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Hi all! I am giving it another go, and trying another wildlife read — this time with Flying Squirrels.
Appreciate any feedback, but, I am specifically looking for feedback on pacing and pitch. More emphasis on northern flying squirrels is probably needed?
I am aware that “but”, “distances”, and “this” didn’t come out clearly. (Any others?)This is my last audio upload for the week, as I will be taking a little break, but I will be back later in the weekend to give feedback.
To those who celebrate, I hope you have a Merry Christmas!
Kathy
Flying Squirrel
(Nature on PBS: How the Flying Squirrel Soars)
A nocturnal member of the squirrel family searches for fungi, its favorite food. But fungi are spread in random patches throughout the forest and the squirrel has to cover large distances to find them. So this squirrel has evolved a special talent – it flies! The northern flying squirrel is just six inches long and weighs the same as a typical smartphone. Yet it can leap almost 150 feet between trees.
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Hi Kathy – great read! This is one of the best reads I have heard from you! It flowed very well, was relaxed and also conversational, which made it fun to listen to and be educated by. And now I am picturing a smartphone-sized squirrel flying through the air 🙂 I liked the pacing and pitch throughout, very good!
Merry Christmas, we’ll see you when you get back.
Mary
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Nice work on this documentary style read! I think you were able to hold at least in my opinion the listeners attention well and additionally I could hear your smile in this as well, thanks for sharing this and good luck!
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Hi everyone! Trying something different for me. 2 scripts, more in the character’s voice (and on my phone). Let me know what you think – believable for one or both? Thanks!
Mary
Million Dollar Baby – Maggie Fitzgerald
I’m 32, Mr. Dunn. And I’m here celebratin’ the fact that I spent another year scrapin’ dishes and waitressin’ which is what I’ve been doin’ since 13. And according to you, I’ll be 37 ‘fore I can even throw a decent punch, which I have to admit, after workin’ on this speed bag for a month and getting nowhere, may be the G*d’s simple truth. Other truth is, my brother’s in prison, my sister cheats on welfare by pretendin’ one of her babies is still alive, my daddy’s dead, and my momma weighs 312 pounds. If I was thinkin’ straight, I’d go back home, find a used trailer, buy a deep fryer and some Oreos.
Problem is, this is the only thing I ever felt good doin’. If I’m too old for this, then I got nothin’. That enough truth to suit you?Terminator 2 – Judgment Day – Sarah Connor
Watching John with the machine, it was suddenly so clear. The Terminator would never stop, it would never leave him. And it would never hurt him, never shout at him or get d***k and hit him or say it was too busy to spend time with him. It would always be there and it would die to protect him. Of all the would-be fathers who came and went over the years, this thing, this machine was the only one who measured up. In an insane world, it was the sanest choice.-
Very well done, Mary!
I know of, but have never seen either of these movies. With that said, the delivery of the scripts flowed well.
Script 1: Nice pace; varying your pitch, and really getting into character! (I do know Hilary Swank was awesome in this movie — Hello, Oscar!)
Script 2: Very relaxed, natural, tone. (I am least familiar with the Terminator movies, so I am not sure of the character history.)I hope this feedback is helpful!
Kathy
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Thanks for the feedback Kathy! It’s interesting to take on the role of another character for me, having not come from the acting world. It is fun however! I have not seen Million Dollar Baby (mainly because I heard it has a sad ending), but I heard that Hillary did a fantastic job. The Terminator movies are so fun, if you like sci-fi and the perennial good vs. evil battle. I highly recommend! I always wanted to be Sarah Connor growing up – she’s a super tough bad*** 🙂
Mary
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Million Dollar Baby, great job on this, now your someone else and it sounds more relaxing and realistic!
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Hi Mary! Ah, Million Dollar Baby- great film and great take on this script. Love the accent, and the fact that you make it very clear that the “g’s” at the ends of words are to be dropped deliberately. One super tiny thing- I think there should be a slight pause between “baby’s still alive, and my daddy’s dead.” Right now, those sound like one thing instead of two. Great job! Is this your natural accent, or one of the ones you can affect?
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Hi there! Here is a script I wrote for my upcoming demo narration coaching. It is a corporate training video. I chose old navy because I think my voice fits their “fun, natural, all ages” brand. Any feedback is appreciated!
Employee Training eLearning
Congratulations on your new career at Old Navy. This employee training video is designed to help our new employees have a better understanding of our company policies, best practices, and the benefits we offer. Click on the green arrow to access the first module.-
Hi Katelyn! Great read! Very good upbeat energy, flow and clarity for the script. I agree that your voice fits the energy of Old Navy very well – good job!
Mary
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Your honest opinion is very much needed for my growth 🙂
“The Truth About Fairies”
Do you believe in fairies? They are not as friendly as once thought. First they bite. It feels like a little pick; a sting on the skin. When it begins to glow, that is what you have to be careful of. Then you’re in for quite a rush, my dear boy. You see, their glittery skin, their sprinkling wings, and glowing smiles – it’s all just a trick; and they love to play tricks, especially on the ones that are fond of them. You think we are evil?… we are devilish, these little girls (if you choose to call them that) are much more darker than we.
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-A bit of editing trouble please bear with me (I’m learning Audacity) …All feedback is welcomed & embraced, so please let me know what you think 🙂
“A Haunting Tale”
In the darkest shadows and in the most ordinary places.
These are the true stories of the innocent and the unimaginable.
Between the world we see and the things we fear.
There are doors.
When they are opened.
Nightmares become reality.-
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“A Haunting Tale”
In this world, there is real evil.
In the darkest shadows and in the most ordinary places.
These are the true stories of the innocent and the unimaginable.
Between the world we see and the things we fear.
There are doors.
When they are opened.
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Hello beautiful people,
This is a monologue from a TV show, which highlights a woman’s difficulty accepting that her allure in the eyes of men might be fading. I thought that a slightly breathy read might be most appropriate. I recorded it in my home studio. I know there are a few mouth clicks (I’ll be sure to eat a Gala apple and drink plenty of water in advance next time). But what are your thoughts aside from that? Much appreciated!
Here is the text:
It’s a dance. A dance no one had to teach me, a dance I’d known since I first saw my reflection in my father’s eyes. My partners have been princes and starving artists, Greek gods and clowns, and every one of them certain they led. But it’s always my dance. I make the first move, which is no move at all. I always just understand that they will eventually find themselves in front of me, primitive, beautiful animals and their bodies responding to the inevitability of it all. It’s my dance, and I have performed it with finesse and abandon with countless partners. Only the faces change, and all this time, I never suspected that the night would come, when the dance would end.
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Great work on this “sultry” delivery! I would just tighten it up a bit and leave out the long pauses, I think it would still sound great.
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Hi SL Jones, nice read! I agree with the tone of how you read it, the character sounds resigned to the reality of how things are happening to her. Good work!
Mary
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Hiya Mary! Thank you so much for taking the time to listen and comment. I appreciate it so very much. Let me go check out some of your recordings! All the best!
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I really like the breathy take here it suits the script and gives it an edge that makes you want to listen to the end. Very nice!
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Hi Forum!
Heading toward making my narration demo, and this is one of the possible contenders. Not recorded in my booth, so don’t really need any comments on editing or recording quality, just on vocal interpretation. Thanks!Respect and good communication go hand in hand.
Employees who feel comfortable talking with their colleagues and supervisors are empowered to address safety issues and other challenges.
In workplaces where there is a lack of respect and openness, employees may adopt a mindset of “it’s not my problem” when issues arise.-
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Really nice read! I like this for your voice, I think it fits nicely. You have an authoritative tone. Is this a corporate onboarding script? There were a few times I thought you could maybe slow down a tad, but maybe my brain is just tired from my long day lol. Here “safety issues and other challenges.” and “respect and openness,” could just be me. nice work!!
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Hello!
First, congrats on moving towards your narration demo! I think this is great- good cadence, clear, tone is consistent throughout. Best of luck to you!
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Hi Community! If you have some time during this busy holiday season, I’d love to get some feedback on my reading of these two commercials (especially feedback on my tempo and hitting key words). Thank you! (Scripts are below for your reference).
JC Penney 6 script
Your brain has two sides. The right side: creative, buys things, has fun. The left side: organized, practical, saves money. Now JC Penney makes both sides happy. It’s the buy more, save more sale. It’s simple, the more you buy, the more you save. 20 to 30%. So use your head. Buy more. Save more. Only at JC Penney.Dove Sensitive Skin script
There are products made for sensitive skin. But there’s nothing quite like sensitive skin dove – It’s the mildest, perfume free sensitive skin bar ever made. No wonder Doves the one that dermatologists recommend most to keep your skin looking healthy and feeling soft. Dove. For the beauty that’s already there.-
Loved your reads! Have you ever considered doing kid scripts? Your voice is extremely youthful I think you would do well in that genre! Your voice has a lot of versatility, keep up the great work!
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Hi Eelalannee! Good reads!
Script 1: JC Penney – good energy throughout. I realize this is for practice but I heard a couple of extra words inserted into the script. “The right side: (is) creative…” and “The left side: organized (and) practical,…” Also the “to” in between “20 to 30% got smushed / shortened, it sounded like “20 t 30%”, (just the “t” sound but not the word). I tend to do that too, so I notice it when I hear it. Also, “The left side” raised in pitch, as if it were a question, not a period. These are small things 🙂Script 2: Dove – great flow, pacing and clarity. I like the lead in “I mean” at the beginning of the read, helped it sound more natural and conversational. Great energy and enthusiasm throughout. Good job, keep it up!
Mary
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Woodies
I hate Woodies! I’m the only dog on the block that doesn’t get any love, and I tell ya, I’m fed up! It’s just Woodies, Woodies, Woodies … every doggone day. She never has time for me anymore. When I want to romp in the park — “Sorry, darling. Mummy has to go to Woodies to buy a new dress.” When I want to play fetch the stick — “Not now, Canine Cutey, WOODIES is having a sale on shoes.” I thought it was supposed to be a dog’s world out there. If only I were a cat! (Meow SFX)
Stella Artois Beer
Of course Stella Artois tastes better than other beers. We’ve had over 600 years to get the recipe right. Since 1366 Stella Artois has been painstakingly brewed in a time honored tradition, using the choicest ingredients, which is why our customers have kept coming back for more even after 600 years. Stella Artois. Perfection has it’s price.
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Hi Bil-Bo! Great reads! I really liked the Woodies read, I’m impressed with your dog character voice! So gravelly and believable, and also the female voice worked well. I was really smiling through the whole thing. The production was great too, very professional and sounds like it is already out there.
Nice variation in the Stella Artois read, these 2 scripts sound like they could easily have been from 2 different people. Very smooth and relaxed and believable, like you are telling a friend about it. Well done!
Mary
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Another documentary. I’m trying not to sound like I am reading, and while this script is a short introduction, it did not flow well again. Perhaps nature reads are not my forte. All feedback is appreciated!
Kathy
Red Fox
Possessing the legendary reputation for being cunning, the small and clever American Red Fox is respected throughout North America…
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I absolutely love your voice it’s alluring. You didn’t sound like your reading to me at all. I’m a newbie to the industry and could be wrong in suggesting this, but I have read avidly since I was 7. I would have probably raised my pitch on that second vowel in “possEssing”. I have no idea why I would do that (lol) other than the fact that I read aloud a lot and kind of have an eye for where to add pitch and/or inflecting certain vowels or words. Hope this helps and VETERANS please let me know if this is a good tip. Excellent Job Kathy!
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You know, the first thing I thought of was how separate each of your words were, especially at “small and clever.” Yes, pick and choose your emphasis words, but I think if you elide the ends of words into the beginning of the following word more often, it will improve the flow and continuity. Maybe think of the overall phrase as more like a line of music.
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Hi Kathy! Good read. I think since the this is a documentary on the red fox I would emphasize “American Red Fox” more than the adjectives “small and clever” so as to let the listener know the subject they are about to learn more about. This is minor and just my interpretation of things. Good read!
Mary
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