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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hello all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Thank you! Working on lead-ins, and sounding natural and enthusiastic. Thanks!
(P.S. Uploaded an older recording first by mistake, feel free to comment on that one too, but the Glock commercial is the second recording).Mary
Glock
Glock is more than a name – it’s a way of life! Where you leave behind the mundane and enter a world full of adventure. Where passion meets possibility, and a lifetime of memories are made. Whatever your lifestyle, no matter where the road takes you. Experience Glock perfection with a G44. Your adventure awaits!-
Hi Mary! Good read.
It was clear, but I felt the pacing could of been a little faster in spots, or maybe don’t pause too long after commas.
Maybe it is me, but this didn’t sound like a pistol commercial. Perhaps it’s the script I am having an issue with, because this sounded more suited for an RV read.
I hope this helps!
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Hi Kathy, thanks for the feedback! Yes now that I am hearing it again it does sound a little slow.
There is not much to suggest the commercial is for a Glock G44 gun, but that’s what it was for. I agree that the words could have been for a variety of outdoor products like an RV! It reminded me of those Levi’s ads that I have seen over the years that have almost no mention of jeans or jean jackets, but you finally know in the final scene by them showing you one Levi label for a split second. This one was like that too, only it had one target practice shot and one more quick glace at the gun in someone’s hands. Ahhh – advertising! 🙂 Thanks!
Mary
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Hi all, here is an intro for a how-to video on shucking oysters that I put together. Let me know what you think. I am aware of mouth clicks (not hydrated enough today), and some background noise that I could not figure how to edit out. Thank you again for any feedback.
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Hi Tom, really nice! Your voice is really warm and deep and well-suited for this genre. Nice variation in tone and pitch. Very good!
Mary
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Hi there! Here is a commercial script – it has been a minute since I posted a commercial 🙂 Any feedback is appreciated!
Katelyn
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Good evening all! Here is a recording (done on my phone) for any and all feedback. Working on lead-ins to help create a more conversational approach. Let me know what you think. Thanks!
Mary
How To Read Music
Reading music is often seen as some sort of mysterious ancient puzzle or complicated foreign language, but it doesn’t have to be that way! The easy-to-follow lessons and companion CD in “How to Read Music” will show you how to decode those little black dots, and in a short time, you’ll be surprised how fluent you’ve become!
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Hi mkell755…and first of all, thanks for your feedback on my Milne poem!
With the goals you’ve set out, I think you’re on a great path. The lead-in was perfect, and I think set your pace nicely. You have (to my ear) found a great, casual, conversational tone. The raise in pitch (whatever the term is for making something sound like a question) periodically reminded me of the youthful, millennial style that’s popular now. Just make sure you’re creating that effect intentionally. One example I can point out is “complicated foreign language,” which sounded like a question before the comma. Also, make sure you’re not skipping too quickly over words that deserve a little more time. “Little” in “little black dots” got pretty well swallowed up by the words around it. But really effective read, I thought!-
Thanks for the feedback Beckolin! You are welcome for the feedback on your poem, it was really well done!
Good to hear that it sounded casual and conversational. I feel like this would be the approach I would take to get a friend more interested in trying to read music, by intentionally varying my tone to keep it casual and not formal. I have been told that I have a tendency to “up-talk” which is raising the tone like a question at the end of a sentence, so I need to continue to work on that. I see how I sped up “little black dots” to be too fast; should have slowed down a bit there to match the rest of the pace, good catch. Very helpful, thanks for the comments!
Mary
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Hello guys,
Here’s a some commercial practice, all feedback welcome. Thank you!Berry Burst
Thank you for calling General Mills. While we connect you with someone who can help, let’s talk about Cheerios and fruit!… Yeah you heard that right! Fruit, real fruit! It’s Berry Burst Cheerios. Wish you had same while on hold? -
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Hello Forum Friends,
I’m working on some public domain stuff…mostly for my own edification and practice. I’d love to get your input on interpretation and recording quality. I feel like my mouth has been really wet lately, which makes for more editing than I like. This would be especially challenging if I start doing longer format material! Meanwhile, here’s a poem by A. A. Milne…”Disobedience.”
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Hi Beckolin!
This is a delightful read! I really enjoyed your variety and confidence in doing such interesting voices. Some parts felt a little fast for me with the complicated tongue twistery parts. I can’t say too much about audiobook type reads because I don’t have training in that, but overall I really liked it.
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Hi Beckolin – wow, very nice pleasant read! Excellent pacing and I agree great variety in the character voices! Nice rhyming patterns throughout – I found myself looking forward to the next “James James Morrison Morrison…” Very well done! You have a really nice and warm story-telling voice. Very good!
Mary
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Happy New Year, everyone!
Just a quick stab at a character read (my apologies to the class at Ridgemont High):
Thanks for taking the time to listen!
“Dude! Go back to high school without REALLY going back to high school? Gnarly! It’s the ‘Back To School Movie Marathon’ Sunday, August 29th only on AMC.”
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Hi Rogue1, this read was a lot of fun. Listening to this clip put a big smile on my face, and made me break out my checkered black and white slip on Vans. The energy was really good. The only critique I have is “REALLY” and “AMC” should have been hit more. But overall this was fun, good job.
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LOL you actually made me laugh out loud. I like this character, great work. Felt very natural and engaging… and silly 🙂
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This was just flat-out fun! Thank you 🙂
Only tweak I would consider is looking at how you break up the last sentence…it sounded like 4 separate sentences: “Back to school movie marathon. Sunday. August 29th. Only on AMC.” If you can smooth that out without losing your surfer dude persona, it would be flawless. -
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Hey Rogue1 – that was great! I loved it and it was spot on for Spicoli. I too think you could emphasize / stretch out “REALLY” a little bit more. The laugh at the end was great. Good job!
Mary
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I was hoping for a Bill and Ted styled read and you did not disappoint! Since there seems to be a big emphasis on “REALLY” in the script, I think you could hang on that word a little bit longer. Great job!
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Hi Thomas! Good reads! The pacing and flow of both scripts was good. Your voice is nice and authoritative.
Cafe Vienna seemed a little somber to me – the script seems like it has more of a daydream vibe vs. a serious vibe. I would think the tone should be a little softer / reflective maybe?
For Lender’s bagels I liked it better, but I think you could go even bigger, with more enthusiasm and variation in pitch throughout the script, it sounded a little monotone to me (I have to push myself in this area as well). Keep it up!
Mary
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Hi again all. Another practice script. This one just taken from the Edge Script Library. As always, appreciate any feedback on any and all aspects of the read/recording. Thanks! Toque
Progressive Insurance
Every year James Ward buys his mom the same birthday cake. But this
year, James switched to Progressive auto insurance. And if they can
shake things up by letting you compare competitors rates and over 20
other facts and figures-then maybe he too should swing for the fences.
Nice work James. Think easier. Think Progressive. -
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