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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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August 8, 2022 at 5:26 pm #78990
madtrammell
ParticipantHello everyone, hope you are all having a great and productive start to the week! I am looking to get some feedback on my second practice read for narration as I am preparing to record my first official narration demo in a few weeks.
Thank you!
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August 12, 2022 at 3:27 pm #79124
samsheeks
ParticipantGreat voice!! But this could have been a bit more lively with some more variety. Shakespeare and the theatre are supposed to be fun and inspiring!
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August 10, 2022 at 11:39 am #79049
cammons01
ParticipantVery nice and textured voice. The pacing was great. I think you can bring a tad-bit more variety to it to give more “life” to the delivery. Other than that, it was really good. Keep up the good work!
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August 9, 2022 at 8:49 am #79010
Mike T
ParticipantIt sounds good! Try to have a little more variety in your read. Even though this is only 25 seconds long, it still has a beginning, middle, and end. If you can vary your performance a bit, you can connect to the listener more and better tell the story.
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August 8, 2022 at 12:23 pm #78967
Rachel MSP
ParticipantRachel Summers assignment of 10 commercial scripts for first VO private lesson. Looking for constructive feedback. TIA
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August 9, 2022 at 9:01 am #79011
Mike T
ParticipantI really like the Six Flags spot. I didn’t hear you, I heard the character! The only thing on that spot might be to deliver the final “Yes!” in a way that contrasts more with the no’s from earlier in the script.
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August 8, 2022 at 8:47 pm #78999
edixon310
ParticipantRachel, this demo is very good. My only suggestion would be to give us more of a roller-coaster ride, i.e. more highs and lows in terms of animation. And remember to billboard the company name with a bit of a space before and after.
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August 6, 2022 at 6:08 pm #78943
Declan Waters
ParticipantHello All,
Some more practice scripts. Any and all feedback is welcome!
The Sesame Place recording I found challenging because I wanted to find a balance between my unaffected voice and the classic over-the-top theme park commercial guy. Let me know what you think. Thanks!Attachments:
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August 19, 2022 at 4:11 pm #79317
Silver Wit
ParticipantGreat read, but I have to agree that you should have fun with the Sesame read. Tap into your inner child and let the good times roll.
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August 12, 2022 at 3:30 pm #79125
samsheeks
ParticipantThe sound is great! Overall, really good reads with good understanding of the scripts. In Freshii, I wanted you to really paint the picture of the bowls, make me really want to eat that right now! And in Sesame, have more fun and make it feel more lively and animated – more character!
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August 7, 2022 at 4:09 pm #78954
edixon310
ParticipantDeclan, these are both very good Reads. I like that they are conversational.
I’ll give my opinion because the reads were very good.
In the Freshii read, when you ask the questions, there should be more inflection to accentuate that they are questions. Yours sound more like statements.
The Sesame Place read, should be more animated, as if talking to children. Essentially the ad is directed to catch a child’s attention so they bug their parents about going.
Overall, very good job.
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August 6, 2022 at 10:53 am #78935
Cheechman
ParticipantThis my last read of 10 for coaching.
#1 is over the top, very masculine I would say.
#2 is a little more reserved.All comments are welcome but would really like to know which one is the one YOU li9ke.
Thanks again.
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August 8, 2022 at 5:23 pm #78989
madtrammell
ParticipantI enjoyed number 1, I feel that for this type of read the over the top performance is more appropriate.
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August 6, 2022 at 6:15 pm #78946
Declan Waters
ParticipantHello,
I really like #1, I think your voice is suited to be powerful. The words invoke a sense of authority, and your voice in #1 delivered that more thoroughly, I think.
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August 6, 2022 at 10:39 am #78933
Cheechman
ParticipantHere is 9 of ten reads.
Wanted to thank all who have made comments on my recent reads.
I am trying to put all the things said into my last 2 reads, this being one of them.
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August 8, 2022 at 5:16 pm #78987
Rachel MSP
ParticipantHi,
I feel this was a good read in general.
I would suggest for the product/script to increase the pace and a change of tone. I would suggest this because the tone sounds like you are appealing to a much younger audience in my opinion. I don’t think that is a bad thing but I wouldn’t suggest it for this script.
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August 5, 2022 at 1:27 pm #78917
edixon310
ParticipantOkay, trying again for a more conversational character read. Let me know what you think.
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August 8, 2022 at 5:39 pm #78993
Rachel MSP
ParticipantThis sounded really good in my opinion. I would suggest enunciating a bit more on “memories” I like that you’re making it sound dark but I didn’t understand what you said at first. I also notice you kind of went out of character slightly when you sped up a little bit.
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August 6, 2022 at 6:20 pm #78947
Declan Waters
ParticipantThis was beautifully done. I really like your voice and tone. Given that it’s the Joker, I think you could get away with sounding a little bit more unhinged. Your best moments were toward the beginning and near the end, when there was a bit more venom in your voice.
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August 5, 2022 at 1:06 pm #78912
annellakaine
ParticipantHi all! New here and would love some feedback on the below narration copy. Thanks for your help!
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August 11, 2022 at 1:34 am #79067
elizbrooksbell
ParticipantWow! The American Airlines one was so good! I felt like I could hear you smiling, and I felt like I was actually on an airplane!
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August 8, 2022 at 3:13 pm #78978
Rachel MSP
ParticipantHi, I think you had a nice pace for what these type of scripts.
I feel like your tone sounded a little too animated and/or jumpy for these scripts; Almost as if you were over-acting to create a character. There were instances when you did sound natural and not exaggerated, I think you do overall have a nice sound.-
August 8, 2022 at 6:52 pm #78998
annellakaine
ParticipantThanks for giving it a listen!
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August 5, 2022 at 12:06 am #78896
edixon310
ParticipantHi all.
I fixed some of the glitches in this read. Your feedback is welcome.Attachments:
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August 5, 2022 at 5:51 am #78901
Mike T
ParticipantThe first half felt less natural than the delivery of the 2nd half. I have a tendency to do micro-pauses with my reads, and I heard those here. But the delivery from :38 on, starting with “no,” was rock solid. It reminded me of the narrator Scott Brick. I can (and have) spent hours listening to him narrate.
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August 5, 2022 at 1:16 pm #78915
edixon310
ParticipantThanks Mike T. You’re right. I think I was concentrating too much on correcting some earlier issues. I will keep that in mind.
I like Scott Brick as well. You should listen to Michael Thompson or Jonathan Davis as well. They are very good. I listen to them all the time.
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August 4, 2022 at 7:42 pm #78884
smarlowe
ParticipantHello, Looking for feedback on these commercial reads. Thanks!
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August 5, 2022 at 12:04 am #78895
edixon310
ParticipantHi Smarlowe,
Great job on these. You got more conversational as you went along, but I would continue to be mindful of that. In the Excedrin read, it sounded like you were presenting it in phrases.
In the Excedrin read, I would imagine myself talking to my 6-year-old about headaches, because we all tend to be more animated when talking to children. That will bring out a more animated and conversational delivery.
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August 4, 2022 at 6:53 pm #78881
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