[David Goldberg]

Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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[Earthbul]

Any and all feedback is welcomed and appreciated. Thanks !

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[SuperLuke]

When you say, “There are guys who will smirk at you”, at the beginning of the copy, I think if you put more emphasis and power into the word “There are guys”, the rest of your recording will flow smoothly. Think about how the listener of this commercial will feel, hearing the build-up and the importance of what you have to say in this recording. Everything else flowed just fine =)

[Earthbul]

I totally hear what your saying. And saying it again out loud really reinforces it. Thanks for the feedback, Luke !!

[RGK3]

Hi all:

I’d appreciate any feedback on these two reads, particularly on pacing and whether they sound conversational. Am I hitting the right money words?

Thanks!

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[dejapowell]

In my opinion both recordings were very conversational, and your diction was very good. The only suggestion I would make is to work on your speed just a bit. Overall, very good!

[BB123]

Hello All,

Looking for feedback on these two for my homework assignment. Two different styles. Any feedback would be appreciated

Thank you

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[swester]

Hi – I like how varied your voice is with each piece. I like how you read the first line in the Dunkin spot. In the Pimco copy, I would work on hitting the word ‘bond’ a little harder to ensure it is coming across, as that is what the spot is about. Good Job!

[BB123]

I appreciate the feedback! Thank you!

[Earthbul]

Comments and critiques are welcomed and appreciated.

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[20jledesma]

Any Feedback to my first 2 practice scripts would be appreciated!

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[Earthbul]

Any and all feedback is welcomed and appreciated.
Thanks !!

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[TimberTykes]

Good Evening!

I have another recording for practice. I’m repairing my soundproofing panels, so apologies for the sound quality.

As usual, my goal is for a conversational piece, and I’m looking for proper diction and pacing. I want to make sure that ‘PRIME DAY’ is given as much recognition as it deserves, and that ‘change’ is varied enough, while trying my best to sound close to somewhat natural, lol.

Feedback and criticism is always appreciated. Thanks for your time!

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[Earthbul]

I felt the enthusiasm could have been dialed down just a bit. That being said I enjoy your voice and like your pauses. Just breathe a little bit and relax.

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[SuperLuke]

I think that you should take a deep breath before you read the copy, aka “The big breath”. It will give you time to fill your diaphragm with air and remember to relax when performing the copy. I feel like you need to breathe more/ have more breath support when performing this copy. Other than that, it was nice.

[Artist7]

Hello! I would really appreciate some feedback on my reads for these two practice scripts. Thanks so much!

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[latyesemca]

I would have to agree with RGK3. the 0% benefit would have been great to have that pause. But both of your reads were superb! regardless of not pausing, it sounded legit!

[RGK3]

Hi,

I liked both of these reads. The Coors one was most successful. I found it conversational and you told the story well. I think you missed a couple of opportunities in the AmEx. The 0% benefit could probably have been emphasized more than the fact that it’s introductory, for example.

[Nikka Kowidge]

Hi VO friends! Here another attempt at the jiff peanut butter commercial.
Thank you in advance for your thoughts with regard to my tone and conversational style. Please no technical comments.

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[Declan Waters]

Hello,

I like your style, and I think you got the -talking to other Moms- tone down, well done
I think you could use more inflexion on your question phrases, it was just a tad flat. Examples: “My kids? / You know?” Maybe inflect higher up on the word ‘kids’ and try both down and up for ‘know’

Hope that helps!

[Earthbul]

Audition piece.
Any and all feedback is welcomed and appreciated.

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