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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hello,
I am a novice and forwarding a brief recording for a homework assignment. I have lots to learn on the recording and voice side, open to suggestions.Thanks
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My first suggestion is to always think about who you are, who you are talking to, and why are you telling them this info? You are definitely reading the copy and so it sounds a bit robotic and not at all conversational. That is the key word for you at this point – conversational. You have a nice voice with a friendly tone. Keep at it – Lance
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Hi Swimmer1, I might suggest you put some more energy into your reading so it does not have a monotone type of reading. The script also says three times, “when,” so you might think about how you might want to make each time you say “when” it’s not the same each time. A slight change in tone might help. We are all novice’s in this VO world that’s for sure!
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I’m trying to improve my pitch variation to try and overcome my monotone voice. Is my pitch range good, or too little? Thanks!
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Hi Logan! I think in attempting to overcome a monotone voice, you ended up emphasizing words in a way that was a bit unnatural, and not how you would say it in a real conversation. Some of the words sounded forced. Something that has helped me with my coach is to use a lead in before the script starts to get myself mentally in the natural zone, imagining I am talking to a real person in my life, and gets me thinking and talking in a natural way. Helps me to not overthink it. Hope this is helpful for you too!
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Hello all:
I’m sharing a couple of reads for feedback before my next coaching session. Just looking for feedback on the reads themselves, as I haven’t started to solve the home studio challenges yet.
Thanks in advance.
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HI RGK3! I like both of these reads. The pacing was good, but I think in both cases lacked a “real” feel. It sounded like you were reading.
I almost missed the joke about the canary in Purina. I think you could have played with that a bit more.
In the Advil read, there were several points of an unnatural stop, some with a lip smack. For example, you can hear it after the first 2 times you say Advil, and after study. The last sentence ended with I think wasn’t quite the right intonation. Your pitch rising a little bit, not quite to the point of it sounding like a question, but enough where it sounded like you might doubt what you’re saying.
Hope this helps!
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Here are two commercial demo’s, both in the same audio file. One for Hyundai and the other for the NFL Network. Your comments have always been so helpful, especially when I have my next session with my coach.
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Good work on your reads! You have a great voice!
Something I noticed was that you had plenty of mouth sounds through the two commercials. Drinking lots of water can sometimes help with that. Also, you might want more variation in your pitch. I noticed this because I have problems with that too.
Best of luck!
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Hi Cheechman, I think you have a nice voice, and all of your reads were very clear. They sound a bit robotic, though. Maybe imagine you are talking to a real person when reading to sound more natural. Your enunciation was very clear, but there were some glottal stops that made the speech sound broken up and unnatural. You can hear it especially in the Advil read in the first line: “Muscle. Aches” (the 2nd Advil read was better, but still there) And in Carnations with the E in Essentials.
Full disclosure- this is what I struggle with, too, and have been tasked by my coach to listen for it in others, so I am hyper-focused on it right now! -
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