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1st Script: I think the tone fits well. The pace shifts in the middle at about 11 seconds in to a little fast but returns to a slower pace later on. Also in the beginning it feels like there’s a couple pauses that are a bit too long. Other than that I think this read is pretty good.
2nd Script: It sounded really informative! I think if you hit the names of the anchors it will make it even better. Also maybe add a little more enthusiasm to make the read really pop.
3rd Script: I agree with some others in saying this was your best one. Great energy and flow to this one. I could hear the smile in this one if that makes sense.
Keep going you are doing great! Good luck on your demo and your future recordings!
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Hi there. Love your voice for all these types of copy! Keep working on being a bit more conversational. That starts with really connecting to the copy and having a specific listener in mind. That would probably help with pacing and variance in energy. Other than that I really think you did a great job!
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Hi ThomasGreene, I liked all 3 performances, but I feel like the third one for Opti-Green seemed to be the one that was most interesting to listen to, and that I wanted to hear more. I think it’s because your tone was a little more varied on that one, and the words that were hit stood out a little more. Your voice is warm and relaxed and suits commercial well. Good reads!
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Hello every one , its my first time here am trying to get out of my shell into this amazing VO world
Here is my first post , an attempt at the “The Raven ” please need your opinion and advice, Thanks“The Raven,” by Edgar Allen Poe<
Once upon a midnight dreary, while I pondered, weak and weary,
Over many a quaint and curious volume of forgotten lore—
While I nodded, nearly napping, suddenly there came a tapping,
As of some one gently rapping, rapping at my chamber door.
“’Tis some visitor,” I muttered, “tapping at my chamber door—
Only this and nothing more.”Ah, distinctly I remember it was in the bleak December;
And each separate dying ember wrought its ghost upon the floor.
Eagerly I wished the morrow;—vainly I had sought to borrow
From my books surcease of sorrow—sorrow for the lost Lenore—
For the rare and radiant maiden whom the angels name Lenore—
Nameless here for evermore.And the silken, sad, uncertain rustling of each purple curtain
Thrilled me—filled me with fantastic terrors never felt before;
So that now, to still the beating of my heart, I stood repeating
“’Tis some visitor entreating entrance at my chamber door—
Some late visitor entreating entrance at my chamber door;—
This it is and nothing more.”Presently my soul grew stronger; hesitating then no longer,
“Sir,” said I, “or Madam, truly your forgiveness I implore;
But the fact is I was napping, and so gently you came rapping,
And so faintly you came tapping, tapping at my chamber door,-
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Hi mrtripo9! I love you attempted a poem! Great job in varying your pitch in the last verse. Be careful of micro-pauses not intended in the verses. Keep it up!
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Maxwell House
Here’s to a world without bitterness. It’s our best Maxwell House ever. Now roasted with 100% Arabica beans known to be the finest coffee beans in the world for a full flavor without bitterness. It’s a new morning. Brew some good. Maxwell House. -
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Hello, I uploaded this before the website’s update and it got lost to the forum. How’s my performance and is my recording setup good?
Lincoln Financial Group
I have a mother. I have a father. I even have a big brother. I don’t need someone else looking out for me. I need someone who can help me look out for myself. At Lincoln Financial Group, their goal is to make the financial world clear and understandable, so I can make informed decisions. Lincoln Financial Group. Clear solutions in a complex world.-
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Hi Tim! I thought your pace in the reading was great. It sounds like you need a slight pause between these sentences: I don’t need someone else looking out for me. I need someone who can help me look out for myself. I did hear some “clicking”, too, a combination between speaking some words and equipment. I hope this helps!
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Tax Reform: Standard vs. Itemized Deductions (2018)
When it comes to tax deductions, the new tax law not only raises the standard deductions, it also reduces or eliminates specific deductible expenses.
So can itemizing still make sense? It’s really all about the numbers.
If you choose the standard route, the deduction limits have nearly doubled. Now you are eligible for a $12,400 deduction or, if you are married filing jointly, $24,800.
If you have itemized in the past, you may find that now, the total of your itemized deductions is lower than the standard deduction limits.
Let’s look at changes the new tax law made to some of the biggest itemized deductions.
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I really like your voice for this script and it works well for educational reads. The only thing I would say is that the script shows $12,400 and $24,800 but your read was $12,000 and $24,000; perhaps not a big deal but if you’re auditioning, that may be a factor if the script isn’t read as written. Nice job!
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Nature’s Recyclers — Discovery Kids
Did you know that mold and bacteria and higher-level organisms like beetles, centipedes and, of course, earthworms are all busy recyclers? By breaking down organic matter — stuff like dead plants, p**p, and decaying animals — they create valuable nutrients necessary for rich and fertile soil. Take it from me, a worm who knows, we are doing you a big favor.-
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Your performance is very fitting for the script and subject matter. You sound so sweet and innocent and every word was pronounced properly. However, I think some of the words you hit could have been enunciated more and you could try more variety in the lists, you don’t want it to sound bland. Overall though, I’d say your performance is a winner.
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Hi ThomasGreene – First read for Advil – good read, your voice is well suited for this sort of commercial. The second read Sandals sounded a little monotone to me; just needed a little more variation in tone? It did not seem welcoming. I liked the third one Freshii the best – it had the most varied tone and pitch and good emphasis on words and excitement about the product. Good reads!
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Good evening all! Doing my daily recording here for upcoming commercial demo. I’m a newbie so any criticism is welcome – thank you!
JC Penney 6
Your brain has 2 sides. The right side: creative, buys things, has fun. The left side: organized, practical, saves money. Now JC Penney makes both sides happy. It’s the buy more, save more sale. It’s simple, the more you buy, the more you save. 20 to 30%. So use your head. Buy more. Save more. Only at JC Penney.-
When you first started the read, I pictured you in a cave or some large empty room. You could definitely work on that. The read was a little devil-may-care which I think would work with some scripts but maybe not this one.But I like your overall tone.
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Your voice works well with the script and I do like your choice of words to hit. Your performance on the other hand, doesn’t have a very welcoming tone. You sound nonchalant or sarcastic. Contrary to what they show on TV, such behavior does not help a store make sales. I’d suggest you adopt a performance that is more caring and helpful to the listener. Also, you need to work on your recording setup, you sound like you’re in a bathroom.
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Spent a b*m load of time on this guy today haha! I’ve been feeling really heavy and feeling like how the heck are we all going to get through this and I put that into my read. I hope it comes across well. Also threw in some music for this one. Thanks for any feedback! 🙂
NIKE:
It’s a mindset. A focus. A deep seated spirit. It’s an inner strength to keep your feet planted firmly on the ground, no matter what presses against you. It’s confidence. It’s belief. It’s a way of life. It’s Nike.-
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Your take on the script was a nice touch. I’d normally expect a more excited tone for a shoe commercial, but your spin on it worked amazingly well. Your pausing makes the script a sound a little choppy, but since you’re relaxed and doing it at the end of each sentence, it works into the read great. Just remember, you mustn’t pause in the middle of a sentence like you do at the end and generally you should avoid hitting the words at the end of the sentence. Keep up the good work!
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Very good clarity and pace on this one. The piano music was nice and complimented or accentuated the flow pretty well. Just a couple things,one I wouldn’t have highlighted “matter” sounds off key, then on the ending not much emphasis was placed on the brand name Nike. Maybe just change the tone on the last sentence with Nike to be a little more uplifting, overall nice work on this!
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“The Raven,” by Edgar Allen Poe<
Once upon a midnight dreary, while I pondered, weak and weary,
Over many a quaint and curious volume of forgotten lore—
While I nodded, nearly napping, suddenly there came a tapping,
As of some one gently rapping, rapping at my chamber door.
“’Tis some visitor,” I muttered, “tapping at my chamber door—
Only this and nothing more.”Ah, distinctly I remember it was in the bleak December;
And each separate dying ember wrought its ghost upon the floor.
Eagerly I wished the morrow;—vainly I had sought to borrow
From my books surcease of sorrow—sorrow for the lost Lenore—
For the rare and radiant maiden whom the angels name Lenore—
Nameless here for evermore.And the silken, sad, uncertain rustling of each purple curtain
Thrilled me—filled me with fantastic terrors never felt before;
So that now, to still the beating of my heart, I stood repeating
“’Tis some visitor entreating entrance at my chamber door—
Some late visitor entreating entrance at my chamber door;—
This it is and nothing more.”Presently my soul grew stronger; hesitating then no longer,
“Sir,” said I, “or Madam, truly your forgiveness I implore;
But the fact is I was napping, and so gently you came rapping,
And so faintly you came tapping, tapping at my chamber door,
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