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The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication.
Stay positive, listen to each other, and have fun!
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Hi all, just practicing for more additions to demo reel, thanks for listening!
Travelocity.com
Congratulations! You’ve successfully planned another vacation. You’ve called the airlines, the hotels, the rental car places and you’ve just hung up the phone. So brace yourself – the nagging doubt, the one that says, did I get a good deal on this vacation? There’s a better way to book travel. Travelocity.com. You’ll have over 700 airlines, over 45,000 hotels, and over 50 rental car companies all at your fingertips. You’re in control. Even look at a picture of your hotel room, or choose your airline seat. Enjoy vacation, and save your nagging doubt for your auto-mechanic. Travelocity.com…go virtually anywhere.-
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Nice! I like this quite a bit. Mixing note, I think the music was a tad loud. While you were definitely hitting the friendly and welcoming vibe, there were a few points I think you could have boosted the enthusiasm to vary your tone just to keep it interesting and really hit home the fact that this is exciting stuff!! 🙂 Nice work!
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I am uploading commerical recordings for commercial demo homework. I would love your feedback. Thank you in advance.-
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Hi arwilliamsvo! I really liked the warmth in your voice, super welcoming and nice tone to listen to. I liked all three recordings, good variation in pitch on all of them. The third one on Legos was my favorite, but all worked well for your voice. Good reads!
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On the second one (Old Navy) despite how excited you sounded I felt like you were still holding back on your excitement. I have this same problem big time. Try letting all the excitement out! 🙂
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Sounds great to me arwilliamsvo, good reality type delivery and enthusiasm! I would tick the volume down one notch thru editing, however minor that maybe though, sounding great!
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Another narration reel for feedback. Thanks in advance!
eLearning/Education
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E-Learning VO tutorial
“This video will show you how to create a new email account in Outlook XP. The first step in creating a new email account is to open Outlook XP. Once the program is open, move your mouse to the upper hand menu and click the tools button. Scroll down, and click “email accounts”. The “email accounts” box will appear. Select the “add a new email account” option, and then click “Next”. You will now be prompted to enter the type of server that operates your email account. Select “Pop3”, and click “Next”.
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Hey all, here is another practice for my narration homework. I can hear a little bit of saliva on my “f’s”, but out of all the ones I recorded and listened to, I felt this one captured the tempo of the script. Let me know what you think. All is appreciated.
Biographies
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Mary Pickford
Forget Julia Roberts—Mary Pickford was America’s first sweetheart. Audiences couldn’t get enough. When she took Hollywood by storm in 1909, at 17 years old, Mary appeared in 51 movies. In her first year, she made 51 films, that’s almost one a week!
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Hi kfvoice! I liked the tone and pace of the read, made me want to keep listening to hear more about Mary. Good read!
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Hi all! Here is my daily upload, interested in any feedback to improve myself. Thanks!
Va-va-va- voom Shampoo
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Hi, good effort! I think you can make it flow better and sound more natural. Tone and voice are good fit for this.
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VO Commercial Practice! All feedback, especially performance is welcome.
Script:
Choices. You are the worst. This or that. This or that. Why must we always choose? Greatness wouldn’t choose. Greatness wants it all. With pizza Hut’s big dinner box you can have it all. Get 2 medium 1 topping pizzas plus breadsticks plus your choice of wings, rollers, or pasta. Or now skip the sides and get a third pizza all for only 19.99. Or ask for any traditional crust for 10. Looks like you can have it all. So load up that plate as hard as you can friend-o. Go for greatness people. Pizza Hut. Make it great.-
Hi mrchaseatherton! I liked the read and decisiveness in your voice, seems well suited for this commercial. Good pace and clarity in the read. I think for the second “this or that” it could be read to emphasize “that” with a downward tone (so it does not sound like a question) instead of reading the same as you did in the first this or that, just to make it stand out a little more. Other than that, very good.
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Here’s my last homework assignment for this week. Thanks for everyone’s comments.
Commercial – Kids – Legos
My child has quite an imagination. His teachers say that someday he’ll be doing great things. Right now, he’s already an architect, a designer, an engineer … I think he’s a creative genius … and thanks to Legos, the creative building toy, there’s just no limit to what he can do, LEGOS … the creative diversion that helps develop a child’s potential.-
Oops! Thanks for letting me know. Here is the Lego recording.
Commercial – Kids – Legos
My child has quite an imagination. His teachers say that someday he’ll be doing great things. Right now, he’s already an architect, a designer, an engineer … I think he’s a creative genius … and thanks to Legos, the creative building toy, there’s just no limit to what he can do, LEGOS … the creative diversion that helps develop a child’s potential. -
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Here’s another of my homework assignments. Thanks again for all your comments!
Motel 6
Whether you live for a good ride or ride to live a little more. Everyone can agree on Motel 6 where you always save more for whatever you travel for. Like the open road. Book online at motel6.com. -
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Hey there everyone. Posting some homework for your critique. Thanks for any and all comments.
On Demand
Some people think that pressing their On Demand button will make their house explode. The On Demand button is a way to access movies, TV shows, and a whole lot more….The button to blow-up a house is actually channel up, channel down, two-star, seven-seven.-
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docr15 — your voice fits this commercial very well. Some feedback: perhaps tighten your words up a bit between, “access movies, TV shows, and a whole lot more.” The pause for effect after this line works, but maybe change you tone slightly with, “The button to blow-up a house is actually channel up, channel down, two-star, seven-seven.“?
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Hey all just looking for constructive criticism Thanks;
Advil
Muscle aches? Nothing is proven more effective or longer lasting than Advil. For long-lasting relief of muscle aches, count on Advil. In a recent clinical study, Advil was found to work better than Tylenol in relieving the pain of sore muscles the day after exercise. No wonder doctors recommend Advil for muscle aches more than any other non-prescription brand. ADVIL — Advanced medicine for pain.-
Hi Mravenel – your voice sounds good for this type of commercial; I feel like I have heard it before. The pace was good but it seemed to speed up a little at the end right before the last sentence, I think I was just expecting a tiny pause for a little more emphasis. Good read!
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Hi mravenel,
Comment: I’m glad you know what you aiming for, being a commercial V.O. You were convincing when saying “Muscle aches?”, it draws the audience’s attention. I’m also glad there were no static or background noises in this performance.
Critique: I think you can do better than what you posted. Right after you asked about muscle aches, I heard your voice get very nasal as you repeatedly said, Advil, sounding first like “A-vil” and “Ad-vil”, as if it was 2 words. So, maybe work on saying “Advil”, in 2 parts, but not two words. Were you aiming for the nasality in the read?
hope my critique was helpful,
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