Nature’s Recyclers — Discovery Kids
Did you know that mold and bacteria and higher-level organisms like beetles, centipedes and, of course, earthworms are all busy recyclers? By breaking down organic matter — stuff like dead plants, p**p, and decaying animals — they create valuable nutrients necessary for rich and fertile soil. Take it from me, a worm who knows, we are doing you a big favor.
Your performance is very fitting for the script and subject matter. You sound so sweet and innocent and every word was pronounced properly. However, I think some of the words you hit could have been enunciated more and you could try more variety in the lists, you don’t want it to sound bland. Overall though, I’d say your performance is a winner.
Hi Thomas, you have a great voice for commercials! My feedback is for the recording quality — I think I heard a little bit of static, especially in your first read. I am getting used to working recording equipment, so this is completely understandable. Overall, keep it up!
Hi ThomasGreene – First read for Advil – good read, your voice is well suited for this sort of commercial. The second read Sandals sounded a little monotone to me; just needed a little more variation in tone? It did not seem welcoming. I liked the third one Freshii the best – it had the most varied tone and pitch and good emphasis on words and excitement about the product. Good reads!
Good evening all! Doing my daily recording here for upcoming commercial demo. I’m a newbie so any criticism is welcome – thank you!
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When you first started the read, I pictured you in a cave or some large empty room. You could definitely work on that. The read was a little devil-may-care which I think would work with some scripts but maybe not this one.But I like your overall tone.
Your voice works well with the script and I do like your choice of words to hit. Your performance on the other hand, doesn’t have a very welcoming tone. You sound nonchalant or sarcastic. Contrary to what they show on TV, such behavior does not help a store make sales. I’d suggest you adopt a performance that is more caring and helpful to the listener. Also, you need to work on your recording setup, you sound like you’re in a bathroom.
Thank you TimDKietzma, will work on being welcoming and not sarcastic (yikes!). Also I did the recording on my phone as I’m just a few days into the coaching program, but I will be improving the recording setup as I go. Thanks again!
Spent a b*m load of time on this guy today haha! I’ve been feeling really heavy and feeling like how the heck are we all going to get through this and I put that into my read. I hope it comes across well. Also threw in some music for this one. Thanks for any feedback! 🙂
NIKE:
It’s a mindset. A focus. A deep seated spirit. It’s an inner strength to keep your feet planted firmly on the ground, no matter what presses against you. It’s confidence. It’s belief. It’s a way of life. It’s Nike.
Your take on the script was a nice touch. I’d normally expect a more excited tone for a shoe commercial, but your spin on it worked amazingly well. Your pausing makes the script a sound a little choppy, but since you’re relaxed and doing it at the end of each sentence, it works into the read great. Just remember, you mustn’t pause in the middle of a sentence like you do at the end and generally you should avoid hitting the words at the end of the sentence. Keep up the good work!
Very good clarity and pace on this one. The piano music was nice and complimented or accentuated the flow pretty well. Just a couple things,one I wouldn’t have highlighted “matter” sounds off key, then on the ending not much emphasis was placed on the brand name Nike. Maybe just change the tone on the last sentence with Nike to be a little more uplifting, overall nice work on this!
Hi katelyndawnvo – this was a great read for your voice. It was well-paced and interesting to listen to. The music fit really well too, really helped to set the mood. Good read!
“The Raven,” by Edgar Allen Poe<
Once upon a midnight dreary, while I pondered, weak and weary,
Over many a quaint and curious volume of forgotten lore—
While I nodded, nearly napping, suddenly there came a tapping,
As of some one gently rapping, rapping at my chamber door.
“’Tis some visitor,” I muttered, “tapping at my chamber door—
Only this and nothing more.”
Ah, distinctly I remember it was in the bleak December;
And each separate dying ember wrought its ghost upon the floor.
Eagerly I wished the morrow;—vainly I had sought to borrow
From my books surcease of sorrow—sorrow for the lost Lenore—
For the rare and radiant maiden whom the angels name Lenore—
Nameless here for evermore.
And the silken, sad, uncertain rustling of each purple curtain
Thrilled me—filled me with fantastic terrors never felt before;
So that now, to still the beating of my heart, I stood repeating
“’Tis some visitor entreating entrance at my chamber door—
Some late visitor entreating entrance at my chamber door;—
This it is and nothing more.”
Presently my soul grew stronger; hesitating then no longer,
“Sir,” said I, “or Madam, truly your forgiveness I implore;
But the fact is I was napping, and so gently you came rapping,
And so faintly you came tapping, tapping at my chamber door,
It began with the seed of an idea. In 1902, the heartland needed folks to embrace new advances in agriculture. But leaders with open minds, strong hearts and willing hands weren’t in abundance.Luckily, kids were.By empowering the next generation to lead, 4/H took root.And grew.Grew kids who are confident and strong.Who are curious enough to question. And capable enough to find the answer. True leaders aren’t born.They’re grown. 4/H GROWS HERE
I’m not sure if this is meant to be a commercial script or narration, but your performance is great either way. You need to avoid hitting the words at the end of the script though, I heard you say tuh instead of to, and your read of the list sounded bland and could use more variety.
I think your tone sounds perfect. I did notice that your pitch maybe changed a bit more than it should have like here “weren’t in abundance.Luckily, kids were.” but I’m not 100%.
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Hi danvasq4030! I think you have a great voice for this style of narration. Calm, warm, easy-listening. The quality of your recording was clear, too. As already mentioned, be careful of extra pauses not in the script, however, you needed a micro-pause between “support … Press 3”. The Press 3 line was also read a little faster compared to the rest of the script. Overall, good job!
You have pleasant toned voice that is easy to listen to! I liked your read, and I would recommend that you be aware of any extra pauses you may be inserting and perhaps shorten them or even exclude some of them for better flow. Also, consider reading a little faster for the listener who is mainly trying to find out what number to press! I think you began to get a little faster around “Press 3 to reach our billing department.”
Whether you’re young or old, male or female, single or with a family – this video is for and about you. That’s because Social Security has programs that affect everybody. This presentation was prepared by the Social Security Administration and tells you what you need to know about Social Security while still working and what you need to know when it’s your turn to collect benefits. It also provides an overview of Medicare and Supplemental Security Income benefits.
Hey there, I think your tone lends well to corporate type work like this. I think you could do well to pace this out a little better as it is all sounding like a long sentence. Clearer pronunciation will also help this to come across more “I’m the expert.” Keep it up 🙂
I would’ve tried to sound a bit more enthusiastic, but I get it social security isn’t the most exciting thing in the world 🙂 Other than that I thought a couple of words weren’t quite pronunciated entirely like “because Social Security”. Very nice!
Hi all, just practicing for more additions to demo reel, thanks for listening!
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Hi RYoung! I liked this read and the smoothness and deeper tone of your voice. The script flowed well, and was understandable and believable. Good read!
Nice! I like this quite a bit. Mixing note, I think the music was a tad loud. While you were definitely hitting the friendly and welcoming vibe, there were a few points I think you could have boosted the enthusiasm to vary your tone just to keep it interesting and really hit home the fact that this is exciting stuff!! 🙂 Nice work!
Hi arwilliamsvo! Great read on all of three! Nice smooth delivery. On your Legos script: I heard Lego on the last line, as opposed to Legos previously. Did I catch that right?
Hi arwilliamsvo! I really liked the warmth in your voice, super welcoming and nice tone to listen to. I liked all three recordings, good variation in pitch on all of them. The third one on Legos was my favorite, but all worked well for your voice. Good reads!
On the second one (Old Navy) despite how excited you sounded I felt like you were still holding back on your excitement. I have this same problem big time. Try letting all the excitement out! 🙂
Thank you so much for your feedback. Still trying to find the point of too much vs not enough. I really don’t want to sound cheesy or announcery. It’s a work in progress. Thanks again
Sounds great to me arwilliamsvo, good reality type delivery and enthusiasm! I would tick the volume down one notch thru editing, however minor that maybe though, sounding great!