[David Goldberg]

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[JNMullett]

Hi All,

Just finished my Commercial demo – what a blast!! Now it’s on to Narration. I’m posting a couple of practice reads and would love to get your feedback. Thank you in advance for your time!

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[slemay]

I really liked the 4h read. You sounded believable and your voice is very calming but with enthusiasm. Thanks for sharing.

[LindsayCampbell]

Hey Jeff- congrats on your demo! How fun! Mine is coming up too and I am so excited. You and I chose the same practice script today! I like both of your reads tremendously- I thought they were great. I could listen to your voice all day!

[Elise Duke]

Hi everyone! Can you please provide your feedback on these samples? Particularly – did I engage the listener?, how was my overall flow?, and/or how was my speed? Apparently I was in a space mood 🙂 Thank you!

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[slemay]

Elise I thought your energy was really good on the Space camp read and you made me want to visit the location with your enthusiasm.

[mir19800]

The pace was good. Good read. I know you are working on your studio, but I heard a lot of popping.

[RoxyMel]

Hi all, I appreciate your feedback! I think this has a small hicup. thanks in advance!

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[JoyceVOA]

Great diction and pace. Add some excitement and awesomeness to your read. This is a fantastic vehicle with great features.

[RGK3]

Hello all:

Sharing a read for feedback. I haven’t started to solve the home studio challenges yet, so not looking for technical feedback.

Thanks in advance.

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[Honeyvoice]

I liked the smoothness of your pacing. It sounded like you were reading the news in the middle, just a bit. Overall a great read!

[Gill]

RGK3
Your read sounded natural, I thought your pace was good. I do hear some popping with “cap and opener but I noticed your working on your studio so that’s more on the audio side. Other than that it sounds great!

[rustylj63]

Hey Everyone… less than two weeks until Demo Record. Getting a bit nervous. Looking for some feed back.

Thanks!

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[Elise Duke]

Hi Rusty, great job on the reads! I think you can make the first part of the Sample read flow a bit more instead of adding a pause after “partner.” I think the pause after “new family” is perfect!

I also like the overall sound of the Explainer. It’s a bit hard to tell where there should be pauses and/or where it could flow more. Your overall tone sounds great in both. Great job and good luck in your demo!!

[Gill]

Rusty,
Really nice job with your reads, both sound natural, pace could be alittle faster for the first if needed. Overall diction was clear on both. Good luck on your demo!

[Thomas_D]

Hey Rusty, what I like about both records is that the tone sounds different for both. I think you sounded more natural in the “sample” record over “Explainer”. The pace and diction for both felt pretty good to me as well.

Good luck on your upcoming demo record!!

[nicolance]

Bio Narration – I’ve re-posted this one – I think it is pro quality. Please tell me why you think that is not true (including any tech stuff) – thanks, Lance

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[Thomas_D]

You’re voice definitely has the “bio” feel to it, 100%. I think the ending might be my favorite part, after “troubled soul”.

I agree with Rusty on possibly letting it breath a little more, especially in the middle where you’re listing all of his personas.

Other than that, this sounds great.

[rustylj63]

I really like the read. For me, I think the tempo was just a bit fast, but, that would really be for the director to determine. I did here some minor clicks in a few places, but they were very subtle. I think you nailed it… I just wonder how it would sound if you gave it a little time to breath a bit.

[mir19800]

Your feedback is greatly appreciated. Doing my homework.

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[rustylj63]

Hi, I think the thing I want to say the most is that it sounds like your are pronouncing Purina as if it were Purrina. I wanted to be sure so I listened to a commercial and they pronounce it Pure, not Purr. Be careful of that. My coaches have all told me its a quick way to turn people off during interviews.

[mir19800]

Amazing feedback. Thank you.

[mir19800]

Hello everyone, can I please have some feedback love…Thanks in advance.

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[slemay]

I am new at this but I would try to make it more of a conversation and drive more of the questioning of what is this place? I hope that makes sense.

[Elise Duke]

I agree with the person below in that it sounds like you’re reading and it’s a bit choppy. I think if you made it sound more conversational, it would be great! I think you could also shorten the pause in between sentences and especially after “on the way over here.” Have some fun exaggerating “Mexico” to make it a bit more playful. Great job!

[RGK3]

Hi, Nice job. You get all the text across niceley. It does sound sometimes like you’re reading, though, and the relationship with the person you’re speaking to doesn’t come through as clearly as it could.

[mir19800]

Thank you for your feedback and I will work on your suggestion.

[gikegami]

Here is my recordings of commercials. This is the first time I recorded using Audacity rather than my phone app. I would appreciate feedback that would focus mainly on my pronunciation and pacing. Thank you.

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[slemay]

I liked the bread read but the last time you say bread it sounded like you were holding your breath. It sounded more natural in the rest of it.

[rustylj63]

Hi, I preferred your read of the bread company. Sesame Street sounded fast, a bit choppy, and at the end you pitched “theme” really high. Your bread company read sound much more professional and had a better tempo in my opinion.

[LindsayCampbell]

Hi! I thought your pacing and pronunciation were good,and I know that’s what you were focused on! There were several points of unnatural glottal stops which can lead to a choppy sound overall, but I think nice work on the pace and pronunciation! 🙂

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