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Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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November 26, 2020 at 11:15 pm #58372
mkell755
ParticipantHappy Thanksgiving all! Here is my daily recording for any and all feedback (recorded on phone for practice). Let me know what you think. Thank you!
Mary
Select Quote Insurance
Hi. I’d like to tell you the three golden rules for saving money when buying life insurance.
– First, buy “term life” insurance, so you get the most protection for the least possible cost.
– Second, buy sooner rather than later. Every birthday your cost of insurance goes up.
– And third, call Select Quote. They search the top-rated life insurance firms like Traveler, Kemper, and CNA, to find the best rates and benefits for you. Then they send you a free price comparison with your five best quotes.
– Just call 1-800-335-7200 for your free price comparison. That’s 1-800-335-7200.Attachments:
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November 27, 2020 at 6:40 pm #58398
burdahgirl
ParticipantHi Mary,
I think your pacing is great and you are so clear. I might try to add a little more warmth or smile to it? Otherwise, awesome! -
November 27, 2020 at 1:24 am #58380
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Mary!
Your pace, pitch, and pauses were good here. When it comes to the number, I know it’s common for some to say “Oh”, as opposed to “Zero”, although, I don’t think I hear many commercials read this way. Something to be mindful of, and double check.
Kathy
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November 27, 2020 at 1:48 am #58381
mkell755
ParticipantHi Kathy, thanks for the feedback! I debated as to say “0” vs. “zero” and the shorter “0” won, but good point in checking on protocol for that. It seems like so many things that are said in commercials are getting shorter these days, like the companies expect us to figure it out with just a tiny bit of information. Now I’ll be listening for that! Thanks again,
Mary
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November 26, 2020 at 2:07 pm #58359
SuperLuke
ParticipantHi everyone. Happy Thanksgiving. My coach wants me to perform this dog character with a scratchy texture and a higher-pitched voice, maintaining the voice and texture together. I rehearsed this character in three different takes. Which one sounds more like what my coach wants us to use for my demo?
In my demo rehearsal, I’m trying to make all my characters consistent and sounding different enough from each other. I even spent time speeding up my performances. How do I sound in the performance and with recording quality? I got a new microphone and headset. There shouldn’t be any hiss or hum in the background anymore.
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November 27, 2020 at 1:10 am #58379
kfvoice
ParticipantHi SuperLuke!
In your first read, dog voice number three was my choice. It sounded more “youthful” for a “pup”. Is this what is the intention?
The second read for your demo rehearsal had a nice variation, while being consistent.
As for the recording quality, I can still hear noise in the background in both. I’m still learning myself, but did you try adjusting the gain?
Kathy
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November 26, 2020 at 10:06 pm #58371
mkell755
ParticipantHi SuperLuke! In the first recording, the second version was my choice for the dog character.
For the second recording, the sound was very low at the beginning but got increasingly louder. I liked the character voice variation. Some of the words were not very clear to me, like they were a little smushed together. I could not understand the name of the restaurant – is it McCholesterol’s? I listened 4 times but could not figure it out. I hope that helps!
Mary
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November 27, 2020 at 12:54 am #58375
SuperLuke
ParticipantThank you for your comments about my recordings and for liking my character variations. I probably spoke very fast, smushing some words together in the second recording. Yes, McCholesterole’s is the name of the restaurant in my demo practice.
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November 25, 2020 at 9:27 pm #58344
mkell755
ParticipantHello all! I’m looking for any and all feedback to this script (it was recorded on my phone, just fyi). Thank you for your comments!
Shelton Savings Bank
It’s taken you months to find the right house at the right price. Your problem is that the seller wants to move fast…if you can’t get a quick answer on your loan application, you’re probably not going to get this house. Well, Shelton Savings can solve your problem. Just fill out a loan application, and within 24 hours, we’ll let you know if it’s been approved. Call 800-233-3551, and apply today. Shelton Savings Bank…Your hometown bank.Attachments:
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November 26, 2020 at 3:00 am #58352
Robert Broussard
ParticipantHi, your voice is clear but it should flow better. Try to loosen up some and try not to sound like you are reading from a paper.
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November 26, 2020 at 9:23 pm #58368
mkell755
ParticipantThanks for the feedback Robert! I will work on the flow – thanks!
Mary
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November 27, 2020 at 1:07 am #58378
SuperLuke
ParticipantI heard a background sound as you performed the read. Might want to consider eliminating it. I liked your performance, good voice, and sounding like a commercial. To make it better, I would suggest following Robert’s advice, loosen up the performance, and try not to sound like you just read it off the paper. Other than that, I enjoyed it
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November 27, 2020 at 1:54 am #58383
mkell755
ParticipantThanks SuperLuke! Yes, I think the background noise you are hearing is the computer fan – it’s almost level with the desk instead of below it, so I will probably have to rearrange things once I’ve set up my home studio (has not happened yet). Will also work on loosening up. I wanted to sound helpful and not like I am reading. Thanks again!
Mary
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November 25, 2020 at 6:04 pm #58336
brian3553
ParticipantHello –
I’m looking for some feedback on the following Edge scripts.
Thank you,
Brian
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November 25, 2020 at 9:02 pm #58341
mkell755
ParticipantHi Brian! I like the tone and raspiness of your voice! It is unique
Script 1 – Advil – Good inflection and pace, your voice is well-suited for this.
Script 2 – History Channel – Good tone and pacing on this one, but it seemed just a tiny bit rushed. You may be able to do a slight pause after the parts that ask questions to allow the listener to think for a beat before moving on to the next thought.
Script 3 – Dublin – Good energy in the read, it felt like you were interested in the topicOverall very good!
Mary
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November 25, 2020 at 4:29 pm #58334
burdahgirl
ParticipantMy first go at a commercial script! Thanks for your feedback!
Okay moms, if you’re like me, your kids…well, drive you crazy! “I’m bored,” “Can we go to the movies?” “When’s dad comin’ home?” Well thank goodness Lego introduced CREATIVE BUILDER. It keeps kids occupied for hours, plus helps them gain creativity while teaching them to develop their skills. Lego, thank goodness.
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November 30, 2020 at 7:13 pm #58539
colleen
ParticipantBurdahgirl~your first go at a commercial is fantastic!! Loved the different kids’ voices & thought your timing was perfect!
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November 25, 2020 at 10:49 pm #58350
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Burdahgirl!
Nice read! The pace was good, and your tone and pitch fit the script where needed. Keep it up! Great job!
Kathy
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November 25, 2020 at 9:05 pm #58342
mkell755
ParticipantHi Burdahgirl! Great read! Great inflection at the kid’s voice parts, very believable and with good variation in the 3 quoted parts of the script. The emphasis on Creative Builder is good too, lets people know what the product is that is being sold. Good pacing in the read. Great job!
Mary
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November 25, 2020 at 1:50 pm #58325
RYoung
Participantlooking for more sample work to add. Critique and comments welcome!
DELTA
WHEN WE’RE BORN. WE ARE MORE ALIKE THAN DIFFERENT.
BUT SOMEWHERE ALONG THE WAY, WE START TO BELIEVE THE MORE DISTANT WE ARE FROM EACH OTHER….THE MORE DISTANT WE ARE.
ITS NOT UNTIL WE VENTURE INTO THE WORLD THAT WE SEE ALL WE SHARE.
MAYBE THATS THE POWER OF FLIGHT.
DELTA ISN’T JUST FLYING TO BRING US TOGETHER….BUT TO SHOW, WE WERE NEVER THAT FAR PART TO BEGIN WITH
Delta is ready when you are!Attachments:
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November 27, 2020 at 12:55 am #58376
kfvoice
ParticipantHi RYoung!
You have a great voice for this type of script. It was a nice read. You didn’t rush through it, and your words were clear. What I did notice, is that maybe the pauses between sentences could of been a tad longer. I especially noticed this between the first and second sentences. Just my opinion.
Kathy
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November 26, 2020 at 10:25 am #58357
RYoung
ParticipantThanks Mary and super Luke for your encouragement it’s much appreciated!
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November 25, 2020 at 9:07 pm #58343
mkell755
ParticipantHi RYoung! Great read and production. Very good pacing and the script flowed really well with the micro pauses at the appropriate times. Your voice has a very nice warm and welcoming tone, and is very good for this sort of commercial.
Mary
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November 25, 2020 at 11:02 am #58318
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November 25, 2020 at 10:45 am #58314
RYoung
ParticipantI redid this one from the old feedback forum I believe trying to be a little more relaxed and realistic. Any of your thoughts are welcome!
Think Different – Apple Commercial (1997)
Here’s to the crazy ones.
The misfits.
The rebels.
The troublemakers.
The round pegs in the square holes.
The ones who see things differently.
They’re not fond of rules.
And they have no respect for the status quo.
You can quote them, disagree with them, glorify or vilify them. About the only thing you can’t do is ignore them.
Because they change things.
They push the human race forward.
And while some may see them as the crazy ones, we see genius.
Because the people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world, are the ones who do.Attachments:
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November 26, 2020 at 4:17 pm #58366
RYoung
ParticipantThanks for your comments and encouragement Superluke and Mary!
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November 26, 2020 at 2:15 pm #58364
SuperLuke
ParticipantGreat job Ryoung. Nice music and adding emotion to the performance, It’s like you embodied your character
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November 25, 2020 at 11:13 am #58321
mkell755
ParticipantHi RYoung! Well done and well produced. Good tone in your voice and well-suited for this type of read. There were a few lines where you finished the statement as if it were a question – “the troublemakers” and “status quo” and “they change things”. Just based on the script it would seem like these should be read more as definitive statements, just my take on things. Very well done!
Mary
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November 25, 2020 at 3:50 am #58308
Nepali Voice over artist-Bhawani
ParticipantHi
all Some of you will be surprise (who is this and from where he arrived here) This is Nepali Voice over artist Bhawani Niroula. you can search my name and website on google. this is my voice please send some suggestion(you guys seems very professional).
here it is,Attachments:
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November 25, 2020 at 11:02 am #58317
mkell755
ParticipantHi Bhawani! I liked the tone, pitch and flow of your read! Although I did not understand the language it sounded nice to me. Thanks for posting!
Mary
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November 28, 2020 at 3:52 am #58416
Nepali Voice over artist-Bhawani
ParticipantReally appreciate it, Thank yo so much Mary.
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November 24, 2020 at 11:37 pm #58287
mkell755
ParticipantGood evening all! I’m looking for any and all feedback on my daily recording (recorded on a phone). I’m going for direct but authentic and believable. Let me know what you think. Thanks!
Mary
They’re called books. You may recognize them. Men have relied on them for millennia. Read up, man up. Put on your glasses, then go kick the tar out of every project you’ve ever dreamed of. Become more self-sufficient, build your future or just enjoy a satisfying, productive read. It all starts here. Duluthtrading.com/books
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November 25, 2020 at 10:40 pm #58349
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Mary!
Enunciation was clear. I felt like you could of read this a tad slower, though. It sounded like you would speed up after the commas, too, instead of letting the sentence breath a little (micro-pause). Also be mindful of placing those micro-pauses where not intended (between “future … or”)
Try varying your tone a little more with the line “You may recognize them.” I read that as sounding sarcastic.
I hope this is helpful.
Kathy
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November 26, 2020 at 9:52 pm #58370
mkell755
ParticipantThanks Kathy! This is helpful. I was trying to pause in the right spots for emphasis, but it needs practice to make more sense and be more natural sounding.
For the “you may recognize them” line I was going for a “duh, this is obvious” feeling, so if it sounded sarcastic I would say that’s what I was thinking, like “in this day and age you do know what a book is right?”. It just seems like book reading is so rare these days, but really it used to be the main way people learned, so I was trying to poke fun at that a little bit. Thanks again!
Mary
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November 27, 2020 at 12:44 am #58374
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Mary!
The sarcasm was clear, the tone with the line still sounded the same. I guess it depends on how you want to deliver the sarcasm — dry and deadpan, or exaggerated.
Kathy
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November 27, 2020 at 1:58 am #58384
mkell755
ParticipantHi Kathy, thanks for the clarification. Dry and deadpan / funny is more accurate to what I was trying to convey. In my head I’m thinking it’s too much, but maybe if I pushed a little more, or with a different tone the feeling would be clearer in what I was trying to get across. Thanks again!
Mary
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