[David Goldberg]

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[Earthbul]

American Tire Supply practice read
Put a little more pep in my step.
I was in a b****r of a Monday mood but I had fun with recording and editing this one.
Any thoughts on how to improve upon it are welcomed.

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[RCampos]

Lots to compliment here: the burst of “free” at the top, the chuckle, and the “hey” – all nice touches that make this very effective. I would suggest a couple of minor tweaks:
An ever so slight pause after: a while right? At the moment, the “well” feels like it comes too soon. You’ve got listener hooked and a little pause can build suspense.
And – “one all weather radial” runs together for me. Just a little differentiation here would help clarify the details of the deal. By the by, I listened to your comments on my AIG VO and made changes – just reloaded today. Would appreciate your take on it. Thanks!

[Debbie]

Hello everyone!
I’m working on being conversational and my glottal stops, so wanted to practice on copy that has key words starting with vowels.
I’m a little congested so you may be able to hear it. No tech notes please, all other feedback welcome!

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[RCampos]

Hi Debbie, very nice job on this VO. I just have a few suggestions:
It feels like you tightened your throat on the word “scenes.”
You could enunciate “definitely” more – sounds like you gobble up a syllable in the middle.
Other than that, I think a little slower would be better, and a touch more of the resonance in your voice. It sounds like most of this is in your “head” voice, rather than from the diaphragm.
Finally, if you have a moment, I’d appreciate your comments on a VO I just loaded today: AIG. Thanks! Robert

[M]

very nice. Keep it going/connected with “this is definitely the place for cross country…etc…”
maybe mark breaths on the script so you don’t get bogged down with an unnatural inhale.

[Earthbul]

I liked your read very much. I felt it was very conversational, laid back and I could hear the smile in your voice. Great enunciation as well. Lovely voice. I’d love to hear you even more relaxed in the read if that makes sense. I feel it would be even better than it is now.

[Jaljr]

Hey, folks –
A couple of lightly edited commercial reads. I value your comments.
Be well…
JALKR

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[M]

Deluth: great match for your voice: deep, hint of south, confident, outdoorsy with a hint of a “commanding general” to it. Bravo.
Acura: seemed less of a fit but perhaps taking out some of the accent, deepening the tone and slowing down could elevate to a more luxurious level.

[VOgalUS]

I could hear ‘money’ in your voice for Acura. Your voice would do good for an even more expensive car. The copy for Duluth distracted me from ‘hearing’ you. Buck n***d for a trading company. Clever.

[Earthbul]

I enjoyed listeng to your delivery on the Deluth read. Perfect fit. Didn’t feel the same about Acura. You didn’t sound comfortable and it didn’t flow. Also a bit of mouth noise in that one as well. That being said I’d love to hear you do a food or travel piece. You have an awesome folksy delivery. Great work.

[Earthbul]

Just experimenting with mixing at the moment.
Not sure if the music is overpowering or under.
Thoughts ?

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[RCampos]

Enjoy listening to your reads!
Just a few notes:
The “t” in retirement is a bit lost.
And – almost sounds like a double “d” on He’d – or is there extraneous click there?
As for the music mix, it’s low enough as to be too distant from the VO. I think if you’re going to use music, it should be more integrated. I would raise the level. All best,
Robert

[Jaljr]

That was a good read. I had to turn it up to get the music in my ears. Certainly not overpowering. Nice job.

[Earthbul]

Practice read.

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[Artist7]

Great read! Pace is on target, flowed well… Enjoyed listening to this one!

[Jaljr]

Listened through a couple of time. Hard to find anything not to like.

[Earthbul]

Thoughts on recording quality ? Was also wondering if the music mix is adequate ?
Thanks in advance

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[ShellyMadison]

Your voice is clear and forward. Recording sounds well recorded and mastered. I think the music should be louder to sound more cohesive. Currently being lost in the background (at least on my computer speakers)

[Earthbul]

Narration read. Far from perfect. Thoughts ?

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[jnamar]

Hi everyone,
Hope you all doing great! I want feedback on this commercial read. I recorded this on my iphone so the sound quality is err. I’m working on sounding relax and with that I’m also trying not to drop syllables, or the inflections, and also want to know if I pick a good focus on the script.
Thank you, take care everyone!

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[Tim Kraft]

Hi – agreed, you have a very pleasant, relaxed voice…and you can hear that relaxation on the first line, then it gets fast. Almost like you want to finish it quickly.

Take a breath at the end of that first line, stay relaxed. Personally I’d pitch down the “dals” in “Sandals”. Sounds more conversational as, in natural speech, we tend pitch down at the end of phrases.

Keep at it, I think this can be a good read for your voice style!!

[Earthbul]

Slowing it down a bit and putting more emphasis on certain words could really bring this up a notch.
You have a very pleasant sound to your voice.

[Nikka Kowidge]

Hello voiceover actors, here’s a commercial read I’m working on. please feel free to give any feedback besides technical. Specifically, I am still working on glottal stops as well as conversational read. Does it sound like I am talking to my friend?

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[kburman]

Hello Nikka,

It sounded very conversational. I like the pace. Just a few tweaks as felt like there were two pauses that I would leave out. between Revlon and High and after gently protect. Those slight changes and Red heads will want the product. Nice work!

[Debbie]

Hi Nikka! Great read, you have a really nice tone. There are some moments in the copy where you could be more conversational. I find that making the effort to keep smiling through the read (even when it feels super weird) helps a lot for me, so that may be something to try if you haven’t already.

[jnamar]

Hi Nikka, I like your voice and delivery sounds young and lively. If you want try for a more sassy read. Usually these hair-dye commercials have some of that. This attitude might help the glottal stops. Good luck!

[tmanning.tix]

Greetings all.. Posting here per my instructor. My first recording. Just getting started using the editing software as well. Feedback is very welcomed. Improvement is always possible.

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[Bruce Kramer]

I agree with Nikka that your tone and voice quality are a good fit for this topic. And I also agree you can slow down. In particular, when the script discusses some of the specific things that he enjoyed in Montana (mountains, rivers…), you can take a moment to really visualize them in your mind, and then voice it. That will help you deepen your connection to the script.

[Nikka Kowidge]

I love this read! Your tone and voice quality hit the mark for the subject. In my opinion, you can slow down a little bit at the beginning and give us a little more around some choice words like Nirvana. The second half of the read included your really good emphasis on those types of important and playful words. I also likes that you slowed down the pace a bit in the second half which allowed me to really listen to the content. Great annunciation and emphasis on the final line. This is the story of Hemingway.

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