[David Goldberg]

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[Mike Thomas]

These are my first two posts here. Any feedback is appreciated!

The Clinic Cares piece is from an Explainer video script that I found online, to help people book appointments online through a website. The Look Labs piece is from a project I was asked to do at work recently. It’s part of a series of explainer videos explaining an NFT project.

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[Alexander]

The pacing for both were great and like Lawszvoice wrote, very clear and concise.

I must know the rest of the goat story, however, the reading was intriguing.

[Lawszvoice]

Nice pacing on the Clinic Cares piece. You were clear and concise.

Look Labs was so funny!! I pictured the entire scenario. Go goat dominance!

[Mike Thomas]

Thank you!

[ashleymitchel]

Hello! Here’s a Dunkin’ Donuts onboarding read. I picked up a few munchkins, for authenticities sake 🙂

Any feedback would be lovely, thank you!

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[Lawszvoice]

You really convey the message as if you were having a conversation with a new employee. You can feel that you were honestly smiling and effectively portrayed Dunkin’s core values. Great job.

[SteveVO]

A lot of good stuff in there, particularly the smile in your voice, the conversational style to it, and how easily it seemed to flow. Really nice work.

[Mike Thomas]

I think this is really well done. The last line in particular sounds great, with the entire clip coming across as conversational.

[SweetPickles]

Howdy all, I have some scripts done for homework and would appreciate feedback.

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[Lawszvoice]

In Atlanta Bread, your listing items had their own unique delivery which made the listener tune it. Nice!

The Horror piece was my favorite. The mellow tone at the beginning drew the listener in and then as you characterized the horror words with the character inflections you set the mood of the piece. Cudos!

Personally, I am not a big cereal fan so your enthusiasm was a little over the top for me but I did believe your family loves it. Sweet!

Trendi sounded more like a read. Do you have a fashionista friend that you can share that secret with?

[Mike Thomas]

I really like the About Horror clip. The beginning made me feel like I was listening to an old episode of the Twilight Zone. Well done!

For the Atlanta Bread Company, I think more can be done to help me (the listener) visualize the food and the setting. You did it with “crisp salads”. The way you said “crisp” made me think about biting into a crisp and crunchy salad. If you can do that on the other food items I think it would be a win.

I hope that makes sense!

[Lawszvoice]

Here it goes, my first post on the Feedback Forum. Interested to know if it is authentic. All thoughts and tips welcome.

Me. Myself. My salad. Okay. This is it. This is the salad for me. The Grilled Chicken Caesar at McDonald’s. I am so into all the different kinds of lettuce and the cute little tomatoes. But what really shouts my name is all that warm grilled chicken. I drizzle on the low fat Newman’s Own all natural Balsamic Vinaigrette and I am one happy woman. Want to hear me go on and on about the crispy cobb or bacon ranch salad too?

I’m lovin’ it.

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[ashleymitchel]

Your voice is so rich and smoothe! Totally authentic sounding. It felt like you had a salad in front of you.

I loved the way you said, “low fat Newman’s Own all natural.” I just know that the rhythm of those words all strung together would have tripped me up, but you gave all of them their own unique spin.

Great job!

[Lawszvoice]

Thank you so much!

[Earthbul]

A practice audition

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[Alexander]

Spoken very naturally (and convincing!). Nicely done!

[Lawszvoice]

Cudos for making a comic content script conversational. Seriously sarcastic which makes the piece believable. Well played.

[RYoung]

Most commercials have what seems to me as three parts, the question or problem, the turn where there seems to be a change in tone and finally the solution! This can help in sounding realistic in lieu of just reading. Any thoughts are welcome!
If you lived before our time, who would you be?
Would you fight your brother for the rights of another? Who would you be?
Would you find new dreams or create wonders?
What if you could choose from a 1,000 yesterdays; a 1,000 lives, when the past was today and the new took your breath away.
Who would you be? What would you feel? How would you live? Who would you love?
Remembering every generation before us;
Remembering for generations to come.
The History Channel. Where the past comes alive.

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[ashleymitchel]

I did not realize there were so many ways to say, “who would you be” but you made them all unique. Loved the tag at the end. You’ve got a great voice!

[Lawszvoice]

Nice poetic like read. I would try shortening the word “be”. I envisioned “bee” and am terribly afraid of them. LOL 🙂

[RYoung]

Thank you I never noticed be to write you should have more down inflection

[Earthbul]

I enjoyed it. It could benefit you to envision what you’re reading. The subject matter is deep and thought provoking, read it as such. You have a great voice. Let it loose 🙂

[RYoung]

That’s about it stop provoking as I get but thanks for the critique

[RYoung]

I meant to say that’s about as thought provoking as I get

[ashleymitchel]

Hello everyone! I’m considering using this for my narration demo. Any feedback is appreciated!

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[Lawszvoice]

Ashley, the delivery of your steps was clear and cheerful. It sounded like you were talking to your friend. It made me want to investigate the app. Nice job.

[LFlynt]

hi everyone – hoping for some honest feedback, as I ‘edge’ closer to getting my demo ready (pls. pardon the horrible pun) 🙂

as always, thanks so much!

Renee

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[Earthbul]

Really enjoy your voice. The flow and inflections are spot on. Keep practicing this type of read. It’s definitely a good fit for you.

[LFlynt]

thanks so much, Earthbul! please pardon the very late response – I’ve been under the weather and navigating some home…stuff. but, back on my feet now.
your feedback is very much appreciated :-). my coach has been great in encouraging me to find the right type of content. all goes to plan, I record the demo in about a month, yay!

[Lawszvoice]

Welcoming and informative sound. I believed that you were an authority on the subject matter. Nice read.

[LFlynt]

very kind of you to say, Lawsvoice – truly! my coach will be glad to hear that what I think you’re picking up is my passion for this kind of content. thank you so much for listening and for the feesback, and please forgive my late response. after about 3 weeks of recovering from a flu, along with other life things, I’m finally getting closer to recording the demo.

my best wishes to you 🙂

[ashleymitchel]

Love a horrible pun! Wow, you have such a melodic voice. This flowed very nicely. I loved how when you list things, you say each word in its own unique way.

[LFlynt]

LOL! thanks Ashley – glad the pun didn’t offend, 🙂

thank you SO MUCH, for the feedback on the listing: this was definitely a point my Coach made for me to work on. she’ll be glad to know someone picked up on her notes. I’m so grateful for your time and feedback, and ask your forgiveness in my delay in responding. I’m just getting back to “normal” after some disruptive time…ya know…life.

but, demo should be done by end of May – fingers crossed!

thanks again and my best to you!

[SteveVO]

Trying an audiobook read on the exciting topic of vermicomposting 🙂

Thanks for any feedback,
Steve

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[Lawszvoice]

Wow, you were able to take a squirmy subject and not make me feel grossed out. I was actually fascinated in the subject matter by your delivery. Cudos.

[SteveVO]

Thanks a lot!

[ashleymitchel]

When you list things, you make each word sound a little different, which is not easy to do with long lists. You sound excited about the topic and it comes off as very natural!

[JamesV]

Hi – I have two files, one with processing and one without any FX. The one with FX has Mouth de-click, some EQ, a gate to reduce breaths and compression. Any feedback would be most welcome. I have tried to make them both about 18 LUFS. James

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[Lawszvoice]

The message seemed to come across stronger with the FX. I am a novice in the editing process, but I could hear the difference. Nice read.

[ashleymitchel]

You have a great way of sounding informative and conversational – not easy to do! I could definitely hear the difference between the two recordings. The one with fx sounded crisper, for sure.

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