[David Goldberg]

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[RCampos]

Hi Everyone,
Would love your feedback on my pace and tone in this first VO, recorded on my cell phone.

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[raven808]

Nice touch adding music and your voice is very well suited for this genre! I felt like you could put a little more emotion or change your intonation for some of the words to keep the engagement (i.e.”he wasn’t fond of rules or having respect for the status quo”).

[RCampos]

Thanks so much for the helpful notes! I’ll work on the emotion / engagement. Appreciate your feedback.

[Kamasch]

Beginner here – after one coaching session, I’ve been focusing on sounding conversational and connected; will accept any sort of feedback. I’m aware there’s some background noise/subpar audio, but this is just practice for now! Thanks!

[Kamasch]

replying on my own thread since it wouldn’t let me edit – had some upload issues

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[Silver Wit]

I could really feel the emotion for your Betterhelp read. though I think you should speak a little louder on your Pillsbury read or get a little closer to your mic.

[RCampos]

I think you are spot on in the delivery for Betterhelp. You capture the tone and the seriousness of the issue. You sound very conversational in all the above. I do think Pillsbury could be a touch more upbeat.

[Nikka Kowidge]

Hi everyone! I’m looking for feedback on this reading please. It’s a spot about a Bob Ross documentary. How can you say two words like “Bob Ross” together without sounding choppy? How does the rest sound? Do you think I hit the right words? Thank you for any feedback you all can provide. Also, home studio not set up yet please don’t comment on production quality

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[RonBroach]

I didn’t notice “Bob Ross” sounding choppy. I think you did great with the pronunciation. There were a couple of places where I felt like I was hanging – waiting for the next word – perhaps the script had a comma, but the actual conversation wouldn’t have had that much of a pause. However, this is subjective to my preference and someone else may like the time spacing. The only other thing that caught my attention is some harsh high frequencies, especially on s consonants.

[RCampos]

I enjoy this read and you grabbed my interest in someone I knew nothing about!

[TimberTykes]

Good Evening, everyone!

Working on a good night’s practice, per my instructor. My main focus lies on diction and glottal stops, with words ending in ‘-st,’ ‘-ts,’ ‘xt,’ etc., like ‘rest.’

Other than that, I’m also looking to make sure I’ve given the brand in question enough emphasis, and that I keep an overall constant energy, with a beginning/middle/end.

Any feedback and criticisms of any kind is much appreciated. Thank you for your time.

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[madtrammell]

Great job! My only advice would be to slow your pace just a tad bit, even though its a shorter read try to take your time with it

[Donnamichelle444]

that sounds like some good advice – thanks for sharing

[Donnamichelle444]

I’m Trying to get my diction together – I would also appreciate some thoughts on my timing. if I focus on either too much the other gets lost in the thoughts.

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[latyesemca]

I definitely got a vacation vibe from this take! I will say, the pacing could be bumped up maybe a half speed but that feel is VERY MUCH THERE. Like Artist7 said, the ending of some words did drop off so just a little practice on that would help make this read. Overall, great job!

[Artist7]

Donnamichelle444 Overall, your read sounded good. Two items to note: In a couple of places (specifically the words “need” and “included”), the “d” sound is dropped from the word endings. You might also want to pick up the pace slightly.

[Donnamichelle444]

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Artist7 I assure you I could not detect a diction problem at all. That’s my issue – sounds to me that your hard work is paying off!

[Artist7]

Thanks for the positive feedback Donnamichelle444-I really appreciate it!

[Artist7]

Hi, everyone!

These two recordings are my very first home work submissions to the forum. For these two recordings, I’m specifically looking for feedback regarding whether they sound conversational, and if my diction sounds okay. I’d be super appreciative for feedback around these two points to find out if I “hit both marks.” Thanks so much in advance!

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[latyesemca]

The Mrs. Dash read sounded GREAT! I would like the volume to be bumped up just a little more, maybe too far from the mic? This was a more conversational flowy read that I tend to lead to and causes me to remember easier so that’s awesome! I would just punch the end a bit more since you are talking about the website. Other than that, fantastic read!

[Artist7]

Thank you, latyesemca for the positive helpful feedback! I will try to incorporate these good tips during my practice reads!

[Silver Wit]

I like your Bombay Sapphire read, had just the right level of sass. I really got the vibe of “You don’t drink Bombay? Where have YOU been?”

[Artist7]

Thanks so much for taking the time to listen and provide the positive feedback, Silver Wit!

[Bil-Bo]

Here are 3 with character voices.

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[raven808]

Definitely sounds professional, wow! Love the sock one! Great enunciation !

[MayeWest]

Seems like you’re a professional already! Great Diction and pace. Awesome reads!!!

[Artist7]

All the recordings sound very professional. Your delivery is very engaging on each one of the recordings. In addition, you have a good, diverse range with your voices, which I think makes you very marketable.

[RetsofNoraa]

Hey all! This is my last homework assignment before recording my Commercial demo reel! These are re-tries of my previous assignment, following the advice given by you guys and my coach. Hope you enjoy!

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[latyesemca]

These takes sound awesome! Really had a professional feel to the read and your volume and pacing are what really grab my attention and peak my ears. Hats off to you!

[Silver Wit]

Really had the feel of a commercial. You got this dude!

[MayeWest]

Sounds like you’re ready for that demo! Great job

[Artist7]

I like that your delivery on both were attention-grabbing. Your pitch and tone were also nice.

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