Arbys – Really nice read! I don’t have much to critique 🙂
Atkins – This one is a tough read because its pretty much like one long list. I think you did a pretty great job, though some of it felt like it could be a little more conversational. In the middle around “you lose weight – see”, perhaps it is a pacing thing. Could be stopping and really asking someone “see?? (I told you this works!)”
Really nice work. Great tone and audio quality.
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