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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hello you fine folks!
Back again with my practice reads for commercial voice over! This time I went with the following three scripts:
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Butterball Turkey – Butterball brings you the joys of turkey day. Friends and family drop in to bask in the warmth of the season. Celebrate this summer with Butterball turkey on the grill. Tender, juicy, surprisingly simple. HAPPY THANKSGRILLING from Butterball.
Six Flags – Kids hate the word no. As in no you can’t stay up late, no you can’t have more ice cream and no, you may not paint the cat. No, no, NO! Well isn’t it time for a yes? We think so. Six Flags Great Adventure. Yes!Let me know what you think, I tried my best to keep an ear out for emphasizing important phrases, eliminating uptalk, having no unnecessary pauses/glottal stops, making sure no words are under enunciated and that any list had differentiated tones/cadence to them. I am still learning how to train my ear to pick up on all these things so I very well could’ve missed some things.
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Hi HulyK! Good reads! I think you had great energy for all 3, good enunciation, and good emphasis of words and phrases. I too hear an echo in the background, but am myself not fully soundproofed yet. I heard just a slight uptalk for script 2 at “…turkey on the grill.” (I have a tendency to uptalk too and it is hard to get rid of for me!). For script 3 you might try it with a little more smile in your voice to accent the humor, it sounded a little firm / harsh to my ear. Really good for all 3, keep it up!
Mary
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I think you nailed everything you wanted to address. Nice tempo, nice energy, nice differentiating the lists, nice choice of words and phrases to emphasize, etc. What I also noticed is there is an echo throughout all three scripts, like you were recording in an area not treated for optimal sound adsorption. Perhaps that can be treated in editing with your DAW; I don’t know enough yet about everything DAW’s can do.
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Hey everybody. I have recorded a new script. I just received my first commercial demo and I want to continue honing my “strike zone.” What do you think of my performance? Do I come off as a witty and confident “friend” the listeners want to hear? Is my recording setup still working well? I’d appreciate any feedback.
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Hey Tim! Great read–you definitely nailed the witty and confident energy you set out to capture. One thought: to my ear, your conversational flow seems to halt a bit in a few spots (sounding more like you’re reading rather than leaning over the fence to give your neighbor the inside scoop on kitchen appliances). Perhaps change up your emphasis a bit (Hit “We” harder on “We do it right, too” for instance) to continue the flow of conversation in an even more natural manner. Keep up the great work!
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Hi all! Here is a recording for any and all feedback. Let me know what you think. Thank you!
Mary
Runner’s World Magazine
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Hi Mary! I so appreciate that your reading had a good tempo and was really clear. The only suggestion I could think of is to spice up the opening sentences a little bit to make them “grab the listeners attention” a little more. Thanks!
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Hi Hi! Here is a cute little narration about animal heroes. I was really trying to focus on varying my lists and trying to sound spontaneous. By all means come at me hard if you notice anything off.
Not all heroes are human.
Sometimes heroes bark, meow, or even grunt.
They may be covered with fur, have curly tails, or live in an alley.
We’re about to meet some real-life animal heroes..
Each one of these heroes has performed an amazing rescue.
Sometimes they even put themselves in danger to help others.
We’ll meet a dog who rescues stray cats.
A brave cat who saved her five kittens from a fire.
A pig who got help for her owner who was having a heart attack.
And a guide dog who led his owner down 71 flights of stairs when the World Trade Center was attacked.-
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Greetings Katelyn! I really liked your tone and pacing like Mary mentioned, and I liked the sound of your voice too. The only spontaneity I noticed is when you read “71 flights of stairs” (because it’s an amazing fact). So it would be nice if you can have that same energy for the other cool facts like for “a pig who got help for her owner who was having a heart attack” and a “cat who saved five kittens from a fire”. I hope that made sense. Thanks for posting!
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Hello everybody. Please feel free to provide feedback on my performance and recording quality. Thank you.
Campbells Chunky Chili
Introducing Campbell’s Chunky Chili with Beans – four delicious, hearty varieties loaded with succulent, seasoned meat. It’s the perfect pre-game warm-up.
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Well done ! Recording quality sounded just fine to me. You used a very nice combo of tone, tempo and pitch. If I had to find one thing to suggest, and it’s a small thing, I thought the pause between “delicious” and ”hearty” could be shortened a tiny bit to match the timing you used for “succulent, seasoned meat”.
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Hi Erik. Very nice! Good energy, nice warm tone and enunciation. I’m not fully set up with a home studio yet, but the sound was good on my end.
Mary
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Dang I want chunky soup now. Really nice read!! I thought it was very well-fitting for your voice. There were just a couple things that popped out to me. I thought the pause was a little too long between “delicious, hearty” it felt like if you were having a conversation with your peeps you wouldn’t pause that long. And the “t” on “meat” was lost. Other than that this was great! 🙂
Katelyn
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Hello everybody. Please feel free to provide feedback on my performance and recording quality. Thank you.
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An active terrain management system…and the most available driver assist technology of any vehicle in it’s class…
The completely redesigned 2020 Ford Explorer…built Ford proud.-
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Hey Erik! For some reason, I feel like the Campbells read sounds like how you normally sound, super conversational and natural, and this one felt like you were “putting on” a voice. Not sure if you know what I mean? I had the ability to listen to one read right after the other so I wonder what impression I would have had if I listened to this one on its own but that popped out to me after I listened to the first one.
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Hey Erik!
I like the energy that you bring to this. You have a lot of popping plosives in your read, and it sounds like it might just be because of how close your mouth is to the mic. There are also a few moments where the volume is inconsistent, are you moving your head a lot when you’re reading? Other than those minor mechanical things I think that you’re definitely on the right track!
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Hello everybody. Please feel free to provide feedback on my performance and recording quality. Thank you.
Florida’s Natural
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I agree with Mary about emphasizing “just” in first sentence because it is one of the defining brand distinctions. I’d also suggest de-emphasizing “made”. It also sounded that the tempo for “not from concentrate” picked up as did the pitch a little bit. Nothing else I’d suggest be changed after the first sentence and very nice job on the land-trees-company list.
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I like this one a lot!
Your tone is consistent, believable, and honest. The nit pick that I have would be your first p in ‘premium’. It’s popping the sound out, and you have to be careful with letters like ‘p’ that require a fast expulsion of air because they have a nasty tendency to distort sound depending on distance to mic, force of air, volume, ect. In this read that was the only one that broke my immersion, whatever you did on all of the other plosives worked very well and I suggest finding a method that can work those kinks out. Other than that, great job!
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I am still working on my editing abilities but I would great appreciate feedback on my Cosmic Origins read.
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Hello!
First off, I think that your tone is great for this read. I rather enjoy the style, and I think that this recording only suffers in the quality and pacing. It’s a little difficult to listen to, it seems like there might be some reverb, or echo, or something that’s distorting your voice and detracts from what you’re saying. I would slow down just a little bit. Let some ideas saturate, leave your listener some room to breathe and think about these ideas that you’re putting forward for them.
Great core sound, I look forward to hearing more from you!
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It never ceases to amaze me, get sick and everybody has a
home remedy. My Aunt Emma’s cure all is crushed garlic and
Limburger cheese in a sock tied around her neck. “ I never get
sick” she says. That’s, cause nobody can get within 50 yards of
the woman. Then there’s my cousin Moon Beam from
California. Swears by frozen Tofu Daiquiris. And my mother –
anytime she hears me sneeze wants to give me a oil and vinegar
rub down. Great – if you wanna smell like a salad bar for a
week. Me, I just go down to Winn Dixie. Their low prices alone
make me feel better, and by the time I go pick up some chicken
my prescription is ready. That’s because they have a computer
back there with a file with my name on it. They know my
Doctors name, my allergies, and never once did they ask me to
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Hi Bil-Bo! All 3 reads were very well done and produced, and sound like they are already out there! I liked the pacing and energy and casualness for all three, and the character voices were great too! It seemed like there should have been a micro pause after “…rub down.” and before “Great”, but that’s being nit-picky. Great job!
Mary
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