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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hey everyone, I am going to be recording my demo soon so I want to upload more. I’m still wondering about my recording accousitcs, do you think it works great? I’m pretty pleased with how the recordings turn out, but I wonder if my computer’s humming is messing with the recording… Also, if you have advice on my performance, I’d appreciate it.
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Thanks for any feedback!
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Hi Burdahgirl! Your voice sounds really good for this commercial, great job! Good pacing, flowed well and good enunciation. Very good!
Mary
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Happy Thanksgiving all! Here is my daily recording for any and all feedback (recorded on phone for practice). Let me know what you think. Thank you!
Mary
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Hi Mary,
I think your pacing is great and you are so clear. I might try to add a little more warmth or smile to it? Otherwise, awesome! -
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Hi Mary!
Your pace, pitch, and pauses were good here. When it comes to the number, I know it’s common for some to say “Oh”, as opposed to “Zero”, although, I don’t think I hear many commercials read this way. Something to be mindful of, and double check.
Kathy
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Hi Kathy, thanks for the feedback! I debated as to say “0” vs. “zero” and the shorter “0” won, but good point in checking on protocol for that. It seems like so many things that are said in commercials are getting shorter these days, like the companies expect us to figure it out with just a tiny bit of information. Now I’ll be listening for that! Thanks again,
Mary
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Hi everyone. Happy Thanksgiving. My coach wants me to perform this dog character with a scratchy texture and a higher-pitched voice, maintaining the voice and texture together. I rehearsed this character in three different takes. Which one sounds more like what my coach wants us to use for my demo?
In my demo rehearsal, I’m trying to make all my characters consistent and sounding different enough from each other. I even spent time speeding up my performances. How do I sound in the performance and with recording quality? I got a new microphone and headset. There shouldn’t be any hiss or hum in the background anymore.
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Hi SuperLuke!
In your first read, dog voice number three was my choice. It sounded more “youthful” for a “pup”. Is this what is the intention?
The second read for your demo rehearsal had a nice variation, while being consistent.
As for the recording quality, I can still hear noise in the background in both. I’m still learning myself, but did you try adjusting the gain?
Kathy
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Hi SuperLuke! In the first recording, the second version was my choice for the dog character.
For the second recording, the sound was very low at the beginning but got increasingly louder. I liked the character voice variation. Some of the words were not very clear to me, like they were a little smushed together. I could not understand the name of the restaurant – is it McCholesterol’s? I listened 4 times but could not figure it out. I hope that helps!
Mary
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Thank you for your comments about my recordings and for liking my character variations. I probably spoke very fast, smushing some words together in the second recording. Yes, McCholesterole’s is the name of the restaurant in my demo practice.
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Hello all! I’m looking for any and all feedback to this script (it was recorded on my phone, just fyi). Thank you for your comments!
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Hi, your voice is clear but it should flow better. Try to loosen up some and try not to sound like you are reading from a paper.
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I heard a background sound as you performed the read. Might want to consider eliminating it. I liked your performance, good voice, and sounding like a commercial. To make it better, I would suggest following Robert’s advice, loosen up the performance, and try not to sound like you just read it off the paper. Other than that, I enjoyed it
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Thanks SuperLuke! Yes, I think the background noise you are hearing is the computer fan – it’s almost level with the desk instead of below it, so I will probably have to rearrange things once I’ve set up my home studio (has not happened yet). Will also work on loosening up. I wanted to sound helpful and not like I am reading. Thanks again!
Mary
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Hi Brian! I like the tone and raspiness of your voice! It is unique
Script 1 – Advil – Good inflection and pace, your voice is well-suited for this.
Script 2 – History Channel – Good tone and pacing on this one, but it seemed just a tiny bit rushed. You may be able to do a slight pause after the parts that ask questions to allow the listener to think for a beat before moving on to the next thought.
Script 3 – Dublin – Good energy in the read, it felt like you were interested in the topicOverall very good!
Mary
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My first go at a commercial script! Thanks for your feedback!
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Hi Burdahgirl! Great read! Great inflection at the kid’s voice parts, very believable and with good variation in the 3 quoted parts of the script. The emphasis on Creative Builder is good too, lets people know what the product is that is being sold. Good pacing in the read. Great job!
Mary
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looking for more sample work to add. Critique and comments welcome!
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ITS NOT UNTIL WE VENTURE INTO THE WORLD THAT WE SEE ALL WE SHARE.
MAYBE THATS THE POWER OF FLIGHT.
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Hi RYoung!
You have a great voice for this type of script. It was a nice read. You didn’t rush through it, and your words were clear. What I did notice, is that maybe the pauses between sentences could of been a tad longer. I especially noticed this between the first and second sentences. Just my opinion.
Kathy
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I redid this one from the old feedback forum I believe trying to be a little more relaxed and realistic. Any of your thoughts are welcome!
Think Different – Apple Commercial (1997)
Here’s to the crazy ones.
The misfits.
The rebels.
The troublemakers.
The round pegs in the square holes.
The ones who see things differently.
They’re not fond of rules.
And they have no respect for the status quo.
You can quote them, disagree with them, glorify or vilify them. About the only thing you can’t do is ignore them.
Because they change things.
They push the human race forward.
And while some may see them as the crazy ones, we see genius.
Because the people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world, are the ones who do.-
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Hi RYoung! Well done and well produced. Good tone in your voice and well-suited for this type of read. There were a few lines where you finished the statement as if it were a question – “the troublemakers” and “status quo” and “they change things”. Just based on the script it would seem like these should be read more as definitive statements, just my take on things. Very well done!
Mary
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