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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #78990
    madtrammell
    Participant

    Hello everyone, hope you are all having a great and productive start to the week! I am looking to get some feedback on my second practice read for narration as I am preparing to record my first official narration demo in a few weeks.

    Thank you!

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    • #79124
      samsheeks
      Participant

      Great voice!! But this could have been a bit more lively with some more variety. Shakespeare and the theatre are supposed to be fun and inspiring!

    • #79049
      cammons01
      Participant

      Very nice and textured voice. The pacing was great. I think you can bring a tad-bit more variety to it to give more “life” to the delivery. Other than that, it was really good. Keep up the good work!

    • #79010
      Mike T
      Participant

      It sounds good! Try to have a little more variety in your read. Even though this is only 25 seconds long, it still has a beginning, middle, and end. If you can vary your performance a bit, you can connect to the listener more and better tell the story.

  • #78967
    Rachel MSP
    Participant

    Rachel Summers assignment of 10 commercial scripts for first VO private lesson. Looking for constructive feedback. TIA

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    • #79011
      Mike T
      Participant

      I really like the Six Flags spot. I didn’t hear you, I heard the character! The only thing on that spot might be to deliver the final “Yes!” in a way that contrasts more with the no’s from earlier in the script.

    • #78999
      edixon310
      Participant

      Rachel, this demo is very good. My only suggestion would be to give us more of a roller-coaster ride, i.e. more highs and lows in terms of animation. And remember to billboard the company name with a bit of a space before and after.

  • #78943
    Declan Waters
    Participant

    Hello All,

    Some more practice scripts. Any and all feedback is welcome!
    The Sesame Place recording I found challenging because I wanted to find a balance between my unaffected voice and the classic over-the-top theme park commercial guy. Let me know what you think. Thanks!

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    • #79317
      Silver Wit
      Participant

      Great read, but I have to agree that you should have fun with the Sesame read. Tap into your inner child and let the good times roll.

    • #79125
      samsheeks
      Participant

      The sound is great! Overall, really good reads with good understanding of the scripts. In Freshii, I wanted you to really paint the picture of the bowls, make me really want to eat that right now! And in Sesame, have more fun and make it feel more lively and animated – more character!

    • #78954
      edixon310
      Participant

      Declan, these are both very good Reads. I like that they are conversational.
      I’ll give my opinion because the reads were very good.
      In the Freshii read, when you ask the questions, there should be more inflection to accentuate that they are questions. Yours sound more like statements.
      The Sesame Place read, should be more animated, as if talking to children. Essentially the ad is directed to catch a child’s attention so they bug their parents about going.
      Overall, very good job.

  • #78935
    Cheechman
    Participant

    This my last read of 10 for coaching.

    #1 is over the top, very masculine I would say.
    #2 is a little more reserved.

    All comments are welcome but would really like to know which one is the one YOU li9ke.

    Thanks again.

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    • #78989
      madtrammell
      Participant

      I enjoyed number 1, I feel that for this type of read the over the top performance is more appropriate.

    • #78946
      Declan Waters
      Participant

      Hello,
      I really like #1, I think your voice is suited to be powerful. The words invoke a sense of authority, and your voice in #1 delivered that more thoroughly, I think.

      • #78949
        Cheechman
        Participant

        I really enjoy “over the top” reads, but the coach and others tell me it only represents approx. 20% of available work?

  • #78933
    Cheechman
    Participant

    Here is 9 of ten reads.

    Wanted to thank all who have made comments on my recent reads.

    I am trying to put all the things said into my last 2 reads, this being one of them.

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    • #78987
      Rachel MSP
      Participant

      Hi,
      I feel this was a good read in general.
      I would suggest for the product/script to increase the pace and a change of tone. I would suggest this because the tone sounds like you are appealing to a much younger audience in my opinion. I don’t think that is a bad thing but I wouldn’t suggest it for this script.

  • #78917
    edixon310
    Participant

    Okay, trying again for a more conversational character read. Let me know what you think.

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    • #78993
      Rachel MSP
      Participant

      This sounded really good in my opinion. I would suggest enunciating a bit more on “memories” I like that you’re making it sound dark but I didn’t understand what you said at first. I also notice you kind of went out of character slightly when you sped up a little bit.

    • #78947
      Declan Waters
      Participant

      This was beautifully done. I really like your voice and tone. Given that it’s the Joker, I think you could get away with sounding a little bit more unhinged. Your best moments were toward the beginning and near the end, when there was a bit more venom in your voice.

  • #78912
    annellakaine
    Participant

    Hi all! New here and would love some feedback on the below narration copy. Thanks for your help!

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    • #79067
      elizbrooksbell
      Participant

      Wow! The American Airlines one was so good! I felt like I could hear you smiling, and I felt like I was actually on an airplane!

    • #78978
      Rachel MSP
      Participant

      Hi, I think you had a nice pace for what these type of scripts.
      I feel like your tone sounded a little too animated and/or jumpy for these scripts; Almost as if you were over-acting to create a character. There were instances when you did sound natural and not exaggerated, I think you do overall have a nice sound.

  • #78896
    edixon310
    Participant

    Hi all.
    I fixed some of the glitches in this read. Your feedback is welcome.

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    • #78901
      Mike T
      Participant

      The first half felt less natural than the delivery of the 2nd half. I have a tendency to do micro-pauses with my reads, and I heard those here. But the delivery from :38 on, starting with “no,” was rock solid. It reminded me of the narrator Scott Brick. I can (and have) spent hours listening to him narrate.

      • #78915
        edixon310
        Participant

        Thanks Mike T. You’re right. I think I was concentrating too much on correcting some earlier issues. I will keep that in mind.
        I like Scott Brick as well. You should listen to Michael Thompson or Jonathan Davis as well. They are very good. I listen to them all the time.

  • #78884
    smarlowe
    Participant

    Hello, Looking for feedback on these commercial reads. Thanks!

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    • #78895
      edixon310
      Participant

      Hi Smarlowe,
      Great job on these. You got more conversational as you went along, but I would continue to be mindful of that. In the Excedrin read, it sounded like you were presenting it in phrases.
      In the Excedrin read, I would imagine myself talking to my 6-year-old about headaches, because we all tend to be more animated when talking to children. That will bring out a more animated and conversational delivery.

  • #78881
    JNMullett
    Participant

    Hi All,

    More practice for my Narration demo. Would appreciate any and all feedback – thanks in advance!!

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    • #78900
      Mike T
      Participant

      I liked this a lot. There’s nothing negative jumping out to me, it’s all positive. The only nit-pick would be that at times it feels like the delivery is a little rushed. You’ve got a great voice for this.

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