[David Goldberg]

Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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[Seth Jackson]

Focusing on the conversational aspect of my read. Any feedback would be awesome. Please and thank you.

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[Michele Martin]

Love your sound, Seth. Sounds like a voice I’d hear on a real commercial. My only offering is to pick up the pace just a touch. Sounded super!!

[Seth Jackson]

I do enjoy much more while picking the pace, for sure. Thanks you two.

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[D B]

Hi Seth, I think you absolutely have a conversational tone from beginning to end in your read, and your voice has a knowledgeable, reassuring tone that it is perfect for the script. I think you could experiment doing this one at maybe a slightly quicker pace without losing any of the friendly, warm delivery you have here. Awesome all around!

[Seth Jackson]

Awesome! Thank you.

[D B]

Hi all. These are practice reads for my narration demo. I would really appreciate your listen and feedback. Thank you.

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[vlwalinski]

Hi DB,

Your reads were great! Smooth, informative and good tone. I think you need a little bit more emphasis on certain words/phrases, such as the last line in Tough Mudders. I also really like the pacing in The Ravens. Wonderful job!

– Veronica

[Michele Martin]

I haven’t taken any narration classes or narration specific coaching sessions, but thought this sounded great! Nothing jumped out at me or gave me that little twitch of “not quite right”. It was easy to listen to and I liked the pacing and tone variation!

[D B]

Hi Michele, thank you for listening and for your encouraging feedback. I appreciate it a ton!

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[Michele Martin]

P.S. I listened to Raven

[vlwalinski]

Hi Everyone,

Here are two recordings for my narration homework:-) Would love your feedback!
Best,
Veronica

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[D B]

Hi Veronica, I loved your reads: the variation between them in tone, and your knowledgeable delivery! Your voice has such a lovely balance of upbeat and informative. I think you could try both at a slightly slower pace without losing any of the vibrancy of your read—-it’s interesting, and your voice is awesome for it. Nice work!

[vlwalinski]

Hi DB,

Thank you for taking the time to provide me feedback! I will slow down the pace, which is challenge for me! Thank you again for the encouraging comments!!!:-)

Best,
Veronica

[Talia Hankin]

Hello! I would greatly appreciate any feedback on these two narration recordings (one corporate explainer, one documentary). Thank you so much!

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[D B]

Hi Talia, I think both reads are fantastic. I love the quality of your voice and the energy it has. In the first read, you’re informative but also warm and friendly, and your diction is so clear and precise. In the second, your voice is very engaging and draws the listener in, even though the subject is serious—I wanted to keep listening. I think if you tried both reads ever so slightly slower, you would still have a very energetic delivery, because your voice is compelling. Loved listening to your reads!

[BJ]

Hi – I’m working on some additional tracks for my narration demo. I’d greatly appreciate you listening to these two reads and giving me some feedback. The first is a non-profit read and the second is an education (pet adoption) read. Thanks in advance:)!

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[Artist7]

Hi, BJ- I enjoyed listening to both reads! Really liked the guinea pig read. One minor item on the AAFA read…the word “triggering” almost sounds like “twiggering.” Aside from that, very nice work!

[Erika S]

Hi- I enjoyed both of your reads. I especially love how you said the word “cute” about the guinea pigs! I can picture it and hear your smile! Sounds warm and friendly. So Nice!

[BJ]

Erika – Appreciate your listen and feedback

[Erika S]

Good morning! Here is a commercial read. I would love to get some feedback on. Thank you!!

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[vlwalinski]

Hi Erika, What a great read! Your voice is smooth, informative and reassuring. I agree with BJ about playing up “beta what?” and turning up the performance there:-)
-Veronica

[BJ]

Hi Erika – Nice. Consider playing up “beta what?” and playing with your timing a bit on this. Try backing up a bit from the mic to avoid some of the mouth noises. Looking forward to your next post.

[Erika S]

Thank you! I was thinking that as well! Trying it a few different ways. I really appreciate your feedback!

[Michele Martin]

Hi Friends-
Here are two commercial reads for my homework. Any feedback appreciated 🙂
Thank you,
Michele

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[Seth Jackson]

I think it sounds great! I’ve been learning from my coach that the bookable auditions are conversational, and that sounds a bit more airable. Like the finished product. I was a bit confused by this, but now it’s starting to make sense.

[Earthbul]

Just felt that the inflection on the word canary could have been just a tad more sarcastic and hit just a little harder to make it a little more humorous. Despite that I really enjoyed your voice and your delivery.

[Michele Martin]

Hi Seth-
Ha- me too. I had to read it again to get the part about the canary and deduced it was a reference to the cat not eating him because he (the cat) had a full belly from the Purina cat food :). Thank you for taking the time to provide feedback!

[D B]

Hi Michele, I love both reads, and especially the warm sincerity you bring to both—-they are ads that don’t feel like ads! Just a friend telling me about two products. The Ziplock tagline delivery is *awesome*. I think your pacing is exactly right for these reads, too. It made me wonder if you also work in narration or if you’re considering it, because your reads are so smooth. I loved listening!

[Michele Martin]

Thank you so much, DB! It felt so good to read your feedback. I haven’t done narration but would like to work on that with a coach in the future. Saving up to hopefully dive into that next :).

[BJ]

Hi Michele – Always enjoy listening to you! Love your tone and can hear your smile and feel your energy. Purina One – Consider playing up the “great news for your canary” line. Ziploc – I feel that when you say “When it comes out this fresh …” is when you’re really hitting your stride in this spot. All around – well done!

[Michele Martin]

Thank you BJ! Will do!

[ksheneman]

Practicing for narration demo. I appreciate your listen and your feedback.

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[Michele Martin]

P.S. And by mature I mean trustworthy and adult, not “too mature”. I’ve noticed on V.O. sites that anything over about age 30 (or perhaps it was 35, I’m not positive) is considered mature.

[Michele Martin]

Hi Kathryn-
Love your voice! You are fun to listen to. I especially enjoyed the poodle haircut instructions. I can also envision you voicing something in the upscale fashion world, or travel. Your sound strikes me as mature, hip, and in the know :). If I had to offer a critique, it would be that the guided relaxation felt a touch choppy to me- perhaps a smoother style read would sound even more relaxing. Nice work!
Michele

[BJ]

Hi Artist 7 – Thanks so much for the listen and the feedback:)!

[Bil-Bo]

Pecos Red.

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[BJ]

Hi – Great vocal variety on these! Alamo – “Road to the Sky” gets a bit mushed together. Coyote – Probably just me, I was a bit disturbed by the copy. I couldn’t really get past the fact that a coyote got shot in NYC. Is it supposed to be a dream sequence? Justin Boots – My favorite. Great use of your voice – pacing, inflection, etc.

[Bil-Bo]

Hi BJ
The coyote was shot down in Central Park with a tranquilizer gun and taken to the zoo until he could be released back into the wild. No animals were harmed during the making of this commercial for the Bronx Zoo. Every American, including coyotes, should visit NYC at least once in their lifetime. Thanks for listening and your comments.
BillH

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