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Very nice read of peas and carrots. It sounds like you felt it and I especially like the bit of magic you create at the end with “let your adventure begin.” Just a few minor critiques. You fade a bit at the end and I think instead you should emphasize the last words. The words “games” and “activities” run together for me. I think you could make a tiny pause in between them and also differentiate how they sound. Finally – you emphasize “your” and I don’t think you need to. I think that rhythmically it would sound better to put the emphasis on “account.” I would much appreciate any feedback you can give me on my Cool-Jazz read above. Thanks!
