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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Hey guys. Here is a read for my narration demo. This is one of those celebrity bios that you’d watch on access Hollywood or on a celebrity youtube channel. I’m imagining talking to my little niece who hasn’t heard of Taylor Swift before. I hope it comes across as engaged, and like I’m enjoying telling someone who hasn’t heard about TS. Let me know if this is hitting the mark or missing it. Thanks! After listening back I think they are both pretty much the same… lol
Taylor Swift; the music superstar has been wowing fans since 2006, when she released her self-titled debut album. A few years later in 2010, she won the grammy award for album of the year. Since then she’s dominated the charts … and captured the hearts of Hollywood’s elite.
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Katelynn, I think your choices in the slight variance of pitch and volume in #2 resulted in the much better of the two reads. I think you nailed which key words and phrases needed to be emphasized and that allowed your personality to shine through, making the entire read sound more natural, conversational and a topic you were truly interested in. Good work !
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Hi all – I chose a few travel Commercials because I wanted to try some scripts that seem to be a little lighter, a little more organic than what I’ve recently been practicing. Interested in how you think about tempo, pitch and tone as well as enunciation, volume and anything else you’re willing to share. Thanks for your interest.
Sandals
Somewhere in the Caribbean, there are 5-star luxury resorts where it’s all-inclusive, all the time. Sandals, where love is all you need. Because everything else is included. Call 1-800-Sandals.Club Med
Imagine for a moment … nothing. No clocks. No ringing phone. No traffic jams. No radios. No newspapers. And no crowds. Now imagine a Club Med vacation. An island village where aqua seas brush dazzling white shores. Where lush green palms line wandering paths. A place where evenings are filled with entertainment and dancing. A Club Med vacation is like none other. Ask your travel agent.-
Hi Chas, great work! This is a good genre for you. I too think you could slow down the Club Med script and really hang on the 6 phrases that start with “No”. After that long list of things, I think too that you could pause just a tiny bit before “Now imagine a Club Med…” to give it more emphasis, because you are now solving the needs of the reader by convincing people how they can escape all of these (negative) things by taking a trip to Club Med. Very good tone and enunciation for both!
Mary
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Thanks Katelyn. Your feedback about slower and savor is exactly what I was going for. When I characterized my choice of script as “More organic” than what I’ve been choosing to date, it’s because I have zero trained acting chops and I want to be able to bring more emotion to the scripts that need it. I thought I was close but always room for improvement. I’ll try to find the time Saturday to do another version. Appreciate your on point feedback, as always – Chas
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Hey Chas! Nice to hear your voice again. Nice work on these reads. I’d like to hear a couple of versions where you slow it down a little more and really savor these things while you are talking about them. I think that would help bring out the luxurious feel and paint the words like “seas brush dazzling white shores.” a little but more. I think your voice would be a nice warm and inviting option for something like this. Great job.
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Here’s even more medical narration practice!
Any and all feedback is very welcome, I’m trying to hit this niche and get comfortable with an overall style for the category.“Medical research (or experimental medicine) is basic research or applied research conducted to aid the body of knowledge in the field of medicine. Medical research can be divided into two general categories: the evaluation of new treatments for both safety and efficacy in what are termed clinical trials, and all other research that contributes to the development of new treatments. The latter is termed preclinical research if its goal is specifically to elaborate knowledge for the development of new therapeutic strategies.”
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Hey everyone. I am working on a commercial read adapted from a Home Depot commercial. I am interested to get any and all of your feedback. I have recorded this in my closet/ home studio.
Thank you.
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Hi Ed! Good read. Good pacing and enunciation throughout. The tone of the read is serious (my interpretation), but you might try varying up the tone a little more throughout to give a little more encouragement / positivity to encourage shoppers to hang in there and continue coming to Home Depot. Good job on this!
Mary
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Hello all! Here is a script for any and all feedback. Working on sounding conversational. Let me know what you think. Thanks!
Mary
American Express
Do you know me? Probably not. In my business, recognition is always important, but when I’m buying goods online I prefer a little privacy. With Private Payments from American Express, I get the security of a unique number created for each business transaction I make. Because my private information is my business, and American Express keeps it that way.-
Hey Mary,
Great job. I feel like you have a clear audience in mind. It seemed personable. I agree though maybe pick up the pace a tad. But great fit! -
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Hi Mary, I liked this read for you. You asked the question at the start very genuinely which isn’t always easy to do. I would like to hear a take where you read this a little bit faster-paced just to see how it would sound. Nice work!
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Hi Mary,
I certainly felt that you made your script conversational. I thought that your opening and concluding sentences sounded friendly, welcoming, and natural – in particular your “and American Express keeps it that way”, which came across to me as being absolutely genuine.
Regards,
John
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Second crack at a PSA, this time with more of a pause between the message and the organization. Does it make you want to book a taxi home in advance the next time you go out on the lash?
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Hi folks! Here is a script going on my narration demo. It’s a university video narration and I specifically have my younger cousin in mind and trying to see the things I’m saying as I’m saying them. Hoping to sound connected to the copy and like I’m talking to my cousin. Also really trying to avoid glottal stops – so many opportunities for those in this read. Any feedback is appreciated. I am uploading 2 reads.
The Emily Carr University of Art & Design leads the way in excellence and innovation. Through visual arts and media design, we empower the next generation of creative thinkers to reimagine a more positive future.
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Sorry just realize I had posted that last one earlier. Here are a couple more, appreciate any feedback!
WSFS Bank
We stand for what’s possible. We stand for ideas of all shapes and businesses of all sizes. We stand for giving you tools online to get your cash flow in line. And turning lines of credit into lines of customers. At WSFS bank, we stand for service.Always
You don’t do ordinary. And neither do we. Defy expectations any day with Always Infinity, made with flex foam that Absorbs 10 times its weight. Rewrite the rules. Always.-
Hi Jensen!
Read 1: Very lovely inviting tone for this kind of corporate commercial, it suits your voice very nicely. You are adding in a lot of pauses that are cutting up the sentences for instance: “We stand for ideas of all shapes (pause) and businesses of all sizes.” So you really want to smooth out those parts.Read 2: I can hear the smile in your voice and its really nice in this read. Again, I would love to hear a take where you only pause where the periods are. Would you pause half-way through a sentence when you’re chatting with your friend about something? In normal conversations, we don’t pause like that. I had to have this beat into me by my coaches haha! Just so you know for reference again you paused here: “Defy expectations any day (pause) with Always Infinity,”
Great audio quality as well. The volume is quite low. Industry-standard for auditions is to normalize it to -3db so you may want to practice that when you upload to the feedback forum.
Great work! I look forward to hearing more from you!
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