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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    The Edge Studio Feedback Forum is the best place for you to post a recording and get feedback from the community! Record in your home studio, upload the file, and see what people think. This is a great place to get some advice on your technique, on your home studio, or to ask for people’s opinion on your reads. Remember, that this is a community forum, so please remain positive and encourage your peers in helpful ways. If Edge Studio feels that a user is too negative, or antagonizing other members of the community, they will have their posts deleted, and risk being banned from further communication. 

    Stay positive, listen to each other, and have fun!

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  • #58040
    irvj
    Participant

    Just trying a promo type of read. Would welcome feedback regarding delivery as well as audio quality.

    Free. Now when’s the last time ya’ heard that? A while…right? Well at American Tire Supply, when you buy one all-weather radial tire, you get another one free! Plus, get a free alignment! Hey, with a deal like this, how can you NOT afford to visit. So hurry on down to your local American Tire Supply, where you can still hear the word free. Subject to dealer participation.

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    • #58081
      AndreaC
      Participant

      I think that the audio sounds great! You have a very comforting, calm tone, and clear annunciation.

    • #58073
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Irvj! I really like your voice! Very warm and smooth and mellow. Good variation in tone and pitch. Great job!

      Mary

      • #58075
        irvj
        Participant

        Thanks a ton mkell755!!!

        • #58110
          mkell755
          Participant

          You are welcome irvj! 🙂

    • #58057
      swy619
      Participant

      Hi there,
      Yes, very nice delivery, and the audio quality sounded great! I might suggest emphasizing that first “free” a bit more. Volume was a little low in comparison to what followed. Also, maybe experiment with more emphasis on “not” in “not afford.” These are just little things of course. Really fantastic job!

      • #58061
        irvj
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback swy619. I’ll put that in to play!!

    • #58052
      katelyndawnvo
      Participant

      Wow I love this!! Your voice is delicious. I don’t really have much to say that is constructive, I thought it was great. Perhaps you could try a delivery with a bit of a quicker pace to up the energy a little bit. Nice work! – Katelyn

      • #58076
        irvj
        Participant

        You’re on point there. After listening for the umpteenth time, a little more energy would be appropriate. Thanks for your input katelyndawnv!!

  • #58023
    kfvoice
    Participant

    Hello everyone!

    I struggled with this copy all evening and night. You name it, and I just couldn’t get it right — from my enunciation, which is frustrating me (“corset” to mention one), to pops and clicks; even my recording quality. However, I am uploading this practice read for your critique.

    Thanks again!

    Mae West

    Mae West was the daughter of a boxer and a corset model, who became a vaudevillian at the age of fourteen. At thirty three, in 1926, she wrote, produced and directed a Broadway show called ‘S*x’, and landed in jail on obscenity charges. After wowing Broadway in ‘Diamond Lil’, she signed with Paramount in 1932 and moved to Hollywood. Her risqué 1930s comedies were ground-breaking, in terms of both s****l content and roles for women. Her films included ‘Night After Night’ and ‘She Done Him Wrong’, which was the film version of ‘Diamond Lil’, and broke all existing box-office records, credited with saving Paramount from having to sell out to its rival, MGM.

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    • #58111
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Kathy! I think this was a good read. The word “corset” is not a deal-breaker if mispronounced in my opinion; not often used enough for that and can be easily fixed. Some of the script seemed a little monotone in spots but was interesting to hear nonetheless. Good job on this one!

      Mary

    • #58032
      BrianWigginsVO
      Participant

      OK, so I struggle with clicks as well, and most of the time, it’s due to a lack of hydration. Munching on some green apple slices can help, too, the acid will help break up the stuff in your mouth that can cause some of the noise.

      With pronunciation, the letter “a” should be short, as in “ah”, not “eh” like Canadians say. By doing that, it may help with the pronunciations of the following words (like corset). Same thing with “obscenity”, it should be a short “e”, like “ob-sen-ity”, rather than “ob-seen-ity”.

      Something that helped me, as a suggestion from one of my coaches, James Andrews, was to cross out the words “to” and “for” and write in the numbers “2” and “4”. It helped me slow down a bit and give the words some more enunciation.

      The sound quality itself sounded fine to me…just a touch of room noise, like a fan from a computer or something, but nothing a little light noise reduction in post couldn’t cure.

      Just know: we all struggle. Knowing that you’re struggling, and knowing that you aren’t getting it right, is a sign that you have the skills and knowledge to do it. This is a good thing. Keep at it!

      • #58050
        kfvoice
        Participant

        Thanks Brian for the encouragement and tips!

        Not that I don’t want to pronounce words correctly, but, I’m wondering if my close proximity to Quebec has anything to do with certain pronunciations and dialect. Hmm.

        • #58190
          BrianWigginsVO
          Participant

          It could. I have to be careful about certain words because of my Delaware Valley accent…we tend to slur words, leave them off, or sometimes have some odd inflections.

  • #58014
    svenbot5000
    Participant

    Howdy! I’m posting another quick practice recording before my next coaching session. Any performance feedback is greatly appreciated.

    Qtie

    Dating and making new friends can be difficult and daunting. But thanks to Qutie it’s now easier for you to meet fellow LGBT individuals. Follow your heart to find your true colors with Qutie.

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    • #58112
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Svenbot! I liked your voice a lot for this read, very warm, friendly and approachable. I agree with some of the other comments in that it could have been just a very little bit slower, but it sounded really good overall. You might want to emphasize “Qutie” a bit more for the 2 times the word is said; it’s an unusual word and you want to make sure the listener knows the product being sold.

      Mary

    • #58077
      irvj
      Participant

      Hi, i thought the slightly slower pace on your 2nd recording was a great improvement. The first recording was just a tad rushed. Love your tone and the accessibility of your voice.

    • #58042
      mbarillier
      Participant

      Hi — Good tone for the spot: you keep the sound upbeat and positive. agreed that a slower speed will let the listener absorb the words a bit more, but overall sounds good.

    • #58020
      BrianWigginsVO
      Participant

      Good evening!

      Okay, so you have a great tone, first of all. The read was a little rushed, though, and it resulted in some words being smushed together. Slow it down and let it breathe a little.

  • #58006
    NoreenQuadir
    Participant

    Hi, new to commercial VO training and wanted to attach my VO samples here for feedback as I’m learning. Would appreciate feedback from others. Thanks! 🙂

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    • #58113
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Noreen! I like these reads for your voice. My favorite was the third for Hershey’s, it just seemed the most believable for you. The Second script for Elf was a little hard to hear clearly on my end, I little slower might help the many “s’s” in the script be fully enunciated, they tended to run together. Good job!

      Mary

    • #58021
      BrianWigginsVO
      Participant

      so the first thing I noticed was that all of the reads were essentially exactly the same in terms of the pacing, tone, and emotion. That’s something that should be varied, as each read would be attempting to reach a different audience, and achieve a different goal, right?

      Also, in each there were some cases of slurred words, so make sure to slow down.

      Finally, was this recorded on your phone just for the sake of practice? If yes, then no worries…if not, you’ll definitely need to work on your setup.

      • #58027
        NoreenQuadir
        Participant

        Thank you for the feedback! Yes, this was recorded on my phone and just for practice.

  • #58001
    swy619
    Participant

    Two very contrasting scripts here. Had fun testing different genres. Feedback appreciated. Peace and thanks!
    Kids Activity TV
    Every day is an adventure with Activity TV. It’s the place to be for
    hundreds of Awesome activities in dozens of categories! Cartooning to
    magic to cooking and more – ready for you day or night. This month
    learn some gross out magic. Watch closely as Ryan teaches you to
    perform the severed finger trick!
    Meditation
    Make yourself comfortable, sitting upright, with a straight spine.
    With your eyes closed, look at the point midway between the eyebrows
    on your forehead. Inhale slowly, counting to eight. Hold the breath
    for the same eight counts while concentrating your attention at the
    point between the eyebrows. Now exhale slowly to the same count of
    eight. Repeat three to six times.

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    • #58114
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Swy619! I really liked both of these reads for you. They were very different from each other and both very believable. Good pace and excitement for the first read and lots of variation in tone. For the second script it was great – it contained more pauses and breathiness which was very appropriate for that read. Great job!

      Mary

    • #58087
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      Wow! The meditation recording was great, relaxed, really worked, convincing and more. The other performance with the kids show was nice too.

      • #58095
        swy619
        Participant

        Thanks SuperLuke!

    • #58013
      svenbot5000
      Participant

      Hi! I have some feedback for your kids tv read. Your higher pitch definitely helps sell the enthusiasm! I would try changing up the pacing of the read next time. An enhanced pace would help hook any kids listening to this want to tune in. Your tone kind of lowers when you say “Dozens” as well, I would raise it instead to emphasize the amount of categories. Keep up the good work!

      • #58063
        swy619
        Participant

        Cool! I’ll try raising that tone on “dozens” and varying the pace throughout. Thank you!

  • #57999
    katelyndawnvo
    Participant

    This was so fun!! Ladies this ones for you 😉 Any feedback is appreciated, thank you. I put this script together based on a recent ad with Amy Schumer

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    • #58188
      docr15
      Participant

      katelyndawnvo, excellent read! I can’t really find any negative to say. This was smooth, natural and easy to listen to. Recording quality was great. This is a TV/Radio quality read in my humble opinion.

    • #58079
      AndreaC
      Participant

      Very clear and friendly!

    • #58062
      irvj
      Participant

      Totally agree with BrianWigginsVO. I hear this, I see this ad on the tube. I liked the way you changed pitch, it gave a more conspiratorial feel, like, “just between us”…Great job!

    • #58055
      katelyndawnvo
      Participant

      Aw shucks, thanks you guys! <3

    • #58033
      BrianWigginsVO
      Participant

      Great job! I could definitely hear that as an actual campaign.

    • #58018
      mkell755
      Participant

      Love this Katelyn! Agree with the comment before, sounds very relatable and authentic – I believe you!! Your voice sounds really good for this commercial – very well done!

      Mary

    • #58011
      NoreenQuadir
      Participant

      I love it! It sounds very relatable as if a friend is talking to me.

  • #57983
    BrianWigginsVO
    Participant

    Audition Feedback

    Hoping to submit this ASAP, so any feedback regarding delivery will be very helpful. Three scripts all with the same direction: “In a tone that’s intellectual and energetic”.

    Script 1:
    Doctors specialize in treating patients, not negotiating drug contracts and rates.
    That’s where GPOs come in – to serve physicians.
    Smart GPOs rely on data to ensure providers have access to the right therapeutic choices at the best value.

    Script 2:
    Distribution is the critical link between pharmaceutical manufacturers and healthcare providers
    Because AmerisourceBergen offers specialty distribution to its partners,
    we understand that a specialty distributor has knowledge of their patient base and specific needs of specialty physician practices.

    Script 3:
    At a time when health systems are challenged to maximize revenue capture, Drug reimbursement requirements are changing and complex.
    Even with an increased focus on this area, it can be difficult for a health system to have a holistic view of the revenue cycle and its complexities, spanning everything from drug procurement to reimbursement.

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    • #58004
      RYoung
      Participant

      Brian, great work on these, good inflections although some seem a bit contrived or maybe too upward in inflection on sentence ending? Only other thought on improvement would be like so many of us have, is glottal stops or I call squeezing of words which come out distorted ie; manufacturers in script 2 and complex in first sentence of script 3, hope that helps and good luck.

      • #58022
        BrianWigginsVO
        Participant

        That’s helpful, thanks…I’ll have to give it another listen to see where I was doing that.

  • #57975

    Hey another ad practice script for me. Thanks so much! I would love performance and space notes for this one.

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    • #58084
      RYoung
      Participant

      I like your natural and informative delivery style. I think it would work well in PSAs. Although this is a retail clothing commercial you may want to perk up the ending somewhat with a smile if you know what I mean, good work on this and thanks for sharing!

    • #57987
      BrianWigginsVO
      Participant

      Love the tone and your delivery on this…there was a real earnestness to it. Maybe slow down like 3.6% (but that’s just one opinion, take it for what it’s worth), and the only real note I have is that the end tag is really rushed, especially to your nearly dead-on pacing with the rest of it. But other than that, great!

  • #57973

    This is a practice script for my coaching sessions. Voice and recording setup notes are both great!

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    • #57988
      BrianWigginsVO
      Participant

      Same notes as above…great tone, maybe a tad slower, especially at the end when you’re giving the website address. Who are you working with, if you don’t mind me asking?

  • #57964

    Hey y’all! Been working on this commercial a bit. Let me know notes on performance!

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    • #58034
      BrianWigginsVO
      Participant

      The last line, the call to action, is super rushed. Slow that down so that we can hear it. But your tone is great, and for the rest, I loved the pacing and your inflections.

      Just to offer a contrast point to Kathy above, as she’s not wrong about “to” versus “ta”, my coach told me that sometimes, “ta” is OK, depending on the tone of the script, and as long as it isn’t being completely lost. In this case, it didn’t bother me, so here you would have a case of two different “casting directors” looking for different things.

    • #58025
      kfvoice
      Participant

      I like your tone in all your reads. In this particular one, I will give feedback — slow it down slightly (I have struggled with this in my narration reads), and enunciate clearer on “to”. It sounded like “ta” — I have to catch myself with this also. I hope this helps.

      Kathy

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