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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hello Edge Studio Alumni,
I have just started my training program and was asked by my coach to post two readings here for review, as well as to review some readings. I apologize for selecting two scripts from the library as I’m sure some of you may have heard these before. I hope for your honest feedback, as I will give you.
Thank you,
Rusty
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Rusty,
Nice read on script 1 it was very engaging, pace and tone were great! For script 2 it was alittle difficult the hear the client’s name. -
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Hello Edge Studio Alumni,
I’ve just started coaching and as homework was asked to create and post two readings. I took scripts from the Script Library, I apologize if you’ve heard these a dozen or more times already, but would you please give me your honest feedback on them? I would appreciate that greatly!
I look forward to hearing from you.
Rusty Jones
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Hello everyone,
I have two pieces to share. Let me know if they sound conversational or if the tempo is too fast. Thank you.
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I love the fun and friendly tone of your voice. You sounded very conversational and inviting in the Motel 6 read, and I really believed that you would “leave the light on” for me. The Milk read also sounded conversational, but I would have liked to hear just a little more enthusiasm. I want to really be able to hear your voice convey that it’s the “energizer you can’t do without.” Also, try not to let some of your words run together. For example, “Need to” and “out of” sounded more like needtuh and outta. I have to watch myself with this too : )
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Hi, I was just listening to your Motel-6 read. There were a couple of words that sounded run together. Just after you say “Well, Motel 6…” I think you said something about just got a redo to, but it’s kind of run together. I think for Motel-6 it is a bit fast. If you listen to their commercials, they are slow, relaxed, and inviting. I’m very new at this so I could be way off. Just my thoughts.
Rusty
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Hey guys, I’ve got a couple of recordings here that I would like feedback on before my next coaching session.
Thanks for the help!
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Hi, I listened to your Church’s Chicken read. You had some trouble with the word probably the second time you said it. Other than that it sounded pretty high energy, right until the very end where it dropped off a bit. I’m really new at this and don’t know what’s expected here, so I’m just putting down what I hear. I hope y’all will do the same for me.
Rusty
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Hi iSynge,
I liked both recordings. Churches Chicken is fun copy! I would say for that show more that you know something they don’t know and it is really great. For Butterball, bring more excitement for something that brings out the joys of a holiday, maybe Thanksgiving is your favorite holiday and you love stuff that reminds you of it.
Hope this helps!
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Hi Everyone, I would like feedback on some narration reads. I appreciate any notes or tips that you can offer. I’m mostly hoping for feedback on the read itself rather than technical feedback. Thank you in advance.
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Hello everyone, Just got a new Narration and Commercial pieces out. Please give out feedback if there are any mistakes I’ve made.
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Sorry about the mistake that was pointed out with the two take being played at once here is the fixed one.
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Hi everyone! I tried to post yesterday but I don’t see it anywhere on here, so apologies if i double-posted this. Anyway I’m looking for feedback for narration coaching homework. Anything helps! Thanks for listening. -Chloe
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Hi Chloe,
I enjoyed your read of Emily Dickenson. Your tempo and tone were great I thought. I’m a bit of an older guy, so please take that into account with this… you’ve got a great voice, but I might be careful of too much vocal fry. Depending on your audience, it might not be well received. I really enjoyed the read.
Rusty
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You have a great voice and sounds perfect. But there is some clicking in the background and much reflection going on in the recording. There is also your tone and emotion which you can put more into. Still keep up the good work.
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thanks much for the tip! Oh yeah i hear the clicking. I forgot to add my little disclaimer of “please dont mind the bad audio it was recorded on my phone!” 🙂
wondering if y’all can pick up on the congestion in my voice, too. i’m having a rough allergy season and i’m trying my best to work through it!
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Hey guys, continuing my prep for my new narration demo. Thanks for the feedback on my last homework assignment. I appreciate feedback and constructive criticism!
Thanks! Wes
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Hey Wes,
I thought you did a really good job on the Aetna read. It sounded like you really cared about the info. The Italy read did not sound very conversational, it sounded measured. I heard a lot of myself in your technologies read. I have a proplem with over-enunciating my words and it sounded a bit like that listening to your read. Now, please understand… I’m very new here and am listening to these as I would my English students oral exams. I may be completely off mark.
Rusty
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Hi everyone! I’ve got a couple scripts here for my last session before demo prep. I’ve loved the feedback that I’ve received on past posts, and would greatly appreciate any more you all have to give.
With these scripts, my coach and I wanted to experiment with adding some small phrases to add my own flair to it. That’s why there are some phrases you’ll hear that aren’t in the verbatim script.
Church’s Chicken:
“Here’s the deal. At this time of year, you’re probably craving seafood. And if you are, you’re probably not thinking about Church’s Chicken, right? Well, think again, because Churchs has it covered. Try our Butterfly Shrimp Platter. That’s Eight tender butterfly prawns, fried until golden, your choice of TWO sides – YEAH, that’s right – TWO sides, and a honey butter cookie for only 5 dollars.”WAAAY Imaging
“… These three and many other WAAAY Better Hits coming up, right after this product information especially for you! In 60 seconds, the most requested Hit of the week!”Thanks again, everyone!
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Hello,
I really liked the Church’s Chicken read. It felt like a voice-over that could be a radio commercial. I think the pace is good and your voice is clear but it seems to lack excitement. I do like the addition of the last line as well. And maybe a little more emphasis on TWO sides.
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Hi bnielsen15,
For Churches Chicken I liked that you added some flair to the end, I think at the beginning you can come in more with a point of view. Maybe you’re talking to someone who always knows what to do, but now they don’t know what to do and you do.
I like the waay copy, I feel for this one as well you can start more as if you are in mid conversation. People could have just been saying you have played great music and you wanna share that you got more hits on the way.
Hope this helps!
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