[David Goldberg]

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[RCampos]

Hi Voice Over Artists!
I would much appreciate your feedback on my pace and tone in this VO. I’m working on varying my pitch a bit more and on being more conversational. This is recorded on my cell phone so not looking for tech feedback yet.
All the best, R Campos

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[Grace17]

Hey RCampos,
Thanks for your feedback on my post! Your voice is warm and pretty conversational. You’re not straining your voice and “pushing” which is great. I would say it would add to the believability of your delivery to quicken the pace because unless it’s requested to speak at this pace, in a conversation you would say this at a slightly faster – conversational level – pace. I also suggest determining the words you want to “hit” beforehand and highlighting/bolding them so you don’t miss the opportunity to hit words that are important for the message like little, sunlight, gravity, atoms, fundamentally, important, cosmos, time, etc. Though it’s your choice what words you think should be hit. Lastly, it felt like you had a matter-of-fact attitude for this read. There are various attitudes(ex: instructional, strict, compassionate) you could have with the read, so try experimenting, and that will also help you incorporate your personality into your reads more, which will make them even more believable.

[RCampos]

Hi Grace,
Thanks so much for the helpful feedback. I do think I need to loosen up a bit and put a little more variation into my read. I appreciate your thoughts and will incorporate into my practicing. All the best,
RC

[Mike_Control]

Hey! Thanks for your feedback on my post, it helps a lot in narrowing my improvement! You do a fantastic job annunciating your script and I couldn’t tell that you were recording on your phone. The “Except for children…important questions” part sounds like a lecture, so it’d be great if you could casual-ify that. I can’t wait to see how it comes out!

[RCampos]

Thanks Mike-Control, Appreciate your notes. I will work on a more casual read. I’ve noticed I do have a tendency to slip into a more formal delivery. All the best,
RC

[Nikka Kowidge]

Hi 🙂 Great job on this read. Your voice is very warm and conversational. I think you’re pacing is on point. This comment might be personal preference, but I think you can add some differentiation between the list items in order to highlight the sense of awe inherent in the text.

[RCampos]

Thanks very much for your notes, Nikka. I’ll work on adding differentiation in lists. I appreciate your time and thoughts.
All the best,
Robert

[joekett]

I’d appreciate any feedback.

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[mattjfogarty]

Hi Joe. I really like your sound. Very rich, friendly, warm, relatable. Very pleasant to listen to. Good emotion and feel. And the sound quality is very good. No noise floor issues to speak of. I might try just a just slightly quicker pace…maybe 10%. Just seemed a little drawn. And a small technical note, I could hear and see a number of mouth clicks. More prominently in the BMW spot (for example at 3.883s, 6.638s). And less so but also present in the Awareness spot (for example 4.313s and 5.362s). I would run something akin to Izotope Mouth Declick, and then go through manually after to find the remaining stubborn bits. Something I spend an extraordinary amount of time doing myself. 🙂

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[Unity]

RCampos, my apologies. I haven’t been on the Feedback Forum page since I downloaded my practice tape on 10/25. I appreciate your feedback and would be happy to reciprocate as you requested but am having some tech problems – unable to open your MP3s as well as my own recording. Will be happy to respond once I figure out the problem. So sorry, Unity

[RCampos]

Thanks very much for your post, Unity, and wish you all the best with the tech troubles!

[adarn010]

Good Afternoon to all! Attaching a corp read for your analysis and critique. I appreciate your time an feedback in advance. Thanks.

[adarn010]

Let’s try this again with the MP3 files 🙂

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[mattjfogarty]

Hi Adam. Great pace, tone, and expression. I think your voicing is very nice. There were some technical issues. More severe with Julia than 4H. some minor things like clicking (for example 4h 23.562s). But more distractingly was a sort of distortion and/or repetative noise through large segments. Best I could guess is maybe a noise gate set to strong. I could see it in the wave form in the gaps between words. There would be big dips and peaks in the sound floor and those could be heard in ways ranging from clicks to distortion. I have had this happen to me when I either pull down levels to much on breaths or noise with abrupt transitions before and after, or when I have cut and pasted room noise into a place it isn’t well matched with it’s surroundings. I guess overall just felt overprocessed. Having said all of that, I think these would be very easy technical fixes. You have the much trickier part…a great read and sound to your voice, well on it’s way.

[Grace17]

Hi,
There may not be much of a difference between these takes, but I was speaking to different people in each take. Which do you like better and why? What’s good, and what could be improved? I really appreciate your time giving feedback, thank you very much.

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[Grace17]

Hi,
I just decided to add this one too. It sounds nice and professional I believe, but I thought it was too quiet and sleep-inducing, but let me know what you think.

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[DillonP]

It sounded clear the last time, and on the fourth one you had your volume under control. But there where certain words that you were over enunciating such as “long”. other then that I think it was a good take just need to work on your enunciations and it can be good. Just keep up the good work.

[RCampos]

Hi Grace,
I like #2 best. I think it’s the most natural and most friendly. In this one you have an upward inflection on name, which sounds friendly. You also put a little bit of “concern” into “call you back as soon as we can,” which makes it sound like you really will make the effort to call ASAP.
Other minor notes: on the word “long” – it sounds like you hang on the “g” a bit longer than usual. Maybe this is an effort to end the word clearly, but I don’t think you need as much emphasis.
And finally, when you say “hold,” – I don’t hear the “l” very well. Very nice job all around, though.
If you have a moment, I would greatly appreciate your feedback on my “Cosmos” VO – just posted at about 9:05pm Eastern time. Thanks!

[mattjfogarty]

I think they all sound nice and professional. I like the pacing on 3 and 4 a little more. Just a little bit slower, especially between “long wait” and “if you prefer”. Seemed just the slightest bit rushed there in 1 and 2 but open and natural on 3 and 4. Only technical thing I heard that caught my attention was an inhalation at the end of #3 just after all the dialogue had ended. I would edit that out since it doesn’t lead into anything. Otherwise sounds very nice

[Grace17]

Hi,
I would love feedback on what’s great, could be improved, or better about either of these takes. Really appreciate your time! Thank you!

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[Dexterius]

I think that both of your reads are very well done! It sounds very professional, on an even keel, but also interesting enough to keep from falling asleep if that’s not your cup of tea. Hope this helps!!!

[Bil-Bo]

Character.

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[Grace17]

Wow this was so good!! I loved it! Your voice and your accent fit great! Perhaps try it with more personality and range in your tone.

[Mike_Control]

Hey friends!

I’m just getting started with my lessons, so this is my first time posting and asking for feedback. I’m trying to work on being more conversational in my takes, so any advice would be great!

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[RCampos]

Hi Mike,
Freshii
Fun read on this. I think you heat your stride on “So, what’s in your custom bowl?” That’s when I hear you being more playful with it. It might help to add that same attitude to the beginning of the VO. The middle sounds great. At the end, you have nice energy on “Eat, Energize” but I think you could use a touch more energy. When I wrote those notes, I had not heard version 2 of Freshii. I think that version improved on the stuff I mentioned above – nice job!

Denali’s is an unusual word and I think you need to hit it a little harder and slow it down a touch to make sure people hear it clearly. Same goes for “view moose up close” and “marvel at Glacier Bay.” These are the candies in the candy store, so I think you can sell them a bit more. I like the way you showcase Holland America and I start to feel the glamour of the trip as you talk about the view from the rail cars. There are spots where I think your read is right on – hitting just the right casual tone, and then other spots where you get more formal. Very nice ending on: The difference is Holland America.

If you have a moment, I would much appreciate your feedback on my VO – Cosmos. Uploaded today, 11-11-22, a little after 9pm Eastern. Thank you!
RCampos

[becksflatt]

Hi again. I’m back with a quicker read of the Greek vacation narration bit I posted the other day. Curious if this feels like a good middle ground as far as pace goes. I tend to read on the faster side and sometimes overcorrect in the opposite direction. I’ve added a few others I’m working on for my demo. I’m using Izotope De-esser and De-click very lightly on all of these which are new to my setup. Any feedback is welcome. Thanks!

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[Grace17]

For App notification, the read is a nice pace. I would recommend more flow between your words while maintaining the great enunciation you already have.

WorkLife is also a nice pace and great read. Your attitude and tone remain the same throughout and that attitude and tone is great for setting up the “problem” in the copy but there’s a change in the message and it doesn’t sound like your tone and attitude changed enough with it. In my opinion, from “Let’s focus on some of the daily choices you can make.” a more upbeat, tone would match the solutions you’re presenting now.

The pace is nice in climate change and Greece 2.0. I recommend letting more of your personality out to improve the believability of the reads, especially when it comes to the seriousness of climate change, without pushing of course. Just a little thing, the line “Greece is actually very affordable if you know where to go” could benefit from sounding more like you’re telling me a secret, or like you’re about to reveal something big. You’re on your way to making a great demo though!

[mattjfogarty]

I agree with Grace that you are well on your way to a great demo. I too would like to hear a little more of you…a little more variability and personality. You have such a nice sound. It sometimes felt like you weren’t letting enough of it out…give us more goodness :). I always notice technical a lot. Just how my ears are. I noticed a heavy rumble or hum in your noise floor. And in some places you have edited it so the difference between the rumble and the edited quieter spots is really noticeable. I played around in audition and izotope with a few different things. Adobe Auditions plain denoise plugin (not the denoise process) seemed to handle it best. I will upload on of the files after briefly doing that so you can here the diff. I wonder if you have either your computer near where you are recording, or a AC or similar on? Sounded like the computer fan perhaps.

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[curtmartin13]

Hi guys,
Attaching some narration samples here, and welcome any feedback you may be willing to provide. I’ve been working on pacing and enunciation (wanting to enunciate without overdoing it). I’m pending some new equipment, so I’m aware that the technical quality is a bit wanting.
Thanks very much!
–Curt

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[jadethevo]

Hi there,

I could only get the Cosmos recording to play. This was very clear and well-paced.

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