[David Goldberg]

Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!

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[TalVerd]

Alright, I’ve got 3 performances today that I need feedback on. Specifically, I need performance feedback, not technical feedback. Thanks very much!

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[Jahna Bobolia]

Hi! I would work on slowing down your pace for both the Dominoes and the H&R block scripts. I also might take a second to write out who you are talking to. Where you are talking with this person, and why you are telling them about this. This helps to make the script sound more conversational. : )

[Michelle Stout]

Hello! This is my first attempt to upload here and was looking for some creative feedback. I’m working on my pacing and diction, while trying to sound natural. Any comments appreciated!

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[Eliz_10]

Hi Michelle,
Here are my comments: Nice warm quality to your voice; easy to listen to. There is some sort of noise or pop on the “st” on the word Instagram. I think there is slightly too much time between the end of “help us complete the picture” and the beginning of “direct message us…” The words “direct message us to find out” are smushed together and sound more like “direct message justify”. Can you tamp down or shorten the “f” sound on the word Life at the end of the demo? All in all, good job! Regards, Elizabeth

[Keith Paul]

Hi, the Instagram script, your diction is excellent, the read is very conversational. The timing issues is not so much a problem, as we practice more, it will come into play. Keep up the good work.

[Michelle Stout]

Thank you so much Keith! I appreciate you listening and for the encouragement!

[Michelle Stout]

Thank you for listening! I appreciate the feedback. I can definitely work on the timing issues.

[Eliz_10]

Hi,
I’m submitting a short, playful dialogue between a grandmother and grandchild. My question for those who listen is: are the two voices clearly different and don’t sound like they’re being voiced by the same person? Any other feedback is welcomed.
Regards,
Elizabeth

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[Jahna Bobolia]

Hi! The two voices do sound very different and as though they are being voiced by different people.

[Keith Paul]

Hi, the voices do sound very different, most important to me is that the voices are very engaging. Great Job

[Krista Andersen]

Practicing – looking for feedback. I’ve been trying to work on not having glottal stops and sounding more conversational, less “announcer”. Thanks for any suggestions.

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[Keith Paul]

Hi, the tone you used for this script is right on the money. I think you can speed up the script a lit bit more. but all in all it was a good read. Very conversational and you brought out the meaning of the script.

[Krista Andersen]

Thanks so much for the feedback!

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hello! I am looking for creative feedback for my coaching sessions homework. How is my pacing? Does it sound conversational? Thank you!

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[Keith Paul]

Hi, on the American express, you started of with one pace and then ended much slower. the beginning part had a very good pace.
I thought the pacing on the Club Med was also very slow, I think you could pick up the pace a bit. I’m thinking this is a 30 second spot. Your recording was 39 secs.
The diction is perfect, your read is very engaging.

[Jahna Bobolia]

Hey Everyone! I am giving it another try with the take 1 and take 2. Going for conversational in both however my “who” changes. Do you hear a difference in the takes?

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[dschneider411]

Hello, Looking for comments on this read — what did you like, what can I do better? Any feedback appreciated. Thank you!

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[Alexander Wright]

I think that sounded really good. Your voice is very good for that type of commercial. I think towards the end the pace was a little different than at the beginning, but I thought it sounded professional. .

[dschneider411]

Feedback welcome for this read, especially for how conversational it sounds. Thank you!

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[Keith Paul]

If it is critique on how conversational your read sounds, you hit it on the head. The only problem is that your volume is too low.

[Krista Andersen]

I thought it was a good read for sure. Not as “conversational” as maybe commercial sounding, but still a very good read!

[Rebekah]

Hello all,
I have completed my commercial demo!! Whoop Whoop!!! Now I am 3 sessions in on narration. Here are two scripts I have been practicing. Let me know what you think. I am excited to hear from you and listen to your work as well

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[Jahna Bobolia]

Hi! Nice work! For the Dr. Seuss narration, at times I thought the pacing was spot on, and at other times I thought you sped up just a bit. I thought your diction was clear except for one word right after Children still…. I couldn’t quite make out that word. : )

[Rebekah]

Thank you so much! Notes taken.

[DavidFritz]

Hello everyone! I would appreciate any feedback on my VO demo from experienced professionals. Hoping for some feedback on the reads (tone, pacing etc.) as well as the overall quality of the production. Thank you so much in advance!

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[Clarke327]

Hello! I’m Paula Lee and working on a homework assignment! I am looking for feedback. How’s my diction? Working on pace – how is it? Anything you may find helpful, please feel free to share. Your feedback is much appreciated! Thank you.

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[waninick]

Hi Paula..! Seems your pace still needs some work. in the first clip, I would explore adding just a little lift (not really a pause) after ‘Tiffany’, and again before “in this episode…” I think that would tamp down the rushed feel. Also, a short drop in pitch on the last part of ‘Tiffany’ will separate that word from the following phrase. The first name is a first and last name, but Tiffany is just the first name, and the following phrase sounds like it could be a last name, until you realize that ‘with a’ isn’t a name. If you slow things down a bit, feel the flow of the copy, let the inflections and pacing group the words into complete thoughts, it will sound more like a story being told in real time, and not something being read.

The second clip has a lot of the same things. At the end, there is a list that, as you present it, is two things she loves: “entertaining her potted plants”, and “relaxation.” I am going out on a limb here, and say that there are probably three things: “entertaining”, “her potted plants”, and “relaxation”. Find a way to use inflexation and pace to create some room for each one without chopping it up.

As for diction, I would say…pretty good…!! Nice and clean!! Not much in the way of glottal stops, as you flow easily into the words that begin with vowels. I think you have a great voice, and am looking forward to hearing your progress. Your environment is a bit echoy, so feel free to step up to the mic a bit, so you can reduce your gain. That way the room won’t be quite as noticeable until you have a chance to treat it.

All in all a nice job. Again, looking forward to hearing your progress.

–TimG

[Clarke327]

Thank you for the feedback Tim! Extremely helpful! I’ll be sure to incorporate the tips provided. Thanks again!

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