Hello, I’ve completed two reads one Narration which is a positive one. While the commercial is dark and mysterious. Please give me feedback, so I learn to keep improving myself, Thank you.
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Nice read. It shows a good range. I especially liked the second one as a unique sound. On both of them I would try varying the pace. Also, I do here an s sound as your are speaking. I think there maybe a plugin for that.
Hi Tim,
Fantastic read on both. I love the pace and different voice inflection. On the Beachfront the only tweak I would do is enunciate Sellable House better as couldn’t quite make that out. And on the NBC sport emphasize the words “Inside Access” like you are disclosing a secret. Nice work.
Hey KBURMAN, thanks for the feedback.Actually that line was “shell of a house”, not “sellable house”. An enunciation failure on my end either way! Not surprisingly, I do have a tendency to slur in H’s and. S’s…you have good ears 🙂
Agree too that I could go bigger on “inside access”.
Thanks again, I’ll post more as I’m having a great time with these promo reads.
I agree with Tim. Approachable and informative. You bring a very
believable delivery to this read. You sound nice and relaxed. Interested in hearing more of you.
Hi Debbie – you have a warm, friendly but knowledgeable voice. I think this is a great read, sounds like e-learning might be a niche to focus your auditions.
Your diction/enunciation is super-precise, which I feel is appropriate for the read. Only the phrase “high cos-t” didn’t seem quite as pointed, but only in comparison to the rest of the script.
I like the timbre in your voice. Great read, really nice delivery.
Is it just me or were the edits a little rough ? I am listening on my phone so there’s that lol Who knows ? Nice job I look forward to hearing what’s next.
Nice reads. I agree with above. It felt like a marine was giving me the inside scoop. On that one the only tweak would be I would emphasize courage. Really think about what that feels like when you say it. On the news one, I would do the same with the words “Want and Need” think people want and need channel 11. Lastly, overall the sound sounds similar on all 3. Perhaps you want to choose something that is out of your comfort zone to show your range. Overall great work and engaging sound.
Nice reads. I agree with above. It felt like a marine was giving me the inside scoop. On that one the only tweak would be I would emphasize courage. Really think about what that feels like when you say it. On the news one, I would do the same with the words “Want and Need” think people want and need channel 11. Lastly, overall the sound sounds similar on all 3. Perhaps you want to choose something that is out of your comfort zone to show your range. Overall great work and engaging sound.
Hi JALjr – Sounds to me like the Marines read was MADE for your voice. You have a true “all American” tone, like you really know what you’re talking about. I also hear that coming through in the Eiffel Tower read, though that sounds a bit more narrative (to my ear) than commercial.
I think News 7 is more promo and needs to go bigger. I’m hardly an expert (coaching on promo now), but these type of commercials often border on announcery. I’ll post a few promo reads I’m working on for feedback.
Both are great reads. Advanced tech is better than Sgt Pepper. Your voice works well for that corporate trainer.
On Sgt Pepper…good emotion…maybe a bit more dramatic than necessary, but overall very good.
Look forward to hearing more.
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Listened through a couple of times. My ears only caught little ticky tacky things. I think it is a really good read. The music is good…maybe mix it in a little earlier. No big deal either way. Great job
First time posting material; I just changed spaces and wondered if I could get some feedback on these auditions I recorded. Commercial/advertisement style.
Well well my friend, you’ve got quite the voice in you lol Seriously good work. The words “shine” and “up” in the enthusiasm spot, were they cut together ? Just wondering because editing is the bane of my existence at times and I know the hassle of getting it just right. Blah, blah, blah that’s neither here nor there. Really nice work man I look forward to hearing more of your reads.