[David Goldberg]

Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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[Wes@1972]

Hey guys, just posting my homework! An area of improvement for me has been editing, so I’m hoping it sounds great! Any feedback is welcome! Thanks, Wes

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[Robertb]

Hi Wes,

You certainly have a voice that can do this work. Your diction is good, and I think these are good pieces to work on. The one thing I would say is that you should have more fun as you read. I’d like to hear more variety from you. My coach gave me two pointers that I hope might help you.

1. A specific actor is a booking actor. ~ I would suggest working more contrasts into the readings. What excites or moves you more than another part? Who are you talking to, and when are you speaking to them?

2. Please think of the script as a short story with a beginning/middle/end. Look for the “beats” in the copy. ~ feel free to make this into a mini performance.

Keep looking up! I hope this helps.

[Wes@1972]

Hi Robert, and thank you so much for the encouragement and the constructive criticism. I’m going to keep working hard.

These are great tips you shared!

[chennianen]

Your reading is clear and precise! I think there could be more variation in the way you read sentences, however. It sounded like it was bordering on a monotone voice. But, I like it so far!

[Wes@1972]

Thank you for your feedback! I’ll keep this in mind as a press forward!

[SweetPickles]

Howdy! Got a few files done for homework and would love feedback. I feel like I was a little fast doing them.

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[chennianen]

I really like the ziploc one! You have lots of energy. Maybe it was a little fast, and I think the energy you bring, while fun, doesn’t quite fit the Purina one. But maybe that’s just me!

[Alexander]

Sesame-Place: Sounds really good and your tone seems to match with this type of genre, too, Disney, Nickelodeon, etc.

[Robertb]

Ok, going to try this again. After my first attempt to upload it said that I wasn’t allowed to upload this type of file. Not sure what to do about that. I would appreciate your feedback on my reading of these pieces. Please note that I used my phone to do this. I have not created a home studio yet.

[Robertb]

Ok, I got a file converter link from Kendra in the education department so I will try this again. I am uploading three examples of things I am working on in preparation for my demo. Each was recorded on my phone, as I have not yet created a studio at home. I welcome your feedback on what you hear. Thanks in advance.

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[Ryan D.]

Robert, these demos are pretty good! Your enunciation is good, your voice calming, laid back. Love the playful energy in the volcano demo lol! Are you using any sound deadening material in your recording area? Sounds like there is some extra reverb that diminishes the natural quality of your voice.

[Lawszvoice]

Robert, Sorry you are having a problem uploading your file. Call your education advisor on Monday. I tried to send a file from my phone which sent over as an m4a to my email. Searched around to see if I could save it to another format but it wouldn’t let me. Looking forward to hearing your reads.

[Robertb]

Hello everyone. I’m Robert, and I would appreciate your feedback on these readings. I am working on them as I move towards making my demo. Please note that they were recorded with my phone. I am in the process of creating a studio but have not set that up yet. Thanks in advance for your input.

[DillonP]

Hello everyone, I have both a Commercial and Narration piece. please feel free to provide any feedback, I would really apricate some inside, thank you.

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[chennianen]

Not bad! I feel like you were slurring your words together, and could use a bit more energy in your reads. But, despite that, I felt like your reading was pretty clear!

[Lawszvoice]

Building Management read. The pace was fast for me, missing some of the instructions. Imagine that you are in the building, and as part of your job you cannot leave until everyone else is evacuated. Try conveying the instructions with authority, with a sense of urgency but calm. The real goal is to be clear and concise. You need the people to understand the instructions so you can leave.

You took me to the Caribbean in the Sandals spot. Nice read.

[Alexander]

..and one more. Thanks again ~Alex

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[Alexander]

Hi, this is my first post. Any feedback would be appreciated on any of these 4 clips. (Was recorded on a iPad) Thanks so much! ~Alex

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[Lawszvoice]

You connected and related to the Six Flags and Milk ads. Milk was the most conversational, Nice.

Six Flags The diversity in your list of “no” was nice and I laughed at your delivery of you cannot paint the cat. Think about the Yes and how it makes you feel to finally get what you want.

JC Penney…My right creative brain sounds different from My left analytical brain. May be fun to try a bit of characterization between them and see what happens.

[Lawszvoice]

Interested in your feedback on “the History Channel who would you be” from a female voice.

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[chennianen]

I really like this one! You sound like an all knowing oracle or genie coming to me about changing the past, haha. Very smooth and it drew me in!

[SuperLuke]

I have attached a segment from the first Jack Reacher novel, “Killing Floor” by Lee Child. Please let me know what you think about my narration progress so far.

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[DillonP]

You have a good way of using a different voice. But feels like your not leaving enough space between sentences.

[Lawszvoice]

Really enjoyed the voice characterizations. Overall, the pace and delivery were fast for me, therefore I missed some dialogue. Cudos on reading multiple characters.

[chennianen]

I have three more examples here — the last one was completely for fun. I was looking through the PSA section in the script library and thought I’d take a crack at it! Hope it’s not cringe, haha

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[Alexander]

Really sounds like you got the gist of scripts, really involved. Freshii one was fun, enjoyed that one.

[Lawszvoice]

The PSA make me envision the dry eye character voice. I kept picturing him in your delivery. You took what could have been read super serious to that alter ego sarcastically torturing your mind. Liked the approach, I felt the internal pull. Nice.

Freshii spot I really enjoyed the flirty delivery … a little salsa fresa and …pop of pineapple.

[Mike Thomas]

The PSA spot wasn’t cringy at all! I enjoyed it. I couldn’t tell if the last couple of lines were still supposed to be in character or not. You might be able to do a little more to make that more clear, but overall that was well done.

For the Freshii spot, I liked how playful you were with going over the different customization options. And the first line to the Ford Escape spot does a great job setting the scene. Good stuff.

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