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Wanted some feedback on a medical read. Content, sound quality etc…
Thanks.The corneal epithelium is a thin layer of fast-growing and easily regenerated tissue kept moist by tears. The epithelium absorbs oxygen and cell nutrients from tears, and then distributes these nutrients to the rest of the cornea. The part of the epithelium that serves as the foundation on which the epithelial cells anchor and organize themselves is called the basal membrane
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Hi LMayo! Great read! Your voice sounds very smooth, warm and calm, and very good for a script like this. Good pacing and enunciation throughout. Very good!
Mary
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Very lovely read. You have a great voice for medical narration. I would say with this read there were pauses so you could work on smoothing out the pauses and only pause between ideas/sentences. You did a much smoother read for the 2nd and 3rd sentence, so the first one os more “pause-y” than the other two. Really nice work!
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Hello all! I’m looking for any and all feedback here to my daily recording. This was recorded on my phone, so this is just for practice. Trying to sound authentic for this sort of commercial. Thank you!
Mary
Balance Bar
A six-pack of lite beer is still a six-pack of beer. Eat with your head. With it’s 40-30-30 ratio of carbs, protein and dietary fat, Balance Bar is a great-tasting way to give your body the nutrition it needs. Plus it has 23 essential vitamins and minerals. To learn more, log on to Balance.com. Balance Bar. Eat with your head.-
Hi Mary! I think you have the right voice for this type of ad. Try to imagine that you’re talking to someone you know about this balance bar before you do the read. Pretend you’re really excited about letting them know that this is going to change their life. I believe this will help make the copy sound more conversational than just reading off the script. Hope that helps and keep up the good work!
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Hi Mary,
Cute attitude. It is a little choppy: for ex, consider the pause after the first “beer” and the pause after “Eat”, and “Plus” You do a great job of changing inflection on “is still” and “with your head”, so the pauses are unnecessary and make it sound stilted. Your delivery on 40-30-30 sounds almost bored, but it is a big deal, as is the first time you mention the product. The pause before “Balance Bar” is good as it makes us pay attention to what will come after. You might try a smile in your voice on the final joke of “eat with your head.” Hope this is helpful. Good luck. -
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Happy Monday, all!
Here is my submission for today!
I did a documentary read from the script library. I am aware of background noise (not hydrated enough today), and would like feedback regarding anything else. It is appreciated.
Kathy
Animal Heroes
Not all heroes are human. Sometimes heroes bark, meow, or even grunt. They may be covered with fur, have curly tails, or live in an alley. We’re about to meet some real-life animal heroes. Each one of these heroes has performed an amazing rescue. Sometimes they even put themselves in danger to help others. We’ll meet a dog who rescues stray cats. A brave cat who saved her five kittens from a fire. A pig who got help for her owner who was having a heart attack. And a guide dog who led his owner down 71 flights of stairs when the World Trade Center was attacked.
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Hi Kathy! I liked this read. It was warm, well paced and with good micro-pauses between thoughts to let the listener hear and understand what was being said. Good natural tone. Good job!
Mary
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Last homework upload. Happy Thanksgiving! Thanks again for all comments!
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More homework! Thanks again for all comments!
Club Med
Imagine for a moment … nothing. No clocks. No ringing phone. No traffic jams. No radios. No newspapers. And no crowds. Now imagine a Club Med vacation. An island village where aqua seas brush dazzling white shores. Where lush green palms line wandering paths. A place where evenings are filled with entertainment and dancing. A Club Med vacation is like none other. Ask your travel agent. -
Hey there everyone. Posting some homework reads for my commercial demo prep. As always, thanks for any and all comments on anything about them, warts and all!
2020 Mercedes E-Class
A car that can actually see like a human.
Using stereoscopic cameras it can even stop itself if it has to.
The technology may be hard to imagine, but why you would want it, is not.
The 2020 E-class.
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Here are a couple more practice narrations of kids’ material. Thanks for your feedback.
Recycling
I don’t know about you, but I like our planet a lot! And one of the
easiest ways we can help protect the Earth is by recycling. That’s
where instead of throwing things like plastic in the trash, you put
them in a special bin so they go to a kind of factory to be reused.
You’ve probably recycled things like plastic bottles before. There
might even be a recycling bin in the room you’re in right now!
Recycling is important because it helps keep the Earth clean,
especially from trash made of plastic.
Making Candy
What exactly goes into candy to make it so sweet and yummy? Join
Professor Hoody on a fantastic journey to find out how candy is really
made. In Making Candy, the professor’s quantum transporter sends him
to a real chocolate factory to explore the candy world. You can just
taste the excitement in this candy-coated adventure.-
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Nice reads! Your tone and pace were good in both scripts, although I felt like your pitch and emphasis could of varied with certain words.
In the first script, try changing your pitch upward at the end of your opening line (… a lot!), like you did with “… right now!” Maybe emphasis “easiest” in the second sentence, and “Recycling is important…” in your last line. Just my thoughts.
With the second script, the opening line, “What exactly goes into candy to make it so sweet and yummy?”, seemed to lack the enthusiasm and excitement compared to the rest of your read.
Good job! Keep at it!
Kathy
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