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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hello everyone, hope you are all having a great and productive start to the week! I have another attempt at narration in preparation for my demo record, and would greatly appreciate any feedback! Thank you!
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Great work! You sound like you’re getting close! You might want to think about blending words together as you speak them. In the recording, there are several times in which certain words are spoken as if they were alone. While not in your Hersheys script, an example of what I’m talking about is this: instead of saying “Best Stuff”, say “Besstuff”, like you would say it naturally. I hope that helps!
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Hoping to get some feedback on my natural delivery. Does this sound like a commercial?
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I have once again been instructed to upload a read per my coach’s instructions.
This one was focused on pronunciation, to avoid “squishing” words together, like “butwitha”, or reading “-or” sounds as “-er”, like “yerself” and “fer”.
That said… Heaven help me if re-recording that first line about remote mountain trails over and over again drew my attention away from my pitch, focusing so heavily as I was on not slurring “from a remote” as “frum uh ruhmote”, or going back after I accidentally said “yerself” again. Please, a second opinion would be most welcome.
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If your coach is telling you to focus on pronunciation, I’d listen to them. I’ll just add a couple of my own thoughts/opinions.
Firstly, pronunciation is important, but only to a point. Having perfect diction will not serve you if you’re trying to connect with a listener or have them believe what you’re saying. Nobody speaks perfectly, and so hearing someone with perfect diction subconsciously makes the listener disconnect from what is being said. If you’re speaking to someone from North America that hasn’t been raised in the upper echelons of society (most people), chances are that you’re going to hear them say “yer” and “fer”, not “your” and “for”. Focusing on pronouncing things correctly is important if you’re just starting out and don’t have control over how you are saying things. Once you have control, then you can start making intelligent decisions (based on the character) as to how refined your speech is going to be.
In the same way, pitch/timing is only important to a point. Focusing on pitch is helpful as a teaching tool, but not beyond that. Learning about pitch and timing teaches us to think about how we say things, and how different prosody patterns affect the meaning of what we’re saying. Once that is understood, however, pitch/timing becomes a stumbling block. I can promise you that Al Pacino doesn’t think about pitch when he’s acting. He’s thinking about the character- correction, he is BEING the character. That is his focus, and through that, his performance comes naturally.
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Hi All –
This is my first time posting for Feedback. I would really appreciate feedback on these recordings I did as a homework assignment for my coaching session. I’m looking specifically for creative feedback, specifically on diction (coach said I need to watch for the words “and” and “to”, and those ending in “t” and “d”), pacing (e.g., am I too fast?), and conversational tone.
I did notice on replay that I am pronouncing “to” as “tah”, which was feedback I got from my coach…gotta watch that.
Thanks all!
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Great Reads! I did notice the “to” as “tah” a couple of times, but it might have gotten by me if not mentioned. Some parts were fast but I was still able to follow what you were saying so IMO, it didn’t take away from the narration as there were beats where it felt like natural storytelling.
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Replying to my own…I thought it might help with feedback if I posted the scripts I used. Here goes:
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