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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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I am still working on my editing abilities but I would great appreciate feedback on my Cosmic Origins read.
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Hello!
First off, I think that your tone is great for this read. I rather enjoy the style, and I think that this recording only suffers in the quality and pacing. It’s a little difficult to listen to, it seems like there might be some reverb, or echo, or something that’s distorting your voice and detracts from what you’re saying. I would slow down just a little bit. Let some ideas saturate, leave your listener some room to breathe and think about these ideas that you’re putting forward for them.
Great core sound, I look forward to hearing more from you!
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Winn Dixie
It never ceases to amaze me, get sick and everybody has a
home remedy. My Aunt Emma’s cure all is crushed garlic and
Limburger cheese in a sock tied around her neck. “ I never get
sick” she says. That’s, cause nobody can get within 50 yards of
the woman. Then there’s my cousin Moon Beam from
California. Swears by frozen Tofu Daiquiris. And my mother –
anytime she hears me sneeze wants to give me a oil and vinegar
rub down. Great – if you wanna smell like a salad bar for a
week. Me, I just go down to Winn Dixie. Their low prices alone
make me feel better, and by the time I go pick up some chicken
my prescription is ready. That’s because they have a computer
back there with a file with my name on it. They know my
Doctors name, my allergies, and never once did they ask me to
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Hi Bil-Bo! All 3 reads were very well done and produced, and sound like they are already out there! I liked the pacing and energy and casualness for all three, and the character voices were great too! It seemed like there should have been a micro pause after “…rub down.” and before “Great”, but that’s being nit-picky. Great job!
Mary
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Hello all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Thank you! Working on lead-ins, and sounding natural and enthusiastic. Thanks!
(P.S. Uploaded an older recording first by mistake, feel free to comment on that one too, but the Glock commercial is the second recording).Mary
Glock
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Hi Mary! Good read.
It was clear, but I felt the pacing could of been a little faster in spots, or maybe don’t pause too long after commas.
Maybe it is me, but this didn’t sound like a pistol commercial. Perhaps it’s the script I am having an issue with, because this sounded more suited for an RV read.
I hope this helps!
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Hi Kathy, thanks for the feedback! Yes now that I am hearing it again it does sound a little slow.
There is not much to suggest the commercial is for a Glock G44 gun, but that’s what it was for. I agree that the words could have been for a variety of outdoor products like an RV! It reminded me of those Levi’s ads that I have seen over the years that have almost no mention of jeans or jean jackets, but you finally know in the final scene by them showing you one Levi label for a split second. This one was like that too, only it had one target practice shot and one more quick glace at the gun in someone’s hands. Ahhh – advertising! 🙂 Thanks!
Mary
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Hi all, here is an intro for a how-to video on shucking oysters that I put together. Let me know what you think. I am aware of mouth clicks (not hydrated enough today), and some background noise that I could not figure how to edit out. Thank you again for any feedback.
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Hi Tom, really nice! Your voice is really warm and deep and well-suited for this genre. Nice variation in tone and pitch. Very good!
Mary
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Hi there! Here is a commercial script – it has been a minute since I posted a commercial 🙂 Any feedback is appreciated!
Katelyn
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Good evening all! Here is a recording (done on my phone) for any and all feedback. Working on lead-ins to help create a more conversational approach. Let me know what you think. Thanks!
Mary
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Hi mkell755…and first of all, thanks for your feedback on my Milne poem!
With the goals you’ve set out, I think you’re on a great path. The lead-in was perfect, and I think set your pace nicely. You have (to my ear) found a great, casual, conversational tone. The raise in pitch (whatever the term is for making something sound like a question) periodically reminded me of the youthful, millennial style that’s popular now. Just make sure you’re creating that effect intentionally. One example I can point out is “complicated foreign language,” which sounded like a question before the comma. Also, make sure you’re not skipping too quickly over words that deserve a little more time. “Little” in “little black dots” got pretty well swallowed up by the words around it. But really effective read, I thought!-
Thanks for the feedback Beckolin! You are welcome for the feedback on your poem, it was really well done!
Good to hear that it sounded casual and conversational. I feel like this would be the approach I would take to get a friend more interested in trying to read music, by intentionally varying my tone to keep it casual and not formal. I have been told that I have a tendency to “up-talk” which is raising the tone like a question at the end of a sentence, so I need to continue to work on that. I see how I sped up “little black dots” to be too fast; should have slowed down a bit there to match the rest of the pace, good catch. Very helpful, thanks for the comments!
Mary
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Hello guys,
Here’s a some commercial practice, all feedback welcome. Thank you!Berry Burst
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Hello Forum Friends,
I’m working on some public domain stuff…mostly for my own edification and practice. I’d love to get your input on interpretation and recording quality. I feel like my mouth has been really wet lately, which makes for more editing than I like. This would be especially challenging if I start doing longer format material! Meanwhile, here’s a poem by A. A. Milne…”Disobedience.”
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Hi Beckolin!
This is a delightful read! I really enjoyed your variety and confidence in doing such interesting voices. Some parts felt a little fast for me with the complicated tongue twistery parts. I can’t say too much about audiobook type reads because I don’t have training in that, but overall I really liked it.
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Hi Beckolin – wow, very nice pleasant read! Excellent pacing and I agree great variety in the character voices! Nice rhyming patterns throughout – I found myself looking forward to the next “James James Morrison Morrison…” Very well done! You have a really nice and warm story-telling voice. Very good!
Mary
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