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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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November 28, 2020 at 8:24 pm #58432
burdahgirl
ParticipantThanks for your feedback! I’m enjoying getting to know you all through your recordings 🙂
“It’s Macy’s Thanksgiving sale. Storewide savings for the whole family. All women’s coats and jackets…30-50 percent off. All men’s outerwear…25-50 percent off. And all kids’ jackets, hats, and gloves…up to 60 percent off. Macy’s Thanksgiving Sale. All you need for the holidays.”
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November 29, 2020 at 5:19 pm #58456
TimDKietzman
ParticipantYour voice is very fitting for the read. You performed a good tempo and enunciated fitting words. Although, I personally think your tone makes you sound like a machine… It’s almost as if you’re just reading it without any apparent interest. If you want listeners to be attracted to your client, it’s important to sound interested yourself. Also, I think your listing of the products and percentages could do with more variation. (I would suggest enunciating the percentages in one, the products in another, you could even raise the pitch of “and.”)
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November 28, 2020 at 11:36 pm #58440
mkell755
ParticipantHi Burdahgirl! Yes it is interesting hearing many of the same voices and getting to know everyone a little!
Great read – very good flow and tone, and good building emphasis on the 3 levels of percentages of sales (30-50, 25-50, and 60). Your tone is very pleasant and well-suited for this type of commercial. Very good!
Mary
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November 28, 2020 at 11:26 am #58418
touzet
ParticipantTried out this Atlanta Bread Co. Script:
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November 30, 2020 at 6:59 pm #58536
SuperLuke
Participantwow this is great
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November 29, 2020 at 5:10 pm #58455
TimDKietzman
ParticipantYou sir are FANTASTIC! You brought the script to life with perfect pace, fitting enunciations, and not too long of pauses. I would recommend though, unless this is your natural speaking voice, you should not perform with such a low pitch. You sound rather gravelly and I feel that sounds like you’re slacking off before the read is done. A relaxed tone is fitting, but don’t overdo it.
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November 29, 2020 at 12:20 pm #58450
touzet
ParticipantThanks for giving this a listen and the generous comments.
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November 28, 2020 at 11:38 pm #58441
mkell755
ParticipantHi Touzet! Very good! Nice warm and rich tone, sounded great! Good flow and inflection throughout. Good job!
Mary
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November 28, 2020 at 8:21 pm #58430
burdahgirl
ParticipantOh man, you have such a great voice and I could listen to it all day! For this read, I thought it was awesome. I might play around with not settling at the bottom of the voice – the higher inflections still have such a rich color but a little more inviting for a place with soup in a bread bowl 🙂 🙂 Can’t wait to hear your voice all over the place!
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November 28, 2020 at 4:20 pm #58426
RYoung
ParticipantTop notch on this one Touzet! I have no critique to offer you, very nice!
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November 28, 2020 at 3:50 am #58415
Nepali Voice over artist-Bhawani
ParticipantThank you,Mary.Really appreciate it.
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November 28, 2020 at 12:05 am #58411
mkell755
ParticipantHello all! I’m looking for any and all feedback on this read (recorded on my phone). I’m trying to work on smiling during the read and for a natural delivery. Thanks for listening!
Mary
Mr. Coffee Elite Plus
Now when you stumble out of bed with a million things to do, at least the coffee’s ready. Mr. Coffee Elite Plus coffeemaker starts brewing whenever you say. You decide the night before, push a few buttons and go to bed. You’ll wake up to a fresh, hot p*t of steaming salvation. Now that’s what we call a real eye-opener.Attachments:
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November 29, 2020 at 6:54 pm #58459
Robert Broussard
ParticipantI like that Mary. Good job.
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November 28, 2020 at 8:22 pm #58431
burdahgirl
ParticipantGreat job Mary! I listened to one of yours a day or two ago and can hear a difference with the “smile” in your voice. It’s awesome!
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November 27, 2020 at 7:34 pm #58402
TimDKietzman
ParticipantHere’s another script I did. Do you think my acoustic set up works well? My main concern is if there is a noticeable hum from my computer… Any thoughts on my performance would also be appreciated. Thanks for the help.
Sandals
Somewhere in the Caribbean, there are 5-star luxury resorts where it’s all-inclusive, all the time. Sandals, where love is all you need. Because everything else is included. Call 1-800-Sandals.Attachments:
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November 29, 2020 at 5:04 pm #58454
TimDKietzman
ParticipantHey everyone. Thanks for the feedback, I’ll definitely take it to heart. Although I wonder why I didn’t receive an email that you’d replied… The old Feedback Forum did that all the time.
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November 28, 2020 at 12:17 am #58413
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Tim!
Great read!
My feedback here is for your audio set up.
I felt like there was a louder hum here, than in your first reading I gave feedback on.
Your reading started out quiet and whisper like at the beginning, and then the volume of your read in the second sentence got louder. It started around “where love…”. I am not sure if this is part of your audio edit, or if your tone changed.
Have you sent in a audio sample for the engineers to listen to?
Overall, good job!
Kathy
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November 27, 2020 at 11:32 pm #58408
mkell755
ParticipantHi Tim! Good read. Your voice had a nice low tone which suited this script well. Even with the quieter tone, I was not hearing any humming. Good job!
Mary
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November 27, 2020 at 7:29 pm #58400
TimDKietzman
ParticipantHey everyone, I am going to be recording my demo soon so I want to upload more. I’m still wondering about my recording accousitcs, do you think it works great? I’m pretty pleased with how the recordings turn out, but I wonder if my computer’s humming is messing with the recording… Also, if you have advice on my performance, I’d appreciate it.
Toddler Town Zoo
When was the last time you brought your kids to the zoo? Now you can bring the zoo home to them. Toddler Town has a brand new collection of zoo characters, designed to put a smile on every toddler’s face. A lovable herd of hippos, a dangerous den of lions, plus monkeys, giraffes, and big burly bears. It’ll keep the little ones happy for hours. So introduce your kids to the ZOO … from TODDLER TOWN.Attachments:
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November 29, 2020 at 1:07 pm #58452
touzet
ParticipantYou have a distinctive voice – which is a great thing. This script seems targeted at the parents and some of the read seems aimed at children e.g. the phrase “…dangerous den of lions”. Also, “put [uh] smile..” may work better than “put [AY] smile..”. That may make it more conversational…
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November 27, 2020 at 11:34 pm #58409
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Tim!
Nice read! Your voice fits the script. The pace was good, and your pitch and toned varied where needed.
I did hear a distant hum/static sound with my Audio-Technica headphones. I hope this helps.
Kathy
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November 27, 2020 at 11:29 pm #58407
mkell755
ParticipantHi Tim! This sounded good – good tempo and flow and enunciation. I’m not hearing the humming on my end. Overall good job!
Mary
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November 27, 2020 at 6:37 pm #58396
burdahgirl
ParticipantThanks for any feedback!
“Listen. Your period comes every month. But it changes every day. That’s why ALWAYS designed new MULTIPAX. Three levels of protection in one smart box. So no matter what, you’ve got the right protection. ALWAYS MULTIPAX.”
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November 30, 2020 at 2:03 pm #58511
colleen
ParticipantHi, Burdahgirl-
I really liked this read: upbeat, nice pacing & confident…nice job! -
November 29, 2020 at 5:34 pm #58458
TimDKietzman
ParticipantYour performance is very fitting and well played out. My only thought is the ending: “Always Multipax.” I think it should have a different tone than the one you have. You don’t sound happy or confident enough in the product…
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November 27, 2020 at 11:58 pm #58410
kfvoice
ParticipantHi burdahirl!
Nice read!
Pitch and tone were good. I would recommend a longer pause after “Listen.” … It sounds like it’s part of your second sentence. Emphasizing ALWAYS and MULTIPAX a little more will highlight the brand and product.
Overall, good job!
Kathy
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November 27, 2020 at 11:26 pm #58406
mkell755
ParticipantHi Burdahgirl! Your voice sounds really good for this commercial, great job! Good pacing, flowed well and good enunciation. Very good!
Mary
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November 26, 2020 at 11:15 pm #58372
mkell755
ParticipantHappy Thanksgiving all! Here is my daily recording for any and all feedback (recorded on phone for practice). Let me know what you think. Thank you!
Mary
Select Quote Insurance
Hi. I’d like to tell you the three golden rules for saving money when buying life insurance.
– First, buy “term life” insurance, so you get the most protection for the least possible cost.
– Second, buy sooner rather than later. Every birthday your cost of insurance goes up.
– And third, call Select Quote. They search the top-rated life insurance firms like Traveler, Kemper, and CNA, to find the best rates and benefits for you. Then they send you a free price comparison with your five best quotes.
– Just call 1-800-335-7200 for your free price comparison. That’s 1-800-335-7200.Attachments:
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November 27, 2020 at 6:40 pm #58398
burdahgirl
ParticipantHi Mary,
I think your pacing is great and you are so clear. I might try to add a little more warmth or smile to it? Otherwise, awesome! -
November 27, 2020 at 1:24 am #58380
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Mary!
Your pace, pitch, and pauses were good here. When it comes to the number, I know it’s common for some to say “Oh”, as opposed to “Zero”, although, I don’t think I hear many commercials read this way. Something to be mindful of, and double check.
Kathy
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November 27, 2020 at 1:48 am #58381
mkell755
ParticipantHi Kathy, thanks for the feedback! I debated as to say “0” vs. “zero” and the shorter “0” won, but good point in checking on protocol for that. It seems like so many things that are said in commercials are getting shorter these days, like the companies expect us to figure it out with just a tiny bit of information. Now I’ll be listening for that! Thanks again,
Mary
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November 26, 2020 at 2:07 pm #58359
SuperLuke
ParticipantHi everyone. Happy Thanksgiving. My coach wants me to perform this dog character with a scratchy texture and a higher-pitched voice, maintaining the voice and texture together. I rehearsed this character in three different takes. Which one sounds more like what my coach wants us to use for my demo?
In my demo rehearsal, I’m trying to make all my characters consistent and sounding different enough from each other. I even spent time speeding up my performances. How do I sound in the performance and with recording quality? I got a new microphone and headset. There shouldn’t be any hiss or hum in the background anymore.
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November 27, 2020 at 1:10 am #58379
kfvoice
ParticipantHi SuperLuke!
In your first read, dog voice number three was my choice. It sounded more “youthful” for a “pup”. Is this what is the intention?
The second read for your demo rehearsal had a nice variation, while being consistent.
As for the recording quality, I can still hear noise in the background in both. I’m still learning myself, but did you try adjusting the gain?
Kathy
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November 26, 2020 at 10:06 pm #58371
mkell755
ParticipantHi SuperLuke! In the first recording, the second version was my choice for the dog character.
For the second recording, the sound was very low at the beginning but got increasingly louder. I liked the character voice variation. Some of the words were not very clear to me, like they were a little smushed together. I could not understand the name of the restaurant – is it McCholesterol’s? I listened 4 times but could not figure it out. I hope that helps!
Mary
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November 27, 2020 at 12:54 am #58375
SuperLuke
ParticipantThank you for your comments about my recordings and for liking my character variations. I probably spoke very fast, smushing some words together in the second recording. Yes, McCholesterole’s is the name of the restaurant in my demo practice.
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November 25, 2020 at 9:27 pm #58344
mkell755
ParticipantHello all! I’m looking for any and all feedback to this script (it was recorded on my phone, just fyi). Thank you for your comments!
Shelton Savings Bank
It’s taken you months to find the right house at the right price. Your problem is that the seller wants to move fast…if you can’t get a quick answer on your loan application, you’re probably not going to get this house. Well, Shelton Savings can solve your problem. Just fill out a loan application, and within 24 hours, we’ll let you know if it’s been approved. Call 800-233-3551, and apply today. Shelton Savings Bank…Your hometown bank.Attachments:
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November 26, 2020 at 3:00 am #58352
Robert Broussard
ParticipantHi, your voice is clear but it should flow better. Try to loosen up some and try not to sound like you are reading from a paper.
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November 26, 2020 at 9:23 pm #58368
mkell755
ParticipantThanks for the feedback Robert! I will work on the flow – thanks!
Mary
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November 27, 2020 at 1:07 am #58378
SuperLuke
ParticipantI heard a background sound as you performed the read. Might want to consider eliminating it. I liked your performance, good voice, and sounding like a commercial. To make it better, I would suggest following Robert’s advice, loosen up the performance, and try not to sound like you just read it off the paper. Other than that, I enjoyed it
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November 27, 2020 at 1:54 am #58383
mkell755
ParticipantThanks SuperLuke! Yes, I think the background noise you are hearing is the computer fan – it’s almost level with the desk instead of below it, so I will probably have to rearrange things once I’ve set up my home studio (has not happened yet). Will also work on loosening up. I wanted to sound helpful and not like I am reading. Thanks again!
Mary
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