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Hi! Upload your recordings, and get feedback from your peers!
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Good afternoon! Here’s another quick recording I did. Please let me know what you think! I’m especially looking for feedback on tone and pace.
Trendi
Trendi.com. It’s the #1 shopping site for top name brands at up to 75% off. Great style, great value and everything ships free. Trendi.com. Everything you love, for less.
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Hi Svenbot! Great energy and tone! Pace was good throughout, too; the only thing I might consider trying differently is that first Trendi.com. After listening a couple times, you basically say it the same way in both spots, but the first one has just a millisecond more of a pause before saying ‘dotcom’. To me it seemed the slightest bit awkward, as though it was a one-word sentence (“Trendi.” then “dot com.”) I’m REALLY nitpicking here…it was a great read! Looking forward to hearing more!
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Hi there! This is another audition piece for a campus tour video narration. The direction was “Looking for a positive informative voice to lead viewers through a virtual tour of campus.” Thanks for any feedback!
Katelyn
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Great job Katelyn! Very bright, clear read, nice pace. Makes me want to listen and learn. If I had any feedback for improvement, it would be that once or twice your “to” sounded like “ta”. I’ve done it myself many times. I try to avoid it by writing the word on my script as “2” rather than “to”. (Same thing with “4” instead of “for”). Excellent work! Toque
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Hello, everyone! Another raw home record (no filtering save a quick “de-noise”)
VO for spot where the visual is a sustained shot of a man quietly dumbfounded and mesmerized by the incredible TV picture he’s seeing (hence the hushed tone of the read).
Two selects from multiple takes for review. All comments welcome–my thanks for taking the time to listen!
SAMSUNG
This is the face of a man watching college football on an 82” Samsung QLED TV. He’s not watching his team, he doesn’t even have a team. He’s more of a golf guy. And yet, here we are. Captivating color. Gripping 4K. The massive 82” Samsung QLED TV. See nothing else.
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Hey Rogue1, I liked both reads! I could totally picture a guy watching as if hypnotized for the first read, really made me chuckle thinking about it. The second read was good as well, and I think draws you in more quickly and then brings you to the same ending point of the other script where you see a man hypnotized, like at first maybe he runs into the room then is stopped dead in his tracks by the awesome TV, whereas in the first one he is hypnotized the whole time.
I too think that you could really emphasize “82” SAMSUNG QLED TV” both times, to make it even more like a “Wow this is happening!” sort of moment, which might make it even more humorous. Really good!
Mary
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Hi hi! nice luxurious reads. I prefer the second option because I think it is hitting your goal but still has some energy to it. Without something visual to look at the first one was lulling me into a meditative state 🙂 Nice piece!
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Great reads! I can definitely picture what you described in regards to the man staring at the tv. I think it would be cool to blend both of your reads and start a little slower with the first line and really punch up the ” 82” Samsung QLED TV, and then more conversational and slightly faster pace with the rest. I love the quirkiness of this script and I totally thought this is something William Shatner would be suited to read as he has that sarcastic wit. Hopefully this is helpful. haha.
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That tone and pace- sounds great for a relaxing session of yoga. Maybe too much pause in “table top…position” around 41 seconds, but overall a wonderful read!
John
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Hi Tina! Wonderful read–your voice is both authoritative and inviting and would be pleasurable to have accompanying one through a long museum trek. My one thought would be to slow down a bit and allow your read to breathe a bit. Perhaps envision yourself actually walking along with the listener in person for a more natural flow of narration. (You’re imparting a lot of information all at once so I feel some judicious pausing would be welcomed by the listener as they “drink it all in”). Great work!
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Hi Michele – good work! I like the tone of your voice. I would suggest a little more tone variation throughout, while still keeping the tone somber in general. I’m not fully set up yet for my studio, but I’m hearing some background noise as well, just something to listen for in your practicing. I think too that this script could be a little more theatrical to help describe the visuals you are seeing while you perform it, just a suggestion. Keep it up!
Mary
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mlanham, I wrote that script with my coach for my demo. It was a good performance overall, with good recording quality too. May want to eliminate the background noise. As far as critiquing your performance, you don’t want to be monotone with this script because it is meant to be like Obi Wan Kenobi from Star Wars when he talks about the Force. Maybe add some more emotion into the recording, embody the feelings in the moment, (war, apocalypse, thief and bandits etc.) as you perform.
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You have a lovely resonance to your voice. I would suggest finding some pauses or beats to break up the flow of this read and taking your time with it. You definitely reflect a serious tone in your voice appropriate for the piece, but I would also suggest playing with going up and down on certain words as it feels a little flat or monotone right now! Hope this helps.
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This had a nice cadence to it. There was a tiny bit of a rushed feel towards the end so I would just be cognizant of that. I feel like you could punch it up even more because some of the things you are describing, such as the m****r of prostitutes and the mutilation can have more weight to what you’re saying. Overall, nice read!
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Hi Michelle – I think that may have been a different version of the recording right before it? It sounded even a little faster than the one I just commented on, so my comments are similar in that I would recommend slowing it down just a bit and let the questions hang in the air for a tiny bit longer. I did hear some background noises on this one that I did not hear on the other one too. I’m not fully set up yet with my studio, just something I noticed. Keep it up!
Mary
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