[David Goldberg]

Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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[Cheechman]

This read is actually a poem I wrote right after 9/11.

It’s different than i normally read, but I would like independent opinions of the read and content.

Thanks.

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[Cheechman]

Read 3 of 5

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[Cheechman]

This is read 2 of my second set 0f 5.

Did 3 because at first, I was trying to get kids excited, but 3 is a little more natural voiced

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[Cheechman]

Comments or suggestions?

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[Shadiq]

Hi Everyone!

Working on conversational reads and pace. Any other creative only feedback is welcomed as well.

New here (be gentle)

Thanks for your help!
DeAndre

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[Hazaro]

Hi Shadiq! I really liked the flow and build up of the Maryland Lottery piece, nice job with that! The words got clearer as you built up so I would just say to keep the clarity even when being low key as some words got dropped off at the end and I wasn’t sure what was said.
I liked the intimacy and pacing of Jaguar, just felt like it could have had more power with a stronger connection to the piece so there was no question that YOU are the Jaguar.

[Cheechman]

There REALLY needs to be a search engine for this. Too many pages to go thru.

[danielh04]

Hello! I’ve been getting back into the habit of practicing some reads, here are two for my upcoming coach classes, the feedback is greatly appreciated!
1) Spotify
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2) Ziploc
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Thank you!

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[Hazaro]

Hi Daniel. You have a genuinely natural tone delivery that’s very sweet. I’m not quite sure what’s missing as I’m not an expert. But maybe more of a sharing of information to help the listener rather then telling them which might add more energy or resonance in the delivery? Again – not quite sure what it is but you’re on your way!

[SamWaxmanVoice]

Uploading my first homework assignment here — would appreciate any feedback!

Script: Commonly summarized as “ontogeny recapitulates phylogeny” (on-TA-jeh-nee re-cah-PIT-you-lates fill-AH-jeh-nee), biogenetic law posits that the embryonic stages in the development of an individual (its ontogeny) repeat the evolutionary history of its ancestors (its phylogeny). A corollary of the biogenetic law is the idea that new evolutionary features are typically added at the end of development, with formerly adult, or “terminal” stages gradually being compressed into progressively earlier stages (or sometimes being eliminated outright).

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[Hazaro]

WOW. Mega PROPS for word pronunciation! This is certainly in your wheelhouse. If I knew what you were talking about I could have more feedback but the delivery of information was not lost as your pitch and intonation kept me wanting to know. Apologies if that was not helpful, great job!

[SteveVO]

Would welcome feedback on this historical narration:
One of our greatest Presidents of the past was born at the foot of the Blue Ridge, near Charlottesville, Virginia, in 1743. Thomas Jefferson set the real American standard of living when at only 33, he penned the Declaration of Independence. “I have sworn upon the altar of G*d, eternal hostility against every form of tyranny over the mind of man.” Unlike Washington, he was never in battle. He was a civilian hero. Though he could not free the slaves, he tried to, and succeeded as nearly as possible without destroying the new nation by a civil war. Jefferson shoulders his way to a place with Lincoln and Washington on the strength of moral greatness and manifold genius.

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[danielh04]

Hey Steve! I believe you have a perfect voice for these kind of reads, it definitely makes you stand out, although I will say that as a listener, it felt a bit rush with a lot of information to go through, but besides that, I think you did an amazing job especially with the quote!

[SteveVO]

Thanks a lot for the feedback. I can hear where it could sound a bit rushed, and your feedback helps.

[Joe Slade]

Hey Steve, I enjoyed listening to this read! You sound very conversational throughout. I noticed a few micro pauses during your read-through. Smoothing those out should help improve the overall flow. Keep up the great work!

[SteveVO]

Hi, all. Would welcome some feedback on this corporate narration script:

Here at Black Diamond it’s all about climbing and skiing. We share the same experiences that you do on rock, ice and snow and these experiences push us to make the best gear possible for our worldwide family of climbers and skiers.

What began with a backyard anvil and a hammer has now grown into a global company with offices on three continents. Black Diamond is a company that’s not just for rock climbers and skiers, but one that stands for the spirit of the sports we live, their values and goals, past, present and future. Since 1957, our innovative gear designs have set the standard in numerous areas. This is partly the result of dedication, desire and diligence on the part of an incredible team of people. It’s also a product of the fact that each of us are climbers and skiers ourselves.

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