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December 27, 2020 at 6:52 pm #60420
Dante M.
ParticipantHello everyone, I have another three scripts for everyone to analyze and critique. As always, I pick the scripts I have the hardest time with to get the best feedback.
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December 27, 2020 at 11:57 pm #60445
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Dante!
Good reads! You have a nice warm, rich tone for these scripts.
Script 1: Good pacing; play around with ‘Thanksgrilling’ … you sounded a little close to the mic? Either way, this didn’t come out very clear to me.
Script 2: I thought this was your best read for a narration script. Nice pace, and clear enunciation. Try varying your pitch a little more in the last sentence with the lists.
Script 3: The enthusiasm was good. I would slow down a tad; practice the delivery in the third line (“No more paper bills!), since this line has an exclamation point!I hope this was helpful! Keep it up!
Kathy
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December 27, 2020 at 10:49 pm #60444
Dante M.
ParticipantMuch appreciated! I’m glad I’m improving.
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December 27, 2020 at 10:17 pm #60441
Robert Broussard
ParticipantDante, all 3 of those are good! Keep up the good work.
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December 27, 2020 at 9:44 pm #60435
mkell755
ParticipantHi Dante! Good reads! Very good clarity, tone and pacing for all.
Script 1: Butterball – I like it! I smiled at the “Happy Thanksgrilling” line.
Script 2: B****r – Sounds good, with good emphasis on words to educate the listener.
Script 3: AMEX – this sounds great, great energy, this is my favorite of the 3 today.
Overall very good and with a nice warm sound!Mary
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December 26, 2020 at 11:00 pm #60399
Robert Broussard
ParticipantTwo different Allstate scripts one take on each. I appreciate any feedback. Thanks
Allstate Insurance – Discount
You never know for sure, but there’s this guy in the office that swears that HIS car insurance is the best, and tells everyone what a hot negotiator he is. So you ask him. “Did you get a discount for air bags, or anti-lock brakes? What about a discount for multiple cars?” Now he’s speechless. “Oh…one last thing. You want the name of my insurance company?” To help make sure you’re getting the auto insurance discount you deserve, talk to an Allstate insurance agent in your neighborhood. You’re in good hands with Allstate.Allstate Insurance – Agent
Go ahead… Make a wish… Now call your Allstate agent. Because today, planning makes wishes come true. And your Allstate agent can help make sure that “family security”, “college funding”, and even a “healthy retirement” are in the stars for you. Your Allstate agent wants to be your agent for life. You’re in good hands with Allstate Life Insurance.Attachments:
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December 27, 2020 at 9:54 pm #60436
mkell755
ParticipantHi Robert, good reads! Good tone and clarity throughout. Your voice sounds good for insurance.
Script 1: I too heard an extra word and an omitted word. The pace seemed just a tad bit rushed to me; I felt like there should have been a tiny pause after “…for multiple cars?” and also after “…my insurance company?” I liked the conversational tone of it and the variation in pitch, well done.
Script 2: Good energy, and I also heard an extra “you” in the third sentence. This was a nice friendly conversational read, also very good. Both reads were good!Mary
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December 27, 2020 at 10:04 pm #60438
Robert Broussard
ParticipantThanks Mary, I am going to have to pay more attention to the being exact on these scripts. Hope you had a Merry Christmas.
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December 27, 2020 at 12:42 am #60408
kfvoice
ParticipantRobert — nice job on the one takes! Good pacing, and I liked the varying tone with both reads, too.
Script 1: In the first sentence you omitted and added a word. A tip I try to do is look a few words in advance of what I am reading; less likely to miss a word.
Script 2: I noticed added words in the third sentence. In the last sentence, your volume/tone sounded like it lowered. Maybe it was on my end. Overall, this read had a nice enthusiasm to it. I actually liked this script read the best.
I hope this was helpful!
Kathy
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December 27, 2020 at 12:53 am #60409
Robert Broussard
ParticipantNo it was probably me getting lower at the end. I will have to look ahead and concentrate more doing these. I do miss a word here and there. Thanks.
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December 25, 2020 at 7:38 pm #60385
mkell755
ParticipantHello all and Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays all!
Here is a read for your review (recorded on my phone) for any and all feedback. I just went to the eye doctor, so my eye prescription was on my mind. I’m trying for an authentic, believable vibe, let me know if you think it sounds appropriate in tone and delivery for the topic. Thank you!
Mary
Essilor
There’s nothing as unique as our eyes. Which is why Essilor pioneers ways to make lenses as unique as you. Varilux for super-sharp vision, Essential Blue for protection, and Crizal for freedom from glare. Three cutting-edge solutions in a single unique lens. So, whatever your needs, insist on Essilor. Visit your local Essilor experts and find the perfect lens for you. See more, do more, Essilor.Attachments:
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December 27, 2020 at 12:08 am #60407
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Mary!
Nice job on varying your pitch, especially with the lists (the three cutting edge solutions). The pacing was good, too, however, there was a pause after “Varilux” not needed. Keep it up!
Kathy
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December 27, 2020 at 9:27 pm #60432
mkell755
ParticipantHi Kathy, thanks for the feedback, and good to hear that the variation in pitch is appropriate. Agreed on the pause after Varilux, I think I was just trying to emphasize it a little, but it did not also need the slight pause after. Thanks!
Mary
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December 26, 2020 at 9:51 pm #60396
Robert Broussard
ParticipantGood read Mary, good pace, tone!!! Hope you had a good christmas.
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December 25, 2020 at 10:02 am #60374
Official81
ParticipantMerry Xmas! I recorded 2 more practice scripts for your appreciated feedback. I finally just got into my studio and rerecorded these takes. Thank You Mary and Kathy for trying to help me with converting my files. First Movie Script Lord of the Rings Opening Monologue, which I gave 2 different takes. Please let me know which one sounds best. Second Advil commercial. Script wording follows:
It began with the forging of the Great Rings. Three were given to the Elves, immortal, wisest and fairest of all beings. Seven to the Dwarf-Lords, great miners and craftsmen of the mountain halls. And nine, nine rings were gifted to the race of Men, who above all else desire power. For within these rings was bound the strength and the will to govern each race. But they were all of them deceived, for another ring was made. Deep in the land of Mordor, in the Fires of Mount Doom, the Dark Lord Sauron forged a master ring in secret, and into this ring he poured his cruelty, his malice and his will to dominate all life. One ring to rule them all.
Muscle aches? Nothing is proven more effective or longer lasting than Advil. For long-lasting relief of muscle aches, count on Advil. In a recent clinical study, Advil was found to work better than Tylenol in relieving the pain of sore muscles the day after exercise. No wonder doctors recommend Advil for muscle aches more than any other non-prescription brand. ADVIL — Advanced medicine for pain.
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January 7, 2021 at 4:12 pm #60962
rogue1
ParticipantHi Official81, You have a very sumptuous quality to your voice which works very well with the opening monologue of “Lord of the Rings” (and I agree with others that the first take is the more immersive, pleasing read of the two you posted—I definitely stopped reading along and just shut my eyes to listen). As far as the Advil spot, again, great quality to your read, just perhaps slow down a bit and try being a bit more conversational in how you convey the the script. It feels a bit like a run-on sentence when you should give yourself—and the listener—the luxury of being totally engaged in hearing all you have to say about the product. Great work!
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December 26, 2020 at 11:51 pm #60406
kfvoice
ParticipantI agree, the first Lord of the Rings script was the better of the two — it had more of a character narration sound to it vs. the second read.
The Advil script had a nice pace. However, be mindful of sounding breathy between sentences.
I hope this was helpful.
Kathy
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December 29, 2020 at 3:02 am #60493
Official81
ParticipantThank you so much Kathy! This does help a lot! I have it noted as one of my first questions in my first coaching session tomorrow! I greatly appreciate your help.
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December 26, 2020 at 9:56 pm #60397
Robert Broussard
ParticipantOfficial81, I agree with Mary that the 1st version was better. You put a lot of character into the story telling and did well doing it.
The advil read was good as well.
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December 29, 2020 at 3:04 am #60494
Official81
ParticipantThank you Robert!
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December 25, 2020 at 7:02 pm #60383
mkell755
ParticipantHi Official81, glad you were able to upload! I like script one read the best – it sounds really dark and mysterious, and very interesting to listen to; really draws you in with lots of variation in tone and stretched out words every once in awhile. The second read was ok, but seemed more like it was being read vs. telling the story.
Advil was a good read as well but now I want to hear more mysterious story-telling monologues! Good job with all of these!
Mary
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December 29, 2020 at 8:17 am #60499
Official81
ParticipantThank you Mary! I will definitely start to practice more of those mysterious scripts. I really enjoyed that. I’ve always loved to read, and this script really really comes alive.
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December 25, 2020 at 1:09 am #60369
Robert Broussard
ParticipantChristmas Greeting
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December 26, 2020 at 11:34 pm #60405
kfvoice
ParticipantThank you, too, Robert! I hope you had a Very Merry Christmas!
Kathy
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December 25, 2020 at 6:44 pm #60382
mkell755
ParticipantHi Robert, thanks for the thanks! I appreciate your feedback too, I think we all do. Thank you and Have a very Merry Christmas yourself! 🙂
Mary
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December 25, 2020 at 9:50 am #60373
Official81
ParticipantThank you Robert I wish you and your family a Merry Christmas and Happy New Year as well! This greeting sounded excellent! Warm, rich, and authentic.
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December 24, 2020 at 2:53 pm #60358
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantHello there. Here is a corporate explainer narration. Any feedback is appreciated! I need to try and be less “bubbly” and “perky” for corporate so I’m trying to sound more straightforward. Feedback is appreciated. Merry Christmas everyone!!! WE MADE IT – 2021 here we come.
Business Management Software – Corporate Explainer
Your online business is growing. That’s a good thing. But as orders increase, so do the bottlenecks in business processes.
To keep growing, you need to do a better job at managing inventory, processing & fulfilling orders and keeping your customers happy – all while expanding into new channels. That’s where business management software comes into play.Attachments:
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December 26, 2020 at 11:31 pm #60404
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Katelyn,
I didn’t think you were perky or bubbly; had enough energy to the read to sound informative. Nice pacing, as well. Good read!
Kathy
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December 28, 2020 at 9:47 pm #60479
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantThanks Kathy!
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December 25, 2020 at 7:05 pm #60384
mkell755
ParticipantHi Katelyn! Good read! Very direct but friendly and very clear enunciation, I think this is a good genre for you! It did not sound bubbly or perky to me, just upbeat, straightforward and concerned with educating the listener. Good job!
Mary
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December 28, 2020 at 9:46 pm #60478
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantThank you! 🙂
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December 24, 2020 at 12:37 pm #60350
RichSummersVO
ParticipantMerry Christmas fellow VO actors! Thought I’d share a read I just did for a Pendelton Whiskey demo. Feedback always welcome!
Hope you all have an amazing holiday and are looking forward to a safe and healthy new year!
~RichPENDLETON WHISKEY
The Pendleton Whiskey portfolio, born in the Great Northwest, is a collection of premium spirits whose popularity has grown far beyond its territory of origin. When your history is tied to the Pendleton Round-Up, one of the oldest and most prestigious rodeos in the West, there’s a lot to live up to. Authenticity and quality are more than words on a label. Today, Pendleton Whiskey carries with its name a call to live life to its fullest – savoring adventure, camaraderie and the moments we keep as memories. It’s a distinction we’re proud to have earned.-
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December 24, 2020 at 2:50 pm #60357
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantHey Rich, this must be a stage name because it matches your tone precisely! Rich and thick like molasses. Very nice. Your voice is a dead ringer for this type of product and read. Just lovely!
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December 24, 2020 at 12:48 pm #60355
mkell755
ParticipantHi Rich, Very nice! I really like your deep, richly textured voice, sounds really good for a whiskey commercial. Great clarity and pacing throughout. Very good!
Mary
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December 24, 2020 at 12:50 am #60322
Official81
ParticipantMerry Xmas Eve All! I recorded 2 more practice scripts for your appreciated feedback. This time recordings were done on my phone outside of my studio. First Movie Script Lord of the Rings Opening Monologue, which I gave 2 different takes. Please let me know which one sound best. Second Advil commercial. Script wording follows:
It began with the forging of the Great Rings. Three were given to the Elves, immortal, wisest and fairest of all beings. Seven to the Dwarf-Lords, great miners and craftsmen of the mountain halls. And nine, nine rings were gifted to the race of Men, who above all else desire power. For within these rings was bound the strength and the will to govern each race. But they were all of them deceived, for another ring was made. Deep in the land of Mordor, in the Fires of Mount Doom, the Dark Lord Sauron forged a master ring in secret, and into this ring he poured his cruelty, his malice and his will to dominate all life. One ring to rule them all.
Muscle aches? Nothing is proven more effective or longer lasting than Advil. For long-lasting relief of muscle aches, count on Advil. In a recent clinical study, Advil was found to work better than Tylenol in relieving the pain of sore muscles the day after exercise. No wonder doctors recommend Advil for muscle aches more than any other non-prescription brand. ADVIL — Advanced medicine for pain.
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December 24, 2020 at 1:00 am #60341
Official81
ParticipantI tried to upload recordings from my phone through the Voice Record app on iPhone and none of them came through properly. If anyone has any idea how I can upload using these methods please help. Otherwise I will get this figured out. I shall return!
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December 24, 2020 at 12:11 pm #60347
mkell755
ParticipantHi Official81! I use the Voice Recorder app on my Android. I too email the file to myself (it saves it as a .mp3), save to my computer then upload to the website. Hope this helps!
Mary
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December 24, 2020 at 1:20 am #60342
kfvoice
ParticipantI used this app on my iPhone when I started out. What I did was I emailed the file (mp3) to myself, saved the file to my computer, and then uploaded to the website. It’s not a direct upload, I know, but I did not have any issues.
I hope this helps!
Kathy
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December 24, 2020 at 3:08 pm #60361
Official81
ParticipantThank you so much! How do I email it as an MP3 file?
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December 25, 2020 at 4:27 am #60371
kfvoice
ParticipantTo tag on to what Mary mentioned… this is what steps I took for the iPhone app:
1) Click on the voice recording from your app; you will see a bunch of options. (I’ve attached an image if this helps.)
2) When you choose “send as email”, the next prompt will be if you want to send the file as an “audio” or “movie”. Send as audio.
3) Last step… pick “email attachment”, and enter your address.
I hope this helps!
Kathy
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December 24, 2020 at 3:36 pm #60362
mkell755
ParticipantHey there! Mine has a “share” icon in the app for individually recorded items, so I email it from there to myself.
Mary
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December 24, 2020 at 12:31 am #60320
kfvoice
ParticipantHi all! I am giving it another go, and trying another wildlife read — this time with Flying Squirrels.
Appreciate any feedback, but, I am specifically looking for feedback on pacing and pitch. More emphasis on northern flying squirrels is probably needed?
I am aware that “but”, “distances”, and “this” didn’t come out clearly. (Any others?)This is my last audio upload for the week, as I will be taking a little break, but I will be back later in the weekend to give feedback.
To those who celebrate, I hope you have a Merry Christmas!
Kathy
Flying Squirrel
(Nature on PBS: How the Flying Squirrel Soars)
A nocturnal member of the squirrel family searches for fungi, its favorite food. But fungi are spread in random patches throughout the forest and the squirrel has to cover large distances to find them. So this squirrel has evolved a special talent – it flies! The northern flying squirrel is just six inches long and weighs the same as a typical smartphone. Yet it can leap almost 150 feet between trees.
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December 24, 2020 at 12:17 pm #60348
mkell755
ParticipantHi Kathy – great read! This is one of the best reads I have heard from you! It flowed very well, was relaxed and also conversational, which made it fun to listen to and be educated by. And now I am picturing a smartphone-sized squirrel flying through the air 🙂 I liked the pacing and pitch throughout, very good!
Merry Christmas, we’ll see you when you get back.
Mary
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December 24, 2020 at 11:06 am #60343
RYoung
ParticipantNice work on this documentary style read! I think you were able to hold at least in my opinion the listeners attention well and additionally I could hear your smile in this as well, thanks for sharing this and good luck!
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December 23, 2020 at 10:44 pm #60294
mkell755
ParticipantHi everyone! Trying something different for me. 2 scripts, more in the character’s voice (and on my phone). Let me know what you think – believable for one or both? Thanks!
Mary
Million Dollar Baby – Maggie Fitzgerald
I’m 32, Mr. Dunn. And I’m here celebratin’ the fact that I spent another year scrapin’ dishes and waitressin’ which is what I’ve been doin’ since 13. And according to you, I’ll be 37 ‘fore I can even throw a decent punch, which I have to admit, after workin’ on this speed bag for a month and getting nowhere, may be the G*d’s simple truth. Other truth is, my brother’s in prison, my sister cheats on welfare by pretendin’ one of her babies is still alive, my daddy’s dead, and my momma weighs 312 pounds. If I was thinkin’ straight, I’d go back home, find a used trailer, buy a deep fryer and some Oreos.
Problem is, this is the only thing I ever felt good doin’. If I’m too old for this, then I got nothin’. That enough truth to suit you?Terminator 2 – Judgment Day – Sarah Connor
Watching John with the machine, it was suddenly so clear. The Terminator would never stop, it would never leave him. And it would never hurt him, never shout at him or get d***k and hit him or say it was too busy to spend time with him. It would always be there and it would die to protect him. Of all the would-be fathers who came and went over the years, this thing, this machine was the only one who measured up. In an insane world, it was the sanest choice.Attachments:
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December 23, 2020 at 11:53 pm #60319
kfvoice
ParticipantVery well done, Mary!
I know of, but have never seen either of these movies. With that said, the delivery of the scripts flowed well.
Script 1: Nice pace; varying your pitch, and really getting into character! (I do know Hilary Swank was awesome in this movie — Hello, Oscar!)
Script 2: Very relaxed, natural, tone. (I am least familiar with the Terminator movies, so I am not sure of the character history.)I hope this feedback is helpful!
Kathy
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December 24, 2020 at 11:57 am #60344
mkell755
ParticipantThanks for the feedback Kathy! It’s interesting to take on the role of another character for me, having not come from the acting world. It is fun however! I have not seen Million Dollar Baby (mainly because I heard it has a sad ending), but I heard that Hillary did a fantastic job. The Terminator movies are so fun, if you like sci-fi and the perennial good vs. evil battle. I highly recommend! I always wanted to be Sarah Connor growing up – she’s a super tough bad*** 🙂
Mary
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December 23, 2020 at 11:40 pm #60317
RYoung
ParticipantMillion Dollar Baby, great job on this, now your someone else and it sounds more relaxing and realistic!
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December 23, 2020 at 11:38 pm #60316
SLJones
ParticipantHi Mary! Ah, Million Dollar Baby- great film and great take on this script. Love the accent, and the fact that you make it very clear that the “g’s” at the ends of words are to be dropped deliberately. One super tiny thing- I think there should be a slight pause between “baby’s still alive, and my daddy’s dead.” Right now, those sound like one thing instead of two. Great job! Is this your natural accent, or one of the ones you can affect?
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December 24, 2020 at 12:06 pm #60346
mkell755
ParticipantHi SLJones, thanks for the feedback! I agree too that there should be a slight pause after “baby’s still alive”, good catch. This is not my natural accent, but one I’ve heard and can somewhat mimic, at least for a script like this that has some emotion involved. Thanks again!
Mary
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