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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hi there! I tried posting this one but I don’t think it took! lol Here is a new read. any feedback is appreciated! Trying to consistently post in my “wheelhouse” of friendly, youthful, energetic. This is a read for Spotify.
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Hello everybody! I’m looking for feedback on this read for enunciation and pacing. It’s a commercial read; not my normal narration. Thanks again!
Almond Breeze
At Almond Breeze, we only use California grown Blue Diamond almonds in our almond milk. And we’re proud of that. But the whole caring and nurturing part? That idea we borrowed from nature. Blue Diamond Almond Breeze, the best almonds make the best almond milk.
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Hi Kathy! I liked this read. I think your enunciation and pace of the read were good. There seemed to be a lot of emphasis on drawing out the word “almond” many times (like “aaalmond”), and I guess for an almond commercial that’s good, but it was noticeable since almond is mentioned 6 times. I like how you stretched out “whole” to make the caring and nurturing part stand out. These are nitpicky things on my part. Great read!
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Hi Kungfu23! I was having trouble understanding all of the words, I think it needs a little crisper enunciation. The third script for Dodge Charger was a little easier to understand all of the words that were spoken. Your tone is nice, I would just slow down the read a little and take time to read each word; some of the words sounded a little smushed together. I hope that helps!
Mary
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Hi all! Looking for feedback on these 2 scripts. Any and all feedback is welcome! Trying to vary my pitch without sounding too over the top. Thanks! Mary
Script 1: Real Estate Educational Explainer
Would you like to buy a house? Maybe it’s your first house, or even your 2nd and you just think that MAYBE you didn’t think hard enough about the last one. Listen, I love Real Estate. And in most cases, even a bad deal can work to your advantage in the very long run. But there are dumb things that people do without realizing it when they buy a house. Humor me for a short story before we get into the meat of this video.Script 2: Zeller’s [Local commercial, fast read, high energy]
Summer’s really heating up! Get into Zellers for our biggest event under the sun. Save up to 70 percent on a great selection of men’s, kid’s and ladies’ apparel and footwear. So hurry into Zellers – because savings like these don’t last forever.-
Hi Mary,
I think you did a good job with pitch variation, and you sounded interested in the material. When you got to the phrase, “and in most cases,” the “and” and “in,” were hard to tell apart. I know you’ve said you’re working on this kind of thing, enunciation without sounding unnatural. I wonder if it could be helpful to think of sliding the “d”from “and” into the beginning of the following word, if it begins with a vowel, like “an din.” I feel like that could be helpful, but perhaps a coach could weigh in on that.
I feel your Zellers read had good energy to it, suitable for that commercial genre. Nice Job!-
Thanks for the feedback Sarah! Yes, I definitely need to work on truncating my “and” to “n”. I will check with my coach on the best way to make that sound natural without over-emphasis (what it sounds like in my head!) or rushing ahead. Glad the energy came out for Zeller’s, wanted it to sound a little more high energy than the first script. Thank you!
Mary
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Hi Sarah! This is a delightful read. I really enjoyed listening to you, you sound cute as a button. Here are my constructive bits. I think it started out a little shaky at the start, there was a long deep breath and pause here: “even people who don’t like fish (breath) have been known to like this fish.” And it would be best to keep that as one thought without pauses. Try pausing between ideas. Of course, we need to breathe but try to be strategic in where you would take those breaths so it doesn’t take the listener out. The part in the middle had me enthralled – specifically the bits about the “blazing bonfire and salted water – crisp smell.” LOVELY. I would say when editing something like this, you can listen back and anywhere there are very loud obvious and distracting breaths you can just drop the volume on those. Great work, I really enjoyed it! 🙂
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Hi Sarah! I liked this read and your voice is well-suited for this sort of copy. The tempo was good and I found myself visualizing the fish over the fire. Good emphasis on several words to keep it interesting and varied throughout the read. A minute is long, but it did not seem long because of the way you read it. Great job! Mary
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Do my characters sound consistent enough? How’s the performance and recording quality? Using Audacity and my laptop at the moment. Your feedback is important.
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Hi SuperLuke,
Your character renditions were really nice. I think the pitch and tone were right on, and the characters just came across really well. Enunciation could have been a little clearer in the DJ script. I confess I wasn’t able to make out the name of the restaurant being promoted, but as I said, I think everything else about it was good, and just loved that dog!-
Looking back at your questions: Regarding the recording quality, the volume was a little low, as if you were kind of in the distance. That may have also contributed to why I couldn’t here the words as clearly at first. Assuming you are using the computer’s internal mic, that’s probably a big factor. An external mic would probably make a big difference.
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Hello! Here are two practice recordings of our 10 year old daughter. We were working on emotion and being more “in character.” Thank you for any feedback!
BOT Character
1. (angry) “Those jerks camped our spot again! C’mon, let’s get ’em!”
2. (enthused) “You’re a freaking genius, Ryan! There’s no way we’ll lose!”
3. (denial, fear, facing real danger) “No, no, no! This can’t be happening right now!”The Princess and the Frog
The princess went to her room and laid down on her bed. The slimy frog jumped on the bed and said, “Now you must kiss me good night! “Yuck!”, thought the princes, she didn’t want to kiss an u**y old frog.-
Hi Christineachsnyc! Both readings sounded really good! In the first script there seemed to be a good display of emotion, and with the appropriate emphasis on the words. For the 3rd emotion, I’m not sure how it could be changed to show more fear; that one sounded a little more angry than scared. For the second script, the read was spot on, great variation in pitch and tone and very well suited for this type of read. Great job for both!
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Hi all,
Here’s a script from Edge about Betty Crocker, it used to be under Narration/Biography so that was my interpretation of it. Please let me know what you think.
Thanks!
AlexisScript:
Betty Crocker is an imaginary person. Nonetheless, in a 1945 survey she was named the second-best-known woman in America, after Eleanor Roosevelt. She was “born” in 1921 during a Gold Medal flour promotion in which users completed a puzzle to win a pin cushion. Company executives decided to use the signature of “Betty Crocker” on the prize letters–Betty because the name had a warm approachable feel, and Crocker after an early company director, William G, Crocker. The fictional Ms. Crocker became so popular that she soon had her own products and recipe books, many of which still exist today. -
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Gonna give the new feedback forum a try…
The original VO on this Sandals track was likely a friend of mine who I set up with a database system to issue and track his VO invoices as well as run tax reports at the end of the year. Sadly, he passed away about a year or so ago. Super VO talent, artist, actor, musician. Anyway, I am giving this Sandals spot a whirl in his honor 😉-
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Hi Touzet, I’m sorry to hear about your friend. As for your read, I think you did a great job of capturing the vibe of the script and of a Sandals vacation. Nice pace and tone!
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Hi all,
This is my first post on the new site. I’m looking for feedback on performance, please.
If you have any comments on the recording quality, feel free to leave them, but conditions weren’t ideal because the dryer was running while recording and that may have created some background noise. I took the script from the Edge library over the summer, not sure if it’s still there. It was found under English Adult > Narration > eLearning & Education
Thanks! AlexisScript:
Bank Employee Training Web VideoWhen you first open a Client Interaction, you will be on the Identification Page. This is the default page
for all client interactions. Please confirm
the caller’s Social Security Number before continuing. Once confirmed, click the “next” button, like this.
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Hi Alexis — Your pace and enunciation were great. The energy for the read I felt was spot on, and your pitch variation hit the right words, too. Nice read. As for quality of the recording, I didn’t hear any background noise, however, I did not have my earphones in either.
Kathy
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