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  • #79595
    JNMullett
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    Hi All, another practice read for my narration demo. Thank you for the feedback on my previous read, I will definitely incorporate your advice/observations into my practice. Again, thanks in advance for letting me borrow your critical ears!!

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    • #79603
      Nikka Kowidge
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      This is a great read. Your voice fits the subject well and you sound very knowledgeable. I think you might consider a bit slower pace during the more medically dense portion of the piece to ensure the listener can keep up as they digest the material.

  • #79587
    bnielsen15
    Participant

    Hi everyone! These are 3 narration scripts I chose to practice for my next session.

    I’ve been having some issues with my editing software in terms of audio levels, so I’m so sorry if these mp3’s are a bit too quiet. I’m working on that but I wanted to get these out for feedback.

    My main focus is pacing, I just want to make sure I’m not zooming through these too fast.

    Any and all feedback is appreciated!

    Advance Technologies:
    Welcome to advance technology incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us.
    Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training and education opportunities.

    Meditation:
    Make yourself comfortable, sitting upright, with a straight spine. With your eyes closed, look at the point midway between the eyebrows on your forehead. Inhale slowly, counting to eight. Hold the breath for the same eight counts while concentrating your attention at the point between the eyebrows. Now exhale slowly to the same count of eight. Repeat three to six times.

    Company Website Greeting:
    Meet Bob. Like 95% of car shoppers, he uses his computer, smartphone and tablet to shop for his next car.A few years ago, you could have reached Bob through traditional means such as Direct mail, TV or radio, and newspaper ads.Today, that simply isn’t enough.
    According to Google – consumers visit 18 websites on average – before stepping into a dealership.

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    • #79602
      Nikka Kowidge
      Participant

      This is a great read. Your voice fits the subject well and you sound very knowledgeable. I think you might consider a bit slower pace during the more medically dense portion of the piece to ensure the listener can keep up as they digest the material.

      • #79604
        Nikka Kowidge
        Participant

        Apologies, I posted the wrong feedback on this thread.

        I meant to say,
        Great job, very conversational tone on all. The pacing sounds good to me on 1 and 3. I would slow the pace on the meditation a bit.

  • #79583
    Cheechman
    Participant

    Last one of the third coaching session. Onto #4….WOOOHOOOOO

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    • #79974
      madtrammell
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      You have a very good voice for this read! I would say try to vary your performance a bit through the read, to give it a bit more energy

  • #79581
    Cheechman
    Participant

    This read is actually a poem I wrote right after 9/11.

    It’s different than i normally read, but I would like independent opinions of the read and content.

    Thanks.

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  • #79578
    Cheechman
    Participant

    Read 3 of 5

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  • #79574
    Cheechman
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    This is read 2 of my second set 0f 5.

    Did 3 because at first, I was trying to get kids excited, but 3 is a little more natural voiced

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  • #79571
    Cheechman
    Participant

    Comments or suggestions?

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  • #79561
    Shadiq
    Participant

    Hi Everyone!

    Working on conversational reads and pace. Any other creative only feedback is welcomed as well.

    New here (be gentle)

    Thanks for your help!
    DeAndre

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    • #79566
      Hazaro
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      Hi Shadiq! I really liked the flow and build up of the Maryland Lottery piece, nice job with that! The words got clearer as you built up so I would just say to keep the clarity even when being low key as some words got dropped off at the end and I wasn’t sure what was said.
      I liked the intimacy and pacing of Jaguar, just felt like it could have had more power with a stronger connection to the piece so there was no question that YOU are the Jaguar.

  • #79560
    Cheechman
    Participant

    There REALLY needs to be a search engine for this. Too many pages to go thru.

  • #79556
    danielh04
    Participant

    Hello! I’ve been getting back into the habit of practicing some reads, here are two for my upcoming coach classes, the feedback is greatly appreciated!
    1) Spotify
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    2) Ziploc
    Only Ziploc brand bags have a unique interlocking zipper to lock in freshness in a way no other bag can. When it comes out this fresh, you know it went in a Ziploc bag. Ziploc. We’ve got a lock on freshness.

    Thank you!

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    • #79567
      Hazaro
      Participant

      Hi Daniel. You have a genuinely natural tone delivery that’s very sweet. I’m not quite sure what’s missing as I’m not an expert. But maybe more of a sharing of information to help the listener rather then telling them which might add more energy or resonance in the delivery? Again – not quite sure what it is but you’re on your way!

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