[David Goldberg]

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[dschneider411]

Hello there! Feedback welcome on these two commercial scripts. My studio setup was not available when I recorded these, and the audio quality reflects that, but I welcome your thoughts on the reads themselves. Thank you!

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[alayne_chappell]

I really liked your tone and choice of word emphasis on the Lexus read. You may try a slightly faster pace; it feels conversational but a bit slow toward the end. Good luck!

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[Jahna Bobolia]

Hi! I think for the Butterball commercial I might play with different ways to deliver the word Thanksgrilling.

[debbyc]

Hi everyone. I am looking to get feedback on my first two narration script readings. How is my pace? Do I sound conversational? All feedback is greatly appreciated.

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[Jahna Bobolia]

Your diction was quite clear!

[debbyc]

Hi everyone. I am looking to get feedback on my first two narration script readings. How is my pace? Do I sound conversational? All feedback is greatly appreciated.

[ScottCarr]

Hello everyone. First time posting. Two practice scripts. Any feedback appreciated.

Starbucks About Us Page
Every day, we go to work hoping to do two things: share great coffee with our friends and help make the world a little better. It was true when the first Starbucks opened in 1971, and it’s just as true today.
Back then, the company was a single store in Seattle’s historic Pike Place Market. From just a narrow storefront, Starbucks offered some of the world’s finest fresh-roasted whole bean coffees. The name, inspired by Moby Dick, evoked the romance of the high seas and the seafaring tradition of the early coffee traders.

Ancient Alien Theory
According to ancient alien theorists, extraterrestrials with superior knowledge of science and engineering landed on Earth thousands of years ago, sharing their expertise with early civilizations and forever changing the course of human history. But how did this concept develop, and is there any evidence to support it?
Ancient alien theory grew out of the centuries-old idea that life exists on other planets, and that humans and extraterrestrials have crossed paths before. The theme of human-alien interaction was t****t into the spotlight in the 1960s, driven by a wave of UFO sightings and popular films like 2001: A Space Odyssey. The space program played no small part in this as well: If mankind could travel to other planets, why couldn’t extraterrestrials visit Earth?
In 1968, the Swiss author Erich von Däniken published Chariots of the Gods?, which became an immediate bestseller. In it, he put forth his hypothesis that, thousands of years ago, space travelers from other planets visited Earth, where they taught humans about technology and influenced ancient religions.

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[debbyc]

Hi Scott, both are very clear with great pronunciation. I would like to recommend slowing down a bit on each.

[ScottCarr]

Thank you very much for your feedback. Much appreciated!

[DicksonVO]

Hello everyone! Looking for feedback on these 2 commercial (conversational) VOs as VO training homework. Thanks in advance.

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[debbyc]

Hey there! I thought both were good reads. Very nice, kept my attention.

[DicksonVO]

Thanks!

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hello! Feedback appreciated! Looking specifically for creative feedback rather than technical feedback.

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[ScottCarr]

Hi Jahna. I liked your reads very much! Sounded quite natural to me, not like you were just reading a script. I also thought your pacing was good.

[Jahna Bobolia]

Thank you for your feedback!

[Dominic]

Hi everyone,

Uploading a few commercial practice takes, any feedback appreciated. Thank you!

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[Jahna Bobolia]

I enjoyed the H4H read. It sounded conversational and authentic.

[Krista Andersen]

Hi all, This is my first time here, just started my 1st coaching classes. Looking for creative feedback only, please. Appreciate your time and looking forward to learning together!

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[Jahna Bobolia]

I thought both reads were clear with strong diction.

[Krista Andersen]

Thank you for the feedback!

[alayne_chappell]

Hello everyone! This is my first post and I’m new to voice over so a lot of room for improvement! Please note I’m not looking for tech-related feedback since this was recorded on my phone in my closet 🙂 I’m mostly focused on e-learning and education and working on reducing glottal stops and coming off authentic; and just getting started understanding what I need to work on. Thank you so much for any feedback.

-Alayne

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[DicksonVO]

Alayne…recorded from your phone? WOW…GOOD READS! Your voice feels so natural for e-learning or education. My one comment would be to slow just a bit. Since it’s e-learning, 2 important things are happening. 1) There are more than likely visuals (videos or slides) that are going along with this and…2) there are people trying to digest the information you are delivering. You can slow your VO read slightly per slide because the slides or video will be on the screen for 3-5 seconds and that should allow the learner time to digest the information. Make sense?

Your read was very authentic, but in trying to be authentic we sometimes have the tendency to talk faster. I bet if you paced yourself a tad bit slower you could still achieve a great authentic read. Good luck!

[alayne_chappell]

Thank you so much for this feedback! I’ll definitely work on slowing my pace and that’s good advice to think about the slides/video as I’m recording.

[SuperLuke]

Hi Alayne,
That was a good read from your phone. And I think you can do much better with practice. When I listened to your recordings, it sounded like I was hearing Alexa for e-learning. Practice connecting and engaging with your listeners more as you perform your copies.

[alayne_chappell]

Thanks for your feedback! That’s good advice to practice engaging with the listener more.

[tmanning.tix]

Greetings All.
Still working on editing these pieces but also looking for feedback on delivery and tone. Thanks for listening.

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[Jahna Bobolia]

Nice sound, I would try slowing the scripts down.

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