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Okay folks, based on feedback, here is a redo of a script I had done just before the new year. Let me know if it’s improved (from the flat tone). I have attached both files. The first is the original, and the second is the one I re-recorded tonight.
Thanks again!
Kathy
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Hi Kathy, good reads! I think the second one is definitely improved from the first – there is more variation in the tone throughout, notably at “a lot HAS changed…” and ” …from our CAREFULLY selected springs”. There is also a little more smile in your voice in the second read.
Also I think you could say “a hundred seventy five years” instead of what sounded like “a hundred n’ seventy five years”, just a thought on that. Good job!
Mary
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Hi everyone! I’m here with a recording for any and all feedback. Working to sound like I have a specific listener in mind, and to clearly convey the message to the listener. Let me know what you think. Thanks!
Mary
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Hi Mary — The pacing was good, and I felt you emphasized words or changed your tone where needed. I do agree with Robert that it needs a more relaxed, and conversational delivery. Additionally, I know you are still recording on your phone, and I don’t usually hear this from you, but be mindful of sounding breathy between sentences (the very last one).
Keep it up!
Kathy
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Hi Mary, I think you did pretty good, but could sound a little more conversational. Hope this helps.
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I selected this practice script to challenge several areas, especially words ending in “s” and words that begin with hard consonants. All feedback appreciated. Thanks!
Lincoln: The Untold Stories
On the night of April 14, 1865, an actor named John Wilkes Booth quietly worked his way through the halls of Ford’s Theater in Washington D.C. President Abraham Lincoln was enjoying one of the first moments of restful entertainment he had experienced since the Civil War began. Then, shortly after 10 P.M. Wilkes slipped into the unguarded presidential box.Firing one shot at close range, Wilkes killed the President. A nation went into mourning over the loss of the remarkable man who had reunited a divided country. In the days following Lincoln’s death, his former law partner, William Herndon grieved as he watched thousands of Americans pay their final respects to their fallen leader.
For seventeen years, Herndon sat across from Lincoln in a series of law offices in Springfield, Illinois — one of which still exists across the street from the old state capitol. But as Herndon perceived the public’s desire to mythologize his former partner, he felt a need to search for the facts and truths of Lincoln’s life…not fictions…not fables.
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Hi John, very good! I liked the warmth and clarity in your voice for this read. It was well paced and enunciated and flowed well with nice variation in tone throughout. The words ending in “s” sounded nice and crisp next to the following words starting with hard consonants.
After “William Herndon” even though there is no comma, I would think there should be a micropause and then a slight emphasis on “grieved” to help with the meaning of the sentence. This is a good genre for you! I liked it.
Mary
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Good evening all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Working on smiling more during this type of read. Let me know what you think. Thank you!
Mary
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good! but maybe needs a little more energy. A variation I would try is “[…] meal that powers YOUR day.”
Even if you over-do it and sound like an infomercial salesman, understanding that inflection will give you a contrast of the middle-ground you want to find. Practicing doing things to the extreme tone (in both directions) helps organize the range of voices I DO want to use, even if I never use the extreme voice itself.Hope that makes sense, haha. Keep at it.
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Good job, Mary!
I could hear the smile, but it seemed to fad a bit with the last two sentences. Otherwise, it had a good pace, and pitch variations. Keep it up!
Kathy
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Thanks for the feedback Kathy! I’m glad you could hear the smile in that one. Not sure why it sounded faded out at the end, I may have moved around while recording. Thanks!
Mary
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Hello!
This is a practing recording for my coaching session, using my phone. Focusing on my:
-mico-pauses
-workable lead-ins
-point of view/audience clearAnd all other feed back welcome, thank you so much!
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monibr16 — nice job on the lead in! With that said, to add on to what Mary mentioned, your lead in was lacking enthusiasm. Sound more excited with “Oh, Trendi.com”, as that is what you are promoting, so it needs to stand out — you did a great job with this at the end (where your smile was evident).
Overall, good read! Keep it up!
Kathy
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Hi Monibr16! I liked the lead in and the micropauses and pacing of the read. It did not sound very excited for the topic however. “…up to 75% off” and “…everything ships free” were very somber in tone, almost downplayed as if they were not important things to mention. I did hear the smile in your voice towards the end, which was great. Keep it up!
Mary
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He is a re-do of yesterday changing it some from feedback. Please let me know if is any better. The first file is yesterday and second is today. Thanks, I appreciate it.
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Much better, Robert! Nice improvement!
To me, it sounded like there should of been more of a break between the first and second sentences. Were you further away from the mic in the second read, or was the volume lower?
Good job!
Kathy
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Hi Robert, very nice! I think the second read was definitely improved from the first – more variation in tone throughout, more relaxed and conversational, and also good emphasis on the “Now if he could only operate the microwave” with a chuckle, that was great, really helped it stand out. Great progress on this one!
Mary
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Wow- great work with the prior suggestions, one can hear the difference- it sounds great! There are a couple pauses that could use tightening with breathe control in recording or on the editing side. One example might be at the “…sight and sound unheard of,…” there’s a longer pause than maybe necessary between “sound” and “unheard of”. Again, great gains in your recordings from feedback!
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Hello and Happy New Year! This is my first effort for 2021. Please provide feedback on all aspects of this endeavor.
Script:
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Hi Scott! Really good job. You have a nice warm tone and good pacing throughout. Nice authoritative tone and variation on key words, this is a good genre for you. Very good!
Mary
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Hi Scotty!
Very good! I love the tone of your voice! Good pacing and enunciation. Be mindful of sounding breathy between sentences. Otherwise, good job! Keep it up!
Kathy
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Hello! This is a read for practice, I’m just starting in VO training. Any and all input is appreciated. Thank you for listening as well as your constructive feedback!
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What Monet found in Venice, according to Mirbeau, was a chance to renew himself by tackling the preconceived images of Venice. He no longer hoped to conquer the light, only to “glide” on the surface of the canvas, in the same way that light glides over things or in the same way that “the most intelligent dancer translates a feeling.” Monet’s Venise was celebrated, almost unanimously, as one of the great feats in the history of painting. Up to that point, Monet had never been so unreservedly lauded. The irony is that soon after World War I these much praised Venetian images fell into oblivion, no longer eliciting the sort of praise they had obtained when first exhibited.-
Hi John, really nice read! Welcome to the forum. I really like the warm soothing tone in your voice, it is really good for this genre. Pacing and enunciation were good.
I agree with Kathy on checking the pronunciation of Monet. There is also an artist Manet, and since they are both artists, someone in the art world would notice this. (Your pronunciation sounded more like Manet to me). Really good work, I look forward to hearing more!
Mary
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Thank you! I sheepishly admit that I watched a British lecture about Monet’s Venice and thought I was onto a fancy pronunciation. Lesson learned…
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Very nice, John! Welcome!
You have a great voice for biography/documentary; warm and welcoming. Your pacing, I thought, was good. Be mindful of pausing in your read where it’s not build into the script. The one thing that really stood out to me was the pronunciation of “Monet”. I have included a link for reference.
https://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/Monet
I hope this helps!
Kathy
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