[David Goldberg]

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[Nikka Kowidge]

Hi VO friends! Here another attempt at the jiff peanut butter commercial.
Thank you in advance for your thoughts with regard to my tone and conversational style. Please no technical comments.

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[Declan Waters]

Hello,

I like your style, and I think you got the -talking to other Moms- tone down, well done
I think you could use more inflexion on your question phrases, it was just a tad flat. Examples: “My kids? / You know?” Maybe inflect higher up on the word ‘kids’ and try both down and up for ‘know’

Hope that helps!

[Earthbul]

Audition piece.
Any and all feedback is welcomed and appreciated.

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[Earthbul]

Been awhile. Thought I’d dip my toe back in the pool 🙂 I’m aware of the down swing on some of the words. I’m working on it.
All comments welcomed and appreciated.
In 1819, the 238 ton Essex set sail from Nantucket on a routine voyage to hunt whales.
Fifteen months later, the unthinkable happened: In the farthest reaches of the South Pacific,
the Essex was rammed and sunk by an enraged s***m whale. Fearing cannibals on the islands to the west,
the twenty-man crew set out in three small boats for South America, almost 3,000 miles away.
Three months later, only eight were left alive, the survivors having been forced to eat the bodies of their dead shipmates.
The ordeal of the Essex was as well-known in it’s time as the story of the Titanic is today.
Steeped in the lore of whaling, with deep resonance in American literature and history.

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[Bil-Bo]

Character with SFX
LINGUINI AND BOB RESTAURANT
When dining formally, in order to avoid an embarrassing utensil faux pas, observe the following protocol: Begin by locating your seafood fork. Grasping this fork between thumb and forefinger, proceed to shove it into the ear of the person directly to your left. SFX: Yeouch!! Next, to impress business associates, stick your soup spoon up your nose and exclaim, “Look at me, I’m a bowl of soup.” When the entree arrives, use the butter spreader to catapult particularly juicy portions onto the balding heads of nearby diners. SFX: Splat! And finally, quietly finish with your dessert utensils, all the while, of course, making odd gurgling noises SFX: Gurgling! and clucking like a chicken. SFX: Clucking Chicken! This lesson in table etiquette has been brought to you by Linguini and Bob, who invite you to enjoy serious Italian food in a not-so-serious atmosphere. Linguini and Bob, now open at Butler Square in Minneapolis.

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[jnamar]

Hi everyone!
Both my recordings are done on an Iphone so the sound quality is not good.
I mostly want your feedback on my delivery. Like did I emphasize the right words? How’s my inflection on these reads; is it Flat? Rising? Falling? Also did I ended my thoughts well after a sentence. Or anything that you like about it or you think I can work on to be better. Thank you, let’s stay motivated!

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[RGK3]

Hi,

Nice job. I think you told the story well in the Burt’s Bees spot and your inflections matched the text appropriately. I think you could have gotten more out of the end of the thought on “so you can be a force” if you slowed it down and emphasized the benefit more strongly (being a force).

The AmEx spot felt less conversational. The inflections made sense, but the pacing felt a little flat and it was less clear you were communicating directly to someone.

[ShellyMadison]

Gathering some more feedback leading up to a coaching session so any insights are appreciated! Still not in need of technical feedback because just recording on Voice Memo on my phone (don’t you worry my tech savvy friends, that day will come 😀 )

Thanks in advance!

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[autobuffyservices]

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[NuZe]

Hello just looking for feedback on my scripts

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[jnamar]

Hi Nuze,
I listen to the nike ad. You sounded clear and easy to listen. I really like how you ended. I think I would also like to hear this again but with the same tone/attitude like how mentioned the brand at the end.

[Artist7]

Thanks for listening, aemanimate! I appreciate your helpful feedback!

[aemanimate]

Would love any kind of feedback!

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[jnamar]

Hi Aemanimate,
I listen to both of your recordings and I can’t help to think that as of now your niche can be in medical, education or instructions vo. The anaconda read needed to sound like your narrating with emotion for example when you say squeezes you can elongate the word squeeezes. Just my humble opinion. Take care!

[Artist7]

Hello! Both of your reads sound great! The only feedback I have is for “Swan-Ganz.” The words “is” “to” and “present” all seem to run together. I would slow down the pace just a bit in order to pronounce them each distinctly.

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