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August 7, 2020 at 9:27 am #15468
David Goldberg
Edge Studio StaffHi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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January 9, 2021 at 4:55 am #61060
Bil-Bo
ParticipantLINGUINI AND BOB RESTAURANT
When dining formally, in order to avoid an embarrassing utensil faux pas, observe the following protocol: Begin by locating your seafood fork. Grasping this fork between thumb and forefinger, proceed to shove it into the ear of the person directly to your left. SFX: Yeouch!! Next, to impress business associates, stick your soup spoon up your nose and exclaim, “Look at me, I’m a bowl of soup.” When the entree arrives, use the butter spreader to catapult particularly juicy portions onto the balding heads of nearby diners. SFX: Splat! And finally, quietly finish with your dessert utensils, all the while, of course, making odd gurgling noises SFX: Gurgling! and clucking like a chicken. SFX: Clucking Chicken! This lesson in table etiquette has been brought to you by Linguini and Bob, who invite you to enjoy serious Italian food in a not-so-serious atmosphere. Linguini and Bob, now open at Butler Square in Minneapolis.Pendleton Whiskey
Pendleton Whiskey is born of the rich tradition of the Pendleton Round-Up. Each bottle prominently features the Pendleton Rodeo’s famous bucking horse symbol and Let’er Buck slogan. Oak barrel-aged, with uncommonly smooth taste and a rich, complex flavor, Pendleton Whiskey is made using glacier-fed spring water from Mt. Hood…Oregon’s highest peak. Pendleton Whiskey. Bottled by Hood River Distillers.
Winn Dixie
It never ceases to amaze me, get sick and everybody has a
home remedy. My Aunt Emma’s cure all is crushed garlic and
Limburger cheese in a sock tied around her neck. “ I never get
sick” she says. That’s, cause nobody can get within 50 yards of
the woman. Then there’s my cousin Moon Beam from
California. Swears by frozen Tofu Daiquiris. And my mother –
anytime she hears me sneeze wants to give me a oil and vinegar
rub down. Great – if you wanna smell like a salad bar for a
week. Me, I just go down to Winn Dixie. Their low prices alone
make me feel better, and by the time I go pick up some chicken
my prescription is ready. That’s because they have a computer
back there with a file with my name on it. They know my
Doctors name, my allergies, and never once did they ask me to
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January 10, 2021 at 12:11 am #61099
mkell755
ParticipantHi Bil-Bo! All 3 reads were very well done and produced, and sound like they are already out there! I liked the pacing and energy and casualness for all three, and the character voices were great too! It seemed like there should have been a micro pause after “…rub down.” and before “Great”, but that’s being nit-picky. Great job!
Mary
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January 9, 2021 at 12:02 am #61049
mkell755
ParticipantHello all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Thank you! Working on lead-ins, and sounding natural and enthusiastic. Thanks!
(P.S. Uploaded an older recording first by mistake, feel free to comment on that one too, but the Glock commercial is the second recording).Mary
Glock
Glock is more than a name – it’s a way of life! Where you leave behind the mundane and enter a world full of adventure. Where passion meets possibility, and a lifetime of memories are made. Whatever your lifestyle, no matter where the road takes you. Experience Glock perfection with a G44. Your adventure awaits!-
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January 12, 2021 at 3:25 am #61190
kfvoice
ParticipantHi Mary! Good read.
It was clear, but I felt the pacing could of been a little faster in spots, or maybe don’t pause too long after commas.
Maybe it is me, but this didn’t sound like a pistol commercial. Perhaps it’s the script I am having an issue with, because this sounded more suited for an RV read.
I hope this helps!
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January 12, 2021 at 9:55 pm #61258
mkell755
ParticipantHi Kathy, thanks for the feedback! Yes now that I am hearing it again it does sound a little slow.
There is not much to suggest the commercial is for a Glock G44 gun, but that’s what it was for. I agree that the words could have been for a variety of outdoor products like an RV! It reminded me of those Levi’s ads that I have seen over the years that have almost no mention of jeans or jean jackets, but you finally know in the final scene by them showing you one Levi label for a split second. This one was like that too, only it had one target practice shot and one more quick glace at the gun in someone’s hands. Ahhh – advertising! 🙂 Thanks!
Mary
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January 8, 2021 at 11:59 pm #61047
kfvoice
ParticipantHi all, here is an intro for a how-to video on shucking oysters that I put together. Let me know what you think. I am aware of mouth clicks (not hydrated enough today), and some background noise that I could not figure how to edit out. Thank you again for any feedback.
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January 8, 2021 at 4:14 pm #61035
TomGregory
ParticipantMissed last month’s contest, so here’s my Nissan spot for feedback.
Tom
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January 9, 2021 at 12:29 am #61058
mkell755
ParticipantHi Tom, really nice! Your voice is really warm and deep and well-suited for this genre. Nice variation in tone and pitch. Very good!
Mary
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January 9, 2021 at 5:06 pm #61085
TomGregory
ParticipantThanks for the feedback. Like many, I’m getting my home studio up and running.
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January 8, 2021 at 1:43 pm #61029
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantHi there! Here is a commercial script – it has been a minute since I posted a commercial 🙂 Any feedback is appreciated!
Katelyn
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January 8, 2021 at 12:13 am #61006
mkell755
ParticipantGood evening all! Here is a recording (done on my phone) for any and all feedback. Working on lead-ins to help create a more conversational approach. Let me know what you think. Thanks!
Mary
How To Read Music
Reading music is often seen as some sort of mysterious ancient puzzle or complicated foreign language, but it doesn’t have to be that way! The easy-to-follow lessons and companion CD in “How to Read Music” will show you how to decode those little black dots, and in a short time, you’ll be surprised how fluent you’ve become!
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January 8, 2021 at 11:11 am #61022
Beckolin
ParticipantHi mkell755…and first of all, thanks for your feedback on my Milne poem!
With the goals you’ve set out, I think you’re on a great path. The lead-in was perfect, and I think set your pace nicely. You have (to my ear) found a great, casual, conversational tone. The raise in pitch (whatever the term is for making something sound like a question) periodically reminded me of the youthful, millennial style that’s popular now. Just make sure you’re creating that effect intentionally. One example I can point out is “complicated foreign language,” which sounded like a question before the comma. Also, make sure you’re not skipping too quickly over words that deserve a little more time. “Little” in “little black dots” got pretty well swallowed up by the words around it. But really effective read, I thought!-
January 9, 2021 at 12:16 am #61054
mkell755
ParticipantThanks for the feedback Beckolin! You are welcome for the feedback on your poem, it was really well done!
Good to hear that it sounded casual and conversational. I feel like this would be the approach I would take to get a friend more interested in trying to read music, by intentionally varying my tone to keep it casual and not formal. I have been told that I have a tendency to “up-talk” which is raising the tone like a question at the end of a sentence, so I need to continue to work on that. I see how I sped up “little black dots” to be too fast; should have slowed down a bit there to match the rest of the pace, good catch. Very helpful, thanks for the comments!
Mary
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January 7, 2021 at 11:26 pm #60999
monibr16
ParticipantHello guys,
Here’s a some commercial practice, all feedback welcome. Thank you!Berry Burst
Thank you for calling General Mills. While we connect you with someone who can help, let’s talk about Cheerios and fruit!… Yeah you heard that right! Fruit, real fruit! It’s Berry Burst Cheerios. Wish you had same while on hold?Attachments:
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January 12, 2021 at 12:31 pm #61205
rogue1
ParticipantThat’s a lovely read! Lots of engaging energy and the perfect amount of effortless “smile” in your delivery. Great work!
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January 8, 2021 at 12:18 am #61008
mkell755
ParticipantHi Monibr16! Good job on this one. Your voice sounded nice and light with good energy and appropriate for an on-hold voice. The word “while” was missed, not a big deal for practice but just something to watch for in future reads. Keep it up!
Mary
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January 7, 2021 at 6:27 pm #60989
Beckolin
ParticipantHello Forum Friends,
I’m working on some public domain stuff…mostly for my own edification and practice. I’d love to get your input on interpretation and recording quality. I feel like my mouth has been really wet lately, which makes for more editing than I like. This would be especially challenging if I start doing longer format material! Meanwhile, here’s a poem by A. A. Milne…”Disobedience.”
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January 8, 2021 at 1:57 pm #61032
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantHi Beckolin!
This is a delightful read! I really enjoyed your variety and confidence in doing such interesting voices. Some parts felt a little fast for me with the complicated tongue twistery parts. I can’t say too much about audiobook type reads because I don’t have training in that, but overall I really liked it.
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January 8, 2021 at 12:24 am #61009
mkell755
ParticipantHi Beckolin – wow, very nice pleasant read! Excellent pacing and I agree great variety in the character voices! Nice rhyming patterns throughout – I found myself looking forward to the next “James James Morrison Morrison…” Very well done! You have a really nice and warm story-telling voice. Very good!
Mary
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January 7, 2021 at 11:35 pm #61004
monibr16
ParticipantThis was such a great story time read. SO much variety with the character voices. I would just say take more time with the rhymes. But I was entertained the whole time!
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January 7, 2021 at 5:52 pm #60983
rogue1
ParticipantHappy New Year, everyone!
Just a quick stab at a character read (my apologies to the class at Ridgemont High):
Thanks for taking the time to listen!
“Dude! Go back to high school without REALLY going back to high school? Gnarly! It’s the ‘Back To School Movie Marathon’ Sunday, August 29th only on AMC.”
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January 8, 2021 at 5:53 pm #61043
Erik B
ParticipantHi Rogue1, this read was a lot of fun. Listening to this clip put a big smile on my face, and made me break out my checkered black and white slip on Vans. The energy was really good. The only critique I have is “REALLY” and “AMC” should have been hit more. But overall this was fun, good job.
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January 8, 2021 at 1:55 pm #61031
katelyndawnvo
ParticipantLOL you actually made me laugh out loud. I like this character, great work. Felt very natural and engaging… and silly 🙂
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January 8, 2021 at 11:16 am #61023
Beckolin
ParticipantThis was just flat-out fun! Thank you 🙂
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January 8, 2021 at 12:31 am #61010
mkell755
ParticipantHey Rogue1 – that was great! I loved it and it was spot on for Spicoli. I too think you could emphasize / stretch out “REALLY” a little bit more. The laugh at the end was great. Good job!
Mary
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January 7, 2021 at 11:19 pm #60996
monibr16
ParticipantThis was GREAT! It just flowed right out.
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January 7, 2021 at 5:58 pm #60987
svenbot5000
ParticipantI was hoping for a Bill and Ted styled read and you did not disappoint! Since there seems to be a big emphasis on “REALLY” in the script, I think you could hang on that word a little bit longer. Great job!
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January 7, 2021 at 5:48 pm #60979
ThomasGreene
ParticipantPractice Read – Cafe Vienna Coffee Commercial
Practice Read – Lender’s Bagels CommercialAttachments:
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January 8, 2021 at 12:40 am #61011
mkell755
ParticipantHi Thomas! Good reads! The pacing and flow of both scripts was good. Your voice is nice and authoritative.
Cafe Vienna seemed a little somber to me – the script seems like it has more of a daydream vibe vs. a serious vibe. I would think the tone should be a little softer / reflective maybe?
For Lender’s bagels I liked it better, but I think you could go even bigger, with more enthusiasm and variation in pitch throughout the script, it sounded a little monotone to me (I have to push myself in this area as well). Keep it up!
Mary
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