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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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January 5, 2021 at 10:40 pm #60884
mkell755
ParticipantHello all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Let me know what you think! Thanks,
Mary
Chico’s
Chico’s was founded in 1983 as a small boutique selling Mexican folk art on Sanibel Island in Florida. Then one day, our founders discovered the sweater that made literally everyone look fabulous. They then quickly pivoted the business, and retail was never the same. Now there are over 600 Chico’s boutiques nationwide.From our exclusive, private-label designs to our most amazing personal service, Chico’s is truly a unique retail environment. When you walk into any Chico’s store, you can depend upon the sales staff to coordinate, accessorize, and help you build a wardrobe to suit your needs. We’re moving fast, but not without you. Get yourself to Chico’s!
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January 7, 2021 at 8:33 am #60929
John Trape
ParticipantHi Mary,
I thoroughly enjoyed listening to your recording. Among the tips that I will take away are your enthusiasm, conversational tone, and relaxed voice. I felt that I was not being rushed through a script. In fact, I forgot that I was listening to a script. Rather, by giving me the time to absorb the story of Chico’s, you were piquing my interest in the company.
Kind regards,
John
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January 6, 2021 at 10:10 pm #60908
Robert Broussard
ParticipantMary,
That was good. I think the pace could have been a little faster. The last was sentence really was natural and flowing. Keep up the good work.
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January 6, 2021 at 7:32 pm #60903
svenbot5000
ParticipantHi Mary! Good read! I liked the last sentence, I could really hear the enthusiasm there. I think you could add that flair to the earlier parts as well.
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January 6, 2021 at 4:59 pm #60900
Erik B
ParticipantHi Mary, I liked the pacing of your read. Also you hit key words very well. In addition I like how you differentiated “coordinate, accesorize, and help” . The only critique I have is, I heard a pause in the first sentence of the second paragraph,”private label designs to our”. But overall you did a good job.
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January 5, 2021 at 6:56 pm #60875
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantHi there! Here is one of the spots that will be on my narration demo as a corporate explainer piece! I’m going for straightforward and confident. Any feedback is welcome!
Katelyn
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January 7, 2021 at 5:47 pm #60978
Toque
ParticipantSounds great Katelyn! Toque
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January 6, 2021 at 1:49 am #60887
monibr16
ParticipantKatelyn this is extactly that. Great job!
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January 5, 2021 at 10:09 pm #60883
mkell755
ParticipantHi Katelyn! Good job on this one. It sounded straightforward and to the point, very good!
Mary
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January 5, 2021 at 5:34 pm #60866
Toque
ParticipantHappy New Year all! Good to be back at it. I’ll be testing out and practising some possible scripts for my commercial demo reel here. Below is the first. I appreciate all feedback (script, performance, suitability for my voice, sound quality, etc.) Thanks in advance!
Toque
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Bundle your family up and join us on the hill! Fresh powder, challenging elevations, breathtaking views and
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January 6, 2021 at 5:02 pm #60901
Erik B
ParticipantHi Toque, I really liked this read. Your energy and tone fit the copy well. Great job.
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January 5, 2021 at 10:07 pm #60882
mkell755
ParticipantHi Toque, good energy here! I liked the smile in your voice and the enthusiasm – very good!
Mary
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January 5, 2021 at 6:55 pm #60874
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantReally nice! I love your friendly and enthusiastic energy here. Well done! You may want to take a wee bit of extra time pronouncing ” Sir Sam’s Ski & Ride, ” because it is like a tongue twister haha! The S’s were slurring together a bit. That’s a toughy.
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January 5, 2021 at 12:34 am #60836
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantHappy New Year!! I hope everyone had a lovely holiday. Here is a little read about beavers! Any feedback is appreciated.
Beavers:
The b****r builds its lodge out of twigs and sticks; as freezing weather nears, they plaster their lodge with mud, making a concrete layer that no predator can break through. During the early nineteenth century, the b****r pelt was the single most valuable commodity; the pelt being used for robes, coats, clothing trims, and top hats.Attachments:
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January 5, 2021 at 10:06 pm #60881
mkell755
ParticipantHi Katelyn, good job! I liked the pacing and variation in tone for this one – very clear enunciation as well. Good job!
Mary
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January 5, 2021 at 5:39 pm #60869
Toque
ParticipantSounds good to me Katelyn. Clean, well enunciated, good pace. Well done!Toque
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January 4, 2021 at 9:03 pm #60812
mkell755
ParticipantHi everyone! Here is a recording for any and all feedback on one of my favorite topics, beer! Let me know what you think. Authentic? Conversational? Thanks!
Mary
Sam Adams – Cold Snap
We all know it’s the coldest time of the year, but we’re ready to fight back with the bold flavors of Cold Snap. This Sam Adams seasonal is only available from January through March, so you’d better start stocking up. This lively unfiltered White Ale gets a kick from a bright blend of spring spices. Orange and lemon zest, vanilla, rose hips, hibiscus, plum and grains of paradise add subtle sweetness, while coriander contributes a peppery bite, creating that refreshing crisp flavor that signals spring is on its way. Sam Adams Cold Snap – embrace the cold!Attachments:
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January 5, 2021 at 5:45 pm #60870
Toque
ParticipantHi Mary. I agree with the other feedback – good overall; still need to add some energy so that I believe you are super into this beer! Also re: the comments about more variation in the list. I felt the pause right before the list may have been a tad too long as well. Keep up the great work! Toque.
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January 4, 2021 at 11:31 pm #60830
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Mary!
Maybe a little more emphasis on “Cold Snap” in the opening line, and “This Sam Adams seasonal…” in the next line? I could hear your pitch and tone change some with the list of seasonal spices, but it could vary a little more. The list read did flow well, to me, so good job there.
Good job, overall. Keep it up!
P.S. Since you like beer, try a read for Rolling Rock? The bottle phrasing might be an interesting read. 🙂
Kathy
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January 4, 2021 at 11:22 pm #60829
Robert Broussard
ParticipantMary, good read overall. Still could have use a little more energy and tone changes for the list of spring spices: Orange and lemon zest etc. Also one word change suttle instead of subtle. Over all good read. I will admit that would be a hard sell to me. I am not real big on fruity beers. Every now and then I find a good craft beer but few and far between. I have learned my lesson and ask for a taste before I drop $8 plus on a pint of beer. Eventhough I worked my way through college at the Budweiser Distributor in Wichita Falls, I generally stick with Dos Equis (Green bottle) if available these days. If I want something sweet I will order something like a margarita, lol. Good job overall!!!!
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January 4, 2021 at 11:47 pm #60833
mkell755
ParticipantHi Robert, thanks for the feedback! I will work on more energy and tone changes.
Actually Cold Snap has more of a crisper than a fruity taste; even with the spices. I like fruity / sours too, but this one is different. Some day you will have to try a taste! Flights are the best, I agree I would not want to waste a full pour on something bad (like most IPAs for me). Dos Equis are drinkable, as are margaritas!! Cheers!
Mary
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January 5, 2021 at 12:21 am #60834
Robert Broussard
ParticipantLOL
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January 4, 2021 at 11:38 pm #60831
kfvoice
ParticipantRobert — I guess we can call you “the most interesting man in the world”? 😉
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January 5, 2021 at 12:22 am #60835
Robert Broussard
Participantlol, that would be a stretch for sure. But thanks!!😊👍
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January 4, 2021 at 7:41 pm #60795
Amitofu
ParticipantUploading my homework for review. I did two different tones for each ad (as per instruction). It’s not perfect, but let me know what you think!
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Great design challenges more than just the eyes. It challenges the future. We designed the RDX to challenge not just the future of SUVs, but also the future of Acura. The future starts now. The future is the Acura RDX.
Acura. Everything we ever imagined. And then some.2>
What you wear to bed is your business. So if you’re sleeping in your contact lenses, ask-your-eye-doctor about Air Optix Night & Day Aqua contact lenses. They’re FDA approved for-up-to 30 days and nights of continuous wear and are the most breathable soft contact lenses available. Because bedtime is your time.
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January 5, 2021 at 5:56 pm #60872
Toque
ParticipantHi Amitofu. The only thing I would add to the feedback already provided is that it felt like the second read for both was more natural to you and your voice. The second, lower reads felt less natural. Great work! Toque.
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January 4, 2021 at 11:11 pm #60828
Robert Broussard
Participant1st script: The first read was too slow and some extra long pauses. The firs use of future your tone varied but was the same for all of the other times it was used. The second read was quite a bit better once again the first future had a tone change but all others were same. But agree with Mary 2nd read was much easier to listen to and suited your voice much better.
2nd script: 1st read wording Used contacts instead of contact lenses. You said doctor in both reads instead of eye-doctor. The were a couple of wording mistakes. I also think the second read was better and was more conversational.
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January 4, 2021 at 11:08 pm #60827
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Amitofu — for Script 1, I preferred the first take, and in Script 2, I liked the second read. I hope this helps. Keep it up!
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January 4, 2021 at 9:19 pm #60815
mkell755
ParticipantHi Amitofu, good reads! I liked how you varied up both sets of reads with tone and pacing.
Script 1 take 1: This was interesting and had some good dramatic pauses, which went with the low tone.
Script 1 take 2: I preferred this one, the tone was a little smoother and it seemed to flow better. It was more encouraging to the listener.
Script 2 take 1: Good read. There were a couple of missed words (I realize this is practice, but it’s just something I noticed).
Script 2 take 2: I preferred this one, again the tone was a little more uplifting, the pacing smoother and there was more variation throughout. There were some different missed words in this read. Overall very good for all!Mary
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January 4, 2021 at 7:26 pm #60793
svenbot5000
ParticipantHello everyone! I hope you all enjoyed the holidays. I’ve been out of practice for a couple of weeks so I’m ready to jump back in things. I did a quick, one take practice recording for you guys. I might sound a little stuffy from allergies so I do apologize. Any feedback is greatly appreciated!
At Rubios, we thought our seafood needed a catchy saying. Something like, want to feel nice? Eat seafood twice. We quickly realized we’re better at flavorful, grilled seafood than we are at at catchy sayings.
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January 4, 2021 at 4:47 pm #60787
FCabral
ParticipantHello!
This is three versions of the same practice script for E-Learning, I’m looking for any tips for improvement, which script sounds the best, or pieces of them that I could incorporate into a new read.
Thank you very much“Welcome to the Introduction to Axial Spondyloarthritis Course.
The bones of the human body are divided into two groups, the appendicular skeleton and the axial skeleton. We’re going to focus on the axial skeleton which includes the bones of the head, vertebral column, thorax, and trunk.”Attachments:
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January 4, 2021 at 10:22 pm #60825
JohnFinn
ParticipantNice reads, all around! I agree with Mary- the tone in the 3rd read is great use of variable tone keeping interest and enthusiasm.
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January 4, 2021 at 9:27 pm #60817
mkell755
ParticipantHi FCabral, very nice reads! You have really good clarity and enunciation and a nice warm voice which makes it nice and relaxing to listen to and learn from. I listened to all 3 twice each, and I could not tell a huge difference between them. I guess I will say the third version is my favorite, because it has just a little more variation in tone, especially for the opening line, which would help to draw in the listener. Really good job!
Mary
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January 4, 2021 at 1:36 pm #60771
touzet
ParticipantEDGE LIBRARY DOCUMENTARY: Unequal Protection: How Corporations Became “People” – And How You Can Fight Back By Thom Hartmann
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January 5, 2021 at 12:37 am #60838
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantVery very nice! 🙂 your voice is very well suiting for this read.
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January 4, 2021 at 10:13 pm #60821
JohnFinn
ParticipantHey Touzet-sounds like a great audio book read! I maybe caught something around 1:05 with “this” sounding a bit like “dis”. Tone was right for this read, I wanted to continue to listen past the end of the recording for the rest of the story.
John
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January 4, 2021 at 9:30 pm #60818
mkell755
ParticipantHi Touzet, really nice! You have a calm, reassuring and interesting voice that is perfectly suited to this genre! I too am struggling to find anything to critique – very good job!
Mary
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January 4, 2021 at 7:58 pm #60802
Amitofu
ParticipantWow! Great job. flawless as far as I’m concerned.
If I’m scraping the bottom of the barrel for a single complaint (or in other words, just for posterity) I’d say
[0:39 secs] “Instead it payed a 1.2 billion dollar fine for[…]” – Billion came out with the tiny-est ‘buh’ sound instead of ‘bil’
But again, that’s me STRUGGLING to find something wrong. Outstanding Job!
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January 3, 2021 at 11:57 pm #60748
Robert Broussard
ParticipantI only did a couple times. I have gotten a different microphone for travel. The 1st recording is on an A875R condensor mic and the 2nd is on a Shure SM7B dynamic mic. The shure is big and bulking vs the A875R witch is a short shotgun mic to travel with.
The Hartford
Would you like to retire here? Or here? Investments. Insurance. 190 years of wisdom. The Hartford. Always thinking ahead.
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January 5, 2021 at 12:47 am #60839
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantHi Robert! Nice work. I love your southern comfort voice (also one of my favorite drinks). Here are my constructive bits:
You could try varying your pitch a little more to aid in sounding conversational. these two words: Investments. Insurance. are spoken with the same cadence/pitch with an uptick in your pitch. An uptick at the end of a phrase is indicative of a question, and these are bold statements of identity so these should be spoken with more straightforward confidence, and both should sound unique. There were a few words in the 1st read that landed on the same note. So if it was a song it was repeating a melody if that makes sense. The second read was more conversational because it felt more spontaneous, though the Investments. Insurance. were still spoken the same way.
This read is pretty much a big long list – each piece of the list on a different line:
Would you like to retire here?
Or here?
Investments.
Insurance.
190 years of wisdom.
The Hartford.
Always thinking ahead.You can find ways to make each statement unique by varying your pitch/tone/intention behind each phrase and find natural places where you would change up how you are telling this story.
Nice work! 🙂 happy new year!!
Katelyn
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January 14, 2021 at 12:34 pm #61346
Robert Broussard
ParticipantThanks for the advice. I like the different approach you suggested. I will try that.
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January 4, 2021 at 10:43 pm #60826
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Robert!
Nice reads! The pacing was good in each. As for audio quality, I listened a handful of times to each one, and I preferred the second one a little more, too. It had a rich, slightly deeper, tone. The first read sounded, initially, a tiny bit distant in sound. As you say, it may just be a matter of experimenting more.
I hope this helps!
Kathy
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January 14, 2021 at 12:39 pm #61347
Robert Broussard
ParticipantThanks Kathy, I think so too.
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January 4, 2021 at 12:19 am #60758
mkell755
ParticipantHi Robert, good reads! I’m not fully set up yet to hear a huge difference between the two recordings from a sound quality level, but they both sounded good. I think I prefer the 2nd one slightly.
Also I think that “Investments. Insurance” had a very similar tone, maybe change the tone of one of them for a little variety? It almost acts like a list of options with “retire here” and “or here” being the first 2 items in the list, I hope that makes sense. Very good!
Mary
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January 4, 2021 at 12:31 am #60760
Robert Broussard
ParticipantThanks Mary, I was surprised to on how much different they sounded. I will have to experiment.
I will try your suggestions as well. Appreciate it!
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