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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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April 18, 2023 at 8:21 pm #86360
Artist7
ParticipantGood evening! Here are two commercial practice reads I would like some feedback on. Thanks!
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April 20, 2023 at 3:56 pm #86391
BJ
ParticipantHi – Autism – Friendly tone, good pacing and inflection – nicely done! Just a couple of thoughts – “To learn the signs…” and “Brought to you by…” seem a little less conversational than the rest of the copy. There’s a poppin’ “P” in the first mention of “parent.” Orange Theory – Like your friendly voice! Consider editing out the breath before “Do you want …” and the “c” in “confidence” is noisy, maybe you’re too close to the mic? Think about emphasizing “you” in “do you want more” “Orange Theory Fitness” and “we and you” in “we give you more. ” Volume is low in both reads. Looking forward to your next posts.
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April 17, 2023 at 4:51 pm #86349
BJ
ParticipantHi Michele – This is a longggggggggggg overdue thank you for your kind and motivating words. You were spot on with your assessment regarding “performing.” In fact, I had my coaching session the next day and was reminded about sounding conversational. I’m a work in progress:)! I’m getting ready now for my next coaching session now.
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April 24, 2023 at 10:54 am #86493
Michele Martin
ParticipantHi BJ! Oh, good! I’m glad you found the feedback useful. I know some of it can be subjective taste, so I’m glad it resonated with you as helpful. Really just a tweek in delivery. You’re rocking it.
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April 15, 2023 at 6:31 pm #86271
vlwalinski
ParticipantHi Edge Studio Friends,
Attached are two reads for my VO homework:-)…a medical narration and a narration. Would love to hear your thoughts. Thank you!
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April 17, 2023 at 11:31 am #86343
Erika S
ParticipantYour medical narration sounds great! Your enunciation of Phytophotodermatitis is very nice and your voice fits this script well.Great read!
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April 16, 2023 at 2:58 am #86291
DanielButtrey
ParticipantYour reads sound great, your voice sounds like it was meant to do these scripts. My only critique is that it does sound like you may be a bit too close to your mic? I’m hearing plosives and a bit of mouth noise. Your pace is spot on, not too fast and not too slow. Overall great read
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April 16, 2023 at 1:46 pm #86311
vlwalinski
ParticipantThank you taking the time to give me your feedback Daniel!!! I will fix those technical issues:-)
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April 14, 2023 at 8:25 pm #86241
Artist7
ParticipantHello! I would appreciate some feedback on these two commercial practice reads. Thanks in advance!
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April 15, 2023 at 6:40 pm #86274
vlwalinski
ParticipantHi Artist7,
I love your energy in the Food Network recording. Your voice is smooth, fluid and clear with nice tone. I would add more energy to the NPR recording, especially toward the end. Both are very well done! -Veronica
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April 14, 2023 at 6:05 pm #86236
M
ParticipantHello Forum Friends. I am narrowing down samples for an upcoming narration demo. I would appreciate a n y input – no need to sugar coat! I am eager for ideas on how to improve, what lands funny, awkward, forced or unnatural and basically, if I am conveying a story with the ever-important “conversational” tone. Thank you so so much!
And one other thing, the energy should be increasing slightly with each read (“Guns Germs and Steel” being the most mild of the three, “Bonobos” with a bit ore energy and “Sun” with the most of the three but still somewhat mild.)
Thank YOU!
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April 17, 2023 at 3:18 pm #86346
Luke V
ParticipantHey M. I’ve listened to your recordings and I really like the careful tone you placed within them. I can’t speak to narration as my focus is on commercial, but I noticed the slight increases in energy you mentioned and I think they work wonderfully. They’re apparent enough for the listener, but subtle enough to avoid drastically changing the consistency and tempo of your reads. Awesome job!
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April 13, 2023 at 12:02 am #86172
Luke V
ParticipantHey guys. I’m back with another round of recordings. Thank you in advance for your wonderful feedback.
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April 14, 2023 at 5:47 pm #86235
M
ParticipantHi Luke! American Express was definitely my favorite of the three. It seemed like a good length with a definite start middle and finish that suited your voice and diction; and, your choice of pace was spot on. I’d like to hear more of that style!
iPhone: I had to rewind a couple of times to determine the words “voice activation” and “driver’s seat” so perhaps take a little more time with those word pairs and articulate the end of one and the beginning of the other – that would help the flow of the read for me.
Rock: Along the aforementioned lines, I got a little bogged down with “bands your” – slowing down a smidge and changing “bandzyer ex” to “bands your (rhymes with “store”) ex” would keep it moving without s mental hiccup.
Great job – for me those minor adjustments would take it to the next level.
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April 12, 2023 at 9:03 pm #86170
Graceson
ParticipantHi all! Just dropping this here. I haven’t fixed the echo in my room yet so please excuse.
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April 20, 2023 at 3:33 pm #86390
BJ
ParticipantHi – Nice warmth in your voice. I like your pacing and inflection. Just a couple of thoughts – consider trying this with a little more of a smile in your voice and playing up the conversational approach (picture who you’re taking with about A-1) – feel free to lean into that “delicious.” Looking forward to hearing more from you.
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April 10, 2023 at 10:33 am #86121
dhwilson2
Participantthese are my first 2 attempts at medical narration. please be kind while also specific. 🙂
One is a “explainer” piece on multiple myeloma.
The other is a “propaganda” piece from a nationwide cancer providerTrying for two different tones
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April 14, 2023 at 3:42 pm #86234
HillOKeefe
ParticipantHi dhwilson2! You have a very interesting sound! What stood out to me immediately was mouth clicks and a low frequency hum. The clicks can be fixed with proper hydration. The hum can be removed with a program like iZotope RX (Just google the stand alone or plug in option for tutorials). You may also want to shoot for crisper/clearer enunciation. Keep going, you’re headed in a great direction!
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April 10, 2023 at 10:49 am #86124
dhwilson2
Participantthese are my first 2 attempts at medical narration. please be kind while also specific. 🙂
One is a “explainer” piece on multiple myeloma–technical.
The other is a positive outlook on the future of cancer Tx.Trying for two different tones
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April 9, 2023 at 6:07 pm #86115
DillonP
ParticipantI got two new reads both Commercial and Narration. And they both have an positive tone. Please give feedback, as it would help me improve on my reads and VO success.
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April 20, 2023 at 4:13 pm #86392
BJ
ParticipantHi – Nice, friendly, warm tone. Lion King – Some words get a bit lost when speaking quickly. Are the last two words “one half” intended to be part of this read? Fish Boil – Conjure up who you are talking to for a more conversational read and to help you vary your delivery style. Looking forward to listening to you again.
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April 7, 2023 at 4:21 pm #86061
RCampos
ParticipantHi VO Friends,
I’m very grateful for all the helpful feedback I’ve been getting from you. Here’s a new one. Working on connecting with the material. Would appreciate your thoughts. Thank you!
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April 9, 2023 at 2:37 pm #86110
M
ParticipantHello rcampos: Great job capturing the playful sarcasm of Carl – perfect! You have a wonderfully smooth voice and calming tone. My suggestion for this read is to pick up the energy to reflect the enthusiasm and eagerness these late-teens must be feeling at (perhaps) their first shot at independence and adulthood.
I noted additional breaths after “dreams” “rules” “conduct” “Carl” and “but” which interrupted the flow. Obviously you have to breath, but perhaps assign where is the most efficient and natural spot to do so so that you keep it moving.
The music I would change or lose; it sets a mood for me that doesn’t encapsulate the youthful energy this time of life epitomizes.
You c l e a r l y have the skills and the voice so take my comments with a grain of salt.
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April 12, 2023 at 5:51 pm #86168
RCampos
ParticipantHi M, Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback! I appreciate your take on it and welcome your thoughts. I do think I can do better at reflecting the energy and enthusiasm of this particular VO, and I’ll work on the breaths as well. Wishing you all the best, Robert
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