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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hey Thomas! Good job. I wonder how it would sound if you stretched it out just a little bit. Maybe slow it down a hair and see which sounds better.
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Hey Thomas! Great job with your first recording! I think you sounded natural and believable. Some of your words run together a tiny bit, so be careful of that. “Aetna and Us Healthcare” sounded like “Aetna’n’UShealthcare” -all one word. Hope this helps!
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Hi Joyce! I agree with Lindsey on varying your pitch when reading a list within a sentence. I think you can end each word in the list in a slightly different tone – higher, then slightly lower, and so on. I have trouble with this too 🙂 You want your listener to hear the first three items, and think… I get “analog instrumentation?,” “a leather steering wheel??” “AND contoured bucket seats?!?!”… wow I need a Buick!
Keep up the good work!
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Hi Joyce- this read starts out with a list of 3 items. You ended each at the same pitch. “Instrumentation,” “wheel,” and “seats” we’re all the same note, even though there was a little variety with the other words. I would be conscious of this so it sounds more interesting. “Performance” “excitement” and “commitment to quality” was also the same note at the end of each item. Otherwise, I like your voice, and nice work. There were a couple pauses that made it choppy, but overall had a pretty good flow. 😊
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For this read, I hear that you’re trying to make it flow, but there are several things that’s causing it to be choppy. The first is where you’re pausing and the second is where you should have breaths. So be aware of pauses in the copy and make a note of where you should take breaths. Once you have those in the right places it should help your read to flow better.
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Hi there Feedback Forum –
Looking for feedback on two short scripts. Thanks in advance for your time.
Tracy
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Hi! Good job! I think they do sound a little “read” with a few unnatural pauses- between toxic and chemicals is a good example. Your pace is great, diction is great, and I think you nailed the attitude appropriate for the copy. I would imagine talking to a real person in your real life while reading these to help sound more conversational. Even use a lead-in: start your recording out by pretending you are talking to a real person, out loud, before the copy starts to get the feeling in your mind/body. You can edit that part out later! It has helped me a bunch. 😊
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Hi Tracy,
I think both of your reads are good with pace and diction. I don’t think it sounds read, I think your tone might be a little strong for clearair but I can see that you are making it more of a serious read given the topic. The only thing I would pay attention to is enunciation on both and where you’re giving emphasis. -
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Hey everyone! I’d like feedback on a couple of recordings I’ve been using to practice. Thank you for your time!
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Hi! I thought these were both pretty good, natural sounding reads! I would say pay attention to your brand, though. Excedrin was not pronounced correctly. Listen to a commercial of theirs if you aren’t sure! should be exCEDrin. (as opposed to EXcedrin) Definitely wouldn’t want to mess this up in an audition 🙂
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This is the last one required for my homework.
I appreciate all your patience listening to me read.Moving on to class #2!
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Hey Lindsay, agreed with Nicolance as well re: the acting training! What I like the most about your voices is that they all sound believable, like you really have internalized each of the scripts. I actually like B****r Creek and Depreciation the best, even though they were a bit faster than the Ulta and Plastic. The latter felt a bit too slow, but not to the point of being unbelievable. Maybe they sounded less conversational?
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Hello Lindsay – all of your samples have a conversational and natural – believable! – quality – WOW! I am guessing you have some acting training? You seem to be “hurrying” the copy. Slow down a bit and think about the person you are talking to – and who you are. In all of the samples, there are key words or phrases that you may have hit differently depending on character. Your plastic sample is a bit slower in pace than the other three, and your character seems more developed. That one is a winner! Keep at it – Lance
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Hi Lance:
Friendly, inviting, and confident do come through. On the whole, I liked this read a lot and could imagine it in actual use. There are a couple of minor places where the phrasing felt less natural to me than in others, like the strong upward inflection on “website,” leading into the next phrase.
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