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I’m not sure if this is meant to be a commercial script or narration, but your performance is great either way. You need to avoid hitting the words at the end of the script though, I heard you say tuh instead of to, and your read of the list sounded bland and could use more variety.
I think your tone sounds perfect. I did notice that your pitch maybe changed a bit more than it should have like here “weren’t in abundance.Luckily, kids were.” but I’m not 100%.
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Hi danvasq4030! I think you have a great voice for this style of narration. Calm, warm, easy-listening. The quality of your recording was clear, too. As already mentioned, be careful of extra pauses not in the script, however, you needed a micro-pause between “support … Press 3”. The Press 3 line was also read a little faster compared to the rest of the script. Overall, good job!
You have pleasant toned voice that is easy to listen to! I liked your read, and I would recommend that you be aware of any extra pauses you may be inserting and perhaps shorten them or even exclude some of them for better flow. Also, consider reading a little faster for the listener who is mainly trying to find out what number to press! I think you began to get a little faster around “Press 3 to reach our billing department.”
Whether you’re young or old, male or female, single or with a family – this video is for and about you. That’s because Social Security has programs that affect everybody. This presentation was prepared by the Social Security Administration and tells you what you need to know about Social Security while still working and what you need to know when it’s your turn to collect benefits. It also provides an overview of Medicare and Supplemental Security Income benefits.
Hey there, I think your tone lends well to corporate type work like this. I think you could do well to pace this out a little better as it is all sounding like a long sentence. Clearer pronunciation will also help this to come across more “I’m the expert.” Keep it up 🙂
I would’ve tried to sound a bit more enthusiastic, but I get it social security isn’t the most exciting thing in the world 🙂 Other than that I thought a couple of words weren’t quite pronunciated entirely like “because Social Security”. Very nice!
Hi all, just practicing for more additions to demo reel, thanks for listening!
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Hi RYoung! I liked this read and the smoothness and deeper tone of your voice. The script flowed well, and was understandable and believable. Good read!
Nice! I like this quite a bit. Mixing note, I think the music was a tad loud. While you were definitely hitting the friendly and welcoming vibe, there were a few points I think you could have boosted the enthusiasm to vary your tone just to keep it interesting and really hit home the fact that this is exciting stuff!! 🙂 Nice work!
Hi arwilliamsvo! Great read on all of three! Nice smooth delivery. On your Legos script: I heard Lego on the last line, as opposed to Legos previously. Did I catch that right?
Hi arwilliamsvo! I really liked the warmth in your voice, super welcoming and nice tone to listen to. I liked all three recordings, good variation in pitch on all of them. The third one on Legos was my favorite, but all worked well for your voice. Good reads!
On the second one (Old Navy) despite how excited you sounded I felt like you were still holding back on your excitement. I have this same problem big time. Try letting all the excitement out! 🙂
Thank you so much for your feedback. Still trying to find the point of too much vs not enough. I really don’t want to sound cheesy or announcery. It’s a work in progress. Thanks again
Sounds great to me arwilliamsvo, good reality type delivery and enthusiasm! I would tick the volume down one notch thru editing, however minor that maybe though, sounding great!
Another narration reel for feedback. Thanks in advance!
eLearning/Education
E-Learning VO tutorial
“This video will show you how to create a new email account in Outlook XP. The first step in creating a new email account is to open Outlook XP. Once the program is open, move your mouse to the upper hand menu and click the tools button. Scroll down, and click “email accounts”. The “email accounts” box will appear. Select the “add a new email account” option, and then click “Next”. You will now be prompted to enter the type of server that operates your email account. Select “Pop3”, and click “Next”.
Hey all, here is another practice for my narration homework. I can hear a little bit of saliva on my “f’s”, but out of all the ones I recorded and listened to, I felt this one captured the tempo of the script. Let me know what you think. All is appreciated.
Biographies
Mary Pickford
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Hi all! Here is my daily upload, interested in any feedback to improve myself. Thanks!
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VO Commercial Practice! All feedback, especially performance is welcome.
Script:
Choices. You are the worst. This or that. This or that. Why must we always choose? Greatness wouldn’t choose. Greatness wants it all. With pizza Hut’s big dinner box you can have it all. Get 2 medium 1 topping pizzas plus breadsticks plus your choice of wings, rollers, or pasta. Or now skip the sides and get a third pizza all for only 19.99. Or ask for any traditional crust for 10. Looks like you can have it all. So load up that plate as hard as you can friend-o. Go for greatness people. Pizza Hut. Make it great.
Hi mrchaseatherton! I liked the read and decisiveness in your voice, seems well suited for this commercial. Good pace and clarity in the read. I think for the second “this or that” it could be read to emphasize “that” with a downward tone (so it does not sound like a question) instead of reading the same as you did in the first this or that, just to make it stand out a little more. Other than that, very good.
Here’s my last homework assignment for this week. Thanks for everyone’s comments.
Commercial – Kids – Legos
My child has quite an imagination. His teachers say that someday he’ll be doing great things. Right now, he’s already an architect, a designer, an engineer … I think he’s a creative genius … and thanks to Legos, the creative building toy, there’s just no limit to what he can do, LEGOS … the creative diversion that helps develop a child’s potential.
Oops! Thanks for letting me know. Here is the Lego recording.
Commercial – Kids – Legos
My child has quite an imagination. His teachers say that someday he’ll be doing great things. Right now, he’s already an architect, a designer, an engineer … I think he’s a creative genius … and thanks to Legos, the creative building toy, there’s just no limit to what he can do, LEGOS … the creative diversion that helps develop a child’s potential.