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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hi Robert, good job! I agree with what Brian is saying – maybe vary the tone on “now if he could only operate the microwave” to give a little more contrast to how simple this new thing is making his life, if that makes sense. Overall very good, and it seems like a good genre for you.
Mary
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Thanks Mary, I agree that part should have changed tone. I am trying use a lower voice some just to see how it works. Bye the way my microwave is complicated to. I am glad there is a 30s button on it. lol.
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First, I love how you pronounce “theater”…that’s a hard one to pull off and sound natural, but I think you did it.
The first item on the list about his IQ is a little muddled, so maybe a little more enunciation there. And with this list, it needs contrast: here’s a really smart guy who, before now, was stymied by his home theater, but this new product makes it so he’s able to do this thing. As it stands, it’s all delivered in kind of the same tone and urgency…give these list items some more color and contrast so that that last item stands out.
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Okay, I did something different for tonight. It’s definitely narration, but I channeled my inner Rachel Ray for this totally off-the-cuff ad-lib for a real cocktail recipe. Hey, it’s the New Year! 🙂
So this might be more on air improv, and I broke all the VO rules, but hey… it was fun. Let me know what you think!
I have included the original draft script I put together, too, so you can see just how much the audio compares to the original script. I actually skipped a step, and I was bummed, but it allowed me to figure out how to copy and paste in Audacity! Yay!
I am (now) aware I said ‘orange liquor’ instead of ‘orange liqueur’. I can edit that, now that I know how to. 🙂 I also dipped down on the very last word of the last sentence, too. Unlike other parts of the read, I did not plan that, lol — but I was not doing it over! If you are curious, this was my third take, but first take of the entire script. I messed up in the very beginning on the first couple of tries.
Thank you for any feedback! Happy New Year! Cheers!
Kathy
French 75 Tutorial
Happy New Year!
Let’s celebrate with a classic cocktail — the French 75!
Here’s how to make it:
The first thing you are going to do is add one ounce of gin into your shaker … followed by half an ounce of simple syrup … and three-quarter ounce lemon juice.
Add some ice, and shake well … now fine strain into a flute … slowly top off with Champaign … and finally garnish with a lemon twist … and that’s how you make a French 75!
Another version is to substitute the Champaign with sparkling wine. Whatever floats your bubbles…
Cheers, my friends!
Here’s to new beginnings…
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Hi Kathy, You have lovely, inviting voice. Totally feel that you’re casually leaning over the counter showing me, person-to-person, how to make the perfect French 75. (Watch out, Rachael Ray). Great on-air improv, though I feel some of your confidence diminishes when you get to the off-script comic asides (you tend to drop out almost altogether—both aurally and energetically—when you’re joking about this being the most expensive cocktail you’ve…bought…ever). You’re a natural at this, just feel free to infuse that fun energy all the way through your read and don’t shy away from the asides (or slow your breezy pace with too many hanging pauses). Well done!
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As was mentioned above, a very “podcast” vibe for me, but that is an absolute compliment…that’s a podcast I would listen to, and your tone is so conversational that the “vo rules” being broken don’t even matter. And frankly, I think that would make for an amazing commercial for one of the liquors or the glasses or something…it really draws the listener in when it’s real, and not “real”, you know?
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Hi Kathy – that was really fun! I could tell you were having a good time as you were going through the steps – very casual and entertaining! I found myself not really focusing on each word as it was written (as I tend to do), but more enjoying listening, and I think that’s a very good thing we should all strive for. I like the podcast vibe for you! Very good fit. I like the idea of explaining how to do things myself, maybe I’ll give it a try too. Explaining how to do something probably triggers something different in your brain than performing or selling or acting, just my thoughts on that. Very good job!
Mary
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Thank you, Mary!
Podcasting does let you have more free rein, so to speak, this is true. There is not as much pressure to follow the rules, and to be yourself, while still performing and acting a little — like I did here. Clarity/enunciation/pronunciation is still important, but I did this on a whim. Give it a try!
Happy New Year!
Kathy
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Kathy I liked that. It is good to be comfortable talking into the mic like that. I have been working on podcast and put a script together and read it out just to get used to speaking. It is a skill to be able to talk into a mic with no one on the other side and make it sound like you are speaking to someone. I have had a fancy to get into talk radio myself. Anyway, that was good. I think I will make me a gin and Spite Zero to toast your recording.😊 Happy New Year!
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Thanks Robert! Have one for me (right now), lol! I am making “75’s” later for the ball drop…
It really was pretty fun, but I can’t seem to replicate that casualness in my sessions, or other readings. I am sure it will get easier.
I, too, have had podcasts cross my mind. Not sure what, or if I actually would. Time will tell. Good luck to you in that pursuit! Keep us posted!
Happy New Year!
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Trying out a new script I put together. Thanks for any suggestions or feedback. Getting close to putting my demo together. Happy New Year to everyone, lets hope this on is MUCH better than 2020.
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Hi Robert, sounds great! I like John Deere for you, flowed well and sounded very natural. Good music in the background too. Good job on that and Happy New Year!
Mary
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Robert — Awesome! Sounds ready to me! Nice pacing, pitch, and tone. Great choice of music, too — the volume seemed just about right starting out, but then it seemed to compete with your voice. Is it just me?
Kathy
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Hello all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback (recorded on my phone). I’m working on sounding conversational and making sure I pronounce all the “for”s and “to”s vs. “fer” and “teh”s. Let me know what you think about it, it’s a hard habit to correct for me! 🙂
Mary
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Good job Mary, nice pacing and tone. You definitely are hitting the right words in this one in my opinion. Keep it up. Happy New Year too!!
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Good job, Mary! Your “for’s” were enunciated clearly on my end. I heard a minor “tah” in It’s gear that’s built to help you get more outdoors for your money. But, I completely understand the struggle…
Kathy
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Hi folks, just uploading a litte narration piece for you tonight AND… maybe we can all learn something about betty crocker while eating some cookie dough or cake batter… Any feedback is appreciated.
Betty Crocker is an imaginary person. Nonetheless, in a 1945 survey she was named the second-best-known woman in America, after Eleanor Roosevelt.
She was “born” in 1921 during a Gold Medal flour promotion^ in which users completed a puzzle^ to win a pin cushion.Company executives decided to use the signature of “Betty Crocker” on the prize letters. Betty because the name had a warm approachable feel, and Crocker after an early company director, William G, Crocker.
The fictional Ms. Crocker became so popular that she soon had her own products and recipe books, many of which still exist today.
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Hello voice fellows!
I’ve got another commercial read I put together for you. Felt like trying something different again, besides narration, for practice.
I am prepared to be critiqued on the clarity and enunciation. (I said ‘hundred as opposed to one hundred — not that I was trying to imitate a Mainer, it just happened, and I decided to leave it in.)
Let me know what you think! Thanks again!
Kathy
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Hi Kathy! thanks for posting! I would like to hear a read of this where you vary your pitch a little more. If this was a song it is kind of all one-note so you could try varying your pitch to emphasize the important words. 🙂
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Hi Kathy! Good read! I think the pacing and clarity were good, but the tone on “…from our carefully selected springs” sounded a little flat to me, maybe “carefully” could have been emphasized a little more to vary the pitch a little? I was thinking about what has not changed since 1845 for this company and it’s possibly the fact that they CAREFULLY select the springs, vs. use just any water, so that makes it more important to emphasize in my mind.
I did not mind the “a hundred” vs. “one hundred” on this one; it sounded appropriate for the script. Overall very good!
Mary
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Hello all! Here is a recording (recorded on my phone) for any and all feedback. We love Chewy.com! Let me know what you think. Thanks!
Mary
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Hey Mary, good read. But I have a suggestion for what my opinion is worth. When you say everything the first time up pitch every and low pitch thing. Then on the next everything do the opposite. Hope this may help. 😊
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Hi Mary!
Nice read! The pacing was good, but I wasn’t hearing the “smile” in your voice with the read. I believe this would show the enthusiasm and love you have for Chewy. I hope this is helpful.
Kathy
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Hi, friends! Here is an audition I submitted for a regional TV commercial. Pasted below is the script along with a link to the music accompanying the commercial. Please provide feedback on not only tone but also technique! I am still learning so I personally think it sounds good but to a more trained ear, you might hear something in my voice that I don’t. Thanks in advance for the feedback!
Music: https://www.premiumbeat.com/royalty-free-tracks/the-light-ahead
Script: The places we call “work” and “home” are starting to look more and more alike. When you could live and work anywhere, why not make it somewhere extraordinary, where the air is fresher, your paycheck goes further, and at up to 10 gigabits per second, the internet is some of the fastest in the country. Whether you need to be connected or get reconnected, Bristol is ready.
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Hi! I enjoy your commercial reads 🙂 You’ve got a great tone and you fit this copy nicely. My constructive bits would be that you can lift “work” and “home” out of the script a little more as these are important to differentiate between. When there is something with an air quote, it helps to actually physically do the air quotes while you read because it naturally helps you lift them up a little more. There were a couple of unnecessary pauses like between “why not make it somewhere (pause) extraordinary,” Just some things that stood out to me. Nice work!
Katelyn
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I really liked your delivery for the read. The tone and pacing were good, as well.
I agree with Mary about emphasizing the words “work” and “home” a little more. Overall, good job!
Kathy
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Hi Sabpierotti – very nice! I really like your nice warm tone and pacing for this script. Great enunciation and sounded very good. The only thing I can think of to critique is that “work” and “home” could possibly be emphasized a little more, to let the listener catch up as to one of the main reasons why they need the superfast internet connection. Minor point, just my interpretation. Very good!
Mary
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Thanks for this great feedback, Mary! I agree, “work” and “home” could be emphasized a bit more. Thank you! Happy New Year!
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