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The Beringer read is believable(doesn’t sound like you’re reading) and confident. It’s great that your attitude shifts to be more warm when mentioning that “everything we’ve learned is yours to enjoy, every time you pour a glass of our wine.” because more warmth fits what’s being said there. I advice practicing the script with other attitudes as this one was very serious. Try more warm attitudes for example, like thankful, Playful, reminiscent.
The serious attitude of the Wachovia read fits, though it’s always helpful to practice with other attitudes than the obvious. Try to incorporate more flow from word-to-word, in Wachovia the words are very blocked off from each other so that it sounds a little choppy.