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  • #82089
    ryanp.bogie
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    Hello,

    Attached are two narration pieces I’ve been working on. Any feedback is appreciated.

    Thank you!

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  • #82087
    DanielButtrey
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    Working on a narration homework assignment, I posted one about a week ago but since then I got a new DAW (free trial version) and I’ve been playing around with it. Here’s a Superman narration I’ve been working on today.

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    • #82092
      SteveVO
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      Daniel, this is excellent. The only critique I have is at :08, where you say “long.” It sounded a little like “log” and like you could have hung on to the “n” in “long” just a bit longer and made the “g” a little softer. Other than that, it was awesome.
      Steve

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      • #82094
        DanielButtrey
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        Thanks Steve! Now that I listen back to it I definitely hear that, I’m not sure why I didn’t hear it when editing. I guess I need to train my ears more 🙂 Also my Superman sounds a bit like Supermen lol

  • #82077
    SteveVO
    Participant

    A few narrations I’m working on. Any thoughts?
    Thanks,
    Steve

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    • #82095
      DanielButtrey
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      Your annunciation and pace are spot on to me in all 4 reads. I would say my favorite of the 4 is the Austin read, it reads as you being an ambassador of the city trying to drive tourism there. I get nearly the same feel from the Italy and Alaska reads but to a slightly lesser degree. Out of the 4 Cancun feels the least genuine but it’s still excellent. I wish I could pinpoint what it is that I’m hearing.
      Keep in mind I’m brand new to voice over and commenting is part of my homework assignment, I am by no means qualified to critique anyone 🙂
      All in all, I really enjoyed all 4 reads, I would just personally rank Austin as the best.

      • #82096
        SteveVO
        Participant

        Thanks. You don’t sound like you’re new, so keep at it.

  • #82067
    Ksmack
    Participant

    Wanted to add one more longer narration than my previous upload. Thank you in advance for any feedback.

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    • #82192
      Stephen Winburn
      Participant

      I listened to all 3 recordings and it really sounds like you’ve found your niche with your voice. In terms of pacing, diction, and conversational quality it’s all there.
      My only critique is the same that my coach gave to me and that is micropausing that sometimes interrupts the flow and makes it feel a little choppy!

      • #82235
        Ksmack
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        Thank you for the feedback. That has been a comment from my coach as well. I keep putting imaginary commas in there.

  • #82064
    Ksmack
    Participant

    Good evening. Little bit late uploading for my upcoming session. Hopefully my last before demo prep. Feel free to critique. Thank you.

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  • #82060
    DillonP
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    Hello everyone I have just gotten done with both a commercial and narration piece. Please leave any feedback that can help me with my diction and enunciation, Thank you.

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    • #82193
      Stephen Winburn
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      I love the quality of your voice and your range is great for these copy!
      I do think what will help with the diction is to slow the pace down a little. “When aspiring writer Zora…” all got a bit blended together, for example.
      Possibly, to practice, do a recording that you feel is actually *way too slow* but intentionally over enunciate every word. You should be able to feel the difference in your diction from when you are intentional with every consonant!

  • #82054
    cbehrens
    Participant

    Any feedback on conversational style or point of view are appreciated! Thanks!

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    • #82300
      RCori
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      I really like how clear your words are and the diction sounds good. I think it could be more conversational however, the tone and pitch are staying at the same level through most of the piece, so it doesn’t sound like you’re having a conversation with someone about Almond Breeze. I’m working on this with my coach as well, but she has some great pointers on reminding me to think of someone specific and concentrate on them through out the “conversation”.

  • #82049
    SteveVO
    Participant

    Short bio on Albert Einstein. Welcome any feedback.
    Thanks,
    Steve

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  • #82038
    Shawn
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    Hi All. Posting my first homework practice reads. Amy feedback much appreciated!

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    • #82053
      cbehrens
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      Your reads have a nice flow and pacing! When comparing each of these, perhaps think about the specific emotional tone or point of view for each to create more distinction between each read — just a thought. Sounds great!

  • #82033
    Steve Z-A
    Participant

    Hi folks. Pretty new to all this but very appreciative of any feedback. Wondering especially about my pacing, and if the tone seems appropriate, but all comments are welcome!

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    • #82042
      Shawn
      Participant

      I thought the Beethoven read was great. Comfortable and interested/ing. Well done!

      • #82048
        Steve Z-A
        Participant

        Thanks for listening and the comment.

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