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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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November 29, 2020 at 8:48 pm #58462
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantHi guys! Been a couple days. My demo record went so great! Here is a script I put together for a commercial read. Any feedback is appreciated! Have a great day.
KatelynAndalou Naturals sunflower & citrus styling gel gives you a healthy shine and protects your hair against heat and humidity.
Sunflower and Tangerine Oils brighten hair tone and revitalize follicles.
This natural gel does so much more than you would expect.Attachments:
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December 2, 2020 at 3:41 am #58649
kfvoice
ParticipantA nice “sunny” and “bright” read, Katelyn! Pace was good, and enunciation was clear. I did notice a very slight micro-pause at “and protect” in your opening line. Again, very slight. It works if the line is rewritten with an intended break. Overall, good job!
P.S. I use Andalou products, and your voice works well for this kind of script.
Kathy
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November 29, 2020 at 9:17 pm #58464
mkell755
ParticipantHi Katelyn! Glad to hear that the demo went well! This read sounds good – good flow and variation in tone and very good for your voice. Good job!
Mary
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November 29, 2020 at 10:11 am #58448
touzet
ParticipantSort of a Jack Daniels Medley
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December 1, 2020 at 11:10 am #58580
touzet
ParticipantThanks for taking the time to give this a listen and for the generous comments.
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November 30, 2020 at 6:47 pm #58533
SuperLuke
Participantwow, this take is delicious, I can already taste it
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November 30, 2020 at 1:49 pm #58509
colleen
ParticipantTREMENDOUS read and background music, Touzet~great pacing, tone…I could almost TASTE the whiskey!
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November 29, 2020 at 10:21 pm #58471
kfvoice
Participant(Accidentally posted as a main entry!)
Awesome job, touzet! I don’t have anything to critique! Your pace and tone fit the script well, and I loved the chuckle in the beginning of your read!
Sounded like a Jack Daniels commercial to me!
Watch out, Sam Elliott! 🙂
Kathy
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November 30, 2020 at 12:01 pm #58503
JackStansbury
ParticipantI mean holy cow, this is great stuff. So evocative, so human and authentic. Really really nice work
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November 29, 2020 at 10:17 pm #58469
mkell755
ParticipantHi Touzet – very nice! Great visuals as I was listening – very smooth and relaxed. Good job!
Mary
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November 29, 2020 at 12:09 am #58443
mkell755
ParticipantHi everyone! Looking for any and all feedback here for this read (recorded on my phone). Thank you all!
Mary
Hotelplanner.com
Planning a group event can be an enormous undertaking whether it’s a work meeting, sporting event or family reunion. Simplify your event planning with HotelPlanner.com —
We’re number one in group travel. We’ll work with you and the hotels to obtain the finest hotel, best prices, and group booking policies available.Attachments:
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December 2, 2020 at 11:58 am #58673
mrtripo9
ParticipantGreat read, i can totally hear this on radio, I agree with kathryn , there is a warmness to you voice , the bracket (–) tip she shared is awesome , i will apply it to my reads too.
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November 30, 2020 at 6:08 pm #58524
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantVery nice work Mary. Your tone is so warm and inviting. I think that the pace is a little carefully spoken and paced out a but slow. There were some pauses in the first sentence: “Planning a group event can be an enormous undertaking whether it’s a work meeting,” and with this whole part being 1 idea does not need any pausing. My coach suggested putting brackets around ideas [—-] that signify that it is 1 idea and so there does not need to be pauses there. Nice work! 🙂
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November 30, 2020 at 11:01 pm #58565
mkell755
ParticipantThanks for the Feedback Katelyn! I definitely like the bracket idea to keep phrases and thoughts together, thanks for that! I will work on unnecessary pauses too. In my head I’m trying t o keep it moving but no too fast, but a random pause doesn’t help that. Thanks again!
Mary
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November 29, 2020 at 5:28 pm #58457
TimDKietzman
ParticipantHello Mary,
This was well done. You enunciated good words and sounded conversational. You were pausing a lot though, and much of it was midsentence. My coach Art advised me to only pause at periods and commas. Also, it sounded like you said “ken” instead of “can.” Your tone leaves something to be desired. Indeed you sound confident but not very interested and I think that is crucial for commercial scripts.
I hope this helps,
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November 29, 2020 at 9:21 pm #58465
mkell755
ParticipantHi Tim! Thanks for the feedback. I hear “ken” now instead of “can”, so I will work on that. I think too that I may be unintentionally pausing to make sure I’m not reading too quick, but if it sounds like a pause that needs work as well. I really was interested in this but will work on a more interested-sounding tone. Thanks again!
Mary
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November 28, 2020 at 11:19 pm #58435
kfvoice
ParticipantHi all!
I hope you all had a nice Thanksgiving, despite the unusual circumstances this year.
I had some new studio equipment come in this week, and today was my first day test driving some of it.
This script is from the library; found under documentaries, but it sounds like a script for a travel app.
(Note: Where I come from, we say route as “root”.)
Any and all feedback is appreciated. Thank you!
Kathy
Route 66
#2 Route 66
While officially Route 66 no longer exists, the majority of it remains to be driven and
enjoyed. The turn-by-turn road description will guide you on your journey through all
eight states from Chicago to Los Angeles. Not only will it help you to stay on track, but
you’ll also find some background information on the hundreds of roadside attractions-
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November 28, 2020 at 11:32 pm #58439
mkell755
ParticipantHi Kathy! I enjoyed this read. Very smooth and flowed well! The only thing I noticed was that the word “guide” seemed to be stretched out or given more emphasis than needed? That is nitpicky on my part. Very good!
P.S. We say “root” too, and 26 miles of Route 66 runs through my city, Tulsa!
Mary
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November 28, 2020 at 11:28 pm #58438
kfvoice
ParticipantI can’t seem to edit this again, but I noticed (only after uploading my recording), that I completely skipped a word in my last line. Oops.
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November 28, 2020 at 8:24 pm #58432
burdahgirl
ParticipantThanks for your feedback! I’m enjoying getting to know you all through your recordings 🙂
“It’s Macy’s Thanksgiving sale. Storewide savings for the whole family. All women’s coats and jackets…30-50 percent off. All men’s outerwear…25-50 percent off. And all kids’ jackets, hats, and gloves…up to 60 percent off. Macy’s Thanksgiving Sale. All you need for the holidays.”
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November 29, 2020 at 5:19 pm #58456
TimDKietzman
ParticipantYour voice is very fitting for the read. You performed a good tempo and enunciated fitting words. Although, I personally think your tone makes you sound like a machine… It’s almost as if you’re just reading it without any apparent interest. If you want listeners to be attracted to your client, it’s important to sound interested yourself. Also, I think your listing of the products and percentages could do with more variation. (I would suggest enunciating the percentages in one, the products in another, you could even raise the pitch of “and.”)
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November 28, 2020 at 11:36 pm #58440
mkell755
ParticipantHi Burdahgirl! Yes it is interesting hearing many of the same voices and getting to know everyone a little!
Great read – very good flow and tone, and good building emphasis on the 3 levels of percentages of sales (30-50, 25-50, and 60). Your tone is very pleasant and well-suited for this type of commercial. Very good!
Mary
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November 28, 2020 at 11:26 am #58418
touzet
ParticipantTried out this Atlanta Bread Co. Script:
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November 30, 2020 at 6:59 pm #58536
SuperLuke
Participantwow this is great
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November 29, 2020 at 5:10 pm #58455
TimDKietzman
ParticipantYou sir are FANTASTIC! You brought the script to life with perfect pace, fitting enunciations, and not too long of pauses. I would recommend though, unless this is your natural speaking voice, you should not perform with such a low pitch. You sound rather gravelly and I feel that sounds like you’re slacking off before the read is done. A relaxed tone is fitting, but don’t overdo it.
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November 29, 2020 at 12:20 pm #58450
touzet
ParticipantThanks for giving this a listen and the generous comments.
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November 28, 2020 at 11:38 pm #58441
mkell755
ParticipantHi Touzet! Very good! Nice warm and rich tone, sounded great! Good flow and inflection throughout. Good job!
Mary
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November 28, 2020 at 8:21 pm #58430
burdahgirl
ParticipantOh man, you have such a great voice and I could listen to it all day! For this read, I thought it was awesome. I might play around with not settling at the bottom of the voice – the higher inflections still have such a rich color but a little more inviting for a place with soup in a bread bowl 🙂 🙂 Can’t wait to hear your voice all over the place!
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November 28, 2020 at 4:20 pm #58426
RYoung
ParticipantTop notch on this one Touzet! I have no critique to offer you, very nice!
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November 28, 2020 at 3:50 am #58415
Nepali Voice over artist-Bhawani
ParticipantThank you,Mary.Really appreciate it.
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November 28, 2020 at 12:05 am #58411
mkell755
ParticipantHello all! I’m looking for any and all feedback on this read (recorded on my phone). I’m trying to work on smiling during the read and for a natural delivery. Thanks for listening!
Mary
Mr. Coffee Elite Plus
Now when you stumble out of bed with a million things to do, at least the coffee’s ready. Mr. Coffee Elite Plus coffeemaker starts brewing whenever you say. You decide the night before, push a few buttons and go to bed. You’ll wake up to a fresh, hot p*t of steaming salvation. Now that’s what we call a real eye-opener.Attachments:
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November 29, 2020 at 6:54 pm #58459
Robert Broussard
ParticipantI like that Mary. Good job.
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November 28, 2020 at 8:22 pm #58431
burdahgirl
ParticipantGreat job Mary! I listened to one of yours a day or two ago and can hear a difference with the “smile” in your voice. It’s awesome!
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November 27, 2020 at 7:34 pm #58402
TimDKietzman
ParticipantHere’s another script I did. Do you think my acoustic set up works well? My main concern is if there is a noticeable hum from my computer… Any thoughts on my performance would also be appreciated. Thanks for the help.
Sandals
Somewhere in the Caribbean, there are 5-star luxury resorts where it’s all-inclusive, all the time. Sandals, where love is all you need. Because everything else is included. Call 1-800-Sandals.Attachments:
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November 29, 2020 at 5:04 pm #58454
TimDKietzman
ParticipantHey everyone. Thanks for the feedback, I’ll definitely take it to heart. Although I wonder why I didn’t receive an email that you’d replied… The old Feedback Forum did that all the time.
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November 28, 2020 at 12:17 am #58413
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Tim!
Great read!
My feedback here is for your audio set up.
I felt like there was a louder hum here, than in your first reading I gave feedback on.
Your reading started out quiet and whisper like at the beginning, and then the volume of your read in the second sentence got louder. It started around “where love…”. I am not sure if this is part of your audio edit, or if your tone changed.
Have you sent in a audio sample for the engineers to listen to?
Overall, good job!
Kathy
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November 27, 2020 at 11:32 pm #58408
mkell755
ParticipantHi Tim! Good read. Your voice had a nice low tone which suited this script well. Even with the quieter tone, I was not hearing any humming. Good job!
Mary
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November 27, 2020 at 7:29 pm #58400
TimDKietzman
ParticipantHey everyone, I am going to be recording my demo soon so I want to upload more. I’m still wondering about my recording accousitcs, do you think it works great? I’m pretty pleased with how the recordings turn out, but I wonder if my computer’s humming is messing with the recording… Also, if you have advice on my performance, I’d appreciate it.
Toddler Town Zoo
When was the last time you brought your kids to the zoo? Now you can bring the zoo home to them. Toddler Town has a brand new collection of zoo characters, designed to put a smile on every toddler’s face. A lovable herd of hippos, a dangerous den of lions, plus monkeys, giraffes, and big burly bears. It’ll keep the little ones happy for hours. So introduce your kids to the ZOO … from TODDLER TOWN.Attachments:
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November 29, 2020 at 1:07 pm #58452
touzet
ParticipantYou have a distinctive voice – which is a great thing. This script seems targeted at the parents and some of the read seems aimed at children e.g. the phrase “…dangerous den of lions”. Also, “put [uh] smile..” may work better than “put [AY] smile..”. That may make it more conversational…
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November 27, 2020 at 11:34 pm #58409
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Tim!
Nice read! Your voice fits the script. The pace was good, and your pitch and toned varied where needed.
I did hear a distant hum/static sound with my Audio-Technica headphones. I hope this helps.
Kathy
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November 27, 2020 at 11:29 pm #58407
mkell755
ParticipantHi Tim! This sounded good – good tempo and flow and enunciation. I’m not hearing the humming on my end. Overall good job!
Mary
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