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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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November 30, 2020 at 6:32 pm #58527
gabecpotts@gmail.com
ParticipantGetting back to practice recordings after a little break – any and all feedback is appreciated!!
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December 1, 2020 at 7:52 pm #58615
monibr16
ParticipantSounds great, I just had trouble hearing the second “we’re” you sped up a little and it was hard to make out. Other than that it was good!
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November 30, 2020 at 10:29 pm #58558
mkell755
ParticipantHi Gabe! Great read! Good flow, energy and pace of the read, really nice!
Mary
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November 30, 2020 at 6:51 pm #58534
colleen
ParticipantGreat read, Gabe! I loved your timing, enthusiasm and pitch…
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November 30, 2020 at 6:41 pm #58530
SuperLuke
ParticipantVery nice.
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November 30, 2020 at 6:23 pm #58525
colleen
ParticipantHi there! Here’s the first of my narration scripts for session #1 homework. Absolutely brand new to voiceover, recorded on Mac computer in my freezing-cold basement(no husband, dog or extraneous noise there…) & looking forward to any tips, feedback, suggestions, etc. Big thanks! ~colleen
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December 2, 2020 at 4:17 am #58652
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Colleen!
A nice first read! I know sometimes pace can be hard in the beginning, but you did a really good job with that here.
As for voice memo download — I don’t have experience with a MacBook, but on my iPhone, I recorded on the Voice Record Pro app, not the voice memos on the phone, when starting out, and then emailed it to myself as a MP3 file. I am not sure if this helps at all, but I thought I would mention it.
Overall, good job! Keep it up!
Kathy
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December 2, 2020 at 2:58 am #58647
Robert Broussard
ParticipantSounds like you found a good spot to record if you can keep warm. I like the pace and tone of your voice. I think you may have your voice slightly louder. Over all a good effort!!
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November 30, 2020 at 10:36 pm #58559
mkell755
ParticipantHi Colleen! First off, welcome! I’m pretty new as well and always learning.
The recording sounded great, but was very quiet on my end. Your voice sounds really nice and smooth for this sort of read. I liked the pace and tone, but there seemed to be a few micro pauses throughout that might not be needed, like they did not seem to be at periods or at the end of a thought. Overall really good!
Mary
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November 30, 2020 at 6:41 pm #58531
colleen
ParticipantIF anyone has suggestions on how to download voice memos from a MacBook so that it shows up as an “attachment”, please let me know! 🙂
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November 30, 2020 at 5:19 pm #58519
Hulykulani
ParticipantHello everybody! First time posting on here for my homework for my commercial demo recording coaching sessions! I have currently two commercials worked on – American Express and Rivers Stadium in Pittsburgh. The scripts themselves are below and I appreciate any and all feedback (on the reads themselves or the way I should set up these posts as I never had to do it for my animation voice over work.
Commercial 1 – American Express
Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.
Commercial 2 – Pittsburgh
In this city… There’s an expectation in the air. We all pay it forward. We all earn it. There’s a currency that connects us. The karma we share. The way we celebrate. If you’re not from here, that’s okay. All comers are welcome. Here’s one more tip. There’s only one place in Pittsburgh we all come together. Whatever your game… Rivers is where Pittsburgh comes to play.
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November 30, 2020 at 10:40 pm #58560
mkell755
ParticipantHi Hulykulani! Welcome! I liked both scripts. I too heard an echo in the background. Good pace and emphasis on the key product words such as Private Payments, American Express and Rivers. Very good!
Mary
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November 30, 2020 at 7:17 pm #58542
svenbot5000
ParticipantHowdy! On the first commercial in the middle, specifically the “I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make” section, it sounds more like you’re reading off the script instead of having a conversation compared to the rest of the reading. Don’t be afraid to vary your speed a little. Other than that, good job!
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November 30, 2020 at 6:38 pm #58529
SuperLuke
ParticipantGood performances for a few commercials, so far. My only critique is that I hear an echoey background.
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November 30, 2020 at 11:18 am #58496
JackStansbury
ParticipantLast round of commercial homework! Any feedback is welcome and appreciated
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December 2, 2020 at 4:00 am #58651
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Jack!
Nice reads!
In Script 1, I liked your low tone. I believe I heard “a” pronounced like “ah”. I have been struggling with this, as well.
In Script 2, I liked the natural, casual delivery approach, but I agree with a previous comment to try to vary your pitch and tone.
In Script 3, just … awesome. I can’t find anything to critique here. This sounds commercial ready!Good job!
Kathy
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November 30, 2020 at 10:44 pm #58561
mkell755
ParticipantHi Jack! All 3 scripts were good for your voice and nicely read.
Nike – good low tone
Wranlger – great casual and easygoing tone!
All State – good variation in tone throughoutOverall really nice!
Mary
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November 30, 2020 at 6:45 pm #58532
SuperLuke
ParticipantThis is really awesome. Good work!
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November 30, 2020 at 6:04 pm #58523
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantReally nice work! I also really loved the allstate read. The wrangler read I thought could have been a bit more enthusiastic or have a varied pitch/tone to it while still maintaining that “wrangler” edge. Good stuff!
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November 30, 2020 at 3:11 pm #58513
gabecpotts@gmail.com
ParticipantI completely agree with the comment before me – I loved your allstate reading! It sounded casual, charming, and you lifted important words without making it sound unnatural. I really liked the Nike copy too, and thought it served as a great contrast to the Allstate one. However it sort of sounded like the final line “it’s nike” was thrown away a bit, and the word Nike felt a bit like an afterthought. Make sure to lift up the product name! great work, though!
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November 30, 2020 at 1:40 pm #58508
colleen
ParticipantJack-
Nice work! I especially liked the All State script: you sounded confident, natural, personable, trustworthy & had a nice flow…I wanted to buy insurance from you 🙂 I thought the Wrangler script sounded a bit flat & slow…but a good start. I really like your voice & think you have amazing potential!
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November 30, 2020 at 3:11 am #58488
kfvoice
ParticipantHello everyone!
Another read with new, different, equipment. This is an Interactive Voice Response script from the library. The last two lines are actually a second take, so my tone and pitch vary slightly than in the first part of the read. Is it noticeable, or does it fit the script? Any feedback is appreciated.
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IVR
You have reached Animal Wellness Center. Please listen as our menu options have changed. Our hours are Monday through Friday from 8 am to 6 pm. We are closed from 12:30 to 1:30 for lunch and on Wednesday from 12:30 to 2:00. We are closed on weekends. To schedule an appointment or reach the front desk, press 0. For Kathy Miller, head of reproduction, press 1.
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November 30, 2020 at 10:51 pm #58562
mkell755
ParticipantHi Kathy! Good read! The flow was nice and the reading smooth and clear. Since “…on Wednesday from 12:30 to 2:00” is something different from all other times on other days, I think emphasizing “Wednesday” might be helpful.
I did not notice any difference in tone and pitch from the first part of the script as compared to the last 2 lines. Good read!
Mary
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November 30, 2020 at 12:36 am #58481
mrtripo9
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December 2, 2020 at 3:51 am #58650
kfvoice
ParticipantHello mrtripo9!
Your pace here sounded good to me, and your voice, with a warm and welcoming tone, is well suited for eLearning/Education/Explainer/Training scripts. Good read! Keep it up!
Kathy
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November 30, 2020 at 10:53 pm #58563
mkell755
ParticipantHi MrTripo9 – very nice! You have a nice deep warm tone to your voice, and a nice accent. Good reading throughout!
Mary
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November 29, 2020 at 11:11 pm #58476
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November 29, 2020 at 10:18 pm #58470
kfvoice
ParticipantAwesome job, touzet! I don’t have anything to critique! Your pace and tone fit the script well, and I loved the chuckle in the beginning of your read!
Sounded like a Jack Daniels commercial to me!
Watch out, Sam Elliott! 🙂
Kathy
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November 29, 2020 at 8:48 pm #58462
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantHi guys! Been a couple days. My demo record went so great! Here is a script I put together for a commercial read. Any feedback is appreciated! Have a great day.
KatelynAndalou Naturals sunflower & citrus styling gel gives you a healthy shine and protects your hair against heat and humidity.
Sunflower and Tangerine Oils brighten hair tone and revitalize follicles.
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December 2, 2020 at 3:41 am #58649
kfvoice
ParticipantA nice “sunny” and “bright” read, Katelyn! Pace was good, and enunciation was clear. I did notice a very slight micro-pause at “and protect” in your opening line. Again, very slight. It works if the line is rewritten with an intended break. Overall, good job!
P.S. I use Andalou products, and your voice works well for this kind of script.
Kathy
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November 29, 2020 at 9:17 pm #58464
mkell755
ParticipantHi Katelyn! Glad to hear that the demo went well! This read sounds good – good flow and variation in tone and very good for your voice. Good job!
Mary
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November 29, 2020 at 10:11 am #58448
touzet
ParticipantSort of a Jack Daniels Medley
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December 1, 2020 at 11:10 am #58580
touzet
ParticipantThanks for taking the time to give this a listen and for the generous comments.
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November 30, 2020 at 6:47 pm #58533
SuperLuke
Participantwow, this take is delicious, I can already taste it
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November 30, 2020 at 1:49 pm #58509
colleen
ParticipantTREMENDOUS read and background music, Touzet~great pacing, tone…I could almost TASTE the whiskey!
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November 29, 2020 at 10:21 pm #58471
kfvoice
Participant(Accidentally posted as a main entry!)
Awesome job, touzet! I don’t have anything to critique! Your pace and tone fit the script well, and I loved the chuckle in the beginning of your read!
Sounded like a Jack Daniels commercial to me!
Watch out, Sam Elliott! 🙂
Kathy
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November 30, 2020 at 12:01 pm #58503
JackStansbury
ParticipantI mean holy cow, this is great stuff. So evocative, so human and authentic. Really really nice work
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November 29, 2020 at 10:17 pm #58469
mkell755
ParticipantHi Touzet – very nice! Great visuals as I was listening – very smooth and relaxed. Good job!
Mary
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