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  • #57360
    CYeschenko
    Participant

    Continued practice; all comments are appreciated, especially regarding my performance. Thanks!

    Legend Airlines

    We’re not a four-star restaurant, but we do serve peppercorn-crusted beef tenderloin in a rich port sauce. We’re not a furniture store, but we do offer an impressive collection of leather recliners. We’re not a luxury hotel, but we do provide valet parking. We’re not an Internet Service Provider, but we do guarantee immediate Internet access. We’re not a movie theater complex, but we do have 56 screens with surround sound. …We’re not what you think….We’re Legend Airlines

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    • #57423
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Cyeschenko – very nice and warm read. You have a good calm tone, and it made me curious to know more about Legend Airlines. Good pauses between thoughts and appropriate phrasing – good job!

    • #57383
      mravenel
      Participant

      Hey great read pacing was nice, interpretation of the copy was on point only criticism I have is the sound quality could be a little better, but you made me want to travel again. 😉

      • #57391
        SuperLuke
        Participant

        Good recording quality and performance. I like how you are relaxed and calm as you perform this commercial. It sounded so delicious it made me hungry!

  • #57350
    katelyndawnvo
    Participant

    Good day good day! Here is my daily upload. Any feedback is appreciated.

    Purina One
    Purina One Special Formula For Cats is made with real chicken. Good news for your cat. Great news for your canary. For a complete adult diet for your cat and the real chicken he wants, give him Purina One Special Formula. Your canary will thank you for it. Purina One. Second to none.

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    • #57494
      katelyndawnvo
      Participant

      Thanks you guys 🙂

    • #57422
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Katelyndawnvo! I liked the read, very clear and warm and sounded like you smiled through some of it, which in turn made me smile. Very good fit for your voice!

    • #57366
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      I like that your voice is a perfect fit for that nice smooth and clear. Delivery and tone was good.

    • #57358
      CYeschenko
      Participant

      Nice work! Your voice fits the copy well and tone wise, you’re in the pocket. Only note would be that “good news for your cat” was a bit louder/more stressed than the canary line, which brings the joke home. If you do the first bit as more of an offhand comment and then lean into the canary line just a fraction more, it will come across even better!

  • #57346
    Robert Broussard
    Participant

    Trying some narration and mixing. Thanks for any feedback.

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    • #57349
      katelyndawnvo
      Participant

      Beautiful work. Your voice is like American honey. I love the way you mixed this with the song in the background. My thought on the performance was – it was great!! There was a consistent thing I noticed and I’m not sure if you are using a de-esser, or perhaps it is your mic or some setting, but your S’s sound a little bit dulled, almost lispy. I’m listening with my headphones. It would be nice to hear it done with a crisper capturing of your voice. But your performances was fantastic! Really beautiful work.

      • #57363
        Robert Broussard
        Participant

        I do have a de-sser working. I will try to tone it down. Thanks for the input. I have a sure sb7m mic. I might get me a condenser mic soon.

        • #57393
          SuperLuke
          Participant

          Great narration and music that fits the performance

  • #57344
    Robert Broussard
    Participant

    Trying mixing with commercial. Thanks for any feedback.

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    • #57359
      CYeschenko
      Participant

      !! Great work! The balance between the music and your vocals is exactly what it needs to be, and your read was near perfect. You understood exactly what the copy was portraying and it fits the target audience %100! At the very end, the music does end abrubtly mid-note, but since this is a practice it’s something to take note of and perhaps find a way to fade out or finish the musical phrase (if its not too long) to have a solid finish to the commercial? It sounds almost as if there was another half second of that note that got cut off. Aside from that, keep up the great posts!

      • #57362
        Robert Broussard
        Participant

        Thanks, I am just getting into this music mixing and still have a lot to learn about it. I appreciate it.

  • #57337
    FCabral
    Participant

    Hey all! Trying some poetry since it’s totally the same thing as narration right? Right?
    I know that some of my p’s pop, but other than that any and all feedback/criticism is extremely welcome.

    On lowland plains I wander//All in the falling year,//By lowland valleys ponder//Upon my true love dear;//But spring will soon restore me//The smiles of Mary’s eye,//And the grand clouds flying o’er me//Upon the mountains high.
    Within the lowland valley//There stands a castle strong,//Where round in each green alley//You’ll hear the wild bird’s song;//Far sweeter visions move me,//When I hear the eagle’s cry,//From the fields of G*d above me,//Upon the mountains high.
    When autumn time is coming//Along the hills and dells,//You’ll hear the wild bees humming//Among the heather bells;//You’ll hear the g*y streams singing//Their songs to earth and sky,//Like the sounds of glad bells ringing//Upon the mountains high.
    Amid their summits airy,//In sweet spring’s blessed reign,//I’ll sit beside my Mary//With happy heart again;//I have no wish beyond her,//And man can ne’er descry//Two youthful lovers fonder//Upon the mountain high.

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    • #57421
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi FCabral! I loved the tone in your voice and the pace of the read, it seems very well suited for poetry like this. On the 3rd verse it sounded like a few of the words ending with “ing” were said to not pronounce the “g” – comin’ vs. coming; hummin’ vs humming; singin’ vs. singing and ringin’ vs. ringing. It all rhymed with each other, but I wonder if it was intended to drop the g’s? Just something I noticed.

    • #57394
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      Wonderful epic (narrative) poetry!

    • #57386
      Jfaustin520
      Participant

      This sounded so cool. I can totally picture what you are saying. I can only imagine how it would sound with background music. A few ways to make this better could probably be watching the “s” sounds for sibilance and maybe editing out the mouth noises. However, I think you did a really great job with this poem.

  • #57334
    kfvoice
    Participant

    Today was my first day trying Audacity, and I thought I would do something different besides reading narration scripts, and went for a promo read. All feedback is appreciated. Thanks!

    Promos and Trailers

    Spotify Premium

    Is this really what you want? Some guy cutting into your tunes trying to sell you something you really don’t care about. I didn’t think so. Try spotify premium. for only $9.99 a month you can get rid of me and anyone else who tries to interrupt your music.

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    • #57376
      waninick
      Participant

      KF, Nice voice, mostly good clear diction. Might want to add the ‘t’ on the end of ‘want’, and the word “didn’t” didn’t quite come out clean. Other than that, it just needs to be edited a bit tighter. Too much space between “care about” and “I didn’t think so.” A couple of other places as well. But the interpretation was really good! Nice Work..!

      • #57395
        SuperLuke
        Participant

        KF, I enjoy the performance. Good diction. Speed it up a little bit. I like your first recording better than the second. You sounded calmer and more like a real convincing commercial. Try aiming for 12 seconds, maybe?

        • #57425
          kfvoice
          Participant

          Thanks, SL. Noted!

          About the two reels — they are the same one. I edited my post, and added it again, thinking it had to be uploaded again, too. (I wanted to edit my post to mention this, but after a couple of edits, it seems the forum doesn’t let you edit your posts. Or give the option to replace or delete a recording.)

      • #57377
        kfvoice
        Participant

        Thank you, waninick! I’m trying to get better at pronouncing my “t’s”. Sometimes it sounds like I am forcing it too much.

    • #57339
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Not bad, try to pick it up a little with your tone.

  • #57330
    Robert Broussard
    Participant

    Nice voice tone and pace.

  • #57327
    Robert Broussard
    Participant

    UCLA
    We are UCLA Extension.
    We are scholars, innovators, visionaries, experimenters. We are idealists, artists, and optimists.
    We have a one hundred-year legacy of taking the unconventional path; the road less traveled. We know that you don’t have to be a student to study. Because we know that knowledge is for everyone and that education improves people’s lives and makes communities stronger. We try and fail and then we try again [slight pause] because we know that there are many paths to success and we are defining our own goals and charting our own course.
    [Pace of the VO picks up a little bit] We go into the unknown. We challenge ourselves. We keep rising. We dare to dream. We are here to make the world better. We are UCLA.

    I have mixed my first recording with background music. Please give and feedback. Thanks

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    • #57419
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Robert Broussard – nice music choice; seems to go well with the read. Your voice is very easy to listen to, clear and smooth word delivery. You have an accent that makes your voice believable for this type of read. Good job!

    • #57333
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi Robert, I like the background music you have chosen for this spot. I thought you had a very clear read, however, be careful of micro-pauses in places that are not necessary. Otherwise, nice job!

  • #57324
    JasonCawley
    Participant

    “This does all seem rather bizarre. We are familiar with the world around us where everything behaves as we would expect. An apple falls from the tree to the ground according to classical laws. It all makes sense, but, at the very small we see classical laws break down. In the quantum world, particles behave in a weird way. They can be in different places at the same time. A cloud of possibilities. This is the strange world of quantum theory.”

    Took some time off, getting back into the training and practice. Any feedback is appreciated, thanks for listening.

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  • #57320
    mkell755
    Participant

    Hello all! Looking for any and all criticism for upcoming commercial demo – thank you!

    Mountain Home, Arkansas

    Welcome to Mountain Home, Arkansas, where visitors can enjoy watersports like kayaking, canoeing and floating on the White River. Mountain Home is ideally situated between two colossal lakes and is only 15 minutes from the three rivers, the Buffalo, White and North Fork.

    Not only are the water sports spectacular, the fishing is world class. Whether looking to land striper, trout, walleye or bass, the waters in the Mountain Home area are always stocked.

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    • #57329
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Your voice is nice and clear. But your tone is very mono tone. Try to hit certian words and add some spice to your dialog.

      • #57418
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks Robert Broussard! I will work on not being monotone. In my head I think I’m being too up and down / animated, but I guess I can vary it more to make the read better. Thanks!

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