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  • #15468
    David Goldberg
    Edge Studio Staff

    Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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  • #60430
    mkell755
    Participant

    Hello all! Here is a recording (done on my phone) for any and all feedback, a medical commercial. Let me know if my voice sounds authentic for this type of read. Thank you!

    Mary

    KISQALI
    We are the thrivers. Women with metastatic breast cancer. Standing in the struggle. Hustling through the hurt. Asking for science, not sorries. Our time… for more time… has come. Living longer is possible and proven in women taking KISQALI plus Fulvestrant or a non-steroidal aroma taste inhibitor. KISQALI can cause lung problems or an abnormal heartbeat which can lead to death. It can also cause serious skin reactions, liver problems, and low white blood cell counts that may result in severe infections. KISQALI is not approved for use with Tomoxafin.

    It’s our time…to continue to shine because we are the thrivers. Ask your doctor about KISQALI, the only treatment in its class proven to help women live longer in two clinical trials.

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    • #60480
      katelyndawnvo
      Participant

      Hi Mary, I think this topic is a nice fit for your voice. You have a mature voice so I think something that is geared toward women of an older demographic is great. And your pitch/timbre suits well for this medical kind of genre. Nice! For tongue twisters – just keep practicing reading tongue twisters online consistently. I’m not sure if you know the website “howjsay” but it also will play audio of how you say words so that could be useful for those medical words.

      • #60487
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Katelyn! I’m glad to hear that this sort of read may be a believable option for me. I had not heard of that website but will check it out! Thanks for the tip on that, appreciate it!

        Mary

    • #60448
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi Mary — this had a nice authentic sound for the script. Good pacing in the entire read, too. Perhaps play around with some slight pitch variations. Overall, this was a nice read!

      Kathy

      • #60451
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Kathy! I will work on varying the pitch. Thanks again!

        Mary

    • #60440
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Mary, I thought that was good. This is a good genera for your voice as well. Nice pacing and tone throughout. 👍😊

      • #60447
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Robert! I’m fascinated by the medical commercials but they take a lot more practice for me, lots of tongue twisters, but then I feel accomplished when I can say them correctly 🙂 Thanks again!

        Mary

  • #60424
    jmtarleton
    Participant

    Hello and Happy almost New Year, good people! Here are three narration scripts with different tones I am trying out. I really appreciate the time and feedback.

    All the best,

    John

    Animal Heroes
    Not all heroes are human. Sometimes heroes bark, meow, or even grunt. They may be covered with fur, have curly tails, or live in an alley. We’re about to meet some real-life animal heroes. Each one of these heroes has performed an amazing rescue. Sometimes they even put themselves in danger to help others. We’ll meet a dog who rescues stray cats. A brave cat who saved her five kittens from a fire. A pig who got help for her owner who was having a heart attack. And a guide dog who led his owner down 71 flights of stairs when the World Trade Center was attacked.

    Crime Drama Narration
    Some crimes committed are so undeniably gruesome that they defy logic and have people asking questions, forever more. The case of Katherine Knight did just that. A woman who not only murdered in cold blood but, then, went on to commit the most despicable act after the brutal slaying.

    Company Website Greeting
    Meet Bob. Like 95% of car shoppers, he uses his computer, smartphone and tablet to shop for his next car. A few years ago, you could have reached Bob through traditional means such as Direct mail, TV or radio, and newspaper ads. Today, that simply isn’t enough.
    According to Google – consumers visit 18 websites on average – before stepping into a dealership.

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    • #60446
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi John!

      Script 1: Nice pace. Clear enunciation. Good job on varying your pitch. Watch for trailing off in volume at the end of your sentences (noticed in the second one, the others were good). Be mindful of unnecessary pauses mid-sentence — this happened in your last sentence.
      Second 2: Pick up the pace a little for this read. I understand you were going for a dramatic sound for the in-show narration, but to me there was too much stretching out with certain words, and unnecessary pausing.
      Script 3: Good tone and enthusiastic read, and pitch variation.

      Overall, good job! Keep it up! I hope this was helpful!

      Kathy

    • #60442
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      John, I thought reading 3 was the best. To me one and two could have used a more serious tone, especially 2. In general all were good reads. Hope this may help some.

    • #60434
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi John, good reads! Good clarity, tone and pacing for each.
      Script 1: The light tone of this suggests that it may be for a kid’s narration and it sounds really nice and friendly
      Script 2: I like the more sinister tone here, well done. Some of the pauses were not at the commas however. There was a pause after “gruesome” but not after “questions”, and there was a pause after “blood” but not after “but” or “then”. I liked the emphasis on “…did just that”
      Script 3: Very authentic read, more upbeat for a car add.
      Overall great job!

      Mary

  • #60420
    Dante M.
    Participant

    Hello everyone, I have another three scripts for everyone to analyze and critique. As always, I pick the scripts I have the hardest time with to get the best feedback.

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    • #60445
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi Dante!

      Good reads! You have a nice warm, rich tone for these scripts.

      Script 1: Good pacing; play around with ‘Thanksgrilling’ … you sounded a little close to the mic? Either way, this didn’t come out very clear to me.
      Script 2: I thought this was your best read for a narration script. Nice pace, and clear enunciation. Try varying your pitch a little more in the last sentence with the lists.
      Script 3: The enthusiasm was good. I would slow down a tad; practice the delivery in the third line (“No more paper bills!), since this line has an exclamation point!

      I hope this was helpful! Keep it up!

      Kathy

    • #60444
      Dante M.
      Participant

      Much appreciated! I’m glad I’m improving.

    • #60441
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Dante, all 3 of those are good! Keep up the good work.

    • #60435
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Dante! Good reads! Very good clarity, tone and pacing for all.
      Script 1: Butterball – I like it! I smiled at the “Happy Thanksgrilling” line.
      Script 2: B****r – Sounds good, with good emphasis on words to educate the listener.
      Script 3: AMEX – this sounds great, great energy, this is my favorite of the 3 today.
      Overall very good and with a nice warm sound!

      Mary

  • #60399
    Robert Broussard
    Participant

    Two different Allstate scripts one take on each. I appreciate any feedback. Thanks

    Allstate Insurance – Discount
    You never know for sure, but there’s this guy in the office that swears that HIS car insurance is the best, and tells everyone what a hot negotiator he is. So you ask him. “Did you get a discount for air bags, or anti-lock brakes? What about a discount for multiple cars?” Now he’s speechless. “Oh…one last thing. You want the name of my insurance company?” To help make sure you’re getting the auto insurance discount you deserve, talk to an Allstate insurance agent in your neighborhood. You’re in good hands with Allstate.

    Allstate Insurance – Agent
    Go ahead… Make a wish… Now call your Allstate agent. Because today, planning makes wishes come true. And your Allstate agent can help make sure that “family security”, “college funding”, and even a “healthy retirement” are in the stars for you. Your Allstate agent wants to be your agent for life. You’re in good hands with Allstate Life Insurance.

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    • #60436
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Robert, good reads! Good tone and clarity throughout. Your voice sounds good for insurance.
      Script 1: I too heard an extra word and an omitted word. The pace seemed just a tad bit rushed to me; I felt like there should have been a tiny pause after “…for multiple cars?” and also after “…my insurance company?” I liked the conversational tone of it and the variation in pitch, well done.
      Script 2: Good energy, and I also heard an extra “you” in the third sentence. This was a nice friendly conversational read, also very good. Both reads were good!

      Mary

      • #60438
        Robert Broussard
        Participant

        Thanks Mary, I am going to have to pay more attention to the being exact on these scripts. Hope you had a Merry Christmas.

    • #60408
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Robert — nice job on the one takes! Good pacing, and I liked the varying tone with both reads, too.

      Script 1: In the first sentence you omitted and added a word. A tip I try to do is look a few words in advance of what I am reading; less likely to miss a word.

      Script 2: I noticed added words in the third sentence. In the last sentence, your volume/tone sounded like it lowered. Maybe it was on my end. Overall, this read had a nice enthusiasm to it. I actually liked this script read the best.

      I hope this was helpful!

      Kathy

      • #60409
        Robert Broussard
        Participant

        No it was probably me getting lower at the end. I will have to look ahead and concentrate more doing these. I do miss a word here and there. Thanks.

  • #60385
    mkell755
    Participant

    Hello all and Merry Christmas and Happy Holidays all!

    Here is a read for your review (recorded on my phone) for any and all feedback. I just went to the eye doctor, so my eye prescription was on my mind. I’m trying for an authentic, believable vibe, let me know if you think it sounds appropriate in tone and delivery for the topic. Thank you!

    Mary

    Essilor
    There’s nothing as unique as our eyes. Which is why Essilor pioneers ways to make lenses as unique as you. Varilux for super-sharp vision, Essential Blue for protection, and Crizal for freedom from glare. Three cutting-edge solutions in a single unique lens. So, whatever your needs, insist on Essilor. Visit your local Essilor experts and find the perfect lens for you. See more, do more, Essilor.

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    • #60407
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi Mary!

      Nice job on varying your pitch, especially with the lists (the three cutting edge solutions). The pacing was good, too, however, there was a pause after “Varilux” not needed. Keep it up!

      Kathy

      • #60432
        mkell755
        Participant

        Hi Kathy, thanks for the feedback, and good to hear that the variation in pitch is appropriate. Agreed on the pause after Varilux, I think I was just trying to emphasize it a little, but it did not also need the slight pause after. Thanks!

        Mary

    • #60396
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Good read Mary, good pace, tone!!! Hope you had a good christmas.

      • #60433
        mkell755
        Participant

        Thanks for the feedback Robert! Appreciate it. I did have a good Christmas, and hope you did as well!

        Mary

  • #60374
    Official81
    Participant

    Merry Xmas! I recorded 2 more practice scripts for your appreciated feedback. I finally just got into my studio and rerecorded these takes. Thank You Mary and Kathy for trying to help me with converting my files. First Movie Script Lord of the Rings Opening Monologue, which I gave 2 different takes. Please let me know which one sounds best. Second Advil commercial. Script wording follows:

    It began with the forging of the Great Rings. Three were given to the Elves, immortal, wisest and fairest of all beings. Seven to the Dwarf-Lords, great miners and craftsmen of the mountain halls. And nine, nine rings were gifted to the race of Men, who above all else desire power. For within these rings was bound the strength and the will to govern each race. But they were all of them deceived, for another ring was made. Deep in the land of Mordor, in the Fires of Mount Doom, the Dark Lord Sauron forged a master ring in secret, and into this ring he poured his cruelty, his malice and his will to dominate all life. One ring to rule them all.

    Muscle aches? Nothing is proven more effective or longer lasting than Advil. For long-lasting relief of muscle aches, count on Advil. In a recent clinical study, Advil was found to work better than Tylenol in relieving the pain of sore muscles the day after exercise. No wonder doctors recommend Advil for muscle aches more than any other non-prescription brand. ADVIL — Advanced medicine for pain.

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    • #60962
      rogue1
      Participant

      Hi Official81, You have a very sumptuous quality to your voice which works very well with the opening monologue of “Lord of the Rings” (and I agree with others that the first take is the more immersive, pleasing read of the two you posted—I definitely stopped reading along and just shut my eyes to listen). As far as the Advil spot, again, great quality to your read, just perhaps slow down a bit and try being a bit more conversational in how you convey the the script. It feels a bit like a run-on sentence when you should give yourself—and the listener—the luxury of being totally engaged in hearing all you have to say about the product. Great work!

    • #60406
      kfvoice
      Participant

      I agree, the first Lord of the Rings script was the better of the two — it had more of a character narration sound to it vs. the second read.

      The Advil script had a nice pace. However, be mindful of sounding breathy between sentences.

      I hope this was helpful.

      Kathy

      • #60493
        Official81
        Participant

        Thank you so much Kathy! This does help a lot! I have it noted as one of my first questions in my first coaching session tomorrow! I greatly appreciate your help.

    • #60397
      Robert Broussard
      Participant

      Official81, I agree with Mary that the 1st version was better. You put a lot of character into the story telling and did well doing it.

      The advil read was good as well.

    • #60383
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Official81, glad you were able to upload! I like script one read the best – it sounds really dark and mysterious, and very interesting to listen to; really draws you in with lots of variation in tone and stretched out words every once in awhile. The second read was ok, but seemed more like it was being read vs. telling the story.

      Advil was a good read as well but now I want to hear more mysterious story-telling monologues! Good job with all of these!

      Mary

      • #60499
        Official81
        Participant

        Thank you Mary! I will definitely start to practice more of those mysterious scripts. I really enjoyed that. I’ve always loved to read, and this script really really comes alive.

  • #60369
    Robert Broussard
    Participant

    Christmas Greeting

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    • #60405
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Thank you, too, Robert! I hope you had a Very Merry Christmas!

      Kathy

    • #60382
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Robert, thanks for the thanks! I appreciate your feedback too, I think we all do. Thank you and Have a very Merry Christmas yourself! 🙂

      Mary

    • #60373
      Official81
      Participant

      Thank you Robert I wish you and your family a Merry Christmas and Happy New Year as well! This greeting sounded excellent! Warm, rich, and authentic.

  • #60358
    katelyndawnvo
    Participant

    Hello there. Here is a corporate explainer narration. Any feedback is appreciated! I need to try and be less “bubbly” and “perky” for corporate so I’m trying to sound more straightforward. Feedback is appreciated. Merry Christmas everyone!!! WE MADE IT – 2021 here we come.

    Business Management Software – Corporate Explainer
    Your online business is growing. That’s a good thing. But as orders increase, so do the bottlenecks in business processes.
    To keep growing, you need to do a better job at managing inventory, processing & fulfilling orders and keeping your customers happy – all while expanding into new channels. That’s where business management software comes into play.

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    • #60404
      kfvoice
      Participant

      Hi Katelyn,

      I didn’t think you were perky or bubbly; had enough energy to the read to sound informative. Nice pacing, as well. Good read!

      Kathy

    • #60384
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Katelyn! Good read! Very direct but friendly and very clear enunciation, I think this is a good genre for you! It did not sound bubbly or perky to me, just upbeat, straightforward and concerned with educating the listener. Good job!

      Mary

  • #60350
    RichSummersVO
    Participant

    Merry Christmas fellow VO actors! Thought I’d share a read I just did for a Pendelton Whiskey demo. Feedback always welcome!
    Hope you all have an amazing holiday and are looking forward to a safe and healthy new year!
    ~Rich

    PENDLETON WHISKEY
    The Pendleton Whiskey portfolio, born in the Great Northwest, is a collection of premium spirits whose popularity has grown far beyond its territory of origin. When your history is tied to the Pendleton Round-Up, one of the oldest and most prestigious rodeos in the West, there’s a lot to live up to. Authenticity and quality are more than words on a label. Today, Pendleton Whiskey carries with its name a call to live life to its fullest – savoring adventure, camaraderie and the moments we keep as memories. It’s a distinction we’re proud to have earned.

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    • #60357
      katelyndawnvo
      Participant

      Hey Rich, this must be a stage name because it matches your tone precisely! Rich and thick like molasses. Very nice. Your voice is a dead ringer for this type of product and read. Just lovely!

    • #60355
      mkell755
      Participant

      Hi Rich, Very nice! I really like your deep, richly textured voice, sounds really good for a whiskey commercial. Great clarity and pacing throughout. Very good!

      Mary

  • #60322
    Official81
    Participant

    Merry Xmas Eve All! I recorded 2 more practice scripts for your appreciated feedback. This time recordings were done on my phone outside of my studio. First Movie Script Lord of the Rings Opening Monologue, which I gave 2 different takes. Please let me know which one sound best. Second Advil commercial. Script wording follows:

    It began with the forging of the Great Rings. Three were given to the Elves, immortal, wisest and fairest of all beings. Seven to the Dwarf-Lords, great miners and craftsmen of the mountain halls. And nine, nine rings were gifted to the race of Men, who above all else desire power. For within these rings was bound the strength and the will to govern each race. But they were all of them deceived, for another ring was made. Deep in the land of Mordor, in the Fires of Mount Doom, the Dark Lord Sauron forged a master ring in secret, and into this ring he poured his cruelty, his malice and his will to dominate all life. One ring to rule them all.

    Muscle aches? Nothing is proven more effective or longer lasting than Advil. For long-lasting relief of muscle aches, count on Advil. In a recent clinical study, Advil was found to work better than Tylenol in relieving the pain of sore muscles the day after exercise. No wonder doctors recommend Advil for muscle aches more than any other non-prescription brand. ADVIL — Advanced medicine for pain.

    • #60341
      Official81
      Participant

      I tried to upload recordings from my phone through the Voice Record app on iPhone and none of them came through properly. If anyone has any idea how I can upload using these methods please help. Otherwise I will get this figured out. I shall return!

      • #60347
        mkell755
        Participant

        Hi Official81! I use the Voice Recorder app on my Android. I too email the file to myself (it saves it as a .mp3), save to my computer then upload to the website. Hope this helps!

        Mary

      • #60342
        kfvoice
        Participant

        I used this app on my iPhone when I started out. What I did was I emailed the file (mp3) to myself, saved the file to my computer, and then uploaded to the website. It’s not a direct upload, I know, but I did not have any issues.

        I hope this helps!

        Kathy

        • #60361
          Official81
          Participant

          Thank you so much! How do I email it as an MP3 file?

        • #60371
          kfvoice
          Participant

          To tag on to what Mary mentioned… this is what steps I took for the iPhone app:

          1) Click on the voice recording from your app; you will see a bunch of options. (I’ve attached an image if this helps.)

          2) When you choose “send as email”, the next prompt will be if you want to send the file as an “audio” or “movie”. Send as audio.

          3) Last step… pick “email attachment”, and enter your address.

          I hope this helps!

          Kathy

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        • #60362
          mkell755
          Participant

          Hey there! Mine has a “share” icon in the app for individually recorded items, so I email it from there to myself.

          Mary

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