[David Goldberg]

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[Silver Wit]

Ok, messed up on the format, but I think I got it right. My first round (part 2) of assignments, any and all advice is appreciated.

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[Hazaro]

Great reads! Your pacing, flow and pitch is all great. Heard a little loss of energy and couple of words in the Sandals spot (“luxury resorts”). Finding more of a connection to the material overall might help to punch it.

[madtrammell]

You have a very pleasant speaking voice and good pacing. One thing you might try is “lifting” the subject of your read to give it more life

[Silver Wit]

Ok, messed up on the format, but I think I got it right. My first round of assignments, any and all advice is appreciated.

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[fchappell]

Hey everyone,

Submitting two more narration recordings from my second session. The first is a bio on Ben Franklin. The second is for medical narration. Looking to see how my diction, pace, and conversational tone comes through. Thanks all!

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[Will-Reierson]

Your diction is good. You do get hung up in a couple of places (on “to free patients to live better lives” and the pause between “for more than a decade” and “Acclerant”) but overall you’re solid.

You’ve got some serious plosives going on with your P’s so make sure that you’re recording slightly off-axis from the microphone to avoid those.

“Conversational” is something that I feel a lot of people (particularly people doing the hiring) don’t understand. “Conversational” means having a conversation. If I ask you “what’s in your living room?” you’re not going to give me a perfectly delivered pat answer. You’re going to have to think about it. You’re going to pause in weird places to breathe, skip commas, ignore periods, say “uh” and “um”, speed up and slow down depending on how fully formed your thoughts are. What you’re NOT going to say is “I’ve got a couch and a side table, as well as a rug and a coffee table. The TV sits on a black TV stand which sits to the left of the bay window.” People say conversational and think it means “casual”. As far as I’m concerned, those are two drastically different things. Casual means relaxed and not up-tight, conversational means you’re having a real conversation with someone.

I’m guessing when you say conversational you’re thinking “casual”. Casualness can be conveyed by speed (the faster the delivery, the more “casual” it will sound) and by letting your enunciation slide a bit (blending words together in some places, saying “tuh” instead of “too”, “what’d” instead of “what did”, “fer” instead of “for”.

The biggest thing however that I feel almost everyone misses (including myself) is connection with the listener. Unless a script is expressly written as a speech, the unspoken intent is that you’re having a dialogue with the listener. You aren’t monologuing. Throughout the script, the listener is asking you unspoken questions and you are answering them. At the start of the “Accelerant” script, the listener could be saying “Man, I’m sick and tired of this sinusitis. It’s ruining my sleep, and my performance at work is dropping. I’m literally losing my mind.” Or perhaps it’s an ENT doctor and they’re saying “I’ve got a bunch of patients that are struggling with sinusitis so if you have any suggestions, I’m all ears.” Find the questions, the pleas for help, and answer them. Your reads will improve ten-fold if you can do this.

Keep it up!

[Kent]

Wow. Observations to learn from, Will-Reierson!

Re: Acclerant

I’d agree on increased speed lending itself more to sounding more conversational. Otherwise, it can sound like reading a laundry list. Not simple with details and words as specific/precise as medical information can contain. (This is something I’m working on, myself.)

The inflection definitely adds warmth and is the strongest part of your medical read. Pleasant voice to listen to.

Otherwise, sound editing would really clean things up.

[Donnamichelle444]

Ms. Duke the Freshii was a great example for me on clarity and pitch. Thank you.

[Donnamichelle444]

#79253 was awesome in many ways but I will start by it over all feel. It was like a real down home welcome to breakfast. I found it very very professional!! something to aspire to for sure

[Bil-Bo]

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[jliebert]

My only feedback is…great!

[MayeWest]

Now I want some bread!!!

[Silver Wit]

Dang, that sounded really, really solid. Though I will say, I didn’t hear the “r” in the word “crisp.” But sounded good overall. Liked the music in the BG too, nice touch.

[TimberTykes]

Good Morning!

I have a couple of recordings today! Feedback of any kind is much appreciated.

I really hope I’m doing right in the way of avoiding pauses- I’ve been taking time to make sure I don’t wait too long in-between sentences.

Either way, thanks in advance, and enjoy your day!

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[jliebert]

For the Uber recording, I would suggest working on the natural conversational tone. Picture yourself looking a friend in the eye and telling them earnestly the great things about this job you discovered, ticking off the benefits on each finger. I hope this helps.

[Silver Wit]

I like the bit of personality you had in your voice for the Uber commercial. Also sounds like your pauses are on a good tempo.

[joekett]

Hello TT,
Good energy. You should work on your pronunciation in the Zeal recording. Make sure you pronounce the D and bring it down to a more natural, relaxed presentation.
Uber was much better.

[TimberTykes]

Thank you for your feedback!

It’s funny, because I was paying so much attention to pronouncing my Ts, and then my Ds start to suffer. I can even tell in the recording. I still have a long ways to go, but I’ll continue to work at it!

[Elise Duke]

Hi everyone! Your feedback on these samples is much appreciated. I’m looking for your feedback on connectivity to the reads, choppiness and tone. Thank you!

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[Silver Wit]

Perhaps it’s because I’m still training my ear, but both of these performances were spot on in my book.

[Nikka Kowidge]

Hi everyone! I’m uploading two practice narration reads for feedback please! I’m working on pace, conversational style and flow. Any tips? Thank you so much for listening!

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[joekett]

Good read on both. Relaxed, easy to listen to. I’d watch the quick pass over the T in the “sweet and ynmmy” Otherwise, nice.

[JNMullett]

Hi All,

I have uploaded a couple of narration practice reads and would love to hear any feedback you may have. Thank you in advance!!

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[Joe Slade]

Hey Jeff, great work on these reads! I enjoyed your pacing and felt both reads had an almost musical quality making them easy to listen to. Both these reads also felt like they were being delivered by a knowledgeable and trusted source. Nicely done!

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