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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #60730
    JohnFinn
    Participant

    I selected this practice script to challenge several areas, especially words ending in “s” and words that begin with hard consonants. All feedback appreciated. Thanks!

    Lincoln: The Untold Stories
    On the night of April 14, 1865, an actor named John Wilkes Booth quietly worked his way through the halls of Ford’s Theater in Washington D.C. President Abraham Lincoln was enjoying one of the first moments of restful entertainment he had experienced since the Civil War began. Then, shortly after 10 P.M. Wilkes slipped into the unguarded presidential box.

    Firing one shot at close range, Wilkes killed the President. A nation went into mourning over the loss of the remarkable man who had reunited a divided country. In the days following Lincoln’s death, his former law partner, William Herndon grieved as he watched thousands of Americans pay their final respects to their fallen leader.

    For seventeen years, Herndon sat across from Lincoln in a series of law offices in Springfield, Illinois — one of which still exists across the street from the old state capitol. But as Herndon perceived the public’s desire to mythologize his former partner, he felt a need to search for the facts and truths of Lincoln’s life…not fictions…not fables.

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    • #60743
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi John — This is really good! Sounded ready to go as a narration for an A&E special to me. Keep it up!

      Kathy

    • #60738
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi John, very good! I liked the warmth and clarity in your voice for this read. It was well paced and enunciated and flowed well with nice variation in tone throughout. The words ending in “s” sounded nice and crisp next to the following words starting with hard consonants.

      After “William Herndon” even though there is no comma, I would think there should be a micropause and then a slight emphasis on “grieved” to help with the meaning of the sentence. This is a good genre for you! I liked it.

      Mary

      • #60850
        JohnFinn
        Participant

        Good catch, Mary- “Herndon” and “grieved” blend in my read. That emphasis should help a lot. Thanks!

  • #60717
    adebenedicts95
    Participant

    Narration Scripts. Feedback appreciated.

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    • #60739
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Ade! Good reads. For all of them, the pacing was a tiny bit fast, and I agree too that clear enunciation should be a focus – some of the words sounded smushed / shortened, or trailed off at the end. Good job!

      Mary

    • #60728
      JohnFinn
      Participant

      Good work on those, pacing and annunciation are areas to focus on there. Keep it up!

      John

  • #60700
    mkell755
    Participant

    Good evening all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Working on smiling more during this type of read. Let me know what you think. Thank you!

    Mary

    Healthy Choice
    Want a lunch that keeps cravings away? Dig into a protein-packed meal that powers your day. With 26 grams of protein and 8 grams of fiber. Healthy Choice power bowls. Find us in the freezer aisle.

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    • #60803
      Amitofu
      Participant

      good! but maybe needs a little more energy. A variation I would try is “[…] meal that powers YOUR day.”
      Even if you over-do it and sound like an infomercial salesman, understanding that inflection will give you a contrast of the middle-ground you want to find. Practicing doing things to the extreme tone (in both directions) helps organize the range of voices I DO want to use, even if I never use the extreme voice itself.

      Hope that makes sense, haha. Keep at it.

      • #60814
        mkell755
        Participant

        Hi Amitofu! I will work on my energy on this one. I like the emphasis on “…YOUR day”, I will try that. I will work on overdoing it too; it sounds like much more in my head when I’m saying it but like you say, it is easier to dial it back than ramp it up. Good tips. Thank you!

        Mary

    • #60725
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Good job on that one Mary!

      • #60735
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thank you Robert!

        Mary

    • #60715
      adebenedicts95
      Participant

      I think it sounds really good.

      • #60736
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Ade!

        Mary

    • #60713
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Good job, Mary!

      I could hear the smile, but it seemed to fad a bit with the last two sentences. Otherwise, it had a good pace, and pitch variations. Keep it up!

      Kathy

      • #60737
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Kathy! I’m glad you could hear the smile in that one. Not sure why it sounded faded out at the end, I may have moved around while recording. Thanks!

        Mary

        • #60742
          kfvoice
          Participant

          To clarify — it “sounded” like your smile faded towards the end, not necessarily the volume. Does that make sense?

          Kathy

        • #60759
          mkell755
          Participant

          Hi Kathy, yes, I hear that the smile faded slightly, thanks for the clarification. Thanks!

          Mary

  • #60685
    MatthewCarrAnderson
    Participant

    These are two Narration files I created based on assignment from my coach. Feedback is appreciated.

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    • #60716
      adebenedicts95
      Participant

      Your Voice fits the scripts really nicely. Your voice sounds informative but interesting. Thumbs Up.

    • #60712
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hello Matthew! Nice job! Your tone fits both scripts very well. Clear reads, and good pitch variation in each. Keep it up! — Kathy

    • #60704
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Matthew, good reads! Your voice sounds really good for narration – very warm and rich and easy to listen to. Good pacing and enunciation throughout, with good variation in tones, very good!

      Mary

  • #60680
    monibr16
    Participant

    Hello!

    This is a practing recording for my coaching session, using my phone. Focusing on my:
    -mico-pauses
    -workable lead-ins
    -point of view/audience clear

    And all other feed back welcome, thank you so much!

    Trendi.com
    Trendi.com. It’s the #1 shopping site for top name brands at up to 75% off. Great style, great value and everything ships free. Trendi.com. Everything you love, for less.

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    • #60711
      kfvoice
      Participant

      monibr16 — nice job on the lead in! With that said, to add on to what Mary mentioned, your lead in was lacking enthusiasm. Sound more excited with “Oh, Trendi.com”, as that is what you are promoting, so it needs to stand out — you did a great job with this at the end (where your smile was evident).

      Overall, good read! Keep it up!

      Kathy

    • #60705
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Monibr16! I liked the lead in and the micropauses and pacing of the read. It did not sound very excited for the topic however. “…up to 75% off” and “…everything ships free” were very somber in tone, almost downplayed as if they were not important things to mention. I did hear the smile in your voice towards the end, which was great. Keep it up!

      Mary

  • #60677
    Robert Broussard
    Participant

    He is a re-do of yesterday changing it some from feedback. Please let me know if is any better. The first file is yesterday and second is today. Thanks, I appreciate it.

    He has a 160 IQ, performs cardiac surgery for a living. And now, he can even operate his home entertainment system. Introducing Harvey Home Theater. It’s so sophisticated, it’s simple. Dimensions of sight and sound unheard of, until now. All at your fingertips. Now, if he could only operate the microwave. Home Theater from Harvey, not your ordinary electronics store. Call for the Harvey near you.

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    • #60708
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Much better, Robert! Nice improvement!

      To me, it sounded like there should of been more of a break between the first and second sentences. Were you further away from the mic in the second read, or was the volume lower?

      Good job!

      Kathy

      • #60723
        Robert Broussard
        Participant

        Yes further away a little to keep clipping down a little.

        Thanks

    • #60706
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Robert, very nice! I think the second read was definitely improved from the first – more variation in tone throughout, more relaxed and conversational, and also good emphasis on the “Now if he could only operate the microwave” with a chuckle, that was great, really helped it stand out. Great progress on this one!

      Mary

    • #60683
      JohnFinn
      Participant

      Wow- great work with the prior suggestions, one can hear the difference- it sounds great! There are a couple pauses that could use tightening with breathe control in recording or on the editing side. One example might be at the “…sight and sound unheard of,…” there’s a longer pause than maybe necessary between “sound” and “unheard of”. Again, great gains in your recordings from feedback!

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  • #60675
    SacScotty
    Participant

    Hello and Happy New Year! This is my first effort for 2021. Please provide feedback on all aspects of this endeavor.
    Script:
    Most of us know there are ways we can improve… to be healthier… happier… more effective…
    but knowing how to improve is a different matter. Without guidance, we often simply stay the same.
    Welcome to Weelearn – a platform where well-known experts and authors can help you get stronger in all areas of your life. Using the Weelearn video library, you can protect your body, strengthen your mind and spirit, become a more positive influence in your relationships, pursue success more confidently at work, and so much more.
    Our experts are taken from fields of hard science, like psychology, but also areas of broader wisdom, like spirituality. And with videos broken up into digestible parts, and supplemented by exercises and games, the next step to your best self is truly only a few clicks away.

    Don’t be stuck in life, love, work – or anything! Try Weelearn for yourself today.
    Weelearn – learning through watching.

    Thanks!
    Scott

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    • #60707
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Scott! Really good job. You have a nice warm tone and good pacing throughout. Nice authoritative tone and variation on key words, this is a good genre for you. Very good!

      Mary

      • #60779
        SacScotty
        Participant

        Hi Mary: The feedback is much appreciated!!

    • #60699
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi Scotty!

      Very good! I love the tone of your voice! Good pacing and enunciation. Be mindful of sounding breathy between sentences. Otherwise, good job! Keep it up!

      Kathy

      • #60780
        SacScotty
        Participant

        Hi Kathy: Thanks for the feedback. I am working on editing out the breath sound with the noise-gate on Audacity. Looks like that needs a little more attention. I really appreciate the comments!
        Scotty

  • #60671
    JohnFinn
    Participant

    Hello! This is a read for practice, I’m just starting in VO training. Any and all input is appreciated. Thank you for listening as well as your constructive feedback!

    Script:
    What Monet found in Venice, according to Mirbeau, was a chance to renew himself by tackling the preconceived images of Venice. He no longer hoped to conquer the light, only to “glide” on the surface of the canvas, in the same way that light glides over things or in the same way that “the most intelligent dancer translates a feeling.” Monet’s Venise was celebrated, almost unanimously, as one of the great feats in the history of painting. Up to that point, Monet had never been so unreservedly lauded. The irony is that soon after World War I these much praised Venetian images fell into oblivion, no longer eliciting the sort of praise they had obtained when first exhibited.

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    • #60709
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi John, really nice read! Welcome to the forum. I really like the warm soothing tone in your voice, it is really good for this genre. Pacing and enunciation were good.

      I agree with Kathy on checking the pronunciation of Monet. There is also an artist Manet, and since they are both artists, someone in the art world would notice this. (Your pronunciation sounded more like Manet to me). Really good work, I look forward to hearing more!

      Mary

      • #60727
        JohnFinn
        Participant

        Thank you! I sheepishly admit that I watched a British lecture about Monet’s Venice and thought I was onto a fancy pronunciation. Lesson learned…

        • #60740
          mkell755
          Participant

          No problem John! I had a little art history as part of my education and because of that it stood out, but the Brits have their own way of pronouncing things altogether, so I completely understand! 🙂

          Mary

    • #60698
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Very nice, John! Welcome!

      You have a great voice for biography/documentary; warm and welcoming. Your pacing, I thought, was good. Be mindful of pausing in your read where it’s not build into the script. The one thing that really stood out to me was the pronunciation of “Monet”. I have included a link for reference.

      https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/Monet

      I hope this helps!

      Kathy

      • #60726
        JohnFinn
        Participant

        Thanks! Could you note the words on either end of those pauses you noticed? I’d definitely like to get used to hearing those in my reads. Thanks again!

  • #60649
    mkell755
    Participant

    Hello all and Happy New Year! Here is a recording (recorded on my phone) for any and all feedback. Let me know what you think. Thanks!

    Mary

    WGU
    It’s here – the moment that will define you. So think of this moment as your moment – the one you’ve been waiting for. You were built for this and so were we. WGU – the online university where ambition never rests.

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    • #60669
      SacScotty
      Participant

      Hi Mary: Nice work here. The pace is just right. The word, “moment” sounds a little indistinct on the end syllable. Also, I would hit “WGU” a little harder. Maybe a longer pause before and after, and more emphasis on the letters. Otherwise, a solid read.

      • #60691
        mkell755
        Participant

        Hi SacScotty, thanks for the feedback! I will work on making moment stand out a little more, and also the letters WGU. Thank you!

        Mary

    • #60663
      monibr16
      Participant

      Great Job Mary! Good timing and very clear. But maybe connecting to the messege of the piece. It seems like an exciting moment. Maybe add a smile here and there and see how that feels? But over all nice and controlled!

      • #60692
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Monibr16! I’ll work on getting the smile feel on this moment, which I agree is meant to seem exciting. Appreciate it!

        Mary

    • #60659
      BrianWigginsVO
      Participant

      It feels “read”, like I don’t know who you are speaking to with this. Your diction is fine, and you have a nice tone to your voice, but I don’t hear you connecting with the words. I guess start with who you are and who you are speaking to…bring the acting into it more.

      Good job, look forward to hearing more!

      • #60693
        mkell755
        Participant

        Hi Brian, thanks for the feedback! I will work on connecting with the script a little more. I was picturing a colleague, an older student who is going back to finish their degree that I see potential in to be more and that I want to encourage, but it is hard for me to make it sound that way to others. Thank you!

        Mary

    • #60657
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      I think you did a awesome job on that one Mary.

      • #60694
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks Robert! Appreciate it 🙂

        Mary

  • #60638
    FCabral
    Participant

    Hello!
    I’m trying to figure out the pacing for medical narration, I appreciate any and all feedback!

    “Phytophotodermatitis is a nonimmunologic phototoxic cutaneous eruption resulting from contact with photosensitizing substances found in plants; furocoumarins (present in limes and other plants) are typically implicated and get activated following exposure to sunlight, especially 320-400 nanometer UVA rays.”

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    • #60651
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi FCabral – very nice read. Your voice is deep and calm, and very clear for this genre. The pacing seemed very appropriate to allow the listener to listen and understand. Good job!

      Mary

    • #60645
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi FCabral!

      The pacing sounded good to me. The read was clear, too, and your voice is suited for medical narration, with a warm vocal delivery.

      I hope this is helpful!

      Kathy

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