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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #82949
    Artist7
    Participant

    Hello-I’ve uploaded two practice scripts, I’d really appreciate some feedback on pace and whether the reads sound conversational. Thanks in advance!

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    • #82962
      aemanimate
      Participant

      Hi!

      4 kids TV was great! Sounded like an actual commercial

      The Advil one just needs a little tweaking on the delivery. When you say or longer lasting than “Advil” Change the tone in the way you say Advil.

      • #83183
        Earthbul
        Participant

        I agree on the 4 kids spot. Although I felt it could have had more “smile” on it. As for the Advil spot i 110% on the tone. It threw me off a bit as well. The pauses should be tightened up as well. I enjoy the sound of your voice and your inflections. Keep em coming !

  • #82944
    RGK3
    Participant

    Hello all:

    I’d appreciate any feedback on the reads attached, particularly concerning the flow.

    Thanks!

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    • #82978
      ShellyMadison
      Participant

      These are great choices for your voice profile. Your diction is very good and doesn’t sound overly stilted. I’d suggest for Gillette finding some variety in your phrasing and ways to connect phrases. Paraphrased example: “3 mounted blades to adjust for every curve, PLUS….AND a strip of aloe.” This is a list and should be phrased as commas rather than periods. Currently they are three separate statements with all the same weight and tone. These are the selling points of the ad so find what’s indivually interesting about each feature but string them together since they’re all talking about one product. Your tag “Gillette the best a man can get” is very strong.

      Your opening list in Vanguard has a lot of nice variation and suits the tone of the product very well (sincere, reliable, authoritative). Just to play with the read, maybe see how it feels for that opening list to read like commas rather than periods. I don’t mean to use up talk necessarily, but let your tone indicate there is more to come with the first two and give that period in your voice for the third.

      great work

      • #83037
        RGK3
        Participant

        Thank you for the thoughtful feedback.

  • #82936
    SuperLuke
    Participant

    Happy New Year.
    I am working on bettering my audition and self-direction skills by performing commercial reads.
    Please have a listen and let me know what you think,

    Thank you,
    -Luke

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    • #82977
      ShellyMadison
      Participant

      Great energy to your read and enthusiasm for the product. Two things I’d suggest looking out for. First is trying to neutralize your accent (New England? I especially hear it in “hardwood”) but definitely a great thing to keep in your back pocket for ads that want that relatable regionalism (I have to WORK to keep my southern accent from sneaking in). Secondly, be careful with consonant blends at the end of words like “lift.” They need to be more crisp just for clarify of the script.

  • #82916
    TimberTykes
    Participant

    Good Evening!

    I have another recording that I’m posting here for practice. It’s a conversational commercial.

    My focus is on diction, keeping the reading at a steady pace with little unnatural pausing, and making sure the reading has a beginning/middle/end. I’m not too worried about the breathing, and I do apologize if my mouth sounds dry!

    Feedback of any kind is much appreciated. Thank you for your time!

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    • #82952
      RGK3
      Participant

      Hi,

      Nice job. The pacing is good and the diction is clear. On the constuctive side, I didn’t hear a great deal of transition between the beginning, middle, and end, and the read felt more presentational than conversational.

  • #82914
    forever888
    Participant

    Wonderful great diction, smooth and flowing.

  • #82913
    forever888
    Participant

    Brian great great read I thought I was actually watching the commercial.

  • #82912
    forever888
    Participant

    I thought your read was great diction, nice rythm

  • #82910
    forever888
    Participant

    Please note micropauses and diction

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    • #82976
      ShellyMadison
      Participant

      Hi there
      I’m having trouble opening both of your submissions. I tried on my computer and my phone. It shows as having a length of time but is silent. Very well could be my devices (both Apple) but wanted to alert you in case others are having difficulty too and is robbing you of feedback 🙂

  • #82907
    forever888
    Participant

    Feedback on micropauses and diction aside from obvious gaffs

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  • #82903
    BrianWigginsVO
    Participant

    Using the advice in the voice actor’s to-do list that was shared in the recent Edge newsletter, and hoping to get some feedback on some recent auditions.

    Audition 1 Specs: Male, 40s-70s. Natural, not commercial. Authoritative. A rich, deep, lived-in voice with some unique character. No southern accents (neutral dialect). Ability to romance copy, create a longing for West Virginia. Multiple scripts.

    Audition 2 Specs: Super energetic and exciting, yet friendly – that friend who can’t wait to tell you about something new they tried.

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    • #82942
      Declan Waters
      Participant

      Hi Brian,

      I like the differentiation between the two reads, the confidence in one and the energy in the other.

      For Announcer_Brian-Wiggins, it sounds (to me) like some of your words ending in L or vowels like in the word ‘you’ trail off slightly. That’s my only note for that

      I liked Fazolis-VO_Brian Wiggins a lot, your read makes me want to try some of that food! When you go from describing the sauces to the cheeses, there’s a bit of a jump in your excitement level where I think it might flow better to have more of a crescendo linking the two parts together, which I can hear a little bit of at the words ‘alfredo sauce,’ but I think it could be even stronger, if that makes sense. Hope this is useful!

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