[kbridges]

Hi Toque!

I listened to both takes of this read, and it’s cool to be able to hear the difference. The second read does have a more conversational, engaging, and positive energy. I imagine the narrator of the video walking along the waterfront, talking to the audience and showing them a beautiful place.

There was a little catch at the beginning of “proud to share” that interrupted the flow, but overall it flows really well and is well received by this listener.

What did you change between the two takes? Any tips on getting that more conversational tone?