[David Goldberg]

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[Earthbul]

Practice read.

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[Artist7]

Great read! Pace is on target, flowed well… Enjoyed listening to this one!

[Jaljr]

Listened through a couple of time. Hard to find anything not to like.

[Earthbul]

Thoughts on recording quality ? Was also wondering if the music mix is adequate ?
Thanks in advance

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[ShellyMadison]

Your voice is clear and forward. Recording sounds well recorded and mastered. I think the music should be louder to sound more cohesive. Currently being lost in the background (at least on my computer speakers)

[Earthbul]

Narration read. Far from perfect. Thoughts ?

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[jnamar]

Hi everyone,
Hope you all doing great! I want feedback on this commercial read. I recorded this on my iphone so the sound quality is err. I’m working on sounding relax and with that I’m also trying not to drop syllables, or the inflections, and also want to know if I pick a good focus on the script.
Thank you, take care everyone!

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[Tim Kraft]

Hi – agreed, you have a very pleasant, relaxed voice…and you can hear that relaxation on the first line, then it gets fast. Almost like you want to finish it quickly.

Take a breath at the end of that first line, stay relaxed. Personally I’d pitch down the “dals” in “Sandals”. Sounds more conversational as, in natural speech, we tend pitch down at the end of phrases.

Keep at it, I think this can be a good read for your voice style!!

[Earthbul]

Slowing it down a bit and putting more emphasis on certain words could really bring this up a notch.
You have a very pleasant sound to your voice.

[Nikka Kowidge]

Hello voiceover actors, here’s a commercial read I’m working on. please feel free to give any feedback besides technical. Specifically, I am still working on glottal stops as well as conversational read. Does it sound like I am talking to my friend?

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[kburman]

Hello Nikka,

It sounded very conversational. I like the pace. Just a few tweaks as felt like there were two pauses that I would leave out. between Revlon and High and after gently protect. Those slight changes and Red heads will want the product. Nice work!

[Debbie]

Hi Nikka! Great read, you have a really nice tone. There are some moments in the copy where you could be more conversational. I find that making the effort to keep smiling through the read (even when it feels super weird) helps a lot for me, so that may be something to try if you haven’t already.

[jnamar]

Hi Nikka, I like your voice and delivery sounds young and lively. If you want try for a more sassy read. Usually these hair-dye commercials have some of that. This attitude might help the glottal stops. Good luck!

[tmanning.tix]

Greetings all.. Posting here per my instructor. My first recording. Just getting started using the editing software as well. Feedback is very welcomed. Improvement is always possible.

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[Bruce Kramer]

I agree with Nikka that your tone and voice quality are a good fit for this topic. And I also agree you can slow down. In particular, when the script discusses some of the specific things that he enjoyed in Montana (mountains, rivers…), you can take a moment to really visualize them in your mind, and then voice it. That will help you deepen your connection to the script.

[Nikka Kowidge]

I love this read! Your tone and voice quality hit the mark for the subject. In my opinion, you can slow down a little bit at the beginning and give us a little more around some choice words like Nirvana. The second half of the read included your really good emphasis on those types of important and playful words. I also likes that you slowed down the pace a bit in the second half which allowed me to really listen to the content. Great annunciation and emphasis on the final line. This is the story of Hemingway.

[montereichert]

Hello again wonderful people. Please comment and/or critique. Thanks!

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[jnamar]

Hi! I like your delivery, it sounds like a radio commercial, sounds professional. However, I think it would be good if you made emphasis on ‘in person’ and in ‘grammy nominated singer and actress’ to just glide on that. Overall is pretty good! Wish you the best!

[Earthbul]

Comments and critiques are welcomed.

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[Tim Kraft]

Love this read – is it a booked job?

Currently doing some coaching in promo reads, and to me you NAIL this. Lots of energy but respects that fine line between ‘going big” and “over the top”.

Thanks for the inspiration!

[Mike_Control]

Man, I swear copywriters should take their scripts and go beta-test them to a random person on the street to see if it sounds normal.

Anyway, here are two commercial scripts. If you listen to them, let me know if the ending of the MILK ad sounds natural. If I sound conversational, the ending slogan sounds less punchy; however, if I really lean into the pitch, then it doesn’t sound normal.

Thoughts?

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[weiss-richmond]

What I notice with the Milk read is that every word is really clear, but that in certain cases that clarity seems to be coming at the expense of flow. My hunch is that if you were to do a couple reads where you trust that all of this good work will show up, but throw it away a bit more, you might get a version of the whole thing that feels a little easier and more fluid. I think that goes for the ending slogan as well. I hope that’s helpful.

[montereichert]

Hello all. I just wanted to see what you think of my recoding below. I was in response to an audition request.

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[Earthbul]

It sounded pretty stilted to me. The emphasis on certain words felt a little off.

[montereichert]

Thank you so much for your feedback. Yes. I can see that now. I was trying for a over confident and some what arrogant tone, as this was suppose to come from a corporate president. But I lost the natural sounding part. I’ll fix that. Thanks again!

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