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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #81834
    nettipo1
    Participant

    Hello, I would love to get any kind of feedback you feel like giving me! Do you like or not like the POV that I chose, or the style I chose, or the sound quality – just anything that comes to mind. Thanks!~

    Burt’s Bees
    You asked me to define myself? What can I say? I’m complicated. I’m complex. I’m a boss. And beautiful. Im all these things and a million things more. The one thing I’m not? I’m not? I’m not synthetic. So why would I use beauty products that are? Introducing new Burt’s Bees Beauty. A full line of natural cosmetics that make you feel your beautiful best. Because of how they’re made. Not in spite of it. Burt’s Bees.

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    • #81848
      Grace17
      Participant

      You sounded authentic, like a real person, and playful which makes the read fun to listen to. But the tone you used for “boss” didn’t sound like you were confident in that. The first line, up until “beautiful” doesn’t sound confident enough to me. Complicated and complex are redundant. Also, I recommend reevaluating what words to hit. Hit the descriptive words(ex: “complex”) in phrases like “I’m complex” rather than the “i’m” part. And natural would benefit from being hit since that’s the main selling point of the product.

      • #81849
        nettipo1
        Participant

        This is wonderful feedback, thank you so much!!!

  • #81813
    Artist7
    Participant

    Hi,Everyone!

    Would appreciate feedback on pace and whether my tone sounds conversational. Thanks in advance!

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    • #81836
      nettipo1
      Participant

      You have a great voice – smooth, credible, pleasant. I liked both reads. The only thing that stood out to me on the 23 Women is the sentence where you said “23 Women is a story” and because you had a downward inflection after story (I’m guessing there was a comma right there?) it sounded like the end of a sentence, so try to ignore punctuation. I liked the tone of compassion in the Talk Listen, but I would say here also, try to ignore the commas, which are making you pause in the middle of your sentence. I bet you have the ability to deliver the emotional quality without the pauses. Good stuff!

  • #81809
    Hazaro
    Participant

    Last commercial alt reads before coaching session today. (Realized I dropped “you” at the end of the first one :/) Appreciate the listens and feedback thus far. Thank you for your time!

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    • #81832
      Grace17
      Participant

      A pace in between these two would be best for most cases in my opinion. You don’t want to elongate words too much since if you were having a conversation, that would confuse the person and being too fast, the person would not process most of what you say. You have a very brief pause between each beat in the script and that’s very nice.

  • #81796
    Grace17
    Participant

    Please excuse the mic pops and i’m not looking for technical feedback but feedback on technique and believability as I’m about to record my narration demo. Thanks!

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    • #81868
      jadethevo
      Participant

      Grace, you reads are mostly very clear! And yes, you do a great job of varying tone between your reads– wow! I am inspired by your ability to do so.

      I think this is the biggest area of improvement that I can hear is in your “TH” sounds, they are closer to “D” sounds and it would be beneficial for you to enunciate more on these.

      Here’s feedback on the individual reads:

      Diabetes: Though the subject is “serious,” I found the use of this tone to be a bit too urgent/worrying/fear-inducing. I would recommend attempting a more straight-forward read. Also, the read of “so what should parents be looking for?”, maybe raise your intonation a bit at the end to make it clearer that this is a question.

      Constellations: Very energetic! This would be so great for something educational for kids. It sounds VERY natural, like you’re talking to a group of kids on a field trip at a museum, love that. Again, the “TH” vs. “D” sound feedback stands. The first line of the read was a bit jumbled, too. Slow that line down a bit and make clearer distinctions between each word.

      Crypto: I think you can place more emphasis on “cryptocurrency” here– “money word” as they say! Otherwise, great job of making distinctions between things you listed (“change, cheat, hack”)

      Lamentation of Christ: I think you can actually slow down a little bit on this, but just slightly. Again, focus on pronouncing T’s fully. I think you also lost a bit of volume in your attempt to use a calmer, subtler tone. I like the tone and think it would be beneficial to attempt to replicate it at a higher volume.

    • #81812
      Grace17
      Participant

      Also, do you sense variety between the reads? Would you recommend more variety between them to market myself?

  • #81773
    Benn Pharr IV
    Participant

    G’evening all. Here’s a couple uploads for my homework assignment. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated.

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    • #81833
      Grace17
      Participant

      These are really nice confident reads. I recommend talking to someone. Really talk to them, to avoid the times when it sounds like you’re reading. And also smiling to show you have confidence in the information you’re saying.

      • #81837
        nettipo1
        Participant

        Your delivery is nice and clear, but it seems kind of careful-sounding. I agree with Grace17; imagining yourself saying the words to another person will definitely make it flow like a conversation with the listener.

  • #81769
    RoxyMel
    Participant

    Appreciate all your feedback! Thank you!

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    • #81839
      Hazaro
      Participant

      I agree with nettipo1. This was a very engaging read and perfect for young listeners! As well as clear and nicely paced.

    • #81838
      nettipo1
      Participant

      Hi RoxyMel, I enjoyed your read! I don’t think I heard any extraneous pauses, and the delivery was upbeat and easy to follow. This script are your voice are perfect for the young listener audience. Well done.

  • #81761
    Jefftuttle
    Participant

    Hi, Everyone! I’m submitting a couple of practice reads for a homework assignment I’m working on. Any and all feedback is appreciated. Thank you!

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    • #81771
      RoxyMel
      Participant

      Great reads Jeff, on the second one I thought maybe it was just a touch fast in tempo…and maybe could use just a slight bit more intonation towards the end – to emphasize the humor. The fist one was nice and smooth. 😉

  • #81755
    Hazaro
    Participant

    Where is everyone else’s posts?! Always feel self conscious when my homework starts monopolizing a page! LOL…just obsessively practicing commercial option reads. Sometimes it’s subtle and sometimes I push it further to flex this muscle. TV VO’s can trip me up as the visuals are there so I don’t want to go overboard, but then I feel it sounds flat so will have to work on that…it’s still helpful to know it all comes across to other ears. Feedback welcome. Thank you for listening!

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    • #81779
      RoxyMel
      Participant

      Hi again! Okay, now that I listened to the last All-State one I noticed that you did add the expression at the beginning, and I like that!

    • #81777
      RoxyMel
      Participant

      Hi Hazaro. On the first All-State, once again I Love the quality of your voice. I really liked when you added in just a little more expression towards the end, and I would just say I think it would sound nice of you added some of that kind of expression towards the beginning as well. Great job 😉

    • #81760
      Hazaro
      Participant

      So the first Loews TV file wouldn’t upload for some reason and couldn’t delete the post so nothing to compare that one to. Ohhh…technology! :/

  • #81747
    RoxyMel
    Participant

    Appreciate any feedback!
    Thanks!

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    • #81772
      RoxyMel
      Participant

      Hi Hazaro. On the Lowes read, I love the texture and style of your voice, I would just say perhaps you can vary the first several items on the “becomes” list a little more. 😉

    • #81751
      Hazaro
      Participant

      I thought this was a lovely read RoxyMel!

  • #81741
    Hazaro
    Participant

    More commercial reads practicing options.

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    • #81855
      jadethevo
      Participant

      For all of your recordings, you sounded pretty clear throughout. I preferred the tone and pacing for each of the second reads, though, over the first reads. Great work.

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