[David Goldberg]

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[Michele Martin]

Hi Friends-
Here are two commercial reads for my homework. Any feedback appreciated 🙂
Thank you,
Michele

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[Seth Jackson]

I think it sounds great! I’ve been learning from my coach that the bookable auditions are conversational, and that sounds a bit more airable. Like the finished product. I was a bit confused by this, but now it’s starting to make sense.

[Earthbul]

Just felt that the inflection on the word canary could have been just a tad more sarcastic and hit just a little harder to make it a little more humorous. Despite that I really enjoyed your voice and your delivery.

[Michele Martin]

Hi Seth-
Ha- me too. I had to read it again to get the part about the canary and deduced it was a reference to the cat not eating him because he (the cat) had a full belly from the Purina cat food :). Thank you for taking the time to provide feedback!

[D B]

Hi Michele, I love both reads, and especially the warm sincerity you bring to both—-they are ads that don’t feel like ads! Just a friend telling me about two products. The Ziplock tagline delivery is *awesome*. I think your pacing is exactly right for these reads, too. It made me wonder if you also work in narration or if you’re considering it, because your reads are so smooth. I loved listening!

[Michele Martin]

Thank you so much, DB! It felt so good to read your feedback. I haven’t done narration but would like to work on that with a coach in the future. Saving up to hopefully dive into that next :).

[BJ]

Hi Michele – Always enjoy listening to you! Love your tone and can hear your smile and feel your energy. Purina One – Consider playing up the “great news for your canary” line. Ziploc – I feel that when you say “When it comes out this fresh …” is when you’re really hitting your stride in this spot. All around – well done!

[Michele Martin]

Thank you BJ! Will do!

[ksheneman]

Practicing for narration demo. I appreciate your listen and your feedback.

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[Michele Martin]

P.S. And by mature I mean trustworthy and adult, not “too mature”. I’ve noticed on V.O. sites that anything over about age 30 (or perhaps it was 35, I’m not positive) is considered mature.

[Michele Martin]

Hi Kathryn-
Love your voice! You are fun to listen to. I especially enjoyed the poodle haircut instructions. I can also envision you voicing something in the upscale fashion world, or travel. Your sound strikes me as mature, hip, and in the know :). If I had to offer a critique, it would be that the guided relaxation felt a touch choppy to me- perhaps a smoother style read would sound even more relaxing. Nice work!
Michele

[BJ]

Hi Artist 7 – Thanks so much for the listen and the feedback:)!

[Bil-Bo]

Pecos Red.

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[BJ]

Hi – Great vocal variety on these! Alamo – “Road to the Sky” gets a bit mushed together. Coyote – Probably just me, I was a bit disturbed by the copy. I couldn’t really get past the fact that a coyote got shot in NYC. Is it supposed to be a dream sequence? Justin Boots – My favorite. Great use of your voice – pacing, inflection, etc.

[Bil-Bo]

Hi BJ
The coyote was shot down in Central Park with a tranquilizer gun and taken to the zoo until he could be released back into the wild. No animals were harmed during the making of this commercial for the Bronx Zoo. Every American, including coyotes, should visit NYC at least once in their lifetime. Thanks for listening and your comments.
BillH

[Bil-Bo]

Coyote in New York

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[Bil-Bo]

Some character voices.

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[BJ]

Hi-

I’m working on tracks for my narration demo. I’d greatly appreciate you listening to these two reads and giving me some feedback. The first is “for lack of a better description” a dramatic read and the second is an elearning read.

Do they sound conversational/natural? Is there vocal variety?

Thanks in advance!

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[Michele Martin]

Hi BJ-
Both sounded natural and conversational to me, as well as having vocal variety. Nice job! I especially liked Reading to Write- sounded polished and pleasant to listen to.
Michele

[ksheneman]

Reading to Write drew me right on in. Voice like honey, yet professional and confident.

[BJ]

Hi Kathryn – Appreciate your kind words!

[Artist7]

Hi, BJ- I thought both reads were very good, and yes, there is vocal variety! My only suggestion would be to slow down the pacing for both reads, especially the “Reading to Write.” Good job!

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[Luke V]

Hey everyone. Back again with another round of recordings before my next coaching session. If you’ve listened to my recordings before and noticed that my voice is a bit off this time, I think it’s because I overdid my warmups and I feel as if it spilled onto my performance, so I apologize in advance if these aren’t up to par. Thank you in advance for your feedback.

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[Artist7]

Good evening! Here are two commercial practice reads I would like some feedback on. Thanks!

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[BJ]

Hi – Autism – Friendly tone, good pacing and inflection – nicely done! Just a couple of thoughts – “To learn the signs…” and “Brought to you by…” seem a little less conversational than the rest of the copy. There’s a poppin’ “P” in the first mention of “parent.” Orange Theory – Like your friendly voice! Consider editing out the breath before “Do you want …” and the “c” in “confidence” is noisy, maybe you’re too close to the mic? Think about emphasizing “you” in “do you want more” “Orange Theory Fitness” and “we and you” in “we give you more. ” Volume is low in both reads. Looking forward to your next posts.

[Artist7]

Hi, BJ- Thanks for the helpful feedback! I really appreciate it!

[BJ]

Hi Michele – This is a longggggggggggg overdue thank you for your kind and motivating words. You were spot on with your assessment regarding “performing.” In fact, I had my coaching session the next day and was reminded about sounding conversational. I’m a work in progress:)! I’m getting ready now for my next coaching session now.

[Michele Martin]

Hi BJ! Oh, good! I’m glad you found the feedback useful. I know some of it can be subjective taste, so I’m glad it resonated with you as helpful. Really just a tweek in delivery. You’re rocking it.

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