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Hello voice fellows!
I’ve got another commercial read I put together for you. Felt like trying something different again, besides narration, for practice.
I am prepared to be critiqued on the clarity and enunciation. (I said ‘hundred as opposed to one hundred — not that I was trying to imitate a Mainer, it just happened, and I decided to leave it in.)
Let me know what you think! Thanks again!
Kathy
Poland Spring Brand Natural Spring Water
A lot has changed since we got our start back in 1845, but we’re still sourced from our carefully selected springs.
Celebrating 175 years. Poland Spring Brand Natural Spring Water. From the Heart of Maine.
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Hi Kathy! thanks for posting! I would like to hear a read of this where you vary your pitch a little more. If this was a song it is kind of all one-note so you could try varying your pitch to emphasize the important words. 🙂
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Hi Kathy! Good read! I think the pacing and clarity were good, but the tone on “…from our carefully selected springs” sounded a little flat to me, maybe “carefully” could have been emphasized a little more to vary the pitch a little? I was thinking about what has not changed since 1845 for this company and it’s possibly the fact that they CAREFULLY select the springs, vs. use just any water, so that makes it more important to emphasize in my mind.
I did not mind the “a hundred” vs. “one hundred” on this one; it sounded appropriate for the script. Overall very good!
Mary
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Hello all! Here is a recording (recorded on my phone) for any and all feedback. We love Chewy.com! Let me know what you think. Thanks!
Mary
Chewy
At Chewy we know the only thing that changes when bringing home a new pet…is everything! And we’re here with everything to help you on that journey. We’ve got toys, treats and food, even prescriptions, delivered right to your door. Get great prices and fast free shipping at Chewy!-
Hey Mary, good read. But I have a suggestion for what my opinion is worth. When you say everything the first time up pitch every and low pitch thing. Then on the next everything do the opposite. Hope this may help. 😊
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Hi Mary!
Nice read! The pacing was good, but I wasn’t hearing the “smile” in your voice with the read. I believe this would show the enthusiasm and love you have for Chewy. I hope this is helpful.
Kathy
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Hi, friends! Here is an audition I submitted for a regional TV commercial. Pasted below is the script along with a link to the music accompanying the commercial. Please provide feedback on not only tone but also technique! I am still learning so I personally think it sounds good but to a more trained ear, you might hear something in my voice that I don’t. Thanks in advance for the feedback!
Music: https://www.premiumbeat.com/royalty-free-tracks/the-light-ahead
Script: The places we call “work” and “home” are starting to look more and more alike. When you could live and work anywhere, why not make it somewhere extraordinary, where the air is fresher, your paycheck goes further, and at up to 10 gigabits per second, the internet is some of the fastest in the country. Whether you need to be connected or get reconnected, Bristol is ready.
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Hi! I enjoy your commercial reads 🙂 You’ve got a great tone and you fit this copy nicely. My constructive bits would be that you can lift “work” and “home” out of the script a little more as these are important to differentiate between. When there is something with an air quote, it helps to actually physically do the air quotes while you read because it naturally helps you lift them up a little more. There were a couple of unnecessary pauses like between “why not make it somewhere (pause) extraordinary,” Just some things that stood out to me. Nice work!
Katelyn
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I really liked your delivery for the read. The tone and pacing were good, as well.
I agree with Mary about emphasizing the words “work” and “home” a little more. Overall, good job!
Kathy
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Hi Sabpierotti – very nice! I really like your nice warm tone and pacing for this script. Great enunciation and sounded very good. The only thing I can think of to critique is that “work” and “home” could possibly be emphasized a little more, to let the listener catch up as to one of the main reasons why they need the superfast internet connection. Minor point, just my interpretation. Very good!
Mary
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Thanks for this great feedback, Mary! I agree, “work” and “home” could be emphasized a bit more. Thank you! Happy New Year!
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Grip-Top Sock
Give me the gift of a grip-top sock,
A clip drape shipshape tip top sock.
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Not your spinslick slapstick slipshod stock,
But a plastic, elastic grip-top sock.
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None of your fantastic slack swap slop
From a slap dash flash cash haberdash shop.
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Not a knick knack knitlock knockneed knickerbocker sock
With a mock-shot blob-mottled trick-ticker top clock.
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Not a supersheet seersucker ruck sack sock,
Not a spot-speckled frog-freckled cheap sheik’s sock
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Off a hodge-podge moss-blotched scotch-botched block.
Nothing slipshod drip drop flip flop or glip glop
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Tip me to a tip top grip top sock.
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Hi everyone! Getting back into the swing of things after Christmas… I decided to put together a promo-commercial for practice, this one for Flexjobs.
Let me know what you all think. Appreciate any and all feedback. Thanks again!
Kathy
Flexjobs
The #1 job site to find remote, work from home, and flexible job opportunities since 2007.
Flexjobs. Get started now.
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Hi Kathy, very good! I like the upbeat directness of it, sounded really appropriate for the script. “Flexible” sounded like 2 syllables instead of 3 to me – more like “flex-ble”. Also I would probably emphasize “Flexjobs” just a little more as the product name, the pitch seemed really low on that word in particular, but otherwise very good read!
Mary
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Hello all! Here is a recording (recorded on my phone) for any and all feedback. It’s a monologue by the character Miranda Priestly in “The Devil Wears Prada”. I realize this is a fictional character, but does the emotion and impatience sound authentic? Let me know what you think!
Mary
This stuff’? Oh, ok. I see, you think this has nothing to do with you. You go to your closet and you select out, oh I don’t know, that lumpy blue sweater, for instance, because you’re trying to tell the world that you take yourself too seriously to care about what you put on your back.
But what you don’t know is that that sweater is not just blue, it’s not turquoise, it’s not lapis, it’s actually cerulean. You’re also blindly unaware of the fact that in 2002, Oscar de la Renta did a collection of cerulean gowns. And then I think it was Yves St Laurent, wasn’t it, who showed cerulean military jackets?
And then cerulean quickly showed up in the collections of eight different designers. Then it filtered down through the department stores and then trickled on down into some tragic “casual corner” where you, no doubt, fished it out of some clearance bin. However, that blue represents millions of dollars and countless jobs and so it’s sort of comical how you think that you’ve made a choice that exempts you from the fashion industry when, in fact, you’re wearing the sweater that was selected for you by the people in this room. From a pile of “stuff.”
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Mary — If I remember this monologue correctly ( great movie… love watching it… Oscar worthy performance, in my opinion, by Meryl… that wig definitely deserved an award of its own! 🙂 ), the delivery was very soft, almost nonchalant. Does this help?
Kathy
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Thanks for the feedback Kathy! I agree that Meryl was great in that movie!
So, are you saying that my delivery was soft and nonchalant or that the movie’s delivery was soft and nonchalant? Thanks again! Curious as to how it’s being perceived, good or bad 🙂 Thanks!
Mary
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Ah, ok, I see. I was thinking that might have been what you meant. In the movie Miranda had a dismissive tone towards Andy, quieter / softer in delivery but still piercing in the message due to Miranda’s personality.
I was trying for impatience and irritation when I read it, so I was trying to make it sound more emotional. I’m glad an emotion came through on that. Thanks for clarifying! 🙂 mk
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Hi there! Happy holidays you guys!! Here is a practice script for a government commercial, I guess it is a PSA kind of government announcement. Shoutout to my old stomping grounds – Tdot! Going for an emotional read and trying to stretch myself out of my upbeat/energetic/perky natural bend. Hope it hits right.
Government: Voice for the city of Toronto
You know that term “We’re all in this together?” Well, it’s true.
While some of us might be working in government and others not, we’re actually all in the same boat.
You see, we’re citizens as well. We all want the same thing.
A city that works for everyone. As fast and efficient and as relevant as can be.
Thriving, accessible, and inclusive.-
Hi Katelyn — clear, and good pacing and tone.
I liked how you threw out the “comma rule” … from the webinar, Science of Speaking Like a Pro 🙂
With that said, there were some slight micro-pauses where there were no commas (While some of us might be working in government and others not… and As fast and efficient and as relevant as can be.), but it still seemed to work well with the emotional/conversational tone you were going for.
I hope this helps!
Kathy
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Hi Katelyn, good read! You have a nice, clear tone and good emphasis on several key words.
There were 2 places where there were commas shown but no pause (that I could hear) taken (“Well, it’s true”) and (“You see, we’re citizens…), so that made the read seem a little fast to me and not as authentic; I think the pauses at the commas help drive the point home that the government workers are empathetic to the citizens if that makes sense. Otherwise, good job!
Mary
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Hello All and Happy Holidays!
I’ve uploaded two practice commercial spots here for review. Honesty and constructive criticism are welcome as I excercise new technique. Thank you.
-NdehruBUDWEISER ZERO ‘ZERO COMPROMISE’
INTRODUCING BUDWEISER ZERO. ZERO PERCENT ALCOHOL, ZERO GRAMS OF SUGAR,
FULL BUDWEISER FLAVOR. FOR ALL THE MOMENTS YOU WANT A BEER
AND NEED TO STAY ON YOUR GAME. BUDWEISER ZERO, ZERO COMPROMISE.HAMPTON TOYOTA (radio commercial)
At HAMPTON TOYOTA, we‘re having a sale that‘ll blow you away! It‘s our annual July
4th birthday extravaganza. Hundreds of cars, trucks, and vans … at unbelievable rock
bottom prices. Shop around. Then come to HAMPTON because we guarantee the lowest
prices. The right car, the right price, the right dealer. HAMPTON TOYOTA … right
where it counts.-
Hi Ndehru! Welcome!
Script 1: This seemed like a very serious tone for a Budwesier commercial. Your voice and the pacing were good, but I would think it should be a bit more upbeat – you are telling someone about how great it is, but it is presented with such a somber tone. As a suggestion, maybe try the read with an encouraging tone like to your best friend who loves beer but has not heard about it yet. Think about how enthusiastic you would be when telling him about this new product that you think he will like.Script 2: Good energy and tone for a car commercial, way to vary it up. This sounds really believable for your voice, very good!
Mary
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Ok this file should work!
Today we are going to show you six easy tips to help you get started with watercolor. Let’s begin.
The first tip is to pick the right paper. Papers for drawing with watercolors are heavy papers. Why heavy papers? Because we’ll be using a lot of water. If you use a thin paper, it’s just going to wrinkle and bleed through. That is why it is a good idea to use 200 grand paper or heavier. Watercolor papers usually have a rougher texture to catch more water. If you are going to use the paper for mixed media and drawing, better to go for a smooth surface. Tip number 2: Picking the right watercolors. Watercolors come in different forms and shapes. You can purchase a set for a few dollars, or you can pay one hundred dollars for it. In general, the better the colors, the higher the price.-
Hi Tina! Welcome to the forum! I liked your voice – very friendly, straightforward and informative. The pacing and clarity were good and I think you did a good job of varying the tone and to emphasize words here and there to appropriately describe the process of learning to watercolor. Good job!
Mary
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Hi there! Your audio quality is great. Your voice has a nice authoritative quality and could fit nicely for a how to read like this. Overall I felt this read was lacking energy and enthusiasm for the topic. You sounded pretty bored. Throughout you were speaking with a down pitch at the end of sentences and pauses which can make it sound as though one is not very interested or interacting positively with the subject matter. (I do this too). It helps to have someone in mind who you are talking to. Perhaps you have a daughter or niece who is learning how to paint with watercolors. You can imagine a scenario where you are teaching someone you love how to paint with watercolors. What is the scenerio? How do you feel about this subject matter? Find something with this copy that allows you to engage with it emotionally. And if you can remember to smile while you are talking it will help you to sound a bit warmer and more enthusiastic about this copy. Hope this helps! 🙂
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Trying out a Chevy Script. It was a 30 sec script and was fast paced for me to cram in in there. Still aboout .5-.75 seconds long on the actual dialog. Trying to work on my speed. Thanks for any feedback.
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Hi Robert! You have a great, unique voice and this was a very good read. I second Mary with the speeding up of the “fine details” portion of the commercial. My only other suggestion is to give more emphasis to the “legendary” in the first line because you’re setting up this big deal of a car and while the sentence flows nicely, I think punching up the delivery to show your awe/amazement would be something to play with. Also, I think Silverado may pack a bigger punch if you played with going down at the end of the word instead of up in pitch. I hope this is helpful! Well done! This is me actively trying to give you stuff because it really is a good read. Tina
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Hi Robert! Your voice is good for truck commercials! Also, that is a lot of words to cram into 30 seconds! I don’t know if this will work for you, but it seems like in car ads like this they speak a normal pace for the first part of the script (like you did), then really fast towards the end which specifies all the details / fine print, starting with “Get 0% financing…” It always seems almost comically fast how they are able to fit it all in. Good job on this one!
Mary
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Thanks Mary, I have to work on this a few times to get it in 30s. I could try speeding up the financing sentence. I need to practice that. I have gotten a whole better this past year reading faster for sure. But still need to keep after it.
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