[David Goldberg]

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[Donnamichelle444]

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Artist7 I assure you I could not detect a diction problem at all. That’s my issue – sounds to me that your hard work is paying off!

[Artist7]

Thanks for the positive feedback Donnamichelle444-I really appreciate it!

[Artist7]

Hi, everyone!

These two recordings are my very first home work submissions to the forum. For these two recordings, I’m specifically looking for feedback regarding whether they sound conversational, and if my diction sounds okay. I’d be super appreciative for feedback around these two points to find out if I “hit both marks.” Thanks so much in advance!

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[latyesemca]

The Mrs. Dash read sounded GREAT! I would like the volume to be bumped up just a little more, maybe too far from the mic? This was a more conversational flowy read that I tend to lead to and causes me to remember easier so that’s awesome! I would just punch the end a bit more since you are talking about the website. Other than that, fantastic read!

[Artist7]

Thank you, latyesemca for the positive helpful feedback! I will try to incorporate these good tips during my practice reads!

[Silver Wit]

I like your Bombay Sapphire read, had just the right level of sass. I really got the vibe of “You don’t drink Bombay? Where have YOU been?”

[Artist7]

Thanks so much for taking the time to listen and provide the positive feedback, Silver Wit!

[Bil-Bo]

Here are 3 with character voices.

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[raven808]

Definitely sounds professional, wow! Love the sock one! Great enunciation !

[MayeWest]

Seems like you’re a professional already! Great Diction and pace. Awesome reads!!!

[Artist7]

All the recordings sound very professional. Your delivery is very engaging on each one of the recordings. In addition, you have a good, diverse range with your voices, which I think makes you very marketable.

[RetsofNoraa]

Hey all! This is my last homework assignment before recording my Commercial demo reel! These are re-tries of my previous assignment, following the advice given by you guys and my coach. Hope you enjoy!

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[latyesemca]

These takes sound awesome! Really had a professional feel to the read and your volume and pacing are what really grab my attention and peak my ears. Hats off to you!

[Silver Wit]

Really had the feel of a commercial. You got this dude!

[MayeWest]

Sounds like you’re ready for that demo! Great job

[Artist7]

I like that your delivery on both were attention-grabbing. Your pitch and tone were also nice.

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[MCR Marketing]

There is some exciting news for foreign investors due to recent geo-political developments and the emergence of several financial factors. This coalescence of events, has at its core, the major drop in the price of US real estate, combined with the exodus of capital from Russia and China. Among foreign investors this has suddenly and significantly produced a demand for Islamabad Golf City

[Madhatr673110]

Hey Folks. This is my first posting. Here is some homework I’ve been doing. I’ve been struggling with mouth sounds for weeks. Any help on that and opinions on these reads would be appreciated. Thank you.

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[Hazaro]

These were great for your first go! If you’ve been struggling with mouth sounds then your practice has paid off as your enunciation sounded great! You can work on making the material more personal and specific as you keep moving forward. Great job!

[Silver Wit]

I feel like you should believe in the product you’re trying to sell. It sound more like you’re reading the product and not selling it.

[Cheechman]

I would suggest not going up and down in tone so much.
Also, highlight the action words, as I call them, to draw more attention to the product.

[JNMullett]

Hello again, here is another practice read I’ve been working on. Any and all feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thanks in advance!!

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[latyesemca]

Wow! Talk about a medical read! You crushed it, without a doubt!

[Grace17]

Hey! I would love some technique/delivery feedback on this. I left the breaths in, so if you have any advice on breathing technique that’ll be great too. Thanks!

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[MayeWest]

Nice silky voice! I also liked your pace. Someone here have me advice on breathing and said I can use the soft pallet in the back of my mouth or turn away from the mic to take a breath. Good read!

[G Cobb]

New to the game interested in feed back,two lesson’s so far

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[Grace17]

Thank you for the tip ValleyDoll!

[Grace17]

Hey! I would love some technique/delivery feedback on this. I left the breaths in, so if you have any advice on breathing technique that’ll be great too. Thanks!

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