[David Goldberg]

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[chennianen]

Got two files here — emotional stuff isn’t my forte but I gave it my best shot!

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[Lawszvoice]

You made me feel genuinely concerned for your friend in the eating disorder piece. I could picture you talking to a mutual friend in the school cafeteria.

[ashleymitchel]

In the ASPCA one, I could definitely hear the pain in the first half, and the hope in the end. It’s subtle and it works.

In Eating Disorder, you really enunciated “early treatment is the key to recovery,” which is probably the most important part, which made me think: if someone only heard that one line, it would be sufficient. So, great job!

[touzet]

Trying out yet another Tractor Supply spot – Not sure what the title was…I’m calling it “Weekends”. In the TV Spot (which this was), an employee standing in front the store had the tag line.

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[ashleymitchel]

Wow, you have a great voice for this brand! I love the differentiation between the main part and the tag at the end.

[michaelflemingvoice]

I have two sections from my narration demo. 1st is a golf course hole overview. the second is from a museum script. Let me have it! 🙂

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[AJS10]

Sounds really good! In two sentences I felt like the last word was said too fast so it’s almost missed. “Tee shot” (I THINK that’s what you say?) in your first sentence… and when you say “wrestling match”, the word “match” is said super fast. But otherwise, sounds great!

[michaelflemingvoice]

Thank you. Speed is something I’ve always struggled with. I will keep this in mind!

[Sarania]

Hello All,
I did two commercial scripts for homework and I would really appreciate some feedback. Thank you!

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[AJS10]

Both are good! I think you could add a little more “smile” to your read with the Gerber copy. I especially liked the Lego copy, great ending!

[Ems412]

Hello Sarania,

I loved the Lego spot. I really liked the differentiation between the child’s voice and the parent’s. For GErber I did like the subtle “punch” on the word natural as well.

[AJS10]

Hello! Would love some feedback on a couple of scripts I’ve been practicing. Thank you!

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[Ems412]

Hello,

I liked both but for the Mrs. Dash spot the part “instead of reaching…reach” is a bit fast.

[Roman Saienni]

Hi everyone,
Here are a few scripts I’ve been working on this week.
Thanks for your feedback.

Roman

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[michaelflemingvoice]

Yeah, man. I can dig it. The Starbucks was your best one because it felt the most relatable and comfortable. I could tell you were you. In National, I liked every single time you highlighted “back”, but the whatever was after that felt weak. Don’t shy away from “road warriors”. Hit it just as hard. And watch the enunciation a bit (something I struggle with too). Discover LA felt like it could have had more variation and was maybe too serious. I think because each phrase ended downwards in pitch, it felt more like something was wrong than something exciting that I want to be a part of. Love the voice, though. It feels like commercials are your thing!

[DillonP]

Here are three new samples I just got done. I would really appreciate some impute and if there is to much clicking. And if there is how do I deal with it properly?

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[Sarania]

Hi Dillon,

I really liked your reads for Big-O-Tires and Butterball! Big-O-Tires had great energy and excitement. It would really grab my attention on a radio spot. Butterball felt so warm and inviting. The overall mood of the season was conveyed very well. I didn’t hear any clicking honestly. So I think you did very very.

[chennianen]

Here’s a short political ad!

Script:
Jobs are leaving the state in record numbers while John Jacobson continues to be an outspoken advocate for outsourcing.
Keep jobs where they belong – in-state.
Vote Nadine Ronald for a better economic future!
Paid for by Nadine Ronald for Governor.

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[michaelflemingvoice]

Howdy! I would love to hear it again without the pause after “numbers”. I felt the change in tone in “John Jacobson” was right on, and I think not pausing will be very effective. And more smile on the “vote Nadine Ronald for a better economic future” while keeping everything else the same. While your voice sounds young, I think you could be very effective if you keep pursuing training in this.

[Elise Duke]

Hi everyone! I’d love to get your feedback on these two samples. Your time and input are much appreciated 🙂 Thank you!

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[DillonP]

The diction was good, and enunciation good, and pacing was fine. But there seems to be a little to much space in between the sentences at the end of them and some clicking and they both sound the same. Overall they were pretty good.

[Courtney Feiman]

Thanks for the feedback and critique!

Blue From American Express:
We are helping put instruments back in the hands of kids. Why? Studies indicate kids who learn music excel at reading, science and math. But Budget cuts are eliminating music programs. So, join blue from American Express to help put music back in the hands of kids!

Honey Bunches of Oats:
It’s amazing! I never thought one cereal would make my whole family stay for breakfast. HONEY BUNCHES OF OATS. There’s never been a cereal like it. With big corn flakes and crunchy bunches of oats. Finally … a cereal my whole family loves.

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[AJS10]

Hi Courtney! I agree… great reads! Re: AMEX, it felt a little bit like you lose a bit of energy on the last word of each sentence. Your voice goes down a bit and has a bit of vocal fry. This is a common issue with me and is something I’m working on so I guess that’s why it stuck out to me 🙂 Honey Bunches of Oats was great! I could really hear your smile towards the end!

[Elise Duke]

Hi Courtney! Great reads! I thought the American Express read sounded a bit fast, so maybe try slowing that one down a bit.

I really liked Honey Bunches of Oats! I think you added emphasis on the right words and it made me excited to want to go get some Honey Bunches of Oats cereal 🙂

[Courtney Feiman]

Thank you so much! I appreciate your feedback.

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