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  • #84156
    mikemcgann
    Participant

    Hey everyone.

    Attached is a narration sample for review and feedback. Thanks.

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    • #84200
      Earthbul
      Participant

      I like the timbre in your voice. Great read, really nice delivery.
      Is it just me or were the edits a little rough ? I am listening on my phone so there’s that lol Who knows ? Nice job I look forward to hearing what’s next.

  • #84141
    Jaljr
    Participant

    Hello, friends –

    Here are three lightly edited commercial reads for an upcoming coaching session. I appreciate all comments and feedback.
    Thanks

    JALJr

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    • #84254
      kburman
      Participant

      Jaljr

      Nice reads. I agree with above. It felt like a marine was giving me the inside scoop. On that one the only tweak would be I would emphasize courage. Really think about what that feels like when you say it. On the news one, I would do the same with the words “Want and Need” think people want and need channel 11. Lastly, overall the sound sounds similar on all 3. Perhaps you want to choose something that is out of your comfort zone to show your range. Overall great work and engaging sound.

    • #84253
      kburman
      Participant

      Jaljr

      Nice reads. I agree with above. It felt like a marine was giving me the inside scoop. On that one the only tweak would be I would emphasize courage. Really think about what that feels like when you say it. On the news one, I would do the same with the words “Want and Need” think people want and need channel 11. Lastly, overall the sound sounds similar on all 3. Perhaps you want to choose something that is out of your comfort zone to show your range. Overall great work and engaging sound.

    • #84179
      Tim Kraft
      Participant

      Hi JALjr – Sounds to me like the Marines read was MADE for your voice. You have a true “all American” tone, like you really know what you’re talking about. I also hear that coming through in the Eiffel Tower read, though that sounds a bit more narrative (to my ear) than commercial.

      I think News 7 is more promo and needs to go bigger. I’m hardly an expert (coaching on promo now), but these type of commercials often border on announcery. I’ll post a few promo reads I’m working on for feedback.

      Great work!

  • #84138
    Talia Hankin
    Participant

    Hello!
    This is my first time posting. I welcome any and all feedback and thoughts you may have!

    These recordings are for Narration.

    Thank you so much!
    Talia

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    • #84145
      Jaljr
      Participant

      Hey Talia –

      Both are great reads. Advanced tech is better than Sgt Pepper. Your voice works well for that corporate trainer.
      On Sgt Pepper…good emotion…maybe a bit more dramatic than necessary, but overall very good.
      Look forward to hearing more.

  • #84122
    Earthbul
    Participant

    Re-Uploading. I cleaned up the audio and added a music bed.
    Any thoughts ?

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    • #84136
      Jaljr
      Participant

      Hey –
      Listened through a couple of times. My ears only caught little ticky tacky things. I think it is a really good read. The music is good…maybe mix it in a little earlier. No big deal either way. Great job

  • #84067
    Dan Pyuen
    Participant

    Hi everyone!

    First time posting material; I just changed spaces and wondered if I could get some feedback on these auditions I recorded. Commercial/advertisement style.

    Thank you!

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    • #84084
      Earthbul
      Participant

      Well well my friend, you’ve got quite the voice in you lol Seriously good work. The words “shine” and “up” in the enthusiasm spot, were they cut together ? Just wondering because editing is the bane of my existence at times and I know the hassle of getting it just right. Blah, blah, blah that’s neither here nor there. Really nice work man I look forward to hearing more of your reads.

      • #84109
        Dan Pyuen
        Participant

        IIRC I only ran normalize and noise floor, otherwise I think it was one take. Thanks!

  • #84062
    RCampos
    Participant

    Hi Everyone,
    I’d appreciate your feedback on my delivery here. Trying to find the sweet spot between conversational and interesting. Also working on pacing. Recorded on a cell phone, so not ready for tech notes. Thank you!

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    • #84137
      Jaljr
      Participant

      Gothic was more conversational than Congaree. Both were interesting.

      • #84256
        RCampos
        Participant

        Thanks very much for the feedback.

    • #84107
      Earthbul
      Participant

      You sound much more relaxed and conversational in these reads. Other then some
      sound treatment issues I think these really flowed. Plus,
      I could only hear you through one channel which didn’t help.

      • #84119
        RCampos
        Participant

        Thanks very much for the feedback. I’ll work on my recording setup soon and will also make sure to put the narration on both channels. all best, Robert

  • #83995
    RCampos
    Participant

    Hi Everyone,
    I’d welcome your feedback on my second version of this VO: AIG. I’m working on reflecting the tone of the story about people abandoning their homes. Also working on more inflection and on being conversational. Any comments would be greatly appreciated. Best, Robert

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    • #84015
      Earthbul
      Participant

      I felt you connected to the copy in a more believable way in this one. Could be a little more relaxed in your delivery. The audio could be cleaned up a bit more. I liked your inflections as well. I’m going to take a crack at this one as well.

      • #84061
        RCampos
        Participant

        Appreciate the feedback. Yes – need to beef up my setup and get cleaner audio to start. Will work on relaxing too.

        • #84108
          Earthbul
          Participant

          I hear you. Fine tuning your recording gear and space can be exhausting.
          What mic and daw are you using currently ?

        • #84127
          RCampos
          Participant

          My background is in film and videography (writer/producer and sometimes 2nd camera) so I’ve been using a pretty rustic field setup: a Sony ECM-77B lavalier microphone which I pin to my collar – and a Tascam DR-100 recorder. I’m just starting to look at the gear I will need to do voice over work. Open to any recommendations. What are you using?

        • #84120
          RCampos
          Participant

          My background is in film and videography (writer/producer and sometimes 2nd camera) so I’ve been using a pretty rustic field setup: a Sony ECM-77B lavalier microphone which I pin to my collar – and a Tascam DR-100 recorder. I’m just starting to look at the gear I will need to do voice over work. Open to any recommendations. What are you using?

  • #83810
    Nikka Kowidge
    Participant

    Hey Friends! Here’a a quick commercial read about Crayola markers. I’m looking for feedback on how conversational it sounds…
    I don’t need feedback on the tech bc my studio is not set up yet.
    Thank you!!!

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    • #84013
      RCampos
      Participant

      Hi Nikka,
      Your voice sounds great here. A few minor notes:
      I would like to hear a little some variation in the first few words: Crayola Color Wonder Markers.
      Also – you have a pause after this phrase which might be a touch too long. To me it sounds to me like you’re starting a new sentence rather than continuing the first one.
      I agree with punching ONLY more.
      Great job. I just posted a VO called AIG (version 2). Would love your feedback.
      Thanks,
      Robert

    • #84005
      M
      Participant

      lovely voice! My suggestions: color “ONLY” on special paper (not on table, walls etc…)

  • #83777
    Leann
    Participant

    Hey there,
    I have been on hiatus for a while due to… life.
    So anyway, these are for my upcoming session.
    If you have time, take a listen. I still have a lot of work to do within Audacity.
    I appreciate any suggestions and comments! – I edited my post and now have doubled my attached files. There should only be three! whoops 😀
    Thanks lots! 🙂 Leann

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    • #84065
      RCampos
      Participant

      Hi Leann,
      Nice voice! I think you could relax a bit more here and give this a more human touch. Also, check your diction on the word, “add.” I think you move to the next word too quickly and the “d” in add is a little lost.

      Sunlife2 is better! I think I would be great to warm this up even more. You might try slowing down and think about the person you’re speaking too. Hope that helps. And if you have a moment, I would welcome your feedback on 2 VO’s I just posted today: Congaree and American Gothic. Thank you!

    • #83788
      Shawn
      Participant

      I listened to the Amex and SunLife. Thought they were both warm and friendly. Subtle intonation kept me listening.

  • #83760
    Artist7
    Participant

    Hello! Looking for feedback on these two practice reads. Thanks so much!

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    • #83819
      M
      Participant

      Great job.
      RB thoughts: the connection gets lost by “omega 3”and the song-song of “flax seeds” – I was expecting a list after “seeds”. Loved the emphasis on “plump” and “juicy” – two great words to “taste” when you say them.
      CJ thoughts: great choices on pace and tone! Wonderful delivery suited for your soothing, yet playful, voice. Really nice work!

    • #83789
      Shawn
      Participant

      I thought the cool-jazz reading was great. Seductive voice and enticing read. Very jazzy.

    • #83769
      Earthbul
      Participant

      I enjoyed both reads. I felt biggest and news should’ve flowed a little better. Plus a slight pause between flaxseed & plump juicy raisins. With a slight emphasis on the latter would really bump it up. Heck, now you have wanting to take a shot it lol
      Great job on both. I look forward to hearing your next one.

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