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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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November 28, 2022 at 2:56 pm #81949
LaurynM
ParticipantHi There,
I am working with a coach and need some feedback for my next session. I am in the process of preparing for my first Narration demo. Although, I recorded these on the voice recorder app on my phone, I am looking for feedback regarding my actual reading of the copy. How I phrase or emphasize, etc. Would love any help I can get! Thank you!
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November 28, 2022 at 10:33 pm #81967
ShellyMadison
ParticipantYou have a very pleasant tone and your diction is quite nice. I’d suggest slowing down a bit and find the parts in each section that you personally find really interesting, then lean into them. Really pinpoint who that focal person or audience is and focus on the goal to entertain and draw them into your story. Currently everything seems to have the same weight and emphasis (not monotone or dull by any means, but doesn’t feel conversational).
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November 29, 2022 at 2:07 pm #81983
LaurynM
ParticipantThank you for this wonderful feedback! Wow! I definitely find that the conversational mindset and speed are my most challenging areas. I am definitely working on that more and more. I tend to sound like a reporter when I slow down. Any advice on slowing down without pausing too much? I feel like I run out of breath and/or have to breathe more often when I do. Anywho, thank you so much for this! I really appreciate it.
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November 27, 2022 at 10:40 pm #81930
jr.roop
ParticipantHello all! Away from my normal set up as I finish up a trip. Sound quality isn’t great, but any feedback on my reading is greatly appreciated!
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November 28, 2022 at 10:38 pm #81969
ShellyMadison
ParticipantLots of great technical stuff here (vocally I mean, I understand you’re away from your equipment 🙂 ). I’d challenge you go go bigger with conveying tone and specific audience. Both reads sounded like they could come from the same book, but are two very different topics. Perhaps play with making your voice more warm and tender for the healthcare one and more playful and enthusiastic for the educational b****r one. This isn’t meant so much as a criticism as it is an invitation to play and see what you can find to push yourself.
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November 26, 2022 at 2:24 pm #81901
Thomas_D
ParticipantHi all, hope you all had a wonderful thankgsiving!
Here are two more practice reads where I’m trying to focus on reading slower/enunciating better. Any and all feedback is welcomed. Thanks in advance
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November 28, 2022 at 6:36 pm #81954
Declan Waters
ParticipantGreat voice – I think you can spend a bit more time on saying the names like Holmes and Watson – since they are the main characters and everything revolves around them to some degree, I think either saying their names slower or having a teeny tiny pause (especially before you said Sherlock Holmes the first time) would help remind listeners to whom they should pay attention. Hope that helps!
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November 27, 2022 at 3:55 pm #81924
DanielButtrey
ParticipantHey Thomas! Love your voice. In the Brief history of time read I did hear a bit of mouth noise that I didn’t hear in the Sherlock Holmes read. Were you warmed up a little more on the Sherlock read?
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November 27, 2022 at 1:45 pm #81915
aemanimate
ParticipantHey Thomas! Great voice. On brief history of time I would recommend just slowing down a tad. And on Sherlock Holmes the word “energizer” sounds like “energiza”. I would just be mindful sounding the words off completely. I struggle with this often so I hear it easier lol. I really have to focus on not doing it. Great job!
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November 26, 2022 at 1:04 am #81893
DanielButtrey
ParticipantHey all! Working on a homework assignment like most of you guys. I’m a little bit sleepy tonight so I decided to read an excerpt from a sleep meditation. Any and all feedback is welcome 🙂
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November 27, 2022 at 7:00 pm #81927
jadethevo
ParticipantThis is so clear, comforting and peaceful. Great read. Would love to know where the except is from!
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November 27, 2022 at 1:46 pm #81916
aemanimate
ParticipantWow that was excellent. Very professional sounding. I thought I was on the headspace app.
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November 25, 2022 at 6:40 pm #81884
aemanimate
ParticipantHello! This is my first post in here with my homework assignment. I will be working on my narration demo in the coming weeks. I work in the medical field which is why I chose a tongue twister it seems medical narration. I would love to have some technique feedback.
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November 26, 2022 at 2:23 pm #81900
Thomas_D
ParticipantHey Aemanimate, you’re very good with verbose/wordy sentences. I listened to the medical narration first, which I thought was great, and then the N**i second, and though “there are so many words here”. You’re able to cleary enunciate each word effortlessly, which is definitely a challenge I have.
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November 23, 2022 at 11:13 pm #81862
Luke V
ParticipantHey everyone. I’m back for round two of feedback. I don’t want to sound pessimistic, so I make this concise. You may hear a dozen of things wrong with each recording, but I will do my best to make sure I implement any and all feedback into future recordings. Thank you in advance.
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November 25, 2022 at 6:47 pm #81888
aemanimate
ParticipantHey Luke! For Michelin I would recommend eliminating some of the pauses in between words. You came off fast and then slowed down a little.
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November 23, 2022 at 8:48 pm #81856
jadethevo
ParticipantAnd another one! Practicing a friendlier read here. Found myself stumbling a bit on the alliterations, but I kept going as opposed to starting over within the same takes. Let me know if you have any feedback, particularly on glottal stops.
Thank you!
Script from the library:
At Freshii you can customize your entree and be your own culinary master. So what’s in your custom bowl? Tex Mex with black beans and a little salsa fresca? Teriyaki twist with a pop of pineapple? Whatever your fresh idea, get any 2 bowls for just $12.99! Freshii – Eat. Energize!
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November 25, 2022 at 6:46 pm #81887
aemanimate
ParticipantI really enjoyed Freshii 3! It all sounded like it was exciting and flowed. I would just change the ending Eat, Energize. Make the tone go lower on the end of energize for Freshii 3
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November 23, 2022 at 11:17 pm #81866
Luke V
ParticipantThese sound like they could be in a real commercial. All it’s missing is the music to go with it.
If you find yourself stumbling on alliterations, you should try incorporating tongue twisters in your vocal warm ups. It’s definitely helped me in the same regard.
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November 23, 2022 at 8:21 pm #81850
jadethevo
ParticipantHi all!
Here are a few practice takes for homework (these are all 22 seconds or less!). Looking for non-technical feedback, especially if you have any thoughts/concerns about glottal stops.
Thank you in advance
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November 29, 2022 at 2:39 pm #81985
LaurynM
ParticipantHi Jade, you have such a lovely voice! So smooth and clean. I love how smooth the 4th take is, but it’s almost a bit too fast, but might come in handy for specs that call for that type of sound and speed. I love the energy on take 5, but then it drops after the first phrase. Personally, I think take 3 is the strongest. It’s slower, but phrased nicely, and breaths are placed with intent and I can really start to see a picture of what the Breethe App does. Nice job. I think take 2 was a little combination of all takes, and therefore felt a bit choppy, but take 3 wins!! Nice work! Can’t wait to see more work from you 🙂
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November 22, 2022 at 7:35 pm #81834
nettipo1
ParticipantHello, I would love to get any kind of feedback you feel like giving me! Do you like or not like the POV that I chose, or the style I chose, or the sound quality – just anything that comes to mind. Thanks!~
Burt’s Bees
You asked me to define myself? What can I say? I’m complicated. I’m complex. I’m a boss. And beautiful. Im all these things and a million things more. The one thing I’m not? I’m not? I’m not synthetic. So why would I use beauty products that are? Introducing new Burt’s Bees Beauty. A full line of natural cosmetics that make you feel your beautiful best. Because of how they’re made. Not in spite of it. Burt’s Bees.Attachments:
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November 23, 2022 at 5:41 pm #81848
Grace17
ParticipantYou sounded authentic, like a real person, and playful which makes the read fun to listen to. But the tone you used for “boss” didn’t sound like you were confident in that. The first line, up until “beautiful” doesn’t sound confident enough to me. Complicated and complex are redundant. Also, I recommend reevaluating what words to hit. Hit the descriptive words(ex: “complex”) in phrases like “I’m complex” rather than the “i’m” part. And natural would benefit from being hit since that’s the main selling point of the product.
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November 21, 2022 at 7:09 pm #81813
Artist7
ParticipantHi,Everyone!
Would appreciate feedback on pace and whether my tone sounds conversational. Thanks in advance!
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November 22, 2022 at 7:42 pm #81836
nettipo1
ParticipantYou have a great voice – smooth, credible, pleasant. I liked both reads. The only thing that stood out to me on the 23 Women is the sentence where you said “23 Women is a story” and because you had a downward inflection after story (I’m guessing there was a comma right there?) it sounded like the end of a sentence, so try to ignore punctuation. I liked the tone of compassion in the Talk Listen, but I would say here also, try to ignore the commas, which are making you pause in the middle of your sentence. I bet you have the ability to deliver the emotional quality without the pauses. Good stuff!
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