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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #58527

    Getting back to practice recordings after a little break – any and all feedback is appreciated!!

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    • #58615
      monibr16
      Participant

      Sounds great, I just had trouble hearing the second “we’re” you sped up a little and it was hard to make out. Other than that it was good!

    • #58558
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Gabe! Great read! Good flow, energy and pace of the read, really nice!

      Mary

    • #58534
      colleen
      Participant

      Great read, Gabe! I loved your timing, enthusiasm and pitch…

    • #58530
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      Very nice.

  • #58525
    colleen
    Participant

    Hi there! Here’s the first of my narration scripts for session #1 homework. Absolutely brand new to voiceover, recorded on Mac computer in my freezing-cold basement(no husband, dog or extraneous noise there…) & looking forward to any tips, feedback, suggestions, etc. Big thanks! ~colleen

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    • #58652
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi Colleen!

      A nice first read! I know sometimes pace can be hard in the beginning, but you did a really good job with that here.

      As for voice memo download — I don’t have experience with a MacBook, but on my iPhone, I recorded on the Voice Record Pro app, not the voice memos on the phone, when starting out, and then emailed it to myself as a MP3 file. I am not sure if this helps at all, but I thought I would mention it.

      Overall, good job! Keep it up!

      Kathy

      • #58658
        colleen
        Participant

        Kathy~
        Thanks so much for the feedback & sharing your “technical” advice. It’s great to see the different ways people voice record!

    • #58647
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Sounds like you found a good spot to record if you can keep warm. I like the pace and tone of your voice. I think you may have your voice slightly louder. Over all a good effort!!

      • #58659
        colleen
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback, Robert!

    • #58559
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Colleen! First off, welcome! I’m pretty new as well and always learning.

      The recording sounded great, but was very quiet on my end. Your voice sounds really nice and smooth for this sort of read. I liked the pace and tone, but there seemed to be a few micro pauses throughout that might not be needed, like they did not seem to be at periods or at the end of a thought. Overall really good!

      Mary

      • #58578
        colleen
        Participant

        Mary-
        Thanks so much for your feedback! This is definitely a big learning curve…especially when you also need pretty savvy computer skills (which I definitely do NOT have!!) Looking forward to more listening & learning.

        • #58631
          mkell755
          Participant

          Hey you are welcome Colleen! Yes, I think I speak for everyone here in that we are all here to learn. Practice makes perfect, right? 🙂

          Mary

    • #58531
      colleen
      Participant

      IF anyone has suggestions on how to download voice memos from a MacBook so that it shows up as an “attachment”, please let me know! 🙂

      • #58581
        touzet
        Participant

        It’s going to need to be an mp3 instead of an m4a. Google something like “m4a to mp3 on mac” and some converters will popup. You just need to make sure there’s no malware in the one you choose.

        • #58606
          colleen
          Participant

          Thanks so much for this info, touzet! I will try it with my next read.

  • #58519
    Hulykulani
    Participant

    Hello everybody! First time posting on here for my homework for my commercial demo recording coaching sessions! I have currently two commercials worked on – American Express and Rivers Stadium in Pittsburgh. The scripts themselves are below and I appreciate any and all feedback (on the reads themselves or the way I should set up these posts as I never had to do it for my animation voice over work.

    Commercial 1 – American Express

    Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.

    Commercial 2 – Pittsburgh

    In this city… There’s an expectation in the air. We all pay it forward. We all earn it. There’s a currency that connects us. The karma we share. The way we celebrate. If you’re not from here, that’s okay. All comers are welcome. Here’s one more tip. There’s only one place in Pittsburgh we all come together. Whatever your game… Rivers is where Pittsburgh comes to play.

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    • #58560
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Hulykulani! Welcome! I liked both scripts. I too heard an echo in the background. Good pace and emphasis on the key product words such as Private Payments, American Express and Rivers. Very good!

      Mary

    • #58542
      svenbot5000
      Participant

      Howdy! On the first commercial in the middle, specifically the “I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make” section, it sounds more like you’re reading off the script instead of having a conversation compared to the rest of the reading. Don’t be afraid to vary your speed a little. Other than that, good job!

    • #58529
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      Good performances for a few commercials, so far. My only critique is that I hear an echoey background.

  • #58496
    JackStansbury
    Participant

    Last round of commercial homework! Any feedback is welcome and appreciated

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    • #58651
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi Jack!

      Nice reads!

      In Script 1, I liked your low tone. I believe I heard “a” pronounced like “ah”. I have been struggling with this, as well.
      In Script 2, I liked the natural, casual delivery approach, but I agree with a previous comment to try to vary your pitch and tone.
      In Script 3, just … awesome. I can’t find anything to critique here. This sounds commercial ready!

      Good job!

      Kathy

    • #58561
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Jack! All 3 scripts were good for your voice and nicely read.
      Nike – good low tone
      Wranlger – great casual and easygoing tone!
      All State – good variation in tone throughout

      Overall really nice!

      Mary

    • #58532
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      This is really awesome. Good work!

    • #58523
      katelyndawnvo
      Participant

      Really nice work! I also really loved the allstate read. The wrangler read I thought could have been a bit more enthusiastic or have a varied pitch/tone to it while still maintaining that “wrangler” edge. Good stuff!

    • #58513

      I completely agree with the comment before me – I loved your allstate reading! It sounded casual, charming, and you lifted important words without making it sound unnatural. I really liked the Nike copy too, and thought it served as a great contrast to the Allstate one. However it sort of sounded like the final line “it’s nike” was thrown away a bit, and the word Nike felt a bit like an afterthought. Make sure to lift up the product name! great work, though!

    • #58508
      colleen
      Participant

      Jack-
      Nice work! I especially liked the All State script: you sounded confident, natural, personable, trustworthy & had a nice flow…I wanted to buy insurance from you 🙂 I thought the Wrangler script sounded a bit flat & slow…but a good start. I really like your voice & think you have amazing potential!

  • #58488
    kfvoice
    Participant

    Hello everyone!

    Another read with new, different, equipment. This is an Interactive Voice Response script from the library. The last two lines are actually a second take, so my tone and pitch vary slightly than in the first part of the read. Is it noticeable, or does it fit the script? Any feedback is appreciated.

    Thanks!

    IVR

    You have reached Animal Wellness Center. Please listen as our menu options have changed. Our hours are Monday through Friday from 8 am to 6 pm. We are closed from 12:30 to 1:30 for lunch and on Wednesday from 12:30 to 2:00. We are closed on weekends. To schedule an appointment or reach the front desk, press 0. For Kathy Miller, head of reproduction, press 1.

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    • #58562
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Kathy! Good read! The flow was nice and the reading smooth and clear. Since “…on Wednesday from 12:30 to 2:00” is something different from all other times on other days, I think emphasizing “Wednesday” might be helpful.

      I did not notice any difference in tone and pitch from the first part of the script as compared to the last 2 lines. Good read!

      Mary

      • #58567
        kfvoice
        Participant

        Thank you, Mary! Noted!

  • #58481
    mrtripo9
    Participant

    Here is another one, I might need help with editing.

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    • #58650
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hello mrtripo9!

      Your pace here sounded good to me, and your voice, with a warm and welcoming tone, is well suited for eLearning/Education/Explainer/Training scripts. Good read! Keep it up!

      Kathy

      • #58669
        mrtripo9
        Participant

        thanks KfVoice , I apprciate , its always great to get the opinion of participant like you. Thanks

    • #58563
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi MrTripo9 – very nice! You have a nice deep warm tone to your voice, and a nice accent. Good reading throughout!

      Mary

      • #58588
        mrtripo9
        Participant

        thanks Mary,your feedback means a lot.

        • #58632
          mkell755
          Participant

          Sure! You are welcome 🙂

          Mary

  • #58476
    mrtripo9
    Participant

    Hi Everyone , hope you all had a nice thanksgiving? I need your feedback on this one, thanks!

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    • #58564
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi MrTripo9 – great read for your voice; you have the voice of a storyteller! Nice warm and rich tone and good pacing of read throughout.

      Mary

      • #58589
        mrtripo9
        Participant

        thanks again Mary

  • #58470
    kfvoice
    Participant

    Awesome job, touzet! I don’t have anything to critique! Your pace and tone fit the script well, and I loved the chuckle in the beginning of your read!

    Sounded like a Jack Daniels commercial to me!

    Watch out, Sam Elliott! 🙂

    Kathy

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  • #58462
    katelyndawnvo
    Participant

    Hi guys! Been a couple days. My demo record went so great! Here is a script I put together for a commercial read. Any feedback is appreciated! Have a great day.
    Katelyn

    Andalou Naturals sunflower & citrus styling gel gives you a healthy shine and protects your hair against heat and humidity.
    Sunflower and Tangerine Oils brighten hair tone and revitalize follicles.
    This natural gel does so much more than you would expect.

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    • #58649
      kfvoice
      Participant

      A nice “sunny” and “bright” read, Katelyn! Pace was good, and enunciation was clear. I did notice a very slight micro-pause at “and protect” in your opening line. Again, very slight. It works if the line is rewritten with an intended break. Overall, good job!

      P.S. I use Andalou products, and your voice works well for this kind of script.

      Kathy

    • #58464
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Katelyn! Glad to hear that the demo went well! This read sounds good – good flow and variation in tone and very good for your voice. Good job!

      Mary

  • #58448
    touzet
    Participant

    Sort of a Jack Daniels Medley

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    • #58580
      touzet
      Participant

      Thanks for taking the time to give this a listen and for the generous comments.

    • #58533
      SuperLuke
      Participant

      wow, this take is delicious, I can already taste it

    • #58509
      colleen
      Participant

      TREMENDOUS read and background music, Touzet~great pacing, tone…I could almost TASTE the whiskey!

    • #58471
      kfvoice
      Participant

      (Accidentally posted as a main entry!)

      Awesome job, touzet! I don’t have anything to critique! Your pace and tone fit the script well, and I loved the chuckle in the beginning of your read!

      Sounded like a Jack Daniels commercial to me!

      Watch out, Sam Elliott! 🙂

      Kathy

      • #58503
        JackStansbury
        Participant

        I mean holy cow, this is great stuff. So evocative, so human and authentic. Really really nice work

    • #58469
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Touzet – very nice! Great visuals as I was listening – very smooth and relaxed. Good job!

      Mary

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