[David Goldberg]

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[RCampos]

Hi Everyone,
I’d appreciate your feedback on my delivery here. Trying to find the sweet spot between conversational and interesting. Also working on pacing. Recorded on a cell phone, so not ready for tech notes. Thank you!

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[Jaljr]

Gothic was more conversational than Congaree. Both were interesting.

[RCampos]

Thanks very much for the feedback.

[Earthbul]

You sound much more relaxed and conversational in these reads. Other then some
sound treatment issues I think these really flowed. Plus,
I could only hear you through one channel which didn’t help.

[RCampos]

Thanks very much for the feedback. I’ll work on my recording setup soon and will also make sure to put the narration on both channels. all best, Robert

[RCampos]

Hi Everyone,
I’d welcome your feedback on my second version of this VO: AIG. I’m working on reflecting the tone of the story about people abandoning their homes. Also working on more inflection and on being conversational. Any comments would be greatly appreciated. Best, Robert

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[Earthbul]

I felt you connected to the copy in a more believable way in this one. Could be a little more relaxed in your delivery. The audio could be cleaned up a bit more. I liked your inflections as well. I’m going to take a crack at this one as well.

[RCampos]

Appreciate the feedback. Yes – need to beef up my setup and get cleaner audio to start. Will work on relaxing too.

[Earthbul]

I hear you. Fine tuning your recording gear and space can be exhausting.
What mic and daw are you using currently ?

[RCampos]

My background is in film and videography (writer/producer and sometimes 2nd camera) so I’ve been using a pretty rustic field setup: a Sony ECM-77B lavalier microphone which I pin to my collar – and a Tascam DR-100 recorder. I’m just starting to look at the gear I will need to do voice over work. Open to any recommendations. What are you using?

[RCampos]

My background is in film and videography (writer/producer and sometimes 2nd camera) so I’ve been using a pretty rustic field setup: a Sony ECM-77B lavalier microphone which I pin to my collar – and a Tascam DR-100 recorder. I’m just starting to look at the gear I will need to do voice over work. Open to any recommendations. What are you using?

[Nikka Kowidge]

Hey Friends! Here’a a quick commercial read about Crayola markers. I’m looking for feedback on how conversational it sounds…
I don’t need feedback on the tech bc my studio is not set up yet.
Thank you!!!

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[RCampos]

Hi Nikka,
Your voice sounds great here. A few minor notes:
I would like to hear a little some variation in the first few words: Crayola Color Wonder Markers.
Also – you have a pause after this phrase which might be a touch too long. To me it sounds to me like you’re starting a new sentence rather than continuing the first one.
I agree with punching ONLY more.
Great job. I just posted a VO called AIG (version 2). Would love your feedback.
Thanks,
Robert

[M]

lovely voice! My suggestions: color “ONLY” on special paper (not on table, walls etc…)

[Leann]

Hey there,
I have been on hiatus for a while due to… life.
So anyway, these are for my upcoming session.
If you have time, take a listen. I still have a lot of work to do within Audacity.
I appreciate any suggestions and comments! – I edited my post and now have doubled my attached files. There should only be three! whoops 😀
Thanks lots! 🙂 Leann

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[RCampos]

Hi Leann,
Nice voice! I think you could relax a bit more here and give this a more human touch. Also, check your diction on the word, “add.” I think you move to the next word too quickly and the “d” in add is a little lost.

Sunlife2 is better! I think I would be great to warm this up even more. You might try slowing down and think about the person you’re speaking too. Hope that helps. And if you have a moment, I would welcome your feedback on 2 VO’s I just posted today: Congaree and American Gothic. Thank you!

[Shawn]

I listened to the Amex and SunLife. Thought they were both warm and friendly. Subtle intonation kept me listening.

[Artist7]

Hello! Looking for feedback on these two practice reads. Thanks so much!

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[M]

Great job.
RB thoughts: the connection gets lost by “omega 3”and the song-song of “flax seeds” – I was expecting a list after “seeds”. Loved the emphasis on “plump” and “juicy” – two great words to “taste” when you say them.
CJ thoughts: great choices on pace and tone! Wonderful delivery suited for your soothing, yet playful, voice. Really nice work!

[Shawn]

I thought the cool-jazz reading was great. Seductive voice and enticing read. Very jazzy.

[Earthbul]

I enjoyed both reads. I felt biggest and news should’ve flowed a little better. Plus a slight pause between flaxseed & plump juicy raisins. With a slight emphasis on the latter would really bump it up. Heck, now you have wanting to take a shot it lol
Great job on both. I look forward to hearing your next one.

[Earthbul]

American Tire Supply practice read
Put a little more pep in my step.
I was in a b****r of a Monday mood but I had fun with recording and editing this one.
Any thoughts on how to improve upon it are welcomed.

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[RCampos]

Lots to compliment here: the burst of “free” at the top, the chuckle, and the “hey” – all nice touches that make this very effective. I would suggest a couple of minor tweaks:
An ever so slight pause after: a while right? At the moment, the “well” feels like it comes too soon. You’ve got listener hooked and a little pause can build suspense.
And – “one all weather radial” runs together for me. Just a little differentiation here would help clarify the details of the deal. By the by, I listened to your comments on my AIG VO and made changes – just reloaded today. Would appreciate your take on it. Thanks!

[Debbie]

Hello everyone!
I’m working on being conversational and my glottal stops, so wanted to practice on copy that has key words starting with vowels.
I’m a little congested so you may be able to hear it. No tech notes please, all other feedback welcome!

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[RCampos]

Hi Debbie, very nice job on this VO. I just have a few suggestions:
It feels like you tightened your throat on the word “scenes.”
You could enunciate “definitely” more – sounds like you gobble up a syllable in the middle.
Other than that, I think a little slower would be better, and a touch more of the resonance in your voice. It sounds like most of this is in your “head” voice, rather than from the diaphragm.
Finally, if you have a moment, I’d appreciate your comments on a VO I just loaded today: AIG. Thanks! Robert

[M]

very nice. Keep it going/connected with “this is definitely the place for cross country…etc…”
maybe mark breaths on the script so you don’t get bogged down with an unnatural inhale.

[Earthbul]

I liked your read very much. I felt it was very conversational, laid back and I could hear the smile in your voice. Great enunciation as well. Lovely voice. I’d love to hear you even more relaxed in the read if that makes sense. I feel it would be even better than it is now.

[Jaljr]

Hey, folks –
A couple of lightly edited commercial reads. I value your comments.
Be well…
JALKR

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[M]

Deluth: great match for your voice: deep, hint of south, confident, outdoorsy with a hint of a “commanding general” to it. Bravo.
Acura: seemed less of a fit but perhaps taking out some of the accent, deepening the tone and slowing down could elevate to a more luxurious level.

[VOgalUS]

I could hear ‘money’ in your voice for Acura. Your voice would do good for an even more expensive car. The copy for Duluth distracted me from ‘hearing’ you. Buck n***d for a trading company. Clever.

[Earthbul]

I enjoyed listeng to your delivery on the Deluth read. Perfect fit. Didn’t feel the same about Acura. You didn’t sound comfortable and it didn’t flow. Also a bit of mouth noise in that one as well. That being said I’d love to hear you do a food or travel piece. You have an awesome folksy delivery. Great work.

[Earthbul]

Just experimenting with mixing at the moment.
Not sure if the music is overpowering or under.
Thoughts ?

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[RCampos]

Enjoy listening to your reads!
Just a few notes:
The “t” in retirement is a bit lost.
And – almost sounds like a double “d” on He’d – or is there extraneous click there?
As for the music mix, it’s low enough as to be too distant from the VO. I think if you’re going to use music, it should be more integrated. I would raise the level. All best,
Robert

[Jaljr]

That was a good read. I had to turn it up to get the music in my ears. Certainly not overpowering. Nice job.

[Earthbul]

Practice read.

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[Artist7]

Great read! Pace is on target, flowed well… Enjoyed listening to this one!

[Jaljr]

Listened through a couple of time. Hard to find anything not to like.

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