[David Goldberg]

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[Tracy]

Good evening everyone –

I have two recordings and would welcome feedback on the attached. Thanks for your time.

Tracy

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[nicolance]

How do you feel about steel drums? Would have liked to hear more perspective in your narration.

[Gill]

Hi Tracy
I would work on the flow and tone of both read and see how it sounds after.

[JNMullett]

Just getting started with Commercial Demo training. I would greatly appreciate any feedback. Thanks in advance!!

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[Gill]

Jeff,
You picked a couple of scripts that really highlights your voice well. I liked your natural voice in advil, your pace and diction are good too but I sort of felt you were putting it on for the chevy script. I think your natural voice would work just fine for chevy.

[maxspitz]

Hey Ya’ll!

Been trying to get some practice in. Let me know any comments, feedback, etc. on these two reads. Thanks so much!

– Max

Lowes:
Living rooms become classrooms…
Dining rooms become offices…
Bathrooms become break rooms…
Garages…become gyms…
And backyards…become the great outdoors…
Lowe’s…
What home can become…

Website Greeting:
Meet Bob. Like 95% of car shoppers, he uses his computer, smartphone and tablet to shop for his next car.A few years ago, you could have reached Bob through traditional means such as Direct mail, TV or radio, and newspaper ads.Today, that simply isn’t enough.
According to Google – customers visit 18 websites on average – before stepping into a dealership.

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[Gill]

Hi Max,
For lowe’s a little variation with the first three lines would enhance your read and I would just be mindful of your diction on website greeting where you say could have sounds like could of overall nice pace and tone.

[Nik]

Hi would appreciate any feedback on my homework assignment!!:)

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[Joel]

Nik, during your recording, you seem to dip into an accent, though I can’t tell where it is from. You have an American accent for most of the voice over (which sounds good and natural), but a couple of words, like “ham” for instance seems slightly out of place.

[Nik]

Hey Joel,
You are spot on! I’m Indian by nationality but went to an American school my whole life..hence the accent :)) I live in Dubai (UAE) and here they would categorize my accent as “neutral.” Hoping that will help me secure some work in this region 🙂

[Joel]

Nik, its funny, one of my former students, Niki K, lives in Dubai and works at The Platform Dubai. Good luck with getting work in that part of the world. I know my former student is certainly enjoying her time there and meeting a lot of good friends.

[LFlynt]

hi everyone!

I’m inching closer to Demo Day – so, as always – your feedback is much appreciated. it’s been so helpful these past months and I appreciate you all, so much, for your time and candor. I usually don’t ask for specifics, but this time, I’d love to know how and what the read makes you feel, if anything. and, of course, any other notes are also welcomed.

my best to you all, fellow artists!

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[Joel]

LFlynt, I would check your diction for some of your words, such as, “young adults,” “couches,” and “vulnerable.”

[carynbell]

Hi All,

Been working on my pacing and diction. Feedback is appreciated.

Thanks!

BENZ 2020 E-CLASS

A car that can actually see like a human.
Using stereoscopic cameras and even stopping itself if it has to.
The technology may be hard to imagine — but why you would want it, is not.
The 2020 E-class.
It doesn’t just see the future…
It is the future.

USPS PSA

The US Postal Service wants 2 remind everyone this year 2 protect themselves from becoming victims of identity theft. Promptly remove incoming mail from your mailbox – and don’t give out passwords, pin numbers, or account numbers. 2 learn more, visit consumer.gov/ncpw

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[Nik]

Hi really soothing voice!! I agree with the other comment that it could be a bit faster.

[carynbell]

Hi All,

Been working on my pacing and diction. Feedback is appreciated.

Thanks!

BENZ 2020 E-CLASS

A car that can actually see like a human.
Using stereoscopic cameras and even stopping itself if it has to.
The technology may be hard to imagine — but why you would want it, is not.
The 2020 E-class.
It doesn’t just see the future…
It is the future.

USPS PSA

The US Postal Service wants 2 remind everyone this year 2 protect themselves from becoming victims of identity theft. Promptly remove incoming mail from your mailbox – and don’t give out passwords, pin numbers, or account numbers. 2 learn more, visit consumer.gov/ncpw

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[Gill]

Caryn, your voice is very soothing. I agree with Joel’s comments on your diction, but wanted to add that it sounds like you sort of have an accent when you say “themselves” like selves drags on maybe southern so i would be aware of that if you’re trying to stay neutral.
Your pace could slightly be a little faster

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[Joel]

Cary, very listenable voice. I would take a look at your diction for words like “promptly” and when you say, “to learn more.” You said, “t’ learn more.” Your focus on using clear diction at “vist consumer.gov/ncpw” was good. My coach noted that instead of saying “your,” I was say, “yer.” So I think we all sometimes shorten some words in our day to day language use. But for voice over work we have to more careful. Also, you only uploaded one mp3 file. I liked your pacing.

[carynbell]

Thanks Joel!!! I’ll fix that other file.

[rustylj63]

Only one read tonight… thank you, in advance for your feedback. It is really helping.

Please disregard the audio quality, I’m sitting at my desk instead of in my “studio.”

Thank you!

Rusty

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[indexasp]

I’d make that opening question stronger and more confident.. have more of a POV! 🙂 And reduce the silence after the question by just a beat – it stretches out a beat too long imho.

Listenable voice for sure..

[TimberTykes]

I want to say thay you have a great voice! Especially for this read. If I had any feedback, I think you could work on the enhancement of your words between commas, and as for the opening line to this script, I felt like there was hesitation when asking the question, leaving the line feeling a little awkward. Other than that, a great read!

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[ashleymitchel]

Practicing for my narration demo – any feedback is appreciated!

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[chloeblackstone]

Hi Ashley! I liked your reads, both sound natural. My note for you on Primanti Bros one, I’m noticing each sentence seems to end on the same pitch. Maybe you could try varying the tone / pitch of the last word of each sentence, to keep the listener engaged.

[rustylj63]

Hi Ashley,

Thanks for the feedback on my Allure read. I listened to both of yours and feel you did a really good job, especially with the Bob Ross one. One note I had on the Primanti brothers is about timing… I might put a small pause, maybe another heartbeat, between “…strip district” and “an area.” Try it and let me know what you think… I felt like they were both good reads!

[ashleymitchel]

Hi Rusty! Great feedback, thank you. I’ll give the small pause a try.

[mikemcgann]

Bob Ross was pretty good to me, just watch for plosives and background shuffling. I may suggest to inflect up a little more at the question at the end.

Primanti Bros was pretty good, but you may want to slow down a little bit on the reading to enforce the idea of nostalgia in the story telling and allow a beat between sentences as well.

Overall, I thought both were done well.

[ashleymitchel]

Thank you for the feedback! Very helpful. I often get the “slow down” note 😛

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