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Merry Xmas Eve All! I recorded 2 more practice scripts for your appreciated feedback. This time recordings were done on my phone outside of my studio. First Movie Script Lord of the Rings Opening Monologue, which I gave 2 different takes. Please let me know which one sound best. Second Advil commercial. Script wording follows:
It began with the forging of the Great Rings. Three were given to the Elves, immortal, wisest and fairest of all beings. Seven to the Dwarf-Lords, great miners and craftsmen of the mountain halls. And nine, nine rings were gifted to the race of Men, who above all else desire power. For within these rings was bound the strength and the will to govern each race. But they were all of them deceived, for another ring was made. Deep in the land of Mordor, in the Fires of Mount Doom, the Dark Lord Sauron forged a master ring in secret, and into this ring he poured his cruelty, his malice and his will to dominate all life. One ring to rule them all.
Muscle aches? Nothing is proven more effective or longer lasting than Advil. For long-lasting relief of muscle aches, count on Advil. In a recent clinical study, Advil was found to work better than Tylenol in relieving the pain of sore muscles the day after exercise. No wonder doctors recommend Advil for muscle aches more than any other non-prescription brand. ADVIL — Advanced medicine for pain.
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I tried to upload recordings from my phone through the Voice Record app on iPhone and none of them came through properly. If anyone has any idea how I can upload using these methods please help. Otherwise I will get this figured out. I shall return!
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I used this app on my iPhone when I started out. What I did was I emailed the file (mp3) to myself, saved the file to my computer, and then uploaded to the website. It’s not a direct upload, I know, but I did not have any issues.
I hope this helps!
Kathy
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To tag on to what Mary mentioned… this is what steps I took for the iPhone app:
1) Click on the voice recording from your app; you will see a bunch of options. (I’ve attached an image if this helps.)
2) When you choose “send as email”, the next prompt will be if you want to send the file as an “audio” or “movie”. Send as audio.
3) Last step… pick “email attachment”, and enter your address.
I hope this helps!
Kathy
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Hi all! I am giving it another go, and trying another wildlife read — this time with Flying Squirrels.
Appreciate any feedback, but, I am specifically looking for feedback on pacing and pitch. More emphasis on northern flying squirrels is probably needed?
I am aware that “but”, “distances”, and “this” didn’t come out clearly. (Any others?)This is my last audio upload for the week, as I will be taking a little break, but I will be back later in the weekend to give feedback.
To those who celebrate, I hope you have a Merry Christmas!
Kathy
Flying Squirrel
(Nature on PBS: How the Flying Squirrel Soars)
A nocturnal member of the squirrel family searches for fungi, its favorite food. But fungi are spread in random patches throughout the forest and the squirrel has to cover large distances to find them. So this squirrel has evolved a special talent – it flies! The northern flying squirrel is just six inches long and weighs the same as a typical smartphone. Yet it can leap almost 150 feet between trees.
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Hi Kathy – great read! This is one of the best reads I have heard from you! It flowed very well, was relaxed and also conversational, which made it fun to listen to and be educated by. And now I am picturing a smartphone-sized squirrel flying through the air 🙂 I liked the pacing and pitch throughout, very good!
Merry Christmas, we’ll see you when you get back.
Mary
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Nice work on this documentary style read! I think you were able to hold at least in my opinion the listeners attention well and additionally I could hear your smile in this as well, thanks for sharing this and good luck!
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Hi everyone! Trying something different for me. 2 scripts, more in the character’s voice (and on my phone). Let me know what you think – believable for one or both? Thanks!
Mary
Million Dollar Baby – Maggie Fitzgerald
I’m 32, Mr. Dunn. And I’m here celebratin’ the fact that I spent another year scrapin’ dishes and waitressin’ which is what I’ve been doin’ since 13. And according to you, I’ll be 37 ‘fore I can even throw a decent punch, which I have to admit, after workin’ on this speed bag for a month and getting nowhere, may be the G*d’s simple truth. Other truth is, my brother’s in prison, my sister cheats on welfare by pretendin’ one of her babies is still alive, my daddy’s dead, and my momma weighs 312 pounds. If I was thinkin’ straight, I’d go back home, find a used trailer, buy a deep fryer and some Oreos.
Problem is, this is the only thing I ever felt good doin’. If I’m too old for this, then I got nothin’. That enough truth to suit you?Terminator 2 – Judgment Day – Sarah Connor
Watching John with the machine, it was suddenly so clear. The Terminator would never stop, it would never leave him. And it would never hurt him, never shout at him or get d***k and hit him or say it was too busy to spend time with him. It would always be there and it would die to protect him. Of all the would-be fathers who came and went over the years, this thing, this machine was the only one who measured up. In an insane world, it was the sanest choice.-
Very well done, Mary!
I know of, but have never seen either of these movies. With that said, the delivery of the scripts flowed well.
Script 1: Nice pace; varying your pitch, and really getting into character! (I do know Hilary Swank was awesome in this movie — Hello, Oscar!)
Script 2: Very relaxed, natural, tone. (I am least familiar with the Terminator movies, so I am not sure of the character history.)I hope this feedback is helpful!
Kathy
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Thanks for the feedback Kathy! It’s interesting to take on the role of another character for me, having not come from the acting world. It is fun however! I have not seen Million Dollar Baby (mainly because I heard it has a sad ending), but I heard that Hillary did a fantastic job. The Terminator movies are so fun, if you like sci-fi and the perennial good vs. evil battle. I highly recommend! I always wanted to be Sarah Connor growing up – she’s a super tough bad*** 🙂
Mary
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Million Dollar Baby, great job on this, now your someone else and it sounds more relaxing and realistic!
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Hi Mary! Ah, Million Dollar Baby- great film and great take on this script. Love the accent, and the fact that you make it very clear that the “g’s” at the ends of words are to be dropped deliberately. One super tiny thing- I think there should be a slight pause between “baby’s still alive, and my daddy’s dead.” Right now, those sound like one thing instead of two. Great job! Is this your natural accent, or one of the ones you can affect?
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Hi there! Here is a script I wrote for my upcoming demo narration coaching. It is a corporate training video. I chose old navy because I think my voice fits their “fun, natural, all ages” brand. Any feedback is appreciated!
Employee Training eLearning
Congratulations on your new career at Old Navy. This employee training video is designed to help our new employees have a better understanding of our company policies, best practices, and the benefits we offer. Click on the green arrow to access the first module.-
Hi Katelyn! Great read! Very good upbeat energy, flow and clarity for the script. I agree that your voice fits the energy of Old Navy very well – good job!
Mary
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Your honest opinion is very much needed for my growth 🙂
“The Truth About Fairies”
Do you believe in fairies? They are not as friendly as once thought. First they bite. It feels like a little pick; a sting on the skin. When it begins to glow, that is what you have to be careful of. Then you’re in for quite a rush, my dear boy. You see, their glittery skin, their sprinkling wings, and glowing smiles – it’s all just a trick; and they love to play tricks, especially on the ones that are fond of them. You think we are evil?… we are devilish, these little girls (if you choose to call them that) are much more darker than we.
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-A bit of editing trouble please bear with me (I’m learning Audacity) …All feedback is welcomed & embraced, so please let me know what you think 🙂
“A Haunting Tale”
In the darkest shadows and in the most ordinary places.
These are the true stories of the innocent and the unimaginable.
Between the world we see and the things we fear.
There are doors.
When they are opened.
Nightmares become reality.-
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“A Haunting Tale”
In this world, there is real evil.
In the darkest shadows and in the most ordinary places.
These are the true stories of the innocent and the unimaginable.
Between the world we see and the things we fear.
There are doors.
When they are opened.
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Hello beautiful people,
This is a monologue from a TV show, which highlights a woman’s difficulty accepting that her allure in the eyes of men might be fading. I thought that a slightly breathy read might be most appropriate. I recorded it in my home studio. I know there are a few mouth clicks (I’ll be sure to eat a Gala apple and drink plenty of water in advance next time). But what are your thoughts aside from that? Much appreciated!
Here is the text:
It’s a dance. A dance no one had to teach me, a dance I’d known since I first saw my reflection in my father’s eyes. My partners have been princes and starving artists, Greek gods and clowns, and every one of them certain they led. But it’s always my dance. I make the first move, which is no move at all. I always just understand that they will eventually find themselves in front of me, primitive, beautiful animals and their bodies responding to the inevitability of it all. It’s my dance, and I have performed it with finesse and abandon with countless partners. Only the faces change, and all this time, I never suspected that the night would come, when the dance would end.
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Great work on this “sultry” delivery! I would just tighten it up a bit and leave out the long pauses, I think it would still sound great.
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Hi SL Jones, nice read! I agree with the tone of how you read it, the character sounds resigned to the reality of how things are happening to her. Good work!
Mary
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Hiya Mary! Thank you so much for taking the time to listen and comment. I appreciate it so very much. Let me go check out some of your recordings! All the best!
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I really like the breathy take here it suits the script and gives it an edge that makes you want to listen to the end. Very nice!
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Hi Forum!
Heading toward making my narration demo, and this is one of the possible contenders. Not recorded in my booth, so don’t really need any comments on editing or recording quality, just on vocal interpretation. Thanks!Respect and good communication go hand in hand.
Employees who feel comfortable talking with their colleagues and supervisors are empowered to address safety issues and other challenges.
In workplaces where there is a lack of respect and openness, employees may adopt a mindset of “it’s not my problem” when issues arise.-
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Really nice read! I like this for your voice, I think it fits nicely. You have an authoritative tone. Is this a corporate onboarding script? There were a few times I thought you could maybe slow down a tad, but maybe my brain is just tired from my long day lol. Here “safety issues and other challenges.” and “respect and openness,” could just be me. nice work!!
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Hello!
First, congrats on moving towards your narration demo! I think this is great- good cadence, clear, tone is consistent throughout. Best of luck to you!
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Hi Community! If you have some time during this busy holiday season, I’d love to get some feedback on my reading of these two commercials (especially feedback on my tempo and hitting key words). Thank you! (Scripts are below for your reference).
JC Penney 6 script
Your brain has two sides. The right side: creative, buys things, has fun. The left side: organized, practical, saves money. Now JC Penney makes both sides happy. It’s the buy more, save more sale. It’s simple, the more you buy, the more you save. 20 to 30%. So use your head. Buy more. Save more. Only at JC Penney.Dove Sensitive Skin script
There are products made for sensitive skin. But there’s nothing quite like sensitive skin dove – It’s the mildest, perfume free sensitive skin bar ever made. No wonder Doves the one that dermatologists recommend most to keep your skin looking healthy and feeling soft. Dove. For the beauty that’s already there.-
Loved your reads! Have you ever considered doing kid scripts? Your voice is extremely youthful I think you would do well in that genre! Your voice has a lot of versatility, keep up the great work!
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Hi Eelalannee! Good reads!
Script 1: JC Penney – good energy throughout. I realize this is for practice but I heard a couple of extra words inserted into the script. “The right side: (is) creative…” and “The left side: organized (and) practical,…” Also the “to” in between “20 to 30% got smushed / shortened, it sounded like “20 t 30%”, (just the “t” sound but not the word). I tend to do that too, so I notice it when I hear it. Also, “The left side” raised in pitch, as if it were a question, not a period. These are small things 🙂Script 2: Dove – great flow, pacing and clarity. I like the lead in “I mean” at the beginning of the read, helped it sound more natural and conversational. Great energy and enthusiasm throughout. Good job, keep it up!
Mary
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Woodies
I hate Woodies! I’m the only dog on the block that doesn’t get any love, and I tell ya, I’m fed up! It’s just Woodies, Woodies, Woodies … every doggone day. She never has time for me anymore. When I want to romp in the park — “Sorry, darling. Mummy has to go to Woodies to buy a new dress.” When I want to play fetch the stick — “Not now, Canine Cutey, WOODIES is having a sale on shoes.” I thought it was supposed to be a dog’s world out there. If only I were a cat! (Meow SFX)
Stella Artois Beer
Of course Stella Artois tastes better than other beers. We’ve had over 600 years to get the recipe right. Since 1366 Stella Artois has been painstakingly brewed in a time honored tradition, using the choicest ingredients, which is why our customers have kept coming back for more even after 600 years. Stella Artois. Perfection has it’s price.
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Hi Bil-Bo! Great reads! I really liked the Woodies read, I’m impressed with your dog character voice! So gravelly and believable, and also the female voice worked well. I was really smiling through the whole thing. The production was great too, very professional and sounds like it is already out there.
Nice variation in the Stella Artois read, these 2 scripts sound like they could easily have been from 2 different people. Very smooth and relaxed and believable, like you are telling a friend about it. Well done!
Mary
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