[David Goldberg]

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[swy619]

Submitting this one for feedback. Thanks so much!
-Sarah

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[swy619]

Thank you both for the feedback. Encouraging and I’ll keep these things in mind.

[katelyndawnvo]

Hi Sarah! This is a delightful read. I really enjoyed listening to you, you sound cute as a button. Here are my constructive bits. I think it started out a little shaky at the start, there was a long deep breath and pause here: “even people who don’t like fish (breath) have been known to like this fish.” And it would be best to keep that as one thought without pauses. Try pausing between ideas. Of course, we need to breathe but try to be strategic in where you would take those breaths so it doesn’t take the listener out. The part in the middle had me enthralled – specifically the bits about the “blazing bonfire and salted water – crisp smell.” LOVELY. I would say when editing something like this, you can listen back and anywhere there are very loud obvious and distracting breaths you can just drop the volume on those. Great work, I really enjoyed it! 🙂

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[mkell755]

Hi Sarah! I liked this read and your voice is well-suited for this sort of copy. The tempo was good and I found myself visualizing the fish over the fire. Good emphasis on several words to keep it interesting and varied throughout the read. A minute is long, but it did not seem long because of the way you read it. Great job! Mary

[SuperLuke]

Do my characters sound consistent enough? How’s the performance and recording quality? Using Audacity and my laptop at the moment. Your feedback is important.

[SuperLuke]

Here is the mp3 version of my DJ and dog

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[mkell755]

Hi SuperLuke! The volume was very low / distant on my end and I could not understand many of the words (it sounded far away?), but it sounded like good pace on the reading itself and the dog character was good. Mary

[swy619]

Hi SuperLuke,
Your character renditions were really nice. I think the pitch and tone were right on, and the characters just came across really well. Enunciation could have been a little clearer in the DJ script. I confess I wasn’t able to make out the name of the restaurant being promoted, but as I said, I think everything else about it was good, and just loved that dog!

[swy619]

Looking back at your questions: Regarding the recording quality, the volume was a little low, as if you were kind of in the distance. That may have also contributed to why I couldn’t here the words as clearly at first. Assuming you are using the computer’s internal mic, that’s probably a big factor. An external mic would probably make a big difference.

[christinesachsnyc]

Hello! Here are two practice recordings of our 10 year old daughter. We were working on emotion and being more “in character.” Thank you for any feedback!

BOT Character
1. (angry) “Those jerks camped our spot again! C’mon, let’s get ’em!”
2. (enthused) “You’re a freaking genius, Ryan! There’s no way we’ll lose!”
3. (denial, fear, facing real danger) “No, no, no! This can’t be happening right now!”

The Princess and the Frog
The princess went to her room and laid down on her bed. The slimy frog jumped on the bed and said, “Now you must kiss me good night! “Yuck!”, thought the princes, she didn’t want to kiss an u**y old frog.

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[mkell755]

Hi Christineachsnyc! Both readings sounded really good! In the first script there seemed to be a good display of emotion, and with the appropriate emphasis on the words. For the 3rd emotion, I’m not sure how it could be changed to show more fear; that one sounded a little more angry than scared. For the second script, the read was spot on, great variation in pitch and tone and very well suited for this type of read. Great job for both!
Mary

[christinesachsnyc]

Thank you!

[AlexisVO]

Hi all,

Here’s a script from Edge about Betty Crocker, it used to be under Narration/Biography so that was my interpretation of it. Please let me know what you think.

Thanks!
Alexis

Script:
Betty Crocker is an imaginary person. Nonetheless, in a 1945 survey she was named the second-best-known woman in America, after Eleanor Roosevelt. She was “born” in 1921 during a Gold Medal flour promotion in which users completed a puzzle to win a pin cushion. Company executives decided to use the signature of “Betty Crocker” on the prize letters–Betty because the name had a warm approachable feel, and Crocker after an early company director, William G, Crocker. The fictional Ms. Crocker became so popular that she soon had her own products and recipe books, many of which still exist today.

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[aprildawn]

Very nice and engaging delivery. Lot’s of personality and charm. You have a warm and velvety tone that fit perfectly for the Betty Crocker narration.

[mkell755]

Hi Alexis! That was very good! I really liked the warmth in your voice and it felt like you were smiling through a large part of the script, which in turn made me smile. Very good tempo and nice variation in pitch throughout. Great read!
Mary

[christinesachsnyc]

Hi Alexis. This was really great. Thank you! The only thing I might explore is the perhaps play with the “liveliness” of the reading. Maybe have a bit more playful vibe to go with the warm and approachable?

[touzet]

Gonna give the new feedback forum a try…
The original VO on this Sandals track was likely a friend of mine who I set up with a database system to issue and track his VO invoices as well as run tax reports at the end of the year. Sadly, he passed away about a year or so ago. Super VO talent, artist, actor, musician. Anyway, I am giving this Sandals spot a whirl in his honor 😉

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[mkell755]

Hi Touzet! I really liked your take on this commercial – you have a very warm and deep voice, and it seemed well-suited for this type of read when you want the listener to relax. I too am sorry about your friend. I think he would feel honored that you are honoring him.
Mary

[AlexisVO]

Hi Touzet, I’m sorry to hear about your friend. As for your read, I think you did a great job of capturing the vibe of the script and of a Sandals vacation. Nice pace and tone!
–Alexis

[touzet]

Found a link to Darryl Gilley’s Sandals VO on Voices dot com. The first clip on the reel is actually Sandals. There are a lot of cool bits from him hosted there if you go up a link – especially the sing-alikes. https://www.voices.com/demo_detail/26249

[AlexisVO]

Hi all,
This is my first post on the new site. I’m looking for feedback on performance, please.
If you have any comments on the recording quality, feel free to leave them, but conditions weren’t ideal because the dryer was running while recording and that may have created some background noise. I took the script from the Edge library over the summer, not sure if it’s still there. It was found under English Adult > Narration > eLearning & Education
Thanks! Alexis

Script:
Bank Employee Training Web Video

When you first open a Client Interaction, you will be on the Identification Page. This is the default page
for all client interactions. Please confirm
the caller’s Social Security Number before continuing. Once confirmed, click the “next” button, like this.
Great, now let’s move on to step-2.

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[mkell755]

Hi Alexis! I liked this read – your voice was warm and the pace was very good. I did not hear background noise on my end, but I also do not have a fully set up studio just yet to potentially hear more of the background. Good read!
Mary

[christinesachsnyc]

Hi Alexis. I thought this was really great. Your voice really matched what I imagined I would be listening to in this sort of thing. I didn’t hear any background noise; however, your “s” were a bit harsh. Hope that helps.

[kfvoice]

Hi Alexis — Your pace and enunciation were great. The energy for the read I felt was spot on, and your pitch variation hit the right words, too. Nice read. As for quality of the recording, I didn’t hear any background noise, however, I did not have my earphones in either.

Kathy

[AlexisVO]

Thanks, Kathy, I appreciate your feedback!

[touzet]

Not a huge fan of the new site so far. Graphically, it’s prettier and more modern but functionally it’s a bit wacked. More clicks to get where you’re going and the older feedback forum was more tailored to that function for VO – not a generic Bulletin Board. However, it looks like you can now give a critique and leave an audio attachment… I don’t think I’ve seen anyone do that yet but you could with an audio attachment say: “You’re doing this: Blah blah blah…when I think it might should be more like Blah”. Being able to leave an audio critique might be a cool thing. Looks like I can make a comment with no attachment at all …just a general statement like this.

[AlexisVO]

I miss how on the old site you could look at a script and hear others’ files for that same script. Also it was easy to post to the feedback forum without having to copy and paste the script. The functionality to quickly add your MP3 was built in. Oh well. I agree that this new site looks much better. Nice job, Edge!

[touzet]

In spite of some of those navigational issues, one cool thing is that you may be able to post an audio critique on someone’s post and say “I hear it this way…etc.”

[AlexisVO]

I guess that can be cool in certain circumstances. Like if you want to explain what you mean but it might be easier to just show the person what you mean by saying it and uploading your comment. For me, that would be rare as I think it’s more convenient and faster to just type a response.

[swy619]

That’s interesting. I mean, do you think it would be appropriate to leave audio feedback? Sometimes I feel like that would be easier for me, but then again, I wouldn’t want anyone to feel like they had to read something the way I would, like maybe that could restrict freedom of interpretation perhaps? Maybe I’m way off, but just a thought. On the other hand, I guess there could also be good opportunities to learn from others’ interpretations.

[swy619]

I hope I’m posting this in the right place. First recording and still figuring out the forum layout, but anyway, here goes. Feedback appreciated.
Thanks,
Sarah
Beethoven
Of all the hundreds of symphonies that have been composed, none can rival in popularity or emotional interest the nine great symphonic works that Beethoven wrote. Beethoven took music off the pedestal of formal beauty, where Haydn and Mozart had left it, and immersed it in the whirlpool of life. He roughened it up until it began to do what he expected it to do … to express problems, evoke emotions, move and struggle exuberantly. More people can respond at once to a Beethoven symphony than to any other. Many have written fine symphonies, but Beethoven’s remain in a class by themselves, as invaluable a part of our heritage as are Shakespeare’s plays.

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[christinesachsnyc]

Hi Sarah. Thanks for sharing. I’m with Alexis in terms of interpretation feedback. I might suggest keeping an eye on your levels. It sounded pretty quiet to me, while I was listening.

[AlexisVO]

Hi Sarah,
I think you did a great job with this. Everything is clearly pronounced and overall your pace was good. I like your emphasis on “immersed” and “whirlpool of life”. I think your read lost a little bit of the energy toward the end, starting around the “More people can…” sentence, and you seemed to slow down a bit too. If you can keep up the energy and enthusiasm through to the end, that would help strengthen the piece. Nice work!
–Alexis

[swy619]

Thank you both for the feedback. Here’s a retake, attempting to take your suggestions into account. Making use of the ability to add audio attachments to replies. 🙂 Sorry for the bump at the beginning of the track. Thanks so much!

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[mkell755]

Hi Sarah! I listened to the first recording and this recording, and the volume is much better. I like too how your energy and pace were a little more upbeat as well for the second read. Very good read!
Mary

[kfvoice]

Hello everyone! Telephony narration for critique. Recorded this one with a mic (no pop filter at the moment), so I am still getting used to it. All feedback is welcome and appreciated!

Telephony

AC Rebates

A representative will be with you shortly. Meanwhile, summer is already here at L.G. Energy! If it’s time to enjoy a new air conditioner, you’ll also enjoy knowing about our money-saving rebates. Ask your representative about them.

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[AlexisVO]

Hi kfvoice,
Nice job with this read. Your recording quality sounds good, and your pace and diction are good as well. I agree with mkell755 that it could use a little more energy. I didn’t hear the exclamation point in the second sentence, and the script tells the customer to get excited about the rebates they offer if they are considering a new AC. I think bringing some of that energy into the script would be great.
–Alexis

[kfvoice]

Hi Alexis!

I agree, I do need to bring more enthusiasm to the read.

I am happy to know the sound quality is good, though, and my pace and diction here is good as well. The enunciation and slower pace is something I have been struggling with. I am confident all pieces of the puzzle will fit together soon!

Thank you much for the feedback! I appreciate it!

Kathy

[AlexisVO]

You’re welcome! Keep at it and things will get better and better 🙂 I used to struggle with reading slow, and still do — in my head it sounds fine, but when I listen back to the recording I think “Why did I do that so slow??” It sometimes sounds different to what I thought I was doing.

I think a big part of the training is learning how things sound in your own head vs. how they actually sound when you record and play back (and have others listen too). I think it’s about learning how to make those adjustments.

Take care,
Alexis

[mkell755]

Hi Kfvoice, this was a good read. I think you could use even more excitement in the second sentence where there is an exclamation point, like you are really excited about it being summer already!!! Your voice dropped down there, and I would think that the company (L.G. Energy) might want their name emphasized a little more. Otherwise, good enunciation and reading.
Mary

[kfvoice]

Hi Mary!

Noted! Appreciate the feedback!

I agree about the pitch. Definitely need to work on that. However, I am glad to know my enunciation was good — that is something I am trying to better achieve before putting everything together, so to speak.

Thanks again!
Kathy

[mkell755]

Hey you are welcome Kathy! I feel like I’m beginning to recognize some names with the voices! It’s nice to receive the positive and honest feedback from all, so we can all learn and improve. The forum is great!
Mary

[mkell755]

Hello all! I’m looking for any and all feedback in an effort to improve. I recorded on my phone and the wind is raging tonight, so hoping that is not too distracting. Thanks for your help!
Mary

Freshii
At Freshii you can customize your entree and be your own culinary master. So what’s in your custom bowl? Tex Mex with black beans and a little salsa fresca? Teriyaki twist with a pop of pineapple? Whatever your fresh idea, get any 2 bowls for just $12.99! Freshii – Eat. Energize!

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[AlexisVO]

Hi Mary, I think you did a great job with this read. It was clear and you had good pitch variation. I agree with other comments that it could use a little more energy in some places. Imagine that you just ate this for lunch and you’re excited to tell a friend about Freshii and how delicious it is. That could help bring in the feeling to the read.
–Alexis

[mkell755]

Hi Alexis, thanks for the feedback! I will work on my energy, I like your suggestion to be more excited about telling a friend how great it was. That sounds like somethign I would actually do, if I liked the food a lot. Thanks again!
Mary

[swy619]

Hi Mary,
I think you had a nice, clear reading for the Freshii script, and I feel there was some good pitch variation, such that it was interesting to listen to and definitely did not sound flat. I might suggest trying it with a bit more volume and more of an upbeat tone. You captured some of the excitement I’m suggesting toward the end of the script, from “$12.99” onward, so I might suggest more of that throughout.
Very nice job. Look forward to hearing more.
Best,
Sarah

[mkell755]

Hi Sarah – realizing now that if I reply to another’s feedback it might not also show up when you check for specific feedback to report back to your coach. Thanks again for your feedback, and I will work on the excitement and upbeat feel of the read. Thanks!
Mary

[kfvoice]

Hi Mary! I like how you billboarded “Freshii” in your opening line. Try varying your pitch when you are asking (to your audience) your questions. Hope this helps. Keep it up!

[mkell755]

Thank you kfvoice and Sarah! Really appreciate the feedback. In my head I feel like I am being somewhat sing-songy, but it sounds like I could vary it even more, and also keep it more upbeat and excited. Thank you!
Mary

[kfvoice]

I completely understand where you are coming from, where it sounds one way to you when reading, but sounds different when listening. We will get there!

Kathy

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