[AlexisVO]

Really nice job, John. I like the first one, it’s very clear and your tone is good for a biography style. The pace is on the slow side, which works if it’s going to be a TV documentary (I was picturing it paired with visuals), but could be considered too slow if this script is meant for something else like an audiobook, for example. It’s hard to interpret when we just pull a script from the library with no context of how it’s going to be used. The second script is really good, too. It feels like your tone gets a bit more conversational as you read through it. Nice job on both!