[David Goldberg]

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[Steve Z-A]

Hi friends- Hope you are having a great holiday season. I am posting here a few narration samples I would welcome feedback on. Specifically wondering about the pacing and tone of these. I know the recording quality sounds like it was done on a phone,,,because it was. Thanks in advance for any comments. Steve

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[swester]

Hi Steve – Overall, I think your diction is clear and your pacing good. If you are able to bring a little more energy into your reads, that would really up your game!

[Steve Z-A]

Thanks so much for the feedback.

[Ymin33]

Hello this forum is so helpful! I’ve attached two kind of older samples, I’ve made a progress since these but never got a chance to ask for any feedback on these. Still working on sound quality aspects but curious as to other aspects, Thank you

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[Steve Z-A]

I really liked both of these reads. The Adventure Academy in particular kept me wanting to hear more with your voice and emphasis on key words.

[Wes@1972]

2021 Chevy Silverado Trail Boss
The Chevy Silverado Trail Boss
When you have a two inch lift…

When you have Goodyear Duratrack tires…
When you have Rancho shocks…and an integrated dual exhaust…
When you have all that…
The last thing you’ll need…is a road…
The Chevy Silverado Trail Boss…
Ready to off-road…right from the factory.
Chevy….find new roads.

I’m looking for some feedback as I work to improve skill with reads and editing! Thanks for any positive and constructive feedback!

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[Steve Z-A]

Your enunciation is very good. Easy to understand. I feel your pace could be a bit faster (a problem I am also working on) and I would also suggest you pick a few key words throughout the text to emphasize with your voice.

[Wes@1972]

Thank you Zakon! That’s great feedback. I appreciate it.

[Debbie]

Hello! Uploading some narration practice. I’m working on diction and pacing for conversational reads, but am open to any other feedback.
Thanks!

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[jliebert]

Hi Debbie –

I loved your reads in both cases! I particularly liked your tone on the Children’s space narration. For the Website greeting, I just did the same one, so I focused on that. I noticed some choppiness due to glottal stops, and also a few cases where it could have been a little more conversational. Some examples:

“of car shoppers”…(smooth out glottal stop on “of”)
“his next car” – smooth this out to sound more natural.
“could have reached Bob” – I think “could’ve reached Bob” would sound more natural here

I did like your choice of hitting “18” on “18 websites”. I personally think the glottal stop in this case is a good choice, as it is an important thing to “hit”.

I’m uploading mine too. I’d love to hear your thoughts and criticisms!

I didn’t focus on the Children’s one as much, but I noticed a few glottal stops in there as well, e.g., “some other” and “throughout”. Just maybe something to watch.

Jeff

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[Ymin33]

Nice job! I really like your voice for both these scripts I think you picked good ones suited to your voice. I think your second read (space) was more conversational because the words flowed together more smoothly. The first read could flow even more just like you did with your second script. Otherwise I really liked how you varied your tones.

[swester]

Hello – Submitting for first time – open to criticism on these narration reads… still fooling around w/tech. How is my pace? Is it conversational enough? Anything else? Thank you!

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[Steve Z-A]

I liked both of these. Tone is good and I would say mostly conversational. Technically they were good to listen to. In the Pets piece I might suggest reading the list towards the end a bit faster, with fewer pauses between each word.

[Terry Davis]

This will be the first time I am uploading anything. I would appreciate any type of feedback at all. Thank you in advance.

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[billmull]

MLB: I think you were trying too hard to sound dramatic at the very beginning, i.e. “The wait … is finally … over”, and it ended up sounding unnatural. Once you got into the rest of the script it seemed to flow much better. I find that smiling while I’m speaking helps me to sound more conversational and natural, so you might want to try this even when you’re trying to sound dramatic.

Capella: I liked this very much especially the very end, i.e. “don’t just learn, learn smarter” which sounded especially authentic. Good variety throughout the read. Nice job!

[jliebert]

Hi All – Appreciate your feedback on these 3 scripts! Looking specifically for feedback on conversational read, pacing, and flow.

Thanks!
Jeff

California Voiceover script
It’s easy to understand why the United States went to war to get California. A land full of wonders, where one man’s chance discovery triggered a mad rush for gold, and where a new generation of marijuana growers is testing the limits of the law. Full of ancient forests and volcanic forms and a valley that’s also the hottest place on earth.
Enjoy spectacular views along the Pacific Coast Highway or soar over beaches and wine country. Explore Big Sur redwoods and cross the Golden Gate Bridge into the heart and soul of this magnificent state. It’s a region full of character, from movie stars to silicon valley giants to amazing natural wonders. Join us as we visit the Golden State of California.

Golden Gate Bridge 75th Anniversary-Wells Fargo Voice Over Script
May 27, 1937. As evening descends to a chorus of oohs and aahs, where the night before stood only blackness, an icon of human accomplishment now illuminates the sky, and a new era of connectivity and commerce is ushered in with celebration and fireworks.
It was at that moment that the Golden Gate Bridge became an integral part of Bay Area life, as it remains to this day, an every day reminder that the Bay Area is a place where nothing is impossible, and dreams become reality.
The Golden Gate Bridge and Wells Fargo each continue to play leading roles in the growth and development of the Bay Area, and we’re honored to help bring the celebrations of the Golden Gate Bridge 75th Anniversary to life.
To Learn more, visit ggb75.wellsfargo.com.

Company Website Greeting
Meet Bob. Like 95% of car shoppers, he uses his computer, smartphone and tablet to shop for his next car. A few years ago, you could have reached Bob through traditional means such as Direct mail, TV or radio, and newspaper ads.Today, that simply isn’t enough. According to Google – consumers visit 18 websites on average – before stepping into a dealership.

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[Steve Z-A]

Nice reads. Well enunciated and good flow. I found I was wanting the first two to be read a bit faster, with shorter pauses between phrases. Not sure if others would agree with that. I liked the pace of the third one, however.

[jliebert]

Thank you!

[Taralosoff2]

Uploading my first recordings for feedback.
Does my read sound conversational? How is my diction? How about my pace? Anything else jump out at you – for better or worse?
Thanks!

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[ShellyMadison]

I really like the baby bath read. The smile in your voice comes through, and you sound interested in what you’re talking about.

The Danables read sounds a bit forced. You linger on the first vowel of words. Wish I had more clear feedback. Lol the variation in your tone and energy is great. Take another crack at it to find the natural flow like you’ve done more closely with the second read. 🙂

Great first submission!!

[Just_Journey]

**not working from a professional home studio yet, NO technical feedback, please!**

-Does my read sound conversational?

-How is my diction?

-Working on my pace – how is it?

-Am I reading my copy with a good flow or do I sound choppy?

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[jliebert]

I love the “Journey Always” script. Very natural sounding, good pace, great tone. The Disney Princess game sounds like you are doing a character. Your voice is higher than natural. I’d suggest you try it more in your own tone of voice, more natural. Hope this helps.

Jeff

[Just_Journey]

Thanks Jeff; I appreciate it!

[Bil-Bo]

MR. COFFEE ELITE PLUS COFFEEMAKER
NOW WHEN YOU STUMBLE OUT OF BED WITH A MILLION THINGS TO DO, AT
LEAST THE COFFEE’S READY. MR. COFFEE ELITE PLUS COFFEEMAKER STARTS
BREWING WHENEVER YOU SAY. YOU DECIDE THE NIGHT BEFORE, PUSH A FEW BUTTONS AND GO TO BED.
YOU’LL WAKE UP TO A FRESH, HOT P*T OF STEAMING SALVATION.
NOW THAT’S WHAT WE CALL A REAL EYE-OPENER.

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[jliebert]

This is really good. And you took the time to add music. Sounds really professional. Is this for your demo?

[Bil-Bo]

Hi
Thanks for listening. It’s in consideration for demo.
BH

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